Slaga's Faith

[odd chick]

Great chapter, Sliguy! I like Yerus-he seems like a very wise character. Well, keep your story going-it just keeps getting better and better as it goes.

[sliguy101]

Chapter 11: Seperate Bloods

After Slaga was done walking on the lake, he had arrived on an island. "That was incredible!" Said Slaga to himself. "Not for long." Said a voice. Gertian had come down from a plam tree. "I have warned you Slaga. You can't escape me." He said. "Enough babbling!" Slaga yelled, "why do you keep following me?" "Hey, it's a rough job. I have to both follow you AND keep the war going." Replied Gertian.
Slaga had getting pretty mad. He felt like he wanted to take out his gun and start shooting him. 'But what good would that do?' Thought Slaga. "Ah yes, I know how I can get you to join my side." Said Gertian. He took out two vials. "The one in my left hand holds the blood of your mother, and the one in my right had hold the blood of your father. If you join my side, you'll get these and much more. Power, moolah, weapons, anything you want. But if you choose not to accept this offer, I shall crush these vials, and then I shall kill you." He said.
Slaga shook with fear. Tears came down his eyes. he fell to the ground and started to scream as loud as he could. Gertian got his gun again and pinned Slaga down. "Slaga, Slaga, Slaga. You just can't make the right choices." Said Gertian. He was about to pull the trigger, but then a giant wave hit him. Slaga opened his eyes and got up. He saw Yerus swim my. He gave Slaga a small wink and dived down to the deepest part of the lake.
He saw the vials unharmed. he picked them up and looked at them. They were a pretty dark red. "I must keep these safe." Said Slaga. He opened a pocket slot in his pants, put the vials in it and closed it. "Mom and dad. You may have done terrible things to me, but deep down, I will always love you two."

[odd chick]

Beautiful! Marvellous!! Fantastic!! That was by far your best chapter yet. I only spotted one grammar error, but other than that, it was excellent! You really know how to capture the characters' emotions-and that's what's so great about your writing style! I give that chapter a 5/5 for it's content.

[sliguy101]

Chapter 12: The Geruda Cave

There was a long silence. "I must complete my quest. There is no time to spare." Said Slaga. He walked into a palm tree forest. After a while, he had arrived at The Geruda Cave. Let me tell you, IT WAS HUGE! The entrance was in the shape of a large spike. It seemed to have a bumpy red-rock structure. All of a sudden, without warning, a large group of bats flew out of the cave, making a loud squelching sound. Slaga ducked down, covering his head as the bats flew by. When he got up, he calmed himself down and went inside the cave.
Luckily, it wasn't too dark in there thanks to Slaga's red eyes. It was pretty scary in there though. All that he could hear was the wind going inside the cave, and his own breath. Slaga could also hear a few whispers once in a while. Drops of clear water came down on Slaga from above. Fear had struck him.
Slaga felt another suprise coming. It sounded like footsteps. They were awfully fast, and they were getting closer every second. Slaga finally realized what was coming. A large herd of scrabs came running towards Slaga. He didn't know what to do. There was no ledge to climb, and he would never have the courage to kill a scrab. He just screamed out the word, "Help!" That was his last word before he was trampled.
He had been suprised. The scrabs just kept running. Slaga was in so much pain, he couldn't even move a finger. He had begun to go unconscious. His eyes were getting very heavy. He closed them and went unconscious.

[sliguy101]

Chapter 13: Captured

The darkness from Slaga's closed eyes had left him. He found himself in a small cage inside of this room. It looked like a vyker lounge. The wallpaper was a bit soft and had a few bloodscrapes on them. "So our pet has finally awakened." Said a voice. Once again, Slaga saw Gertian. "You're such a bastard!" Yelled Slaga. Imidietely, Slaga was shocked by about 40,000 volts. "Now, now. Be nice, or else you'll come face to face with our punishments." Said Gertian. "OUR punishments?" Asked Slaga. About 8 sligs appeared with their guns loaded.
"Come, my minions. Let us go celebrate for the capture of Slaga!" He ordered. All the sligs ran out, but Gertian stayed. "By the way, Slaga. You shall be killed in a short amount of time. Get comfortable while you're in there." He said as he hopped out of the room.
Slaga looked around the room some more. It had sharp blades, bone saws, and more torture devices. But to his right side, there was a stick with the yellow fire on it in a torcholder. "I'm goanna die! I'm goanna die!" Screamed Slaga. He cried and cried alot.
After about ten minutes of nonstop crying, he pulled out the vials from his pocket. They were unharmed. "This is for you two, mom and dad." He said with proud dignity. He grabbed a few of the bars from the cage and began to bend them. He was doing very well! Then, he completely broke the cage. Slaga dashed for the yellow fire on a stick. He grabbed it and ran for the exit.
An alarm was going off. Gertian and the other sligs were behind him. Slaga let out a large cry. his vision had turned white. He was near the temple at the top of the mountain.
'What was that?' Thought Slaga, 'it seems that I have been teleported here by somebody. Anyways, he climbed up the mountian and got near the right torcholder. He lit it, and then the temple let out a small beam. "I am closer than I think." Said Slaga with a small grin.

[Fuzzleman54321]

Cool! That was awsome Sligguy101! Please write another Chapter!

[The Marching Mudokon]

Great chapters sliguy101, keep up the great story!

[sliguy101]

Chapter 14: All is not lost

Gertian and the sligs were angry that Slaga had escaped their clutches again. "There is nutin we can do boss!" Yelled a slig. All of a sudden, Gertian had an idea. "All is not lost, my troops. I know where Slaga is going next." He said. "Where is that, boss?" Asked another slig.
"It's the Iceshad Mountain." Replied Gertian, "Slaga is searching for four fire. Right now, he has three. We must not let him get that fire on the top of that mountian. So I guess we'll have to race him to the top." "Yes, that plan is grand." Said a voice. The mudokkon shepard had appeared. "I thank you for the information, Molluk." Said Gertian. The mudokkon shepard had taken the shape of Molluk. "Oh, it's my pleasure." Replied Molluk. "Now there's no way Slaga will triumph!" Exclaimed Gertian. Then, they had all laughed evily.
Slaga was starting his journey to the Iceshad mountian. "I've got a feeling that I am being betrayed." Said Slaga, "I mean, what if this is all a trick. But still, I must still have trust in the shepard." Slaga had not seen this coming, but Gertian and the sligs were on the other side, following Slaga to the mountain.

Chapter 15: The race begins

It wouldn't be long until Slaga realized that Gertian was following Slaga around, since the forest would no longer seperated. Slaga finally noticed Gertian and the sligs. He held out his gun. "What are you doing here?" Asked Slaga. Gertian did a small, evil laugh. "Racing you up to the mountian." Replied Gertian. "Racing me?" Said Slaga in a confused way. I know what you are looking for, Slaga. Thanks to the valuble information I was given, I have a closer eye on you." Replied Gertian. "Who in the world gave you that info?" Asked Slaga raising his gun more. "You just don get it, do you Slaga?" Said Gertian. He and the sligs ran off, taking first place in the race so far.
Slaga decided to walk. He was tired after all that running in that other place anyways. "Who gave him such information?" Slaga kept asking himself. He had finally arrived at Iceshad Mountain at night.
Luckily, because of Slaga's good eyes, he could see Gertian's camp not nearly halfway up the mountian. Slaga could feel snow under his legs. He already began to feel cold. "I must get through this." Slaga had said if he ever would feel scared.
He fianlly began his journey going up the mountain. It was slippery, so he had to be careful. By morning, he was a little bit halfway up the mountain. It had been nonstop climbing for him. Suddenly, while Slaga was still climbing, Slaga had slipped. He found himself dangling from a cliff, holding on for dear life Also, a huge snowdrift was falling down, and it was coming towards him. He had done a quick side crawl and dodged it by the skin of a human pair of teeth. Slaga climbed back up and regained balance. "Oh! I am sorry! I didn't mean to do that." Said the voice of a worried female. A figure of a blue female mudokkon appeared.

[sliguy101]

C'mon people, isn't this a good story?

[The Marching Mudokon]

Sure it is, I really like it. You've got a good story going here.

[odd chick]

Hey, sorry I didn't reply sooner-I couldn't go on the internet today because I've been kinda busy. Anyway, those were great chapters as usual. Keep the story going-I love how you really captured the atmosphere and environment in chapter 12! It seems so creepy!

[kjjcarpenter]

Yes it is whens chapter 16?

[sliguy101]

Chapter 16: Skaihera

"What are you talking about?" Asked Slaga. "First, let me introduce myself." Said the mudokkon, "I am Skaihera, goddess of winter. I can do anything with winter, and I accidently used it to try to kill you. I'm very sorry." "Are you really a goddess?" Asked Slaga. Skaihera nodded. "Are you also sure that you did that by accident?" Slaga asked again. "Have trust in me, Slaga."
Skaihera put her arm on Slaga's shoulder. "Are you hurt?" She asked. "A little. But I'm mostly shocked. I don't think I can go on anymore." Replied Slaga. "Don't say that Slaga." Skaihera said immidietely, "just think what could happen if Gertian gets that fire. If he does, you'll die, period." "Dying is better than this!" Yelled Slaga in Skaihera's face. There was a very long silence after that.
"Slaga, if you don't complete this quest, all of Oddworld will be both angry and upset at you." Added Skaihera. There was another silence. Then finally, Slaga said, "but how? How am I goanna get to the top when Gertian is better than be?" "The bloods of your parents." Pointed out. "What?" Said Slaga really confused. "Drink them. They will give you strength Slaga." Replied Skaihera. "Are you sure?" Asked Slaga. "Absolutely." Replied Skaihera, "now I must go. Good-bye Slaga! Stay alive, for we will meet again." Skaihera had dissapeared into the winter mist.
Slaga took out the vials hold the bloods of his parents. They were still unharmed, and still warm. He opened the blood of his mother. "This is for you, Grily." Said Slaga. He drank the blood of his mom down to the last drop and put in back in his pocket. He took out the blood of his father next. "This is for you, Lou." Said Slaga. He drank his father's blood and put the empty vial back in his pocket. Slaga was now feeling the strength going through him. He continued on climbing the mountian.

[odd chick]

Nice chapter, Sliguy. There was one thing that I thought was a bit awkward in that chapter, and it was: "Slaga, if you don't complete this quest, all of Oddworld will be both angry and upset at you." It makes sense, but I was wondering why Oddworld would be angry and upset with him. You could've said something like, "Slaga, if you don't complete this quest, all of Oddworld will be both angry and upset at you because not only would the inhabitants be overpowered by Gertian, but they would also be in poverty due to his selfishness." That was just a very minor thing I found, though. Other than that, the story's great!

[Fuzzleman54321]

GREAT,GREAt,GREAT! I'm am liking this! Please write chapter 17

[sliguy101]

Chapter 17: The blue fire

As Slaga was still going up the mountain, he began to think about something. 'The god and the goddess both had said the same thing when I was done talking to them. They both said 'Stay alive, for we will meet again.' What do they mean?'
That had really pondered him while going up the mountain. He even stopped for a moment or two to think about it alot more. Anyways, Slaga not only saw the blue fire on a stick, but he couldn't believe the view when he got to the top. It had been incredible. But that all started to change quickly. Gertian and his slig troop were almost to the top. When they got there. Gertian was angry.
"You son of a mudokkon! I can't believe you got up here before I did!" He yelled. "I guess the goddess of Oddworld watches over me." Replied Slaga. Gertian laughed evily, which echoed in the mountains. "The goddess of Oddworld would never watch over you if you were thhe kindest creature on Oddworld!" Gertian scowled out. "Yes she would!" Yelled Slaga back at Gertian. All of a sudden, there was a talk back fight going on with, "no she wouldn't! Yes she would! No she wouldn't! Yes she would!"
Finally, Gertian yelled, "Stop!' he took out his gun. So did all the other sligs. "So Slaga. Are you goanna come quietly, or do I have to kill you once and for all?" He asked. Slaga was shaking. He could feel his fear rising. He was holding the stick of the blue fire in his hand, about to drop it. He was about to scream, but then the ice block he was standing on cracked, and he found himself sliding down the mountain. He screamed, but then realized that it was just like riding on a sled. "Woo-hoo! This is great!" He yelled. "DANGIT SLAGA!! GET BACK HERE!!!" Ordered Gertian.

[odd chick]

I really liked that chapter, Sliguy! It was very dramatic and even a bit amusing in parts. Way to go!

[sliguy101]

Chapter 18: Suprise!

Slaga had just made his darring escape down the mountain. Gertian and the sligs were still up at the top. "I'm almost to the end! I'm almost to the end!" Exclaimed Slaga while he was running back to the temple. Before Slaga could go to the temple, he had to check on the war. Once he got to the battlfield, he couldn't believe what he saw.
There were mudokkons happily cheering and dancing. This must have meant they have won the war! Slaga could also see many sligs lying dead on the battlefield. They have also tossed away their weapons. It made Slaga's eyes widen. But then, someone yelled, "Enough!!!"
Gertian and the slig troop came running out. the mudokkons ran as the sligs and Gertian tried to shoot them. Finally, Slaga came out and things grew silent. "Suprise, Slaga. Welcome to your death hour." Said Gertian. Slaga, who was still holding the blue fire at his side, held it close. "You just see, Gertian. Soon, I shall light the last torchholder and then I will become immortal!" Yelled Slaga. "I'm afraid I can't allow that." Said a voice.
Molluk had came out of the bushes. "Who are you?" Asked Slaga. "What? You don't reconize me, Slaga?" Replied Molluk. He turned into the mudokkon shepard. Slaga pointed a finger at him. "Traitor!" He yelled. He ran towards the shepard, but the shepard pushed him back with a beam from his staff. Slaga got up in agony. "So Slaga. Give me the blue fire, or else you'll die." Ordered Gertian. Slaga stood in silence.

[odd chick]

Yay! Molluck is in it!! That's cool because he's the best Oddworld "bad guy", in my opinion. You know, if you ever write a third story based on this series, I wouldn't mind seeing Abe make an appearence in it. Anyway, great chapter!

[sliguy101]

The FINALIE!

Chapter 19: A final blow

Slaga did a rough sigh. Gertian and all the sligs were pointing their guns at Slaga. "C'mon! Don't have all day!" Yelled Gertian. Slaga looked straight at Gertian. "Gertian. I'm tired of you, so I think it's time to have a final battle. Right here, right now." He said. The mudokkon shepard (who was really Molluk) lifted his staff and tried to attack Slaga. But Gertian grabbed his staff and stopped him. "This is just between me and him." Said Gertian.
Slaga and Gertian slowly walked up to eachother, staring face to face. All of a sudden, they ran towards each other. Both of them started to punch eachother nonstop. The sligs, mudokkons, and Molluk stood there watching them fight.
Finally, Gertian pinned Slaga to the ground, and took his gun out. "Your faith in the gods is low Slaga, they don't love you. TIME TO DIE!!!!" He yelled. All of a sudden, Slaga had a quick flashback of his childhood and working at Gertian's Brew. He could hear saying back then like, "shoot it! Shoot it! Shoot it! Nice one, boss! You are different from other sligs. TIME TO DIE!!!! Stay alive, for we will meet again."
Shockingly, Slaga had punched Gertian right in the middle of his chest. He flew in the air. "AHHHH! WHAT DID YOU DO TO ME?!?" Gertian boweled. He fell to the ground on his back. Slaga could hear a cracking noise. All of Oddworld was silent. Suddenly, the sligs screamed and then ran off. Slaga grabbed the blue fire that fell to the gound "You can't control me Gertian." Said Slaga, "I'm going up there, and getting my gift!" "I can't believe you!" Yelled Molluk, "you peacemaker. You'll pay for this one day!" Then, Molluk just dissapeared.

Chapter 20: The gift

All of the mudokkons follow Slaga up the hill. He was holding the blue fire nice and bravely. Once he got to the top, he still saw the temple. He walked up to the past torchholder. "This is it." Slaga wispered. He put the stick in the holder. He felt a light around him. In a flash, he was fourteen.
"Horray for Slaga!" Said some familiar voices. Slaga thought it was some mudokkons at first, but then realized all of them were quiet. Three lights stood around him. There he saw Philip, Yerus, Skaihera. The mudokkons gasped and then bowed down to them. "I can't believe it Slaga, you finally did it!" Said Philip in large excitement. "Yes, truly he is worthy!" Said Yerus. "What are you guys talking about?" Asked Slaga in his new, young voice. "There is one last thing we must add before the full gift is completed." Replied Skaihera.
All of them chanted some ritural. After a few seconds, a lightning bolt came on Slaga. It didn't hurt, and he also couldn't feel it. Philip went to Slaga's right side, and raised his right arm. "All hail Slaga! God of freedom and liberty!" Yelled Philip. Then, the mudokkons repeated the phrase. "Do you guys really mean it?!" Asked Slaga. All of them nodded. "This is a dream come ture. Thank you!" "Don't thank us." Said Yerus, "thank your dignity, strength, and courage to keep going." "But what about the mudokkon shep-I mean Molluk?" Asked Slaga. Philip did a small laugh. "I don't think we will be worrying about him for a while." Replied Philip.
"Slaga." Said Yerus. "Yes?" "Gertian has one last request." Slaga sighed. He ran down the mountain and then laid next to Gertian's body. "What do you want?" Asked Slaga. "S-s-s-slaga." Said Gertian, "I don't need to be in this world a-a-anymore. P-p-p-please, k-k-k-kill, m-me. I no l-l-l-longer belong." Slaga looked at Gertian, then picked up his gun. He aimed it right at his heart. He pulled the trigger. Now, Gertian was dead. "Coutesy of me." Said Slaga. He ran back up the hill to meet with the gods and goddess.
"Come Slaga. It's time we go check you in with the goddess of Oddworld." Ordered Skaihera. "Yeah!!" Exclaimed Slaga. In a flash of light, the gods and goddess disapeared.
Yes, Slaga had completed his quest. He had been in quite in peace, comfort, and harmony in the kingdom of Odd-heaven. All Oddworldians and I are happy that Slaga has found a place, which is of course, where he belonged.

Be prepared for the third installment to 'The life of Slaga' which is called "The wrath of Molluk."

[odd chick]

Nice ending, Sliguy!! It was sort of sad, for some reason, when he shot Gertian. Anyway, I'll be sure to check out your next story! *Goes to thread to read it*