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please dont make really huge chaptors I dont like reading huge blocks.
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Hmm... okay. Here's the first little, already translated part of the next great chapter:

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Chapter 3 - The ambush


Jennadelle ran as fastly she could along the street to the great place where she had to find the trailers and Floyd too. Although the clakker has gave Jennadelle warning of outlaws on her way she didn't meet some. This streets were almost stone-empty. But it gave not a damn about for Jennadelle. Probably did the Stranger this job some minutes ago. Maybe Jennadelle could overtake him before he thwarted Floyd.
Now she really outran. Jennadelle was very fast on foot indeed and could cover a long distance without getting tired from it. But abruptly her path resulted in a broken bridge which has stretched over a trench. Jennadelle went closer to it and had a look at the bridge which was broken in its center.
"Who are you, stranger? And what are you doing here?", she heard a voice surprisedly.
Jennadelle turned around and spotted two clakkerz which looked like building workers standing some meters next to the broken bridge. They took a coffee break and leaned against a wooden, little table which stood in front of a jerry-built house.
"I'm Jennadelle.", she visualized, "Bounty hunter. I'm chasing after Floyd."
One of the clakker laughed quietly: "Another one...!", and took a sip out his coffee cup.
Unsurely Jennadelle asked: "That Stranger or how ever you call him... he was here already, I guess?!"
The other clakker answered: "Yeah, he has droped over here some moments ago. He also wants to bag Floyd. Well, it has seemed so. This guy was in a very hurry."
Jennadelle looked at the bridge and frowned.
"Was it Floyd?", she asked and pointed the broken bridge.
"His boys was it, yeah. They want to anticipate the coming of our trailers to town again. That's why they blowed up this bridge some days ago. These bastards!"
The other clakker nodded furiously: "Oh, yeah. And who have to fix it now? We have to do it!"
Jennadelle announced hastily: "But I must go across the trench! I have to go to the place where the trailers are!"
The clakkerz laughed: "Forget it, Jennadelle! Now you can't go over that trench. That's impossible!"
"But how has Stranger went across that broken bridge?"
The clakkerz stopped to laugh. They looked at themself and wondered. And they produced a painful impression.
"We, uh... didn't see well..." the first said and scratched his head shyly.
"Uhm... actually, me too.", the second confessed, "Surprisedly he was on the other side."
Jennadelle just shaked her head. What were these clakkerz daft.
"But I must go to the other side anyway.", she said resolutely.
"Well, that could be difficult, lady. This trench is sure about ten meters long. You can't go over it."
Jennadelle went slowly some steps back. Slow but sure steps. It was clear. She planned something.
"You don't want to...?!", the scared clakker shouted.
the other clakker almost let fall his cup: "No, she will do not...! That's impossible!"
Jennadelle stepped more back with a focused look forward to the bridge.
"No, she never will made that!", the second clakker shouted, "It's just too far!"
But both curious building workers watched this event.
Jennadelle paused. She felt a mysterious powers in her legs. Sleeping ones which she also has forgot... till now.
And these powers revived.
The clakkerz didn't know anymore what to say now. They just marveled.
Immediately, Jennadelle began to run. She ran and felt how forgot memories took her by surprise. Jennadelle just knew she could jump. Fastly. Highly. Trebly. Afar.
Jennadelle got at the bridge and jumped.
At this moment blew the wind in Jennadelle's cat-like ears while she was in the air. And she landed on all four... almost soundless and safe... on the other side of the bridge.
Jennadelle marveled at her own skills. But she didn't let on.

Clink!

Both surprised looking building workers had let her coffee cups fall.
"She... she did...", one of them stuttered but he couldn't say a thing.
Jennadelle stood up and forged ahead to Floyd as if nothing happened. She outpaced two marveling workers without a look behind.
"What the devil...?", the clakker whispered, "Who is that strange lady?"
The shrugging other one shaked his head. He also was at a loss.
"We must treat this... Jennadelle, or how ever they call her, with respect!", he said earnestly.
His friend nodded: "You're right. She seems to be very dangerous. Maybe she isn't a real bounty hunter. Maybe she's new in this business, I guess."
"Yeah. Hoping she never is going to be an outlaw. With such skills... she would be perfect for this."
"You're right. I only can hope that she don't will be an enemy. We were no match for it."
"Never."
Both were silent.
Finally, one noticed the shards on the ground.
"What a bummer!", he freted, "The nice coffee!"
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I can't beleive i missed the last 3 chapters! But they're read now, so yeah.
Awesomely awesome, SM! I want more!
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very sly of you. I never thought it would run along side by side. Very well played. You have certainly thought this through. Excellent keep writing. You have got me hooked.
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Thanks!
The exciting part of the chapter is yet to come .

Someday...!
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This is one of the best storys Ive read.
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Stranger's Maid come on! You created an eerie silence. Work still in progress. I want more :cry: Progress!!! progress!!
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Are you cute .
Sorry but I'm not finished with the translation yet... it's just hard. That's why it takes longer.
But I progress! Progress anyway!
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Are you cute .
Sorry but I'm not finished with the translation yet... it's just hard. That's why it takes longer.
But I progress! Progress anyway!
well of course I am. Anyway you said you are translating it. Is this not your work? Or you wrote this in a different language or something?

I won't tell anyone..... I promise.
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My original (and invented) story about Jennadelle is written in german. That's why I have to translate it first.
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Yikes!

Sorry, I'm late. You know I just had to do other important things at home (...actually, what is more important than translating my boring story).

However...


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Jennadelle arrived the tunnel which leaded through a mountain. The tunnel seemed to be very old because there had grew some plants everywhere around it already. High grass, shrubberies... almost like a little forest.
Bu now Jennadelle stopped surprisedly.
"We’re all set. I hear the trains coming!", a strange voice shouted at the end of the long tunnel.
This voice didn't own a clakker definitely. Jennadelle was sure.
It was the outlaws!
Immediately, she jumped in the high grass und hided behind them.
When she looked carefuly trough its blades she spotted a little lot of this little, frog-like outlaws. They were armed with sharp, long sables and waited for... something. They planned something.
"Good!", another outlaw said, "'Cause here they come! Get in to positions!"
The group hided behind the left side the street behind a great wall. Jennadelle saw the trailers, drived by clakkerz, coming closer to the outlaws. The clakkerz all were still unsuspecting.
"Hold it... hold it... hold it...", the outlaw said calmly to his colleagues while he focused the coming trailers, "hold it..."
Jennadelle sensed something bad.
"NOW!", the outlaw shouted loudly.
One of his group throwed the leverage immediately which sparked the dynamite on the other side the street.
It banged loudly when big rocks fell and blocked the whole street. Nobody of the clakkerz could find a way out anymore. The trailers were caged.
The outlaws were pleased with it jubilantly: "Yeah! Okay, guard the area! Make sure no one get's to the trains!"
Except for me of course, Jennadelle thought with a smirk.
She felt something mysterious in her pugnacity. There happened something in her fingers. A bit confusedly Jennadelle looked down at them.
She had let her long, sharp, black claws out her finger tips.
What...?, she confusedly thought and looked closer her claws, How did I do this?"
Jennadelle touched her finger tips carefuly.
Razor-sharp...!, she found out.
A little moment she didn't know what to think of it.
Finally she grinned: Cool!
And her tail waged feisty. That would be fun!
But before Jennadelle could attack, she saw a little, squirrel-like creature which seemed to appear from nowhere landing right in front of her hide.
This animal started to rail and to bluster loudly now.
"Hush!", Jennadelle whispered, "You snafu my whole plan, you little...!"
"Hey!Who's this over there?", an outlaw shouted, "A rodent! I hate rodents!"
He dropped from the group and ran straight to the harasser. Straight to Jennadelle's hideout.
No! That little, loud thing leads them all to me at last!, Jennadelle thought,
...nevermind, I can knock the stuffing out of them anyway.
But abruptly the outlaw got wounded by a spider and wraped in her gluey net. He lost his balance and banged on the ground. His sable was no use now. It was fallen out his hands and lay out of reach. The captive outlaw even could call his colleagues... the spider did gag his mouth with its net already.
Didn't I see this sort of spider before...?!, Jennadelle thought, then in the forest...with that... bounty hunter... oh...!
You could hear hasty, heavy steps which came closer the lying outlaw very fastly. Jennadelle went a bit deeper in the grass to hide better. And she already knew who it could be.
At this moment a big, booted man stood in front of his winded booty on the ground. And he opened his can trap.
The outlaw tried despairingly to hold fast to the ground but the suck was too strong. It just took seconds till the outlaw was baged.
Plopp!
"Hey! Who's there?", an outlaw shouted ahead.
The bounty hunter jumped in the high grass immediately where Jennadelle hided.
Jennadelle took her breath away surprised looking.
Now the big, redoubtable bounty hunter. Right now. At this awkward moment.
And when he walked some steps back to hide better he came closer to Jennadelle.
He didn't notice her yet. Although she sat on her knees close behind him...
The outlaw which spotted a glimpse of a hat-wearing stranger came closer to the place where the bounty hunter baged the outlaw before.
"Where did he go?", the outlaw asked and looked around.
Altough he stood next to the bounty hunters he couldn't see them because of the high, thick-set grass. They hided very well.

Clack-click-clack-clack-click.

Another spider was charged on the crossbow. The outlaw turned to the direction where this inscrutable sound came from... but he didn't see a thing.
"What the...?", he asked and tried to do some curious steps to the shrubbery.
Bumm.
But the bounty hunter did shot his spider already...!
The spider ammo wraped in its booty with its gluey, white net like the other one.
The lying and winding outlaw saw with scare how a big, strong hand shooted out the grass and pulled him at his feet back to the hideout. Now he was at the guy's mercy which owned that hand...
Jennadelle froze. She was so close to that bounty hunter that they could touch themself. And he didn't take notice of her at all? Was he that busy?
The wretched outlaw tried as good he could to grab hold of the ground. But he couldn't elude the suck of the can trap.
Plopp!
He was another captured outlaw of the bounty hunter now.
The sucking can got closed quickly and Stranger put it under his poncho.
"Hey, guys! Where are you? You mustn't hop off here now!", the residual one of the group shouted.
He ran, innocent like his forerunner, ahead to look for his chicken-hearted colleagues which had turned the corner.
"We have to guard the...", he said but then he noticed surprisedly that nobody was here anymore.
There was only an empty street with partial high grass on both sides.
Confusedly he looked around.
"Ahm...guys?!", he shouted unsurely, "Where are you?"
Nobody answered.
While Stranger looked at his next prey with his green shining eyes he saw Jennadelle sitting in his angle all of a sudden.
Now he turned to her.
Jennadelle's blood ran cold. Now he did notice her! And he stood right in front of her! What was now? What he was going to do now?
Jennadelle shyed some steps from him.
But Stranger kept calm.
Either Jennadelle's attendance didn't surprise him actually or his poker-face didn't tell it. The green of Stranger's eyes glowed through the shadow of his sun-bleached hat directly in Jennadelle's face.
And in this moment the time seemed to stop.
While the innocent outlaw still stood outside and paced around, Jennadelle waited anxiously for Stranger's response.
But it happened different from Jennadelle fears.
Stranger put in his own confident, calm way his fore-finger on his lips and indicated: Just keep calm... trust in me...
Jennadelle nodded hesitantly and still looked in his eyes unsurely.
Stranger smiled a bit... and turned to the outlaw to keep watching the outlaw.
Jennadelle had a closer look at this mysterious bounty hunter. And at once, his look seemed to awake something deep in Jennadelle. She felt it clearly in her bones. No, Stranger was much more than just a bounty hunter in this moment. Someone... particular. Special.
But it wasn't his mysterious character... or that he was the only one who used live ammo.
No.
Jennadelle just knew it. There was a forgot but significance memory in her heart... but she didn't find out what it was now.
Maybe she would, if she kept an eye on that fellow.
Yes, it had to be so.
"Guys, that's not funny!", the seeking outlaw shouted, "What if this bounty hunter comes here...! Damn, now come out your hideout already!"
Bumm.
The third time. The bounty hunter pulled him to his hideout.
And plopp he was in his can trap.
Jennadelle didn't have an idea what was going to happen now. All outlaws within the range of vision were gone. Baged by the bounty hunter. And Jennadelle? She just stood there like an idiot and didn't know what to say...
"This area is safe again.", Stranger said with his deep, calm voice and let his crossbow close. He want out the hidout. Jennadelle followed him.
"What... what was that before?", she asked unsurely.
The bounty hunter went his way quickly. First it seemed that he didn't hear Jennadelle. He paused in front of the boulder.
"What was what?", he asked calmly.
At the same time he looked for opportunities to come over the boulder. He didn't even take a look at Jennadelle.
"I meant that what you did... with the outlaws... before.", Jennadelle tried to tell.While she said that she felt asininely unknowing.
"Such as those creatures you shoted as ammo. What were that for... things?"
Stranger just seemed to ignore her again. He spotted a hanging rope next to a wall some meters ahead. The outlaws must have made it just in case for emergencies. And they needed to get over this blockage in this case. Jennadelle followed him. She didn't think whether he already know that she was his business competition or not. Anyway, he seemed not to be that dangerous...!
Stranger climped up the rope without giving Jennadelle an answer. But Jennadelle didn't give up to interfere with Stranger. Even she knew that this could be a dangerous game...
Wordlessly she climped up the rope quickly than he did and saw how Stranger just jumped off the other side.
So, he think I can make anything by himself and ignore me?, Jennadelle thought and was a bit offended, We'll see...!

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yeeeeeeehaw sorry got a bit excited excellent good discriptions

e.g"The green of Stranger's eyes glowed through the shadow of his sun-bleached hat directly in Jennadelle's face."

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Hehe, thanks .

But like I said: The worst is yet to come. It was just the (boring) beginning
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maid! You always seem to surprise me with this. I doubt that Stranger saw Jennadelle. She just assumed,I believe Stranger can camoflage but this Jennadelle can do it even better but I will wait and see.

Yeah its really boring.

However I am tempted to play Stranger's Wrath and see if I can find this Jennadelle character behind my tracks
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I'm new here and I read this story long before I logged in.
It's very exciting. Please carry on with it! I want to read more!!
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Thanks for the compliments!

It took long but here's the next part of the chapter:

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All hell was let loose on the place where the tracks stood.
Clakkerz ran for their lifes, followed by shooting outlaws. The Clakkerz took fly in all their tracks and closed their doors immediately.
And the outlaws battered against them with their guns.
"Get out! Now!", the outlaws shouted.
"Never! Go away, you stupid vermins! Hit the road already! Go away!"
And you heard other clakkerz crying: "Oh, we're all gonna die! They will shot
us all! We're so dead!"
All outlaws enjoyed themselves tremendously with their awed booty while a
lion-like bounty hunter sneaked up slowly through shrubberies to his bounty.
Clack-click-clack-clack-click.
One of that strange, cheeky squirrel and a spider thing sat on the crossbow
now. And with the same tactic which Stranger used some minutes ago, he
bagged three outlaws.
But surprisedly, all outlaws ran in the contrarious direction now.
And nobody came back. Just nobody.
You heard loudly bloodcurdling screams, shots and swearwords.
But then there was a dead silence.
What the...?, Stranger thought and left his hide slowly to look after what was go on behind the trailers. He leaned with his back against a caravan and had a carefuly look around its corner... but everywhere was nobody.
The place was just like empty. Thereby the bounty hunter was sure that there had to be a half-dozen outlaws some seconds ago. Stranger stepped to that place and looked around.
How could these outlaws just disappear without leaving their marks? Was this
a trick?
"Hey, boys! Where are you?", a last outlaw shouted afar which Stranger had
overlooked.
Before the outlaw could spot him, Stranger jumped in the next hiding shrubbery. The gun wearing outlaw stepped fastly on the great place between the tracks, which one was crawled with a lot of his friends some moments ago...!
"Uuuh... guys?", he asked so gently that you could pity him now, "Get out
your hides. The boss said he needs everyone of us for the ambush...!? Boys?"
Thereby you could see his fear of dangers in his frog-like eyes. While this
helpless one watched out for his fellows, Stranger got ready for an attack.
But he abuted upon something. Or someone.
Stranger saw Jennadelle standing next to him, aiming at the meandering outlaw and it seemed that Jennadelle didn't know who stood near her.
"What the hell are you doing here?! You must not...", Stranger whispered
angrily but Jennadelle cuted in with a warningly gesture.
There was an outlaw which could hear them finally...!
Stranger became a little low but doubly ominous for it: "Why did you follow
me?"
Jennadelle saw in his eyes. Actually, she wanted to answer but she had a lump in her throat at the moment. Jennadelle became a little nervous now. She mustn't tell him that she also was a bounty hunter.
He would become... angry.
"Listen, I really can't deal with you, my little lady. I plan to kick some oulaws's asses at the moment..."
"It's exactly what I do!", Jennadelle blurted out the truth.
She was scared herself by her directness but it was too late to call it off now.
"You... what?!!", Stranger was so surprised that he lost the control about his loudness at this second.
The oulaw noticed him and stepped to the shrubbery. But he was still a stone's throw from the bounty hunters.
Stranger did a hounding and irritated gesture and snarled: "I'll look after you
later. First he's next..."
And he left his hide fastly. Jennadelle watched how the outlaw pulled the gun out and aimed at the bounty hunter. But before the outlaw could fire he got
wounded by a spider which wraped him up in its white net busily. After some
seconds Stranger came closer to him.
Plopp!
Jennadelle stepped out her hide when she noticed that this was the last outlaw here. Now there was no danger anymore. Momentarily.
Silence was on the trailer place while Jennadelle came closer to Stranger.
"So, plaintext now!", Stranger turned to her.
Fortunately, he seemed to be a little cooler than before.
"Why did you follow me?"
Jennadelle had to tell him the truth. Who cares. He couldn't harm more than
the six outlaws which Jennadelle had baged before.
"I didn't follow you, I wanted to go to Floyd. I'm a bounty hunter."
When he heard the word bounty hunter Stranger turned his face away
from her... refraining from laughing.
Sure, he disbelieved her. Maybe it was good so. For Jennadelle. She kept
serious anyway.
"Forget it, Floyd is mine.", Stranger said in his calmly way.
But now... he really began to loom large...
He closed in on Jennadelle and looked at her with his gimlet, green eyes.
Jennadelle's heart was almost in heer boots. But she dissembled it. As good as she could...
This man was dangerous indeed.
"I think you better stay out my way", Stranger turned and went away.
He let Jennadelle stay where she was. If she didn't have the strong feeling to
remain with Stranger she would be miles away in a second.
But something important... Jennadelle felt it clearly in her bones, it could not
be wrong... something important let her close to this mysterious bounty hunter.
A clakker stept out his trailer: "Whew… glad you showed up! I thought we
were goners!"
Stranger came close to him: "The outlaws seemed to have blocked the way to town."
"Yeah, those stinky bastards got us good this time!", the clakker said peevishly, "Hmm...well, I think there's a mine shat that'll get us to town"
And he stept to a place behind the trailers where a metallic bridge was cranked up over it's head. But he didn’t take notice of it. Yet.
"Now, where is it? I could've sworn it was over here.", the clakker said and had a look at his left and his right but he still didn't find something, "N-no, oh! Maybe over here... oh... now what was I lookin' fer again...?"
And surprisedly:

DONG!

The metallic bridge over the clakker fell, and landed right on his body. He was
dead immediately.
"Oooops! Ha ha haa!", you heard someone laughing afar behind the fallen bridge.



And no person other than Filthy Hands Floyd with his two boys stood behind the pressed button for the machinery of the bridge.
Stranger took no notice of the killed clakker and came, in his strong and
indomitable way, a little closer to the outlaw boss.
"Filthy-hands Floyd.", he snarled, "I'm taking you in. Alive or a corpse. It’s your choice..."
But the outlaw boss was nearly unimpressed of his enemy.
"Looks like we got's company, boys!", he said nonchalantly to his two minions which were gun-toting as well. But their guns were not as big as Floyd's shotgun.
"Let's give him a warm welcome.", Floyd grinned.
In this moment Jennadelle's pride became provoked. She stept quickly in the range of vision of the outlaws.
"Hey, you! Try to match with me first!"
...now there was a dead silence while everyone payed attention to that strange girl.
Then finally, all outlaws bursted out laughing.
Stranger just banged his hand on his forehead and shaked his head.
Floyd looked at him grinning while his minions almost rolled on the floor:
"Hey, Stranger! What... is she a friend of yours?"
Stranger pulled his over the eyes lying hat right on his head and looked at Floyd: "Hell, no! I don't know who she is!"
Now Jennadelle was pissed. Pissed off.
It was already enough that these outlaws did laugh. And that Stranger was ashamed of her. Everybody just underestimated her so much...
Jennadelle's bloody claw came out her finger tips fastly and she became gimlet-eyed. Now it was time to show who she was!
Showing her carnivore-like teeth, she crawled: "You don't know who I am? Well, I'll teach you with who you are dealing with!"
And at this moment everything happened very quickly. Too quickly for both of Floyd's boys which with laughter didn't notice the dangerous, wacked out thing with razor-sharp claws which came closer to them at an accelerated tempo. But now, when it was too late, the outlaw minions stopped to laugh.
Now, when claws drilled deep in the first minion's chest.
The minion could not say a word. Couldn't scream. He just droped dead immediately.
His fellow cried out and tried with his gun to aim at that cat-like murderer.
But Jennadelle saw him earlier than he saw her.
With a jump, she avoid his shoot which splintered the next barrel behind.
Meanwhile Floyd came out his confusion that had let him just watching what that girl did with his boys the last seconds.
And he got ready his shotgun.
Jennadelle hunted after the fleeing minion. Thereby she let him ran to the next trailer.
Then she baged him there. And didn't even let him resound.
Stranger watched Jennadelle a bit amazedly at her but he didn't say a thing.
Plopp!
Another outlaw in Jennadelle's can trap. Almost alive. Not like the last one which Jennadelle had killed by her anger.
Now Floyd got his gun reload finally and aimed at Jennadelle which had turned him her back while she had baged his minion:
"Wait, you little...!"
Stranger act immediately when he saw him.
Quickly he ran from behind the trailer to Jennadelle and pulled her back behind it again.
Right in this moment the bounty hunters saw big bullets which missed Jennadelle by some centimeters and they bored deep in the floor now.
Five ones at the same time.
"Oh my... ", Jennadelle whispered scared.
Stranger lost his hold on her arm.
She looked at him a little wonderingly: "That was damn nice of you."
"You were too overhasty!", Stranger told her earnestly, "Never do that again if you want to have a long life in this job!"
Jennadelle nodded.
"I just was pissed..."
"Keep your temper then, young lady!", Stranger said and turned away from
her, "Even they are outlaws."

Clack-click-clack-clack-click

"Leave Floyd to me."
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How boring...

SO KEEP IT UP ALREADY!!! It becomes exciting I think.
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Boring?



...okay, it is boring...

I hope I'll make it better in future
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(On the strength of a little post deleting problem I need to say again: )

I just kidded, it's not that boring
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While Jennadelle licked her bloody claws clean, she watched interested how that bounty hunter started working. Floyd was in a very bad temper, you could see that easily. Every wrong move you did could cost some of his big bullets in your waist! That's why it was excessively good that a beginner, like Jennadelle, had somebody who she could learn from. And Stranger was really perfect for this. Why not? By his innumerable years as a bounty hunter, he just had to be master of his trade.
So this was it. A big bad-ass bounty hunter.
However Floyd tried to shoot him he never could hit that lion-like man. Stranger wasn't so offensive like Jennadelle. He sneaked up slowly but surely to his enemy. While he came closer to Floyd, there stood something, it seemed to be a new kind of ammo, something biting, furry on his crossbow. Jennadelle realized these furry animals. It was the same nasty, grim sort which she had saw in the forest before. Those ones, which had attacked the hunting outlaw in the name of "Blisterz Booty".
Unconditionally, no cuddly toys. And Floyd obviously agreed about that.
Because in this second he get shooted by two of these beasts and they seemed to develope an appetite for his flesh...!
Floyd screamed filled with fear like a scared child and tried hastily to strike these things dead. He just tried everything to get them off while Stranger came closer and closer to him.
It proved to be an advantage to come closer to an outlaw when he's too busy with other important things. Like not to let rankled to his bones...
"Aaah!", the poor cried, "Fuzzles! FUZZLES! I hate fuzzles! Go away, you stupid vermins! Ow! I kill all of you!!"
But now Stranger shooted another portion of them at him and Floyd didn't notice anymore how close Stranger stood to him already. Yet he had to save his bacon (which was really tattered). And surprisedly, Stranger stood very close in front of him. And he didn't leave Floyd any seconds to aim his gun at him. Because he get hit by a spider.
And he was captured now. Floyd wriggled, strugglem just did everything to get out of its net. But it didn't help. Floyd was trapped.
Stranger ran to him before the silk could get riven and hold his opened can trap in front of his scared face.
Jennadelle watched Stranger. For any reason she didn't care that she saw that man baging her prey. She knew that this man, this Stranger mattered.
Sooner or later he would it be, and Jennadelle knew it exactly, who she will...

Plopp!

Jennadelle forgot her thoughts for a moment when she saw that Floyd was captured in the can trap. She stept to Stranger.
Stranger put his can back under his poncho and grined at her: "Did you see that? So you have to do it!"
Jennadelle rolled her eyes.
"The big bounty hunter...", she said quietly with an undertone.
Stranger gave her a little, soft pat on her shoulder. Jennadelle wondered about his gesture but didn't say a word. She looked at him. And in this moment, Stranger reminded on the thoughts she had about this bounty hunter before... Jennadelle really seemed to remember... but...
Stranger noticed her long, mysterious look now.
"What...?", he asked.
Jennadelle turned away from him: "Nothing..."
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Jennadelle really seems to remember soon. Although, I guess it's something bad. (Or I hope so!)
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Finally finished readin this. ^_^ I like it so far.

So this is running alongside the game? It's a pity I've never played it. (I don't have an X-Box) I wonder how Jennadelle is going to react to Stranger being a Steef.
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I am glad, you like it


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So this is running alongside the game?
Actually, I plan to. But Jennadelle never goes along with Stranger all the time. Only in the beginning of the story (and perhaps in other important parts). So there's going to happen much more than "only" Stranger's story... much more.


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I wonder how Jennadelle is going to react to Stranger being a Steef.
First things first . That part is not yet to come...
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But Jennadelle never goes along with Stranger all the time. Only in the beginning of the story (and perhaps in other important parts). So there's going to happen much more than "only" Stranger's story... much more.
I look forward for it 'cause I already know Stranger's whole story...
That makes your story more interesting !
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Jennadelle stept in the bounty store.
The clerk eyed her inquisitively while she came closer the counter.
"Uuh...", he asked unsurely, "...you found something?"
Jennadelle didn't answer but put her filled can trap on the counter so that the clakker could see for himself. First he put Jennadelle's can-like thing hesitatingly and took off its top carefuly. He only left the cap ajar, that was already enough to have a look in there.
Jennadelle waited patiently and fawning for his reaction.
"Hmm...", the clerk mumbled and his eyes became small, "...pretty much for your first try."
He closed the cap again and looked at Jennadelle sternly: "But Floyd ain't there. So you didn't get him, did you?"
Jennadelle kept silent.
"Well then!", the clakker sighed and went back to the back room, " let's attend to your prey now..."
It became quiet. Jennadelle didn't mind. That had to be so that he did this. Stranger had told her everything about the job while they had went back to the town. Soon the clerk would be back, would give her the can trap back and hand out Jennadelle's reward. That's it. The outlaws will be placed somewhere they never could burst...
The clerk came back and put the can trap back on the counter.
"Actually, what do you do with all the outlaws which I give you? What happens with them?", Jennadelle sternly demanded.
Thereupon, the clakker got a sneaky, spiteful grin in his face: "Company secret..."
"I see...", Jennadelle said incuriousely and took her can trap back in her side pocket.
The clerk watched her a little inquisitively: "May I ask you something... Jennadelle? That's your name, isn't it?
She nodded.
Then he asked: "That Stranger guy... say, where is he actually? Did you see him?"
"He's yet to come.."
"Aha..."
The clerk scratched his back of the head nervously. He seemed to want to say something but he didn't find the right words.
"Uuh... well... uhm.", he started to talk, "what happened? I mean... uh..."
Jennadelle got impatient.
"Say! What do you want to know?", she asked abrasively.
The clerk took a deep breath: "Did you get a peck of trouble when you ran into Stranger? Was he pissed?"
"Well...", Jennadelle answered, "...a bit."
"A bit??"
The clakker was surpised.
"Untill now, nobody made it to come back in one piece when they tried to upset Stranger's plans. And you're telling me, he just was a bit pissed?"
Jennadelle nodded. The clakker just shaked his head when he saw her easy, relaxed reaction.
He voiced something under his breath incomprehensibly. It sounded like he was really negative surprised about it.
The only things Jennadelle understood were: "Why...? Hmm... girl! ... barefaced...! Bounty hunter! What... wrong with that guy?! ... Just let her...! "
Jennadelle cut in on him: "Your prison in that town is quite small. All the outlaws just would lack space there. How can you put them all in prison?"
The clakker answered: "We only send the very bads in the prisons."
"What's with the others?"
"I told you. Company secret."
Jennadelle sighed.
The clerk grined again: "But, of course, you may make a visit there anytime you want to. Only Blisterz Booty does time there now. Unless..."

Now the door became opened.

"Ah, Stranger! I see, your hunt was successful?!"
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WOW thats a really good story! nice work!

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Awesome story!

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"Actually, what do you do with all the outlaws which I give you? What happens with them?", Jennadelle sternly demanded.
Thereupon, the clakker got a sneaky, spiteful grin in his face: "Company secret..."
Company secret?! Funny idea.
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Ack! I've missed so much!! You MUST update soon, SM!! Please!!
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Hell, yes! Why do you let us wait that long? I'm curious about Stranger's next behaviors. By the way I like that Jennadelle character and I'm also curious about her forgotten past.

So when do you plan to carry on with the story?
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You're all so sweet, guys ! You know that?

Actually, I've the whole story in mind. But unfortunately, I don't have ideas for the sequel to this situation yet. First I thought Stranger could make Jennadelle to his partner but then I thought Stranger would not want to, because he's just the lone wolf of oddworld (in my eyes)...! But he'd not accept a rival which ran into him always too, don't you think? Stranger just needs to get the moolah.

That's why I didn't carry on with my story yet. But I still think about good ideas. So if you can give me some suggestion then PM me. Maybe you inspire me then.
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