vykkers lab installment 147 -

Stripe · #31 09-29-2002, 04:14 AM

Bad ending first! When you know you're gonna get to read both endings, you wanna read the unhappy ending first so you feel tons better after reading the happy ending!

The bad ending makes the good ending gooder!
*G*

(well, thats how it works for me anyways)

sO fReAkIn oDd · #32 09-29-2002, 08:27 PM

The votes are in and Bad ending wins by a land slide. *applause* I'll try to have the bad ending in before wenesday and then the good ending in by saturday.

Al the Vykker · #33 09-30-2002, 12:13 AM

I finally got the chance to read your story, its really good, no lie either, It seems like you are a very good writer, and has written lots before, not on here but maybe where you are, and at school, I hope you continue this pace, as well as your excellent work, I would love to have this entered in the competitions here coming in October, after my week vacation, I will start putting things together, with Alector, and vote on my judges for voting on Fan Fics and artwork here in FC, so stayed tuned for more info on that also. But keep it up.

- Your fellow member, and Mod Al the Vykker

Mac the Janitor · #34 09-30-2002, 02:22 AM

Hey Al, you just did another one of those really long run-on sentences...

paramiteabe · #35 09-30-2002, 11:29 AM

This is a well written story. You indeed should be part of Al's compitation he is working on. There are a lot of members including myself in it. It goes to show you there are still people including myself who still use the Fan Cornor for it's general purpose. Thats what makes this place fun. So keep up the good work and I hope to see more from ya. Did you consider a third ending? Like the games Great, good, and bad and maybe even a forth ending black. Ya know?

Paramiteabe...

Mac the Janitor · #36 09-30-2002, 01:18 PM

Hey PA, what contest are you talking about?

paramiteabe · #37 09-30-2002, 01:35 PM

Well Al was telling me about an award he was going to give to some of the fanfics here. He mentioned it to me awhile ago. I ment to say that all of are fanfics might be considered for an award. Read Als topic on (fancorner/plans/additions, contests and ideas.)

Al the Vykker · #38 09-30-2002, 09:36 PM

Mac I know that, deal with it, and stop spamming in my forum you didnt even reply to this story, you just replied to what I said. And if you were paying attention to the notices in FC, and being more involved, you would know about the contests that will be coming up. I dont liket to be mean, but when someone posts a reply you dont have to always point out things that are wrong. So please if you dont like it get out of FC, or out of this topic, feedback is feedback, we dont have to always, have perfect grammer, this isnt a highschool english class buddy. Thats all I have to say in response to that, if you have something to say about this particular issue, send me a PM, you dont have to post this same message that you put in the Employee lounge. To me it just seems like a way to boost your post count. So please next time think before you post something like that in FC, Im fedup with always being nice, and being leneant on the rules. I have reminded so many people the rules, and my expectations here before. Take it as a reminder, but next time know that there will be consequences, so be looking for an update on my rules, that will address my regulations on things such as posts to certain topics and what they should be formatted to, and the context of the posts for certain topics, etc.

-Al the Vykker FC Mod

sO fReAkIn oDd · #39 09-30-2002, 09:38 PM

so much tension in my little topic.....

sO fReAkIn oDd · #40 10-01-2002, 07:23 PM

Here is the bad ending for Vykkers Lab Installment 147!

........The lights in the room flickered and dimmed until they shut off. Then from deep in the shadows came a very familiar voice.

"AH HA! Brilliant, brilliant, birlliant! Well done Shrink! You tricked him perfectly, you even fooled the Queen. HA!" A purple saucer descended from the corner of the room, with Vincent inside. The luminous purple glow radiated out of the craft. "You did an excellent job, just how I imagined it all." He said.

"Oh no," I said, "What's going on?!?" I felt sick and then the saucer turned to face me.

"What's going on? Is that what you said? I'll tell you whats going on, you've been sold out by your friends, thats what!" Yelled Vincent at me.

"What are you talk-" He interrupted screamed at me again.

"Joe, Tim, reveal yourself's, show your friend your true colors." And sure enough Joe and Tim emerged from the shadows.

I stared at them, the nervously gazed around the room, ignoring me. "Guys? What have you done?" I begged them.

**"We're sorry Ben, he promised us that we would be kept out of slavery." Said Tim. "And he said that we would be treated like royalty in Mudos if we helped you be captured." Said Joe. "We don't don't want to be slaves anymore Ben. I wanna be happy for once!" they both said together.

I shouted to the one person whom I know I could get answers and help from. "Sujalin!?!? Help me!"

"He promised me something too Ben. I wasnt rewarded in the afterlife, I was punished. I didn't die protecting Necrum, I died when my Mudokon brothers found out I was a Glukkon collaborator and they lynched me. So I contacted Vincent and told him about you, Vincent promised me that he could bring me back with DNA he has of me. I'm going to be alive again Ben! Do you think I care about you and your damn Queen?!?" I couldn't believe this. I staggered back in shock.

Betrayed.

"Ben, I am dying. I now remember who Sujalin is, he killed many Mudokons by selling them into slavery. Don't trust him." And with a final breath, my Queen slipped out of this world.

"NO!" I screamed. Vincent laughed uproariously.

"Shrink, why you? Why did you do this to me? Why did you betray me?" He gave me a blank stare.

"I thought I made it pretty clear that I want out of this ship! AND DID YOU HONESTLY THINK I WAS GOING TO HELP THE LIKES OF YOU!?! I CAN"T STAND YOU CREATURES!" His screams made feel sick.

"Why me?!?!" I screamed.

"Why you?" said Vincent, "Didn't you realize something special about yourself? You are a saviour Ben, and I did this because I am going to be rich and famous. And you are going to be a personal slave to a Glukkon Queen." He started to laugh histerically.

"What about Sam?" I asked.

"Oh her, she's dead and you killed her Ben." He began to laugh again. "You've single handedly sold your brothers into slavery, killed your mother, and helped me make millions in Moolah!"

"How did this help you?" I said sniffling through it.

"Oh, you got rid of any evidence of my connection with her cloning so I can say she died from natural causes, I can freely make my clones and be the only supplier of Mudokons on Oddworld!!" He laughed again. I hated his laugh. "You also brought back Sujalin which will further my cause, freed Shrink whom will be able to teach me the methods to tend to a Mudokon Queen, and you have given two Mudokons up to a life which you are truly envious of." He paused and slowly said, "I also get to claim to be the one who halted the next Mudokon saviour. You helped me very much Ben."

A green light flickered and a bell rang in the back of the room. "Ah, it sounds like we're here." He began to press a series of buttons in his little ship. The Glukkons gave me their moolah for the queen already, and I just sold the Glukkons a dead Queen. I hope you and your brothers have a good fall."

He pressed a button inside his little suacer. The floor opened up underneathe me and I fell through it. I screamed as loud as I could and tears streamed down my face. I was going to smash into the forest below me. I prayed and waited for the end, I waited to hit the cold hard gorund and die.

**WHOOSH**

I landed in a net,

"What the?" I said. I looked up, the net was connected to a ship, with a Rupture Farms logo on it. Then without notice, 1,000 mudokons landed on top of me. The ship roared away and took us back to our servitude at Rupture Farms.

I work at Rupture Farms now, but not for long. Somehow word of my attempts at escape were found at Vykkers Lab Installment 147. They are going to put me on "trial" and sentence me to death, I know it. I write you my story on my cell wall, engraved deep in the stone. I hope someday it is found and will help someone in need.

A knock came at my cell door and then it swung open, letting the light poor in.

"Come on beast! They're waiting for you in the courtroom." Said a slig. I walked over to him feebily, I was very weak. We walked down a long corridor until we reached a large wooden door. I walked in and was chained to the floor. The judge, a Vykker, had a monicle and a black mustache and a gray Judges wig. He gave me a very disgusted look. He grabbed his gavel and slammed it on the desk.

"The sentence is 100 years solitary labor in the Bone mines." He said very cooly. The slig hit me over the head with his rifle and dragged me out of the room. I woke up in a very dark cave, alone and frightened, I cried, I cried because before I fell unconcious I saw Joe and Tim in the back of the courtroom, laughing at me.

The End

Kesiah · #41 10-02-2002, 12:05 AM

cool! Very nice, and very evil.
I like this ending

heheheheh.....
I like the thought that has gone into this story, but how did Vincent get to communicate with Sujalin? Can he talk to spirits?

sO fReAkIn oDd · #42 10-02-2002, 12:29 AM

here let me fix that, I forgot to put something in.

There! That should take out all the roughness of it. expect the good ending later this week.

I am also planning to have Sujalins Oddysey, Ben's Oddysies (folows good and bad ending), and a prequel about Shrink. And possibly stories for Joe and Tim together (Bad and good endings.)

Mac the Janitor · #43 10-02-2002, 02:27 AM

Great bad ending, SFO. I like how well thought out it is.

:

Originally posted by Al the Vykker
(1)Mac I know that, deal with it, and stop spamming in my forum (2)you didnt even reply to this story, you just replied to what I said. And if you were paying attention to the notices in FC, (3)and being more involved, you would know about the contests that will be coming up. I dont liket to be mean, but (4)when someone posts a reply you dont have to always point out things that are wrong. (5)So please if you dont like it get out of FC, or out of this topic, feedback is feedback, (6)we dont have to always, have perfect grammer, this isnt a highschool english class buddy. Thats all I have to say in response to that, if you have something to say about this particular issue, send me a PM, you dont have to post this same message that you put in the Employee lounge.(7) To me it just seems like a way to boost your post count. So please next time think before you post something like that in FC, Im fedup with always being nice, and being leneant on the rules. I have reminded so many people the rules, and my expectations here before. Take it as a reminder, but next time know that there will be consequences, so be looking for an update on my rules, that will address my regulations on things such as posts to certain topics and what they should be formatted to, and the context of the posts for certain topics, etc.

-Al the Vykker FC Mod

(1) Yeesh, sorry. I was only joking. Didn't mean to offend anyone.

(2) Yes I did. Look on the first page.

(3) Well, sorry that I don't go to the FC too much. It is only an online forum, after all.

(4) I didn't just plainly point out the things that were wrong. I was just foolin' around with you, Al.

(5) No way, homie! I post my story here in FC, and I like to read other's stories, like SFO here.

(6) I know, I never said that. I know that I make many mistakes, too.

(7) Naw, that's just silly...

Now, Al, please don't take this post offensively. I was just trying to clear up this small issue, not offend anyone. Sorry that I did in the first place; I didn't know you'd take it like that.

And SFO, can't wait for the other Oddysees! Your plan sounds very interesting.

Al the Vykker · #44 10-02-2002, 07:53 PM

I am sorry too bud, I hate to have to fight about something like this I should have known you were only joking, I have always had a slight problem with taking someone's joke to serious in my everyday life. But I try and lighten up about it now a days, Im just glad to know you were kidding. I am sincerely apologetic about this small issue, I hope you can forgive me for this slight misunderstanding, though I know now if you do have a problem with me just send me and email or Pm, but if you are just kidding around Ill try and make sure I see. Thanks again.

Continue with your great story SORFEAKING ODD, and Mac, continue your good work along with everyone else, here and throughout the forum. Sorry again.

-My Kindest Regards, Al the Vykker

sO fReAkIn oDd · #45 10-02-2002, 09:41 PM

I just added more to the bad ending. I wasnt really happy with it so I added some more.

Thank you all
-SORFEAKING ODD

*oops* I mean sO fReAkIn oDd

Jacob · #46 10-03-2002, 10:13 PM

Very Odd...yet, very good also *Applauds*

sO fReAkIn oDd · #47 10-05-2002, 01:59 PM

I thank all of you for your input, but now, what you have all been waiting for..............THE GOOD ENDING!

..........The switch followed the engraved lines in the steel control box, and with a "click", turned off everything in the room except the lights. Shrink walked over and put on of his mechanical arms on my shoulder.

"You had to do it, it was the humane thing to do." He said in a suprisingly comforting voice.

"I know, I know." I held back my urge to cry. "But lets go help the others." We bagan to walk back towards the door form which we came when suddenly,

"Not so fast!" Out of the shadows emerged Vincent, he held some sort of remote control in his hand. "If you even take one step towards that door, I'll kill all of your little siblings." He readied his finger over the single red button on the remote.

"Why would you do that? Their your income!" I snarled at him, I thought that I looked intimidating but I probably looked stupid.

"Well my dear friend, when you have the single building block to a Queen of a species, you don't really give a damn about your 'income' as you like to put it." He held forth a very small vile, it contained a green liquid.

"You are a wicked thing, you are evil in its purest form!" I yelled at him.

"No my dear lad, I'm a capitalist, and you are scum." He laughed and then yelled, "Okay boys, come on in!" At that command, about 10 Interns entered, all of them armored and packing Snuzi's. "You know, I am rather proud of myself. Sure I lost the Queen Sam, but I still have what I need." He glared at the vile for awhile, and then suddenly snapped out of it. "Okay boys, let 'em have it!" He shouted. I waited fro the Snuzi bullets to pierce my flesh. When suddenly,

*BOOM*

"What the devil!?!" yelled Vincent. A hatch opened at the top of the cieling and an Intern came running down screaming,

"MMMPH MPN MNN MHN MHHHHHHHHPH!" He yelled it over and over again.

"WHAT!?! ABE!?! HERE!?! HOW?!?" Another explosion rocked the ship. "Damn! Okay boys continue your business, I'm going to the escape pods." Vincent ran out of the room as fast as his little stubs could take him.

The interns raised their Snuzi's once more.

"Are you ready for this?" said Shrink. I thought that he meant dying, so I responded,

"Yes I am." As soon as I uttered the words he grabbed a hold of me and leaped to the cieling. When we hit the cieling he grabbed a hold of a pipe. I looked down, all the interns were lying dead on the floor. "What did you do to them." He smiled.

"Before I lept up here, I shot some sedation needles into all of them, the needles were kinda made for Sam, so I guees it kinda killed them." We dropped back down to the floor, he picked up a snuzi and handed it to me, the sheer weight of it almost made me fall over. "Anyway, go catch Vincent!" And he pointed me to the direction of the door. I hurried myself over there and entered the next room..........

............to be continued............

Kesiah · #48 10-06-2002, 01:34 AM

Hey that's really good SFO, when do we get the next part? Huh?
When!
.............
*Kesiah stares at the screen until the next part is posted*

Mac the Janitor · #49 10-06-2002, 04:00 AM

Aargh! Don't stop there!

Must...read...more...

*collapses*

Stripe · #50 10-06-2002, 10:50 PM

Its a shame he can't save shrink too.
Even if he *could*, shrink wouldn't be able to survive in the wilderness. *shrug*

Need.......to......read next....... chapter!!

sO fReAkIn oDd · #51 10-10-2002, 10:05 PM

In the next room stood Vincent slamming his fists into a keyboard.

"DAMN THAT ABE! HE SABATOGED THE ESCAPE PODS!" I glared at him.

"Hey Vincent, it's over. Give me the vile, I don't want to have to kill you!" I yelled. He turned and faced me.

"You worthless little scrub! DAMN YOU! Damn you and all your damn brothers! Here's your precious DNA! Take it and go!" He threw the vile in the air, I reached out and caught it. I stuck it in my clothes.

"Now open the door to my brother's room." He glared at me.

"Why you little-" I fired above his head, he fell over in fear.

"SCRUB?!? IS THAT WHAT YOU WERE GONNA CALL ME!?!" I walked over and hovered over his pathetic figure. "I've put up with all of this slave business long enough! How does it feel to be in my position for a change!?!" I heard the doors open behind me. I whirled around, it was Abe. He spoke,

"We gotta get outta here! This whole place is gonna blow!" I glared down at Vincent.

"What about him?" I said.

"Leave him to Shrink." and Abe turned around and ran out the door. Shrink enetered,

"Ben you best hurry, I'll take care of him." He pulled some drills and saws from his inventory.

"How are you gonna escape then?" He turned to face me.

"Don't worry, I've got my own way out." He pushed me out the door. I heard the whirr of a drill and Vincent screaming rather vigorously. I cringed and ran down a seperate hatch.

The doors to the main cell-room were open. I enetered and gave the muds a wave.

"Hello!" They turned and said,

"Hello!" back.

"Follow me!" this was then followed by,

"Okay."

I quickly led all 1,000 of them down the first corridor I found, I kicked open the first door I found. Inside was Munch and some baby Gabbits, he was saying something to them.

"Now watch me." He strained himself until an electric bolt shot out of his head and into a machine. "Now ya see, you little baby Gabbits can't do that because you don't have this thing." he tapped a gadget on his head. "I now have the escape pods ready for all of our Mudokon friends." He turned to me.

"Uhhh hello." I nervously dropped the snuzi on the ground.

"Well what are you muds waitin for? Get in the pod!" A pair of doors opened behind him, they led into a miniature ship large enough for all of us. We hurried inside.

"Where's Abe!?! I'm gonna go find him!" I ran out of the pod and back down a corridor, I made my way down a series of other corridors until I ran right into Abe.

"Sorry Ben! Do you know where Munch got to? That little Gabbit always gets lost!" I rolled my eyes.

"He's down in the big escape pod, follow me." We started sprinting back down the long corridors. After a while we heard a faint rumbling behind us, I turned.

Vincent rounded the corner behind us, he was carrying a series of saws and drills.

"SUPRISE!" He started to cackle laughter, coughing up blood. He ran towards us slashing at us with his deadly medical utensils.

We screamed and ran down towards the escape pod. The ship shook as a ball of fire hurdled down the corridors towards us. We sprinted faster and faster, Vincent right behind us, and the inferno behind him. We turned sharply into the escape pod room. Munch frantically waved us in, hopping up and down as he did so. Abe and I dove in, Munch immediately shut the door behind us. Vincent slammed right into the door.

"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!" The flames engulfed him as Munch posessed the pod and detached off the ship. The engines gave a blast and kicked off as we ripped through the sky. I looked through a narrow slit in the opaque glass doors. The labs rapidly exploded and disintegrated in the air. It's metal frame crashed into the ground below.

"Good job Ben, It's almost over!" I passed out.

........to be continued.......

Jacob · #52 10-10-2002, 10:53 PM

Ooohh, more, more!! Very good!!

*Coughs-Updated Assassins-Coughs*

Stripe · #53 10-12-2002, 01:00 AM

See? TOLD ya reading the bad ending first was a great idea!
Can't wait to read more!!

sO fReAkIn oDd · #54 10-19-2002, 01:54 AM

A distant voice spoke as I slept.

"Why hello Ben."

I opened my eyes. A blinding white light hit me, I squinted. I was in a white room.

"Where am I?" I asked.

"You are inside your mind Ben, and I thought that I would pay a visit. You have done very well and I wanted to thank you in person."

The voice seemed different.

"Sujalin?" I asked.

"Ben, you have done so much for your people and asked nothing in return. You are the greatest hero your people know, you have surpassed Abe."

I was puzzled.

"No, I didn't. Without Abe, I couldn't have done anything!" He laughed.

"Oh Ben, you will see what I mean, you've had a long day and you should rest. But I will say this as best I can," He cleared his throat, "You have the deepest gratitude and the greatest thanks that has ever been recieved by anyone ever. But for now Ben, rest."

I felt myself become tired and I drifted into a sleep.

I slept for a very long time..............when in a quiet voice I hear,

"Uhhh hey ya fellow chump, wake up!" I snorted and popped awake.

"Abe?" I asked. He smiled at me.

"Come on Ben, we can't be late." I was still half asleep. He yanked me up and dragged up and out of bed. I wasn't sleeping in the ship but instead I was sleeping in a small hut out iun the woods. Abe dragged me out of the front door of my hut and throught the woods for about a minute. After sprinting while still half asleep we reached a large wooden hut with a sign on top of it. He kicked the doors open. "HEY YA EVERYBODY!" shouted Abe, "Look who I brought!"

A cheer rang out among the muds inside. A hand slapped my back and an unfamiliar voice said,

"Welcome to Alf's Rehab and Tea, I'm Alf! What can I get for ya?" A very cheerful mud put his arm around my shoulder and walked me over to a table.

"I guess I'll have a Tea." He laughed, he was a very perky guy.

"Of course you will! That's all we serve." He laughed and poured me a bubbling hot brown cup of Mudokon Herbal Tea. I took a sip,

*OUCH*

It was still hot, I blew on it and then resumed drinking. I immediately perked up and smiled. I could feel the tea make me feel better as I drank.

"Hey Ben!" Abe shouted from on a stage at the end of the room, "Come on up here." He waved me over.

I walked on over and stood next to Abe. I gave a stare out into the mudokon crowd, it wasn't all 1,000 but there were sure a lot of muds there. Abe whispered, "Say something, they turn on ya real fast if ya don't talk." His words kinda suprised me,

*SNORK*

I kinda snorted and coughed at the same time. I recieved some blank stares from the crowd. I cleared my throat after the embarassing moment.

"Uhhh, I'm not very good at speeches, and I don't have much to say. What I did was what anyone of you would have done for me. You are all my brothers and we all look out for each other, I would be nowhere without you. But we have just started to fight back against the Magog, I will need every single one of you to help further the effort and help save the rest of our siblings. I know that there has to be more than 1,399 mudokons on Mudos, and we gotta find em." A slow pause, a single clap, a couple claps, everyone clapping.

Abe clapped and then leaned over and whispered, "You spoke just in time, I thought they were about to rush the stage in a blind rage!" I kinda had a laugh at Abe's apparent lack of understanding about moods.

All of the sudden, in a mechanical clamor, Shrink rushed in and seemed to be in a big hurry.

"Oh boy, what now?" I said to myself.

...........to be continued......

Silversnow · #55 10-21-2002, 06:44 PM

ARRRRRGGGHHH!!!

Please... No more to be continued, alright? It's rather... annoying right when you believe everythings over.

Um... Better rephrase that or something. Eh... Yay! *applauds*

Al the Vykker · #56 10-21-2002, 11:28 PM

Great thus far, I do in fact like the direction its taking, and I like the two different endings. Give the people including me what they want more to the story.

-Al the Vykker FC Mod

sO fReAkIn oDd · #57 11-11-2002, 10:48 PM

Really sorry for that huge wait.......but I promise this is indeed the end of this story! So here it is...............

"Ben, it's so good to see you. I was told you made it out but I had to see it for myself!" said Shrink in a very spastic voice.

I waved and rubbed my arm in an awkward silence.

"Yea, I'm alive. But how did you make it out?"

He smirked "Well, I was giving Vincent a taste of his own medicine, literally, when an explosion knoked me down. Vincent used that opportunity to temporarily shut me down. When I powered back up I realized that I could simply bore through the wall of the ship and jump."

I took it in "But the ship was so high in the air.....how could you possibly live through that?"

Shrink paused "Well, the ship was almost touching the ground when I jumped, so it wasn't all that far. I was lucky though....But it's so good to see you!"

He walked over and embraced me in his mechanical arms. I shivered. It was very cold.

Then it suddenly hit me.

"Where's Sam?"

I recieved some very sad glares from around the room.

Abe spoke up, "We don't have anything to bring her back Ben. And we dont know where to find that type of thing."

Only one solution came to me.

"We must ask the Raisin." We treked through the woods quickly and with no delay. We slowly descended into the Raisin's cave. And at the bottom there he sat. I walked over to him and kneeled.

He gazed down at me and said in a husky voice, "You are Ben, correct? And you have come seeking my council on the cloning device to bring back your Queen?"

I was fairly suprised, "Yes, you're exactly correct."

He seemed unsuprised, "I will tell you what you need to know," he yawned, "the device in which you seek is located in a Vykkers expirimental institute located east of Necrum, the city of the dead. You must go there quickly to bring back your Queen, but you must also go there to stop the production of an expiriment. The Glukkons have begun to make Mudokon slaves without opinions, reasoning, a mind, or a soul. These shells of lost being's have no will of their own, only the will of their master. You must stop these things before it is too late. Before their production falls the Mudokon Nation. You must........you must..... you must....." Abe interrupted.

"Save us all, Ben."

"Oh no. This is awful. But If I must, then I must."

I held the vile to my chest and clutched it tightly. A tear rolled down my cheek.

"This madness must end!" I said.

The next morning I set out for Necrum with Abe, Tim, and Joe. We had little idea of what awaited.

THE END!

Mac the Janitor · #58 11-11-2002, 11:14 PM

Very good, SFO. I hope there will be an Exoddus...

sO fReAkIn oDd · #59 11-12-2002, 08:11 PM

*cough cough FEEDBACK cough cough NEED MORE FEEDBACK cough cough*

and I do have some ideas in mind, but nothing real elaborate as of right now.

Silversnow · #60 11-15-2002, 08:34 PM

Ooh... Nice ending! All left open, nice and clean and with a fresh breeze now and then. Alright, now let's bring on the other one.