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Geez, that girl just can't stay put can she? xD I really enjoyed this chapter, Stivik better be nice to Anni if and when he finds her, if not Somi will eat his face...tentacles.
I think overall Nick's a good guy, I really like his character.
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Another week, another chapter

We were all noobs once, Havoc. And I always liked Math's name; I guessed it was short for Matthew, but it goes with his character to use a more unique slang form of his name Sometimes to tell a story, you've gotta say 'I was once a noob, too'.
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Chapter 41

Out in the stockyards, Anni had slipped past where Javi was working and was now meandering between the cages with Somi, passing scraps of barbed wire fence and old, broken security orbs, stopping every so often to examine anything that interested her or the paramite, and generally enjoying the freedom that came with no one knowing where she was.

She was bent over, peering into a sloghut. “Would you like a house like this?” She asked Somi, who of course didn’t understand her words but responded to her voice with a happy hiss. Anni smiled and pirouetted with more enthusiasm than grace, laughing happily. “Come on; it can’t be far now.”

She and the paramite hurried forwards to the next low cliff and they scrambled up it, side-by-side. Somi reached the top first and jumped over, out of sight, and Anni reached the top a moment later, peering over, “There’s the gate!” She said with an excited yelp when a yell from behind her brought her crashing back down to earth.

“Stop right there.”

She quickly pushed Somi down out of sight, hissing at her as she did, imitating the sounds a cornered paramite made to tell her to stay. Then she turned.

Her heart sank as she saw the new slig, Stivik, hurrying towards her, scrambling over the broken ground with less difficulty than she would have expected. “Stop right there,” He said again.

“What do you want?” She asked sulkily.

“What do you think?”

She glared at him, “I’m not hurting anyone.”

He rolled his eyes, “You’re gonna hurt yourself, girl. What are you gonna do when you get out there?”

She pouted, “I just want to see something outside of the factory! I’ve never been outside of industrial ground.”

“Yeah, for good reason,” He replied stonily, walking towards the bottom of the cliff. “Do you have any idea what it’s like out there?”

She looked down on him coldly, “What do you know about it?”

“I used to work out there, mu- kid. It was my job for seven years. I know how dangerous it is.”

Anni was suddenly struck by the strangeness of the situation. The slig was trying to reason with her. She felt he ought to have been shouting at least. “I won’t go for long. I’m gonna come back tomorrow.”

He snorted, “Oh yeah?”

“Yes! I just want to see some of the world; I’m not running away.”

“Whatever you want, you’ll be dead before morning. What are you going to eat? Where are you going to sleep? How are you gonna stop yourself being some animal’s dinner?”

How could she reply? She couldn’t tell him about Somi, or about her hope of meeting natives. “I’ll be careful.”

“You’ll be dead.” He sighed, “Look, I hoped it wouldn’t come to this,” He raised his gun at last, “Come on. I can shoot you without killing you if you really make me do it.”

She glared.

“Come on mud!”

Looking furious and with a last glance over her shoulder, she slid down the cliff.

“Good, now let’s get out of here.”

They began the long walk of shame back towards Rupture Farms. Stivik walked just behind her, his gun half-raised in a confident threat that stoked her anger. She was furious with herself for being so stupid, for letting herself get distracted. She should have known that they would come after her; she should have gone as fast as she could!

They were nearly at the part of the stockyards that she was familiar with when there was a loud, aggressive hiss from behind her and Stivik let out a yell. She spun around to see Somi diving at him. He raised his gun to shoot the animal and Anni leapt at him, crashed into him, yanking at his gun and shrieking in paramite language, danger! Hide!

Somi went bounding away and Anni suddenly found herself standing in front of Stivik, holding his gun. Quite instinctively she pointed it at him, fingers fumbling to rest on the trigger. He was breathing hard, looking at her with hate. “What are you going to do now, shoot me?”

The world seemed to be spinning around her head; she had attacked a slig, stolen his gun, and even now she was threatening him with it! She couldn’t believe it; what was she doing?

“Let me go; get out of the way,” She said, her voice firm, inwardly horrified at what she was saying.

He sneered, “No.”

“Do it!”

“I’m not moving. You want to go; you’ll have to kill me.”

“Don’t make me!”

“I’m not making you, but I’m not moving.” His voice was cold, frighteningly calm. She hated that he was so sure she wouldn’t do it. She was holding a weapon; she shouldn’t feel so powerless!

“Anni!” She looked over Stivik’s shoulder; Nick was running towards her. “What are you doing?!”

She affected the sobbing face she had used on Javi, “Nick, he said he was going to kill me! He found me where I was working and dragged me out here, and-”

“Nice try, mud,” Stivik spat with hate, “Nick sent me out here to stop you leaving.”

Anni looked at Nick, horrified, and his expression confirmed it. “Put it down, Anni,” He said softly.

“No,” She said, because she was terrified now. She had gone too far; how could she get away with this? If she handed in the gun they would stop being nice. They would be so angry! And every second she hesitated, it was getting worse.

“Put it down, Anni,” Nick said calmly, “No one’s going to hurt you.”

“Hell to that!” Stivik sneered.

“Stivik!”

“She’s threatening to kill me, Nick. Should she walk away from that?”

“She’s just scared. Come on, Anni.”

“Yeah, come on; shoot me!” Stivik sneered.

Anni felt a tingle in her finger, the one on the trigger, and for the first time it occurred to her that she actually could; she had the power over this slig’s death! One twitch of a finger and he would be puffed out like a candle flame.

“Come on, Anni; if you’re so tough! I’m not going anywhere! You want to leave, you’ll have to kill me.”

Do it, kill him.’ Said a voice in the back of her head, ‘It’ll be so easy. Just do it.

“Calm down, Anni.”

“Do it, kill us, if you think you can.”

Do it, or you’ll never be free.

She whispered, so softly that the sligs wouldn’t hear, “No.”

She began to lower the gun, but then there was an enormous BOOM to her side; she leapt into the air and spun around. Nick yelled and also turned. Then Stivik’s fist hit her in the side of the head and she was falling backwards. He caught his gun, wrenched it from her hands and kicked her in the stomach. She fell back and he was suddenly stood over her, pointing his gun at her head.

“What was that?” Yelled Nick.

“Grenade. Chucked it when she was looking at you,” Stivik said mechanically, and then with acid in his voice, “Get up.”

There was only one grenade at his waist and she mentally kicked herself for not seeing. Then she pushed herself slowly to her feet, her legs trembling with her terror; what would they do to her now?

“Right, now we’re going to go up to the factory, and-”

“What’s going on?”

She turned; it was Javi, evidently drawn by the explosion, and she sobbed and ran to him, fell into his arms, crying into his chest, genuinely this time, shaking with terror and sobbing with fear. He fell to his knees to be closer to her, “What’s happened?”

“I attacked him!” She sobbed, “I stole his gun, I-I…”

He looked with shock into her eyes and then hugged her tight, “It’s alright, it’s alright.”

She was trembling, her cheeks wet, but she sniffed back her tears and turned her head to face the sligs, “Go on then,” She stuttered, “What is it? I threatened a slig; what are you going to do to me?”

Looking the wrong way, she never saw the expression Javi shot Nick. Nick looked stunned, then uneasy, “Look…” He said slowly, “She was scared, wasn’t she? I mean, she wasn’t really going to shoot you.”

Stivik stared at him.

“Come on, you wouldn’t have egged her on like that if you thought she was really going to do it.”

“She stole my gun!” Stivik roared, “She tried to threaten me! You’re just going to let her off?!”

Nick was looking increasingly flustered, “Come on Stivik; no harm was done, was it?”

“Odd! This place has made you soft as scrab-chkhur, mud-lover!” And with a snort he stormed off back towards the factory. Nick sagged with relief and turned back to the mudokons.

For the first time in months, Javi was looking at him with a thin smile. Anni looked doughy-eyed, and he realised their private little war was now firmly over.

* * *

Nick, Groll and Seven worked late into the evening and, just as everyone else was retiring to their beds, Seven unlocked the boiler control room and restored power to the factory.

Nick spent the next two days sorting through the trash in the grinders, and sorting through Groll’s poorly written notes of his own sorting of the grinders, and ordering machine parts in bulk. Repairs were going to take weeks; he was glad that Arnie’s three new sligs would be arriving within the week; one of them was a big-bro whose strength would be helpful, one of them was a mechanic hired specifically to help in the grinders, and the last was a guard who would probably be useless, but at least would mean he and Groll wouldn’t have to do any guarding and could get on with the job.

He also had his own business to attend to; his contract with Arnie was expiring in another month, and he was seriously considering seeking employment elsewhere, though he wasn’t sure if he could find anywhere that would pay a slig mechanic more than Arnie did. But he felt like he needed a change of scenery.

“I took the mechanic’s training at my last job,” Groll told Stivik and Razor later that week as the sligs were eating in the cafeteria, “Because it was an easy ticket to a promotion. You know, the training was a pain, but in the end it was easy, and the mechanics thing isn’t too hard once you know what you’re doing. But then when the refinery where I worked went bust I had to get a new job, and this mechanics thing made it really hard! I think most glukkons think a slig trained as a mechanic is gonna be pretty arrogant, so even when I advertised to work as a guard it was still in my way. It’d probably be less difficult to get employed if my CV said I had a virulent, flesh-eating disease.”

Razor laughed at that, while Nick looked the other way, glad that at least he was more qualified as a mechanic than Groll, which might make him look better rather than worse, plus he would be taking Math with him if he moved, which might help his chances, too.

Anni seemed slightly happier again now, though more reserved and less playful; she was keeping out of the way of the sligs more, which was in some ways a relief, though she kept grinning at him when he passed her. But she kept out of the way of the new sligs when they arrived. Arthur was a worker-class slig and nothing special, though rather non-violent, which was a relief compared to Razor and Stivik. And Boogie was a huge big-bro with a rather unfortunate name. Boogie was quite quiet and mostly kept to himself, though he worked when and where he was told to work, and he got on with everyone fairly well; he was simple, but not in a stupid way. Nick had a long conversation with Seven about having Boogie help him with the grinders, but Seven was quite insistent that they would need him to guard the factory, too. “You’ve got Groll and Sev, and that mud.”

Sev was the other slig who had come, a mechanic who was here for a couple of months to help with the grinders. He was a friendly slig (as sligs went) and Nick got on with him well. And the mudokon, Floyd, was one Seven had picked out to help them with the grinders. Floyd confessed to having a minor interest in mechanics himself and was willing to be helpful.

Still, Nick really wanted Boogie’s brute strength, and eventually Seven relented to let him have him on odd occasions, which was useful. A good number of parts had arrived and the mechanics were busying themselves with various jobs by day; they were still detaching smashed parts of the machinery, and Nick was spending far too much time inside electric motors trying to find faults in kilometres of wiring.

Nick’s newest worry was Stivik, who was causing him far too much distraction. Stivik was something of a mystery; he seemed quite intelligent and sensible, but he shared that thuggish sense of humour that was the mark of sligs like Razor and Reg, who weren’t overly endowed in the brains department. The most obvious thing about Stivik was that he passionately hated mudokons. Nick had asked him about it, but he had just shrugged him off.

In the end, curiosity made Nick check out his staff record. In a way this felt very much like cheating (though he wasn’t sure what the game was) but his curiosity had been aroused by the puzzling slig.

* * *

Anni was with Math, working in the packaging lines on the top floor (which, much to Dean’s glee, was currently producing ‘New and Improved Paramite Pies’), talking and joking as they did. Anni was having a minor celebration of the fact that she, Javi and Dean had now been at Rupture Farms over a year. The subject of the first year of her life without any vykkers in it had come up, and Math was entertaining her with a series of crude vykker-impressions when Nick came in.

“Can I have a word?” He asked.

This sounded rather ominous, so Anni said, “Can Math stay in?”

Nick shrugged, “I suppose. It’s about Stivik.” Anni’s expression soured, “I was wondering if he seemed strange to you, if you’ve caught him doing anything odd. Math, how about you?”

Math shook his head.

“What about you, Anni?”

Anni glowered at nothing in particular, “Since the stockyards, he’s been really… He keeps trying to frighten me, to scare me. You know, not jump out at me, but follow me around and glare… It makes my skin crawl.”

“Unfortunately, being a brzstrk to muds isn’t that unusual.” He shook his head, “It’s probably not anything. I mean he just seems a bit strange.”

Anni gritted her teeth at being called a ‘mud’ but knowing Nick didn’t mean any harm by it, she let it drop. “He said he used to work out in the wild,” She suggested, “He said he had for a few years.”

“That doesn’t really mean anything,” Math said.

“How long’s a few? Five years would be a quarter of his whole lifetime,” Nick said pointedly, but then went on, “Look, I looked up his record on the computer, ‘cus I thought he seemed strange. Apparently, he was a scout for his first seven years or so after basic training – that’s out in the wild, a pretty extreme lifestyle compared to factory work – then he was injured and started a more normal job. And since then he’s been jumping through jobs for the last five years. I don’t think he’s had any job for more than a year. It might be he’s just having trouble adjusting, but… well, a few of the places he’s worked have shut down or had management changes after he’s left.”

Math shrugged, “Meaning what?”

Nick also shrugged, “It’s a bit of a wild guess and maybe I’m just trying to paint him blacker than he is, but I keep feeling that there’s something strange about him,” he lowered his voice, “I’m half beginning to wonder if he might be a Cartel inspector, like, undercover.”

Math looked sceptical, “Seems a big conclusion to jump to.”

“But…” Anni said, looking excited, “There was a time I accidentally overheard a conversation he was having with Groll and Razor, and saying he thought the Cartel would want to shut this factory down!”

“Doesn’t necessarily mean anything,” Math stated.

“Yeah, but then he caught me, and he seemed way angrier than the other two. Then he dragged me off and I was half-scared he was gonna hurt me, but he just took me to Kix. I dunno, it seemed strange.”

Trying to sound unconvinced, Nick muttered, “Well he might have been upset about you listening in on him because he has secrets he doesn’t want you hearing…”

“He seemed pretty firm on keeping Arnie’s rules; maybe he didn’t want to draw attention to himself.”

“Or maybe he didn’t want to stir up trouble, just see what trouble there already is.” Nick seemed to go through some internal dilemma before deciding, “Maybe we should tell Arnie about all this, just in case. And he can decide what to do about it.”

Anni nodded, “It might be good.”

Fifteen minutes later, Nick knocked on Arnie’s office door, Anni and Math behind him. “Come in,” Came the boss’s voice.

Nick opened the door and looked surprised. Behind him, Anni looked horrified, her eyes wide as she took in the creature standing this side of the desk.

“Nick,” Arnie said, “Can I help you?”

“Uh, maybe this isn’t the best time,” Nick said, eying up the boss’s guest who was looking at him with contempt.

“Come back in an hour,” Arnie advised, then added to the other person in the office, “This is Nick; he’s our head mechanic, in charge of getting the grinders fixed at the moment. Nick, this is Dek. He’s our new doctor, and scientist.”

Nick recovered himself and nodded politely to the vykker.

-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-

Arthur belongs to Munch's Master (I promised to make sure Arthur was in here, as he mentioned Dionysia in his fanfic).
Boogie belonged to Big Bro Boogie.
Sev was created by Jarnww.
Floyd the mudokon was the creation of Boogie.
And Dek the vykker was also created by Munch's Master.

Man, that's a lot of new characters! Though actually Munch's Master and Boogie arrived a little earlier, and Sev arrived a little later. W@RF 4 will be covered in just a few chapters; Lots happened that Anni and co weren't involved in in this part of the RPG.

Been waiting awhile to say that bit about Groll and his mechanics. And we finally got to see that other side to Stivik!
And that bit I put in about Nick betraying Javi turned out very useful indeed!

And I loved that moment where Anni tried to use old fake-tears trick for Nick, and it failed. Then when Javi arrived, she realised she couldn't manipulate her way out of this, and decided to accept whatever the sligs were going to do to her. Some characterisation by T-nex - our little girl's growing up!

Anni's fun times are pretty much over, now.

I'm gonna take next week off for Christmas, so no more chapters until the fifth of January. So see you in two weeks!
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wow!!! this chapter was so amazing!!!

I love how cool Stivik remained... well till he got his gun back... and Anni and Nick were so cool aswell!!!

and yay for Arthur being in the story!!!


actually I wanted to upload some of the fanart tomorrow ... but you said you're gone ...so I'll wait till you return ^^ (hey merry x-mas and a happy new year!!! enjoy your holidays ^^ !!! 8D)
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Nice chapter, I really thought Anni was going to escape, but I guess she can't leave just yet...not with a new vykker on the way :P I'll be waiting to see how she reacts to him!
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I said this before, but seriously bad shizzle is coming down (and if you can work out what that means then you're a better man than I). (Or woman.)
Dark stuff happens at the end of Part 6. Happy days are over for my girl.


And Sci, you could always post it as a Christmas present I really look forward to seeing it.
Maybe I'll post something about Dionysia next week for Christmas, since she seems to be a popular girl.
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haha yeah she certainly is

-ok I post it now n.n

... i just have Dion and Anni so far ^^;...
Stivik is missing! D8 - I think he's the coolest Slig ever 8D

and Nick is misiing aswell...

but I dunno how Stivik and Nick really look like...
yeah ok Stivik has probably the newest type of mask etc since he's a spy... and a lot of scars and the grenades and the black box xD ...and he#s slightly taller... (aswell as Dionysia ) (lol his w@rf profile is not really detailed xD ) and I haven't even started with Nick but the one with Nick will be different from the others
(it will take a little while again till I have the time to draw Stivik and Nick and the other drawings ^^; (have to finnish the drawing of Nox first n.n) so yeah... i can upload them now n__n




hope you like it

edit: anni looks a little strange sry about that ^^;
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*Shrieks with girlish glee* That is awesome! I love Anni's innocent expression; she's so cute! \^_^/ (My manliness! AARRRRGGHHHH!!) That's the face that has Dean, Javi and Kix under her spell, and has been the bane of many a slig.

And you really captured Dionysia fabulously, pinned down her personality brilliantly. I can see her glaring at Stivik with that look as he laughs at her name . I dunno how you got her expression so perfect: she's arrogant but there's that vulnerability in her. You are amazing, Sci!

They're both great; their clothes and feathers are brilliant. Loads better than I could ever have hoped for! Their expressions rock and they look great!
They're both a bit more grown up by the time Dionysia comes to Rupture Farms but never mind that; it's brilliant. Made my Christmas I can't get over how amazing they look. Fan-art of my fan-story is the best idea EVAH!!! I love seeing how you guys see my characters, and I think you got them really close to my vision.

Also, the background rocks, too. Wheee!!!


Stivik doesn't necessarily have a super-modern mask, though his gun's pretty cool in a discreet sort of way. That's the thing; he's discreet. But he does have that spider-webby scar on his left shoulder (I think it's left, from his battle in the prologue) and a couple of spooce-burns, maybe. Or something. Did I say he was tall? I dunno, i probably wouldn't say that now. It's tough describing sligs. They don't really vary that much. My mudokon W@RF character was pretty non-descript, too. The stuff on his 'belt' is Stivik's give-away, really. And Nick would probably be greasy and carrying tools. Maybe Havoc could tell more.

I would love to see Kix; I have quite a clear picture of her in my head from when she first met Anni, but it'd be cool to see how others see her.

So yeah, next Tuesday I will post a little thingy about the conception of Dionysia, though it probably won't be that exciting, not in the least because I don't remember all of the details.



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One and Two. That is where Anni starts to grow up, starts taking responsibility. And yeah, it was Math in the RPG instead of Javi.
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Ah, the irony - Anni was sent to Rupture Farms so she wouldn't be around vykkers, but it looks like she can't get away from them no matter where she goes.

I see you played on that irony too, setting it a whole year since she's seen vykkers and having that topic come up between the mudokons just before Dek's appearance.

Actually (spoilered for the people who haven't read WARF)
Didn't Hembar and Anni have a conversation sort of to that effect? I remember them talking about vykkers and how there isn't any nice ones and how they're moving into everywhere or something

And Groll can't help it if he barely knows how to write! Learning to write was boring! Maybe it would've been more fun if he could've written using bullets or something.

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whoa!!! x3
n.n I'm really glad you like them Splat! 8D ~thank you!

and thanx for the info ...you're right Kix is an interresting character -that scene could become a cool picture ^-^


haha btw: I read the trial scene of the RPG ...

Nick and Anni are awesome :'D


ah I thought this was funny:
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Stivik: "Uh... um... Well I think... Look, I still think... Nick broke the bosses rules didn't he? So even if he didn't mean to the rules are well, the rules..."





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I do seem to recall that, Gretin. That may make it in some form in the story when the time comes (though I dunno if I'll have quite so many natives running around Rupture Farms as did in W@RFs 5 through 9.)

Sci, I wait with great anticipation for any art you may produce in the future

In other news, I did promise a little things about the creative origins of Dionysia and so here it is. I apologise in advance that it's probably not very entertaining, and is rather thin on the sort of details that make this sort of thing interesting. I won't be offended if people don't read it.
One year my uncle bought this hideous handbag with pictures of cats on it for my sister; from then on, all rubbish Christmas presents 'went into the cat-bag'.

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Dionysia:
Conception, Creation and Characterisation

Dionysia is a dark-skinned mudokon, created by a group of vykkers who wanted to make a mudokon more trust-worthy and loyal to the Magog Cartel, as a weapon against terrorism. A dark-skin would generally obediently follow around any terrorist for a while until a critical moment when they would push said terrorist into a trap or set off an alarm or some such thing. Dark-skins are made by mixing mudokon DNA with slig DNA. Dionysia is a prototype model for the experiment; she was made specifically for study, so that the vykkers could apply what they learn from her to a male dark-skin. The term ‘dark-skin’ is slang referring to their untrustworthy behaviour; a finished dark-skinned mudokon would have the same appearance as a male mudokon. Dionysia’s skin however is dark, dark grey, so that the vykkers can keep track of her more easily.

The idea of the dark-skinned mudokons is a very old one, dating back to when I was still playing through my first Oddworld game (Abe’s Exoddus) for the first time. Before I had even finished it, it was grabbing my imagination by the throat and inspiring me to write my very first piece of fiction. ‘Splat’ (which I started writing first, but uploading second) was the story of a mudokon named Splat who was used in an experiment by vykkers to make a creature to use as a warrior. As mentioned, the story was my first, and was a mix of many different ideas that had been brewing in my imagination up to this point. As it was a rush to get all my good ideas out of me, the story wasn’t actually that brilliant. But several of the ideas were for other experiments carried out by the lab that worked on Splat. Some of these ideas were rather silly; most were developed further on in the story or would have been in the unfinished trilogy that the story was a part of. One of them was never developed further, however. In fact, it was only referenced once…

“[The fifth experiment developed by the lab was] black-skin mudokons. They basically whined, growled or giggled when you talked to them then shrugged when sympathised or returned fire when slapped! Either that or followed you for awhile, then either started ignoring you or started shouting or running around madly at a critical moment. At the moment they all came out of the experiment with (you guessed it) black skins, which really blew their cover.”

‘Splat’, Chapter 6

As I said, this idea was more or less dropped entirely from ‘Splat’, and may have stayed dropped forever. There was so much in ‘Splat’ that when I grew up a bit as a writer, I was more than ready to drop most of the untied threads from the story and rewrote a lot of its continuity when I began writing the sequel. More than half of the experiments mentioned in that list would be forgotten after ‘Splat’, and ‘black-skins’ would be one of them.

Or so it would have been, if not for events that took place many years later, in the course of the ‘Work at Rupture Farms’ RPG.

I once looked at the RPG section of Oddworld Forums because they sounded like fun, but was so confused by the layout of the rules in those days that I quickly lost interest. Later on, T-nex, one of the people who read ‘Splat’ and a good friend on the forums, convinced me to join the RPGs. Basically, she told me how it all worked and then stood back. W@RF was one of three RPGs I joined in those early days (one other was just starting and died very soon) and I wanted a character that would stand out, without really standing out. I created the slig, Stivik, and decided that he would be a Magog Cartel undercover inspector. This meant that he could act like a normal slig while actually being somewhat more dangerous to Rupture Farms and its inhabitants. I had read some of the RPG before joining and had seen that the factory’s boss, Arnie, typically had his sligs be nice to mudokons, to keep them from thinking any rebellious thoughts. I thought that this was likely to cause him trouble and gave a reason for the Cartel to send an inspector.

All was well as I settled into the RPG and later created a second character, a mudokon named Jim (coming soon to a fan-story near you!), for (in my words at the time) ‘those awkward moments when Stivik is taking a shower and no one wants to know any more than that’. Later on, as the story progressed, it became clear that Stivik had surely collected enough information on Arnie to bring trouble down upon him, and some sort of retribution ought to come. Obviously I couldn’t have the firing squad turn up (as such sudden plot-destroying actions are generally frowned upon by RPGers) so instead I came up with a new idea; that Arnie would be given a troublesome mudokon experiment to look after as punishment, and that his survival would be tied in with the safety of said experiment.

As with most good RPG decisions, this idea came very spontaneously, and I instantly began thinking up ideas for this character. I wanted it to be an experiment, so instead of quickly coming up with something new, I dug up an old, fairly low-key idea from my old story. For reasons I don’t remember, except that I probably thought it would make for a deeper character, I made the experiment a female because I thought that it would make a stronger character (at the time my only female W@RF character – I was sceptical of female characters as of course there are none within Oddworld continuity so the choice of making this character female was a big one, justified only by her status as an experiment).

And finally I took the letters D and S, for Dark-Skin (a mistake, as the originals had been black-skins, but as I’d only written that once, three or four years earlier, I hope I can be forgiven) and a very out-dated dictionary of first names that we had knocking about the house and came up with a name that fitted with the afore-mentioned letters, and so Dionysia was conceived. I wanted her to be a trouble-making so I gave her an arrogant personality, and soon she was ready to go. During a particularly slow phase in the RPG, I brought her in. Her original RPG character profile was as follows…

Name: DS-P.L7 v4 (Dionysia)
Race: 'Dark Skin' Mudokon: nice genetic engineering job. Odd bless the industrials for all these interesting character possibilities!
Gender: Female
Age: Mentally 18 by human standards. Hatched 3 years ago.
Appearance: Skin is a dark grey, almost black (big shock). She wears a dyed red cloth wrapped round her lower regions and another round her upper chest where she shows particular female features. Like a normal mudokon she is muscular but less sinuous. Slightly taller than average, eyes are normal yellow and feather is purple, red and black and flows all the way down her back stopping just above her lower garment. Her lips are stitched.
Bio: The original industrial 'Dark Skin Project' was intended to create mudokons with the behaviour more like sligs or glukkons and less like scrubs. Originally the male creations came out with psychopathic inclinations to kill anything and everything. By version 7 of the project the experiment team realised a hormone necessary for a mudokon to grow was causing this fault. However, female mudokons created in the past never had this hormone and the vykkers, taking this into account, attempted to engineer a female 'Dark Skin'. The fourth prototype in this series was christened Dionysia by her makers and proved to be reasonably successful, if a little too Skillya-like for comfort. Not to be outdone, the vykkers decided to dump her on some poor glukkon who was causing a stir in the Cartel but no one wanted to remove from his job cus, quite frankly, he was good at it. Shortly afterwards she was shipped off to Rupture Farms with a private message to Arnie.
Dionysia (or Dion) likes to be thought of as threatening and a bit evil. She can be patronising and arrogant, or kind and supportive, depending on which she thinks will get the most out of the person she is faced with. Very nasty to people naive enough to cause her trouble.

Work at Rupture Farms (v.5), page 8, post 213

A short while later, I made another spontaneous decision; she soon met up with Stivik when he had finished dealing with what he considered a little complication of his own, and I decided that they should have a history together. To add some tension, I decided to change (or at least develop) some of the information from her profile. I decided that the vykkers had sent her to a few different factories to test her in a normal environment and in one of these she met Stivik, who was already a Cartel spy by now. They eventually grew some form of relationship and she trusted him enough to tell him her big secret; that she was made using Skillya’s DNA. Stivik reported this to the Cartel who seized her and used her to blackmail her vykkers into compliance; they could use her and the vykkers as they wished and in return wouldn’t tell Skillya about their secret.

This created some pretty awesome action between Stivik and Dionysia and I had a lot of fun writing their scenes together. Then, when Stivik left, I brought her in a new ward in the form of the power-hungry, sadistic Dr Krik, who brought out a secret, more vulnerable side to Dionysia’s personality.

She was developing in other unexpected ways in the RPG at the same time, regarding other characters, but to avoid spoilers I won’t go into detail. We saw Dionysia’s anger, her fear of death and of abandonment, her arrogance, her deeply buried insecurity and ultimately her unconscious slavery to the sadistic Krik and the medicines he provided her with. We also saw her intolerance to physical pain.

A while later, I decided to write the back-story to my RPG characters as a lengthy fan-fic. This gave me the difficult task of characterising Dionysia from infancy to her RPG self. I included the plot ideas I had had for her but not previously developed, such as the vykkers she grew up with spoiling her for her attention, her lip-stitching and the aging-drugs she was forced to take. I changed the name of the experiment that created her to the ‘Denial of Nature Study’ to fit my new idea for the origin of her name, which is conveniently made up of the capital letters, D. N. S. E. R. (not a fact I considered when I first chose it). ‘Denial of Nature Study’ fit in with the first three letters, and a bit of technobabble filled in for the last two, giving me a reason for the vykkers (particularly a psychologist with a liking of word-games) to give her such an obscure name. And so ‘Dark Skin’ became a slang term, instead of the name of the project. I also came up with the idea of the six silver rings she received from one of the vykkers, which tied in nicely with current events and plans in the RPG.

After writing Krik’s relation to her (and developing the drugs she needed to live into a plot by him to make a lot of moolah), I then got to write the long-awaited meeting between her and Stivik. Their relationship ended up a lot less close than I originally saw; they bonded emotionally, but still kept their distance from one another. To fit, I had Stivik work out her secret, rather than having her tell it. And so came her downfall.

During the writing of ‘The Despicable’ I wrote a new edition of her RPG profile.

Name: Dionysia (DS-P.L7 v4)
Race: 'Dark Skin' Mudokon: the original genetic engineering job.
Gender: Female
Age: Mentally 18 by human standards and probably early to mid teens in mudokon years. Hatched 3 years ago.
Appearance: Skin is a dark grey, almost black (big shock). She wears a dyed red cloth wrapped round her lower regions and another round her upper chest where she shows particular female features. Like a normal mudokon she is muscular but less sinuous. Taller than average, eyes are normal yellow and feather is purple, red and black and flows all the way down her back stopping just above her lower garment. Her lips are stitched.
Bio: The original industrial 'Dark Skin Project' was intended to create mudokons with the behaviour more like sligs or glukkons and less like scrubs which could be used as weapons against mudokon terrorists. Originally the male creations never lived passed infancy. By version 7 of the project the experiment team realised a hormone necessary for a mudokon to grow was causing this fault. However, female mudokons created in the past never had this hormone and the vykkers, taking this into account, attempted to engineer a female 'Dark Skin'. Using DNA taken (illegally) from Skillya many years ago by one of the team, they successfully created Dionysia. The fact that she is made with Skillya's blood means that if the slig Queen ever found out about her she and her creators would probably be killed. The Cartel does know her secret since Dion unknowingly told it to a Cartel spy, but they keep it from Skillya so they can take advantage of her and the vykkers who made her.
Dionysia is usually nasty, selfish and arrogant on the surface, though inside she's very insecure. In many ways she is more like a slig than a mudokon, showing contempt to other mudokons. She often suffers from mood swings and is less tolerant of pain than most people, is fairly intelligent but withdrawn emotionally, not trusting herself or others. She practically worships the vykkers who made her.


Dionysia will return in the first chapter of Part 7, and will come to Rupture Farms shortly afterwards. Rather more grown-up than when we last saw her, she will face a lot of emotional turmoil during her time in Rupture Farms before making a series of decisions that will change not only her life, but the lives of many inhabitants warring over the freedom of Mudos.

So will she survive after Rupture Farms? You’ll have to wait and see.
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for some reason i always thought she had 3 not 6 rings xD

it's cool to see how Dion evolved from all the ideas and how old the concept of the Dark-skins is compared to her

and her character is quite realistic ^-^ I can't wait for the story to continue!!!


:< don't let her die... why do the cool characters always have to die? ;__;
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:< don't let her die... why do the cool characters always have to die? ;__;
Because Splat enjoys seeing his fans squirm ...I mean, all good things must come to an end, yes.

It was really interesting reading about her and how your ideas evolved and she was created. She's a great character and as Sci said, realistic.
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...I mean, all good things must come to an end, yes.
you really should read Glory Slig ^^


back to the topic:

I <3 tragic thats why Stivik is one of my favorite characters after all ^^


(but i still don't want her to die xD simply because it's always like that. It's like some sort of unwritten rule that the coolest character always dies. And now we even expect her to die...R.I.P.)



but in the end it's up to Splat what happens to her anyways...
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Everyone dies. It's not a question of 'if' but of 'when' and 'how'. And I will follow all of the four main characters to their deaths, whether at a ripe old age or premature.

Dionysia does own 6 rings, but she doesn't wear them all. In fact she doesn't wear any of them most of the time 'cus she doesn't want greedy sligs or glukkons seeing 'em and trying to nick 'em. Pretty sad she has these beautiful things that she never gets to use But no, she wouldn't wear all six 'cus she likes it better with less. Three or four at most. (Originally it was four but you two are convincing me that three is better )

Sometimes a story has a will of its own, but I don't want her to die before her time.
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ok thats truuuuuee if you follow them all to their deaths thats another thing xD
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B...b...but... What about the new chapter?? :'(
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My week off for Christmas.
Also, you haven't replied to the last one yet. (How was/is America btw?)

EDIT: Oh and Nexy, if you get the chance, work your magic on Dripik again and get him to start W@RF 10, or this story will grind to a very firm halt before the end of the month.
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Right, so I finally got caught up with the story again, after being gone for several months; and I gotta say Damn Splat.

This story is what encouraged me to take a look at my character that my brother had used and set lose in the world of W@RF, and inspired me to actual think of what made that butchered character tick.It is also what made me excited to try and write my own story for Ark (which sadly fell apart rather quickly, but never mind that).

Your writing is compelling with most of it driven with dialog and action rather than description, and it works beautifully with nothing becoming over dull by excessive detail.

While I tried to read through all of W@RF, I stopped at some parts and jump past others, making it so that I never got a clear idea of what or why things happened the way they did. Reading these last few chapters, and the thoroughly helpful links, gives me a welcome glimpse into the world that captivates me so.

Bravo Splat, continue the great work.
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There are four more chapters of Part 6 (including this one) and they were... hard to write. I've done a lot of rewriting but they're still rather... lumpy
Maybe you'll know what that means. I think this is fairly ok, though a lot happens and it does feel a little rushed in one or two places. It is the last chapter of part 6 to cover any amount of time; the rest all take place within 18 hours. I'm working on them as I go, but... Well, I'll let you guys judge
EDIT: I've just rearranged a part of this chapter to try and remove the time-jumpiness, but I haven't read it to see how effective it is 'cus I'm lazy, so it's a bit hit-and-miss.

Time is running out; everything that's happened in the last 12 chapters are drawing together! Soon many of the mysteries will be revealed, and Anni's life will be forever changed!

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Chapter 42

Nick had come back to the boss’s office alone an hour later – he wasn’t quite sure where Math and Anni had run off to. Then he had told Arnie all he had found out about Stivik, and his theory that Stivik might be a Cartel inspector.

Arnie sat, considering it for a while, “I’m not the only glukkon with a no-beating policy,” He said at length.

“Yes sir,” Nick said patiently, “But you are the only glukkon who runs the Rupture Farms where Abe began his reign of terror; that sort of draws more attention to you.”

Arnie growled, “Odd, I can’t escape that little fact, can I?”

Nick didn’t answer.

“Well I can’t say I agree with you,” Arnie went on, “But I suppose it could be a possibility.”

“If it is true, sir, then what this guy’s seen is you holding a trial over a slig beating a mud – yes, I know that was just ‘cus I broke your rules, but I know he thought it looked dodgy – and Anni trying to sneak out of the factory. Oh, and the main grinders breaking down.” He suddenly realised that at least two of the three things on this list were his fault, and scratched his neck awkwardly.

“Well it might be a good idea to try and keep him busy, just in case. What do you say to having him help on the grinders every so often?”

Nick hated the idea, but if it kept the factory from being shut down… “If you think that’s a good idea, sir…”

“Well it won’t do for all the time, but every so often. Seven was saying that you wanted our new big-bro’s help from time to time.”

“More than that if possible,” He replied hopefully.

He left the office half an hour later after a long conversation about grinder repairs and suddenly wondered when things had stopped being about Stivik.

* * *

A week later, Kix was in the kitchen, doing the washing up, while Dean was cleaning. Kix looked somewhat distressed.

“She was crying again, today. Trying to hide it again, but she’s not much of a liar, is she?”

Dean shook his head and said nothing.

When Anni had ended her hostility with Nick, she had been buoyant, but her happiness had been short lived as Stivik had begun hunting her. Stivik was passionate in what Kix was sure was a very genuine hatred, so much stronger than the casual arrogance that had led Reg to abandoning Bud or attacking her. It was tearing the girl apart.

And then the vykker had arrived and a bad situation had turned worse; Kix had spoken to Dek, and he seemed unusually respectful for a vykker, actually quite concerned for his patients (he had wanted to check up on her after hearing she had been dealt first aid by a slig, even though it was a long time ago). But Anni acted as though he was the embodiment of evil; she was terrified of him and furious when she had to go near him.

“I don’t get it,” Kix said aloud, “What’s her problem with vykkers?”

Dean made a little non-committal noise.

“Oh,” Kix said, only half-trying to keep the disdain from her voice, “This is another of those things I’m not allowed to know.”

She looked over her shoulder at him and he was looking at her apologetically. She sighed and rolled her eyes, turning back to the sink.

“Look, Kix… It’s not easy to tell you this. I mean surely there are things about yourself that you don’t want everyone to know? Anni just…”

“I know,” She said bluntly. She knew she should be nicer about this, but she hated this feeling of exclusion. “But come on, what do I have to do to prove myself?” She said awkwardly.

“Maybe you should ask Anni.”

She made a dismissive noise in her throat. “Yeah, ‘cus that’ll make everything better when she’s this upset.”

Dean sighed, “Alright… Look, there’s a lot of it and it’s really complicated. But even when we got her, Anni hated vykkers. She wouldn’t go to medical check-ups, she wouldn’t do anything. Sometimes I think we might have been sent here to get her away from them.”

“But why? Surely she told you something about it?”

He nodded, but he didn’t want to give away too much, like he had with Nick. He wondered what he could tell her. “It started… She had a friend, who was hurt. This is the same as you and Reg, really. Her friend was hurt and they tried to help her, but-”

“Her? This friend was a girl, too? Why did they want all these female mudokons?”

Dean shrugged, looking the other way, “They’re cheap aren’t they? Anyway, they said they would help her friend, and… They did something to her and to Anni, and it really hurt Anni, and the other one died. That’s when it started I think, but there’s a lot of resentment. You know how vykkers can be; they don’t treat you like real people most of the time.”

Kix looked unhappy. “Well she can keep out of Dek’s way can’t she? I mean, there’s only one.”

Dean nodded, “I guess. Maybe once she gets over the shock, she’ll be ok again. If Stivik gets off of her back. Him being mean to her is encouraging Razor, too. Odd, I’m sick of sligs.”

* * *

Groll was some distance above the ground in a cherry picker that he was deciding could have been better set up. Stivik was below, looking uncertainly at the controls.

“Alright, that was…” He swallowed, “Very good.” He braced himself, “Take me left just a tiny bit, will you?”

Stivik very carefully prodded the controls and Groll jerked alarmingly. Taking a deep breath, he said, “Right, that’ll do. Just stay down there and keep an eye on things, will you?”

Stivik glanced to the other side of the room where Nick and Sev were bolting an enormous section of grinder rail into place; the mud, Floyd, was red faced, hauling with all his strength on a rope, evidently holding the section in place while they attached it.

“You sure you’re ok up there?”

“I’m fine,” Groll called back, already attaching new sections of pipe to replace the broken ones they had taken out while waiting for the parts to arrive. The wall was marked with tracks of spray-paint showing where the new pipes fitted.

Once Groll got used to the cherry picker rocking whenever he moved, he got on alright. Work progressed, Stivik moving the basket around whenever Groll needed it, slowly becoming used to the machine’s awful controls.

At length, Groll heard a call, “How’s it coming?”

He glanced down at Sev, who had left his work with Nick to check up on their progress. Sev was a fairly straight-forward slig who was as qualified a mechanic as Nick. “Nearly done,” Groll called, “Another half an hour.”

Sev nodded, “good job. We’re gonna see what we can do with the catwalk tomorrow when Boogie’s here.”

The middle floor catwalk was hanging wonkily above them, and they had all made a habit of not walking under it. So far none of them had gotten close enough to see how bad the damage was. Nick was hoping that they would be able to fix it back into place without having to replace any part of it.

“Nick’s definitely going then?” Stivik called up to him as he resumed work.

“Yeah, in another three weeks. Sev’ll take over at the grinders once he goes and I’m just hoping Arnie hires another mechanic before the grinders are finished, or I’m going to have all the rest of the factory’s repair work to catch up on on my own.”

“You found someone to pay you more than Arnie?” Stivik called over to Nick, who was clambering down from the grinder rail.

“Sort of. They’re paying me more ‘cus of Math, otherwise I would have been better staying here. I asked Arnie for a pay-rise, but…”

“Grinders breaking down, hiring a vykker and two extra sligs, repair costs,” Stivik listed.

“Yeah, all that. I wanna get as much of the grinders done before I go, though. Leave on a positive note, you know?”

* * *

Anni was walking with none of her usual boldness towards the ground floor station where she had been told by Seven to help unload a train. She was passing the main lifts when a slig came tearing round a corner towards her. She looked up, startled, but relaxed when she recognised the new slig, Arthur. Arthur was somewhat scatter-brained and probably as aggressive as a meep. “Hey,” He said as he saw her, “I’m supposed to be going to the slaughter room and I don’ have a clue where it is! Do you know?”

She smiled, amused, and nodded. Rupture Farms was only a small factory and she wondered how he would survive in a bigger place, “You know where the warehouse is? Well if you go in there, there’s a door to the left that takes you to the meat storage room, and the slaughter room is through there.”

“Thanks!” He said, looking relieved, turned to run past her and muttered an, “Oh, hi.”

She looked over her shoulder to see who he was speaking to and then leapt back glowering. Arthur paused, puzzled by her sudden movement, but she was looking with hate at Dek and Stivik, who had walked up behind her. She hated herself for not hearing them coming.

“Is there a problem?” Dek asked stiffly, returning her glare.

Stivik laughed, “Don’t mind her; she’s just a crazy mud.”

The words seemed to ring in her head and she clenched her jaw.

“Well,” Dek was saying sternly, “She ought to be taught some proper respect!”

Stivik grinned broadly and Arthur suddenly stepped in, “Come on, kid; you can show me the way.”

He grabbed her by the arm and steered her away from the pair. She heard Stivik laughing as she went, or was it just her imagination?

“Hey, are you alright?” Arthur was asking, shaking her gently by the shoulder.

She shuddered, feeling like she was waking from a dream, “Yeah. Sorry.”

“It’s alright, but hey, careful next time. That vykker’s not all that bad, but you know what they can be like, right?” He smiled at her and hurried off. Looking unhappy, she walked slowly back towards the station.

* * *

Good progress was made on the grinders over the next few weeks, and when Nick returned to the bunks at the end of his last working day he was confident that Sev and the other could get finished within two weeks.

It was an odd experience for him, leaving the factory that he had called home for the last three years. Anni was at the station (again) when he left, though for once he didn’t chase her away. She was crying as she hugged Math goodbye while they waited for the train to arrive, and Nick had an odd feeling of unfinished business, like he had left so much work still to do. He thought of Stivik; Arnie hadn’t really taken his worries about Stivik seriously, but then maybe he was right not to. Stivik was just a thug, though rather cleverer than most thugs, admittedly.

To his surprise, Anni threw her arms around him before they left. He pushed her off but she was laughing through her tears, and Math was grinning cheekily. Nick glared at him. “Stay out of Stivik’s way, alright? And try and keep out of trouble.”

“I will,” Anni nodded tearfully and Nick had a last thought.

“Keep an eye on him, though. If he does anything strange, tell Arnie.” She nodded again.

“I’ll miss ya, Anni,” Math said firmly and gave her a hug. “Don’t worry about Dek, ok? Don’t let him bother you. You don’t have to worry about vykkers. Just be yourself, alright? And be happy!”

Nick wasn’t sure that ‘being herself’ was the best advice Anni could receive but she seemed glad to get it. He nudged Math forward and boarded the train behind him. “Good luck,” He said.

“Odd bless,” Math added and a moment later the door slid closed.

There were no windows on the train but Anni stayed on the station until it disappeared from sight. She walked to the cafeteria, needing the comfort of her friends.

* * *

Ten days had passed since Nick and Math left and Anni’s mood was at its lowest, no doubt pushed lower by Stivik’s bullying. Dean was at work in the kitchen that afternoon when Razor entered the cafeteria.

Razor stalked around before poking his head into the kitchen, “Where’s that little friend of yours?” He demanded.

Dean felt a slow, sinking feeling, but didn’t show it to the slig, “She’ll be working with Javi or Kix, won’t she?”

“She should be, mud!” Razor growled, “But she’s run off. You don’t know where she is?”

Damn it Anni, what trouble are you getting into now?’ “Haven’t seen her, sorry.”

Razor swore and stormed away.

“Hey,” Dean called, “You’re not allowed to hurt her, remember!”

Razor yelled some Sliggish curse back at him and left.

* * *

Stivik had once again been relegated to working the cherry picker controls and, as this involved a lot of standing around doing nothing, he was bored out of his mind. He was leant back against the wall, watching Floyd the mud hold the enormous grinder blade steady while Sev welded it together. Above Stivik, Groll was also welding, securing the catwalk in place. The grinders would take maybe five more days to finish, assuming nothing else went wrong with the blade (he grinned savagely at the memory of the last time, when they had picked it up to put it on the rail and it had fallen to bits).

“Move me over, Stivik!” Groll yelled from above and Stivik jumped out of his daydreaming and fiddled with the controls. He was only as bad at working this machine as everyone else was.

“Hey,” Came a call as he was sinking back into himself. Razor was walking into the room, “Any of you guys seen Anni? She’s run off from her post."

Stivik rolled his eyes as the two other sligs made various sounds of denial.

“What are you gonna do to her if you find her?” Groll called down.

“Oh,” Razor replied, “Just have a friendly chat. You sure you haven’t seen her round?”

“She’s not been here,” Sev called.

Razor shrugged and walked back to the door. As he was leaving, Stivik shouted, “Hey, Razor!”

Razor looked back at him.

“If you find her, give her a ‘friendly chat’ from me, too.”

Razor grinned at him and slipped away.

An hour later Boogie came to the grinders and took over from Stivik, who headed towards the cafeteria for a drink when he ran into Razor, who was looking troubled.

“What’s up?”

“Still looking for the brat.”

“You haven’t found her yet?!”

Razor glowered at him, “What do you think?”

Stivik rolled his eyes, “You’ve got your radio? Great, get me a brew and I’ll go up to the office and see if I can find her on the cameras.”

Razor grunted assent and headed to the cafeteria while Stivik rode a lift to the middle floor. Razor joined him in the security office ten minutes later, “You found her?”

“Not yet. Who’s the mud Arthur’s been showing around?”

Razor shrugged, “New one, replacing Nick’s pet? Hey, there she is!”

Stivik nodded, “That’s her at work a couple of hours ago. Five minutes from now she’s gone, so- Hey, there she goes!”

Flicking through cameras, they followed Anni’s progress from the production lines on the middle floor to the ground floor, and then down a passage behind the grinders. “That leads to the derelict part of the factory; there are no more cameras down there,” Stivik reported. “Let’s get down there.”

Razor hesitated, “Aren’t there supposed to be wild animals living down there?”

“You’ve got a gun, haven’t you?” Said Stivik, who was emptying the bullets out of his and pulling some tranquilisers out of his locker in the room.

“Does your gun load different kinds of ammo?”

“It’s a special one; some vykker hooked me up with the licensing. Come on.”

“Look Stivik, it’s near the end of the work shift. In half an hour it won’t matter.”

“What are you scared of?”

“I’m not scared!”

“Then come on! You want a chance to teach Anni a lesson, don’t you? No one will see anything we do down there.”

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The final 24 hours of Part 6 have begun.





On another note, I am actually quite worried about things now. I am still waiting for W@RF 10 to start and until it does and the story progresses, I can't really start writing anything more than the first chapter of Part 7. And then when W@RF 10 does start, I will still have to progress Anni's story in the RPG a way before I can start writing here.
I am really foreseeing a long hiatus for this story starting in three more weeks and so I'm apologising in advance. If you want to minimise the wait, PM Dripik and tell him to start W@RF 10! I really wanna get back to writing this story and I think writing my plot summary of the RPG will be so much harder for the second half. There are a lot less sligs hanging around for a decent amount of time for one thing.
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You know, I was going to say things are getting tense, but I could say that about a lot of the chapters Which is a good thing, it's good cause it keeps us readers on the edge of our seats!

I liked this line near the start
He left the office half an hour later after a long conversation about grinder repairs and suddenly wondered when things had stopped being about Stivik.

I guess Nick got more than he bargained for in his meeting with Arnie

And of course, as usual I liked the scenes featuring Groll You sure know how to get all the comedy out of him
And good ole' Arthur, aggressive as a meep XD He's the sort of slig Arnie needed in the factory. Although I remember when the RP filled up with heaps of "nice" sligs it kinda caused problems, but Arthur was good.

There were a couple of bits that did seem slightly rushed, but I guess there's not really much you can do about it. It still seemed to flow ok though. Looking forward to your next chapter
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nice chapter ^^

poor anni ...whoa but still... -I can't wait for the next one!!!

I like how you described Arthur aswell xD
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Uh-ohh, if they find her Anni's sure in trouble, plus now she has this new Vykker who can intimidate her Nice chapter!
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Glad Arthur was such an instant success I'm sure Munch's Master would be proud

Yeah, Arnie has rather more power in the story than in the RPG. I do like how he cunningly steered the conversation onto what he thought a more practical topic

Time for Anni's woes to increase...
I attacked this chapter viciously after I uploaded the last one and am at last satisfied with it.
Bad shizzle... And Anni's mystery is about to get even deeper. And time is ticking away...
(On the topic of scrabs in this chapter, it may well be that the scrabs in Abe's games were so much more vicious than the scrabs in MO because they were all females ready to breed - it's my chosen theory, anyway.)


Chapter 43

Anni had slipped away when Kix’s attention was elsewhere. She was feeling sad, and lonely, and above all she wanted company where she could just be herself, out of the way of anyone else. She went to find Somi.

* * *

“Come on, Razor!” Stivik growled two hours later.

“We won’t find her down here, anyway. I don’t know why you’re bothering.”

“Hey, I used to be a scout. I’m used to hunting down animals. Finding some mud will be child’s play.”

* * *

Anni had wandered through the derelict part of the factory, looking for Somi. She had long ago realised that she wouldn’t find the paramite just by going back to the place where she had first hidden her. Somi was now nearly fully grown, was strong and intelligent and though Anni had never seen them, she almost certainly had a pack of her own now.

She was wandering for only fifteen minutes when she heard a hiss. She spun round and grinned, “Somi!” A moment later, the paramite had leapt into her arms, knocking her over backwards, and the two were rolling on the floor, Anni laughing for the first time in weeks. They chased each other, they sat and Anni talked, then they played again. Nearly two hours later, Anni was running with the paramite down an empty corridor somewhere in the basement when the paramite came to a halt and let out a hiss. “What’s wrong?” Anni said, concerned.

There was something in the paramite’s body language, some fear. She approached the animal and crouched down beside her. “What’s wrong?”

There was suddenly a bang and a shriek from further up the corridor. Anni twisted round and stared. A huge, angry she-scrab was walking towards them, its head raised in a warning. Anni’s eyes widened as she dropped to her hands and knees beside Somi. The scrab stopped, looking uncertain, and even in her fear, Anni let herself smile. The smell of Somi that she had rubbed all over herself as they played was making the scrab see two paramites, instead of a paramite and a mudokon. It would think twice about attacking, but if it was hungry enough…

Somi let out a hiss, ‘Stay’, and began to back away. Anni didn’t dare copy the call, doubtful that she could make the sound convincingly to fool the scrab. But she edged back with Somi, hoping the scrab wouldn’t follow them.

* * *

Stivik was moving confidently through the derelict factory, winding down towards the basement, following his instincts. Razor was skulking after him, looking around nervously. Stivik was disappointed in him, “If there are any animals around we’ll hear them before they attack.”

“Well you might trust your instincts, but I don’t. Let’s find the stupid mud and get out of here. I’m not sticking around.”

“Not even to have some fun with her?”

“Don’t be an idiot. It’s dangerous down here, Stivik!”

Stivik snorted, “Your gun’s the most dangerous thing down here.”

As they wound down to the basement, they fell silent. The light was fading and Stivik was beginning to feel the intensity of the situation, too. But he was enjoying himself. It had been years since he had done anything like this, and even if it was only for ten minutes, even if he was safely inside some industrial walls and not really out in the wild, he was taking all he could from it. “There’s something up ahead,” He said under his breath. He put his head round the next corner.

He was looking down a dark, derelict passage, and quickly spotted Anni on the ground at the far end, deep in shadow. There was something beside her that he couldn’t see in the dark, but he guessed it was just some heap of junk. Between her and him, though, was a cow-scrab, from the look of it ready to breed, which would make it fiercely aggressive, viciously territorial. It was standing threateningly over the mud, and he was amazed it hadn’t already attacked.

Then he felt Razor close behind him and before Stivik could stop him, he yelled, “Hell, Stivik, that’s a SCRAB!”

He shoved Stivik viciously aside and he sprawled on the ground, cursing, “Razor!”

The scrab spun around and charged at them. Razor started firing, his aim wildly off as he panicked completely. He caught the scrab in the flank just as it neared them and instead of attacking it stumbled and crashed into Razor, throwing him back.

Stivik rolled over and shot at it with his tranquilisers. It stumbled and turned to face him. “GET OUT OF HERE!” he yelled to Razor, and then realising that Razor wouldn’t respond in his panic, added, “GO GET HELP!” He didn’t want or need assistance, but he had to get Razor the Hell away from here. The other slig gave a chirrup of confirmation in Sliggish and ran for it.

The tranks he had loaded into his gun were intended for nothing larger than a mudokon or a paramite. They would have a very slow affect on the hormonal scrab, and it spun around and reared over him as he fiddled with his gun to load the next trank.

It was bearing down on his with its sharp, bone-tipped feet when Anni leapt onto its back, taking him by surprise. She clung on for all of two seconds before it shook her off and she dropped to the ground, disorientated. The scrab, momentarily confused, turned its attention to the prone mudokon. It raised its head to the ceiling and roared, long and high, and Stivik realised what it was going to do next. His pack had known the scrab’s lethal power by its slang-name of ‘shred attack’.

It was charging towards Anni when something else hit it, something dark and dusty, and Stivik scrambled to his feet, staring now. It was a paramite, clawing at the larger predator, hissing and howling. Anni let out a scream, “Somi!”

Stivik raised his gun and heard Anni yell, “Don’t! You’ll hit her!”

“That’s the idea, grhzz-wit!” He roared and fired. The trank hit the scrab in the neck, and it stumbled suddenly, before it could use shred attack. Anni yelled something and the paramite jumped towards her. He raised his gun to shoot it but she threw an arm around it, crouching down low, and leapt under cover. The scrab howled again and stumbled towards him. He hurried backwards and it suddenly dropped like a stone, lying prone in the middle of the passage.

Stivik was breathing hard, hating himself for being so unfit. Odd, he smoked too much. Tilic and Dekas would never have let him get away with it. “Anni?”

He got no answer.

“Are you hurt?” His voice sounded rough, ragged. Odd, he was so out of shape. Dekas would have beaten him to within an inch of his life if he could see him now.

Down the passage he heard the muffled sound of sligs’ legs and Razor appeared at the end of the passage. He stopped and took in the scrab, “You got it?”

Then two figures appeared behind him; the hulk of Boogie and behind him, Dek.

“Come on, Anni.” Stivik called, “We’re getting out of here.”

“Hell, there’s another one!” Razor yelled suddenly and fired with his gun. Stivik heard a shriek and the paramite came leaping out of the shadows and passed him, nearly ploughing him down. Razor raised his gun to shoot it again as Stivik turned to do the same, but Anni yelled, “Leave her alone!” And threw herself into Razor’s way, distracting them both long enough for the paramite to disappear.

“Huh?” Razor said thickly, “It’s a wild animal, Anni! It was gonna attack you or something.”

“It’s not hurting anyone,” She said fiercely, and then she caught sight of Dek, standing behind Boogie. “What are you doing here?!” She almost screamed.

Somehow Dek managed to ignore this and snorted, “Forget the paramite. Is that a cow-scrab?”

“Yeah, it is,” Stivik said nonchalantly, approaching it carefully, “And it’s not in a happy mood.” He was grinning, enjoying Dek’s attitude to Anni’s attention-seeking.

“If it’s in heat, then it could be rather valuable, from a scientific view-point. I think we should take it with us. Razor, check it’s unconscious.”

But Anni let out a feral shriek and threw herself at the slig; Razor yelled as he was thrown to the ground and Anni pulled back, now gripping Razor’s gun, “Get away from here! Go away!” Anni yelled savagely, pointing the weapon at Dek.

Growling angrily, Stivik raised his gun, “Idiot mud!” He fired and the trank hit her in the back. She twisted around and moved to push herself to her feet but the anaesthetic was quicker to act on her and all she managed was to hiss furiously through her teeth before she slumped backwards, landing on top of Razor.

Razor let out a disgusted yell and a moment later pushed her off of him, scrambling to his feet and flapping about like her touch had contaminated him with some disease. Stivik rolled his eyes, wondering who he thought he was impressing. “Did you kill her?” Razor hissed.

“Don’t be an idiot,” Stivik snarled. “She’s just unconscious. I think we should all get out of here before more trouble comes. And I’m taking that girl to Arnie; that’s the second time she’s pinched someone’s gun and I’m not letting her get away with it!”

“It’s too late to bother Arnie, now,” Dek said, “I don’t know if you’ve noticed the time but it’s rather late. Bring her up to my lab.” There was a glint of greed in his eye which Stivik liked the look of. “The scrab, too.”

He nodded, smirking, “I’ll carry her. Boogie, you want to help Razor bring the scrab?”

Boogie glanced back at Dek, who nodded, and the big-bro strode forwards, filling up the corridor. He lifted the scrab by the waist and hauled it up, “Grab its neck, Razor,” He grunted.

“Don’t hurt it,” Dek cautioned as Stivik picked up Anni and flung her over his shoulder like a sack of meat.

“What are you gonna do to the mud?” Razor asked.

“Take a look at her, make sure she’s not ill. And there are cages in the lab I can keep her in overnight so you can tell Arnie about her in the morning.”

“Sounds better than she deserves if you ask me,” Razor grunted.

* * *

Stivik was leading the way when the three sligs and the vykker, complete with their unlikely cargo, emerged into the main factory. It was dark; the main lights in the production areas had been shut off for the night.

“We’ll take the executive lifts; it’ll be quicker,” Dek told them, who, as a vykker, was the only one other than the glukkons and Seven with permission to use them.

“This girl’s starting to stir,” Stivik said a few moments later as Dek pulled the lever to call the lift down. “Weird, the trank should’ve lasted longer than this. Maybe the dart was bad.”

“It won’t be long now.”

Razor laid down his half of the scrab and worked the pulley to pull the company up the lifts, since Dek couldn’t work the glukkon voicelock. “Hell, now she’s giggling!” Stivik growled as they reached the middle floor, “Right in my ear! That’s as creepy as anything!”

“Hurry up, then,” Dek barked irritably and led the way towards the labs. He opened the door and led them in. “Put her on that table, and strap her down if you can manage that. Boogie, there are some cages through that door where you can put the scrab.

She was murmuring to herself as Stivik laid her down on the table, then singing shakily, “I drink to you… I drink it from… I drink… too much… It comes out of my…”

He rolled his eyes and tried to ignore it as he strapped her down. There were short leather straps and buckles at the edges of the table for the occupant’s wrists and ankles, assuming they had them. He slid them on rails along the table edges until they were at the right distance for Anni, locked them in place and began strapping her down.

“It comes out of my…”

“Shut up, you freak,” He muttered under his breath.

In a deep voice, very different from her own, she said it again, “It comes out of my…” And then in her own voice, high, timid and scared, she muttered a word he didn’t catch.

“She’s strapped down,” He called to Dek, straightening up.

“Good,” Dek replied and came over to examine his work. He had been loading drugs and equipment onto a trolley. “Pull that over here for me, will you?”

Stivik obediently tugged the medical trolley over. There was a large gas cylinder on it, attached via a tube for a mudokon-fitting gas mask.

* * *

Anni could hear Dek’s voice, and it made her want to scream; the sound of the vykker was utterly repulsive. Terror coursed through her; she couldn’t move or see, and they could be doing anything to her. Something was tickling in the back of her head and suddenly it exploded like a supernova. Pain shot through her head, like she hadn’t felt for years. She wanted to scream with all the air in her lungs, to shake, to thrash, it hurt so much. She wanted to cry out, to weep, to beg.

She couldn’t move. She lay as still as a piece of wood while inside she burned. She managed to open her eyes a crack and saw Dek descending on her with a gasmask. Stupid vykker; she and Nova had started becoming immune to that stuff that vykkers used when they were still tiny. What did he think he was doing?

Darkness closed in.

* * *

“That should keep her down for a good while,” Dek said, straightening up.

“Boogie’s having trouble locking the cage,” Razor said, wandering into the room. Dek didn’t look round until he heard the flick of a lighter.

“I won’t have smoking in my lab!” He barked, spinning around.

Razor looked affronted, “Come on, you guys invented them.”

“It interferes with the instruments and it smells like death.” Vykkers didn’t mind selling things that poisoned their customers, but they themselves all intended to live as long as medical science would allow; all vykkers feared death, having seen so much of it. “If you’re going to smoke, get well away from here! Well away!”

Razor looked like he was going to argue, but Stivik spoke first, “Go on. It won’t be interesting now, just drawing blood and seeing what colour it turns. He won’t hurt her, not until Arnie’s heard what she’s done.”

Razor grinned, “Keep her simmering,” He said with a nasty grin and stalked out of the lab.

Dek huffed and turned back to Anni, picking up a huge, empty syringe from the trolley as he did.

“Dek, how do I lock this thing?” Boogie called through the open door to the store room with the cages.

“Oh, for goodness’ sake,” Dek growled, standing over Anni and waving the syringe around impatiently. Leering, Stivik turned to watch Boogie struggle as Dek peered through the door, trying to see what Boogie was doing wrong. “Turn it counter-clockwise! No, not that way! See, now that bit sticking out should slide into place. Got it?”

* * *

Anni’s eyes opened slightly and she saw a vykker standing over her with a syringe. She realised her arms and legs were strapped down. Her heart began to race; as quietly as she could, she tried to pull herself free but the straps were too tight. She felt a scream building in her throat but just before it burst out, another force took hold of the scream and sent it in a different direction, soaring towards the ends of her limbs. Her hands and ankles suddenly burned, painfully, and she snatched them away.

Stivik let out a roar, “GTRZ! GRHZZ! WHAT DID- HOW DID- HELL, SHE HAS POWERS!” She raised her head and saw him scramble back from her, bang into a medical trolley, sending its contents crashing to the floor and lift his gun to point at her.

“What are you jabbering about?” Dek yelled and turned to face the terrified slig.

“She has grhzzing powers! The straps! She’s burnt them! She summoned fire out of the air and burnt through the straps!”

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How's THAT for a cliff-hanger?! I didn't know she could do that! Did you know she could do that?! Did she do that?! What just happened?! Find out the answers to these and other questions (or not) in the next exciting installment of...

I would like to leech off of your sympathy for a moment on the topic of that scene in the basement with the scrab, for two main reasons.
First, the scrab in the story bears little resemblance to the male, vykker-modified scrab from the RPG that was created by Jarnww, which had the abilities to think rationally and speak.
To make it worse, almost the entirety of that scene was deleted by a hacker, who hacked into the forums and screwed everything up so badly that Alcar had to load up a 2 or 3 three week old backup of the forums, after 2 or 3 weeks of very intense RPGing. Pretty much the whole encounter, until Anni is carried out of the basement, was deleted and I don't really remember what happened. I think Sev was down there but I don't remember why or when he left the others. Boogie didn't appear until later but I don't remember how he got drawn in. I do remember that Anni somehow got Stivik's gun off of him and was threatening to shoot him; apparently (judging by T-nex's later posts) she was protecting him from the scrab somehow (which, as noted, had the powers of intelligent cognition omigoshrofl). Dek jabbed her with a tranquiliser syringe, which is what knocked her out. I rearranged a lot of that as you saw, and did my best to batter it into a feasible shape, but it was a painful experience. I dunno how Razor made it back so quickly with Dek and Boogie, but who's to know, eh?

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Remember how Anni dealt with that scrab. Pretending to be a paramite, what a clever girl!

And as a final note, just think about how terrified a slig would be of a mudokon with powers; imagine how you would feel if you found out that someone you really hated and had even been bullying had powers to summon fire or worse still, to completely take over your body, to force you to kill your friends and even kill yourself.
Anni's gonna have her work cut out explaining her way out of this one!

If you don't reply, Stivik will be even angrier!!!
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while I read this I thought omg this is what I've been waiting for! I <3 this chapter! >.< the whole atmosphere is brilliant! It's certainly one of my favorites hehe and Stivik is surprised that he is out of shape lmao xD

and whoa anni's fiire-thing-powers are cool! (and that deep voice and that high voice singing that song... the special power instead of just screaming... the situation which reminds a lot of that certain day in the past... -i think.... i figured it out now.
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great great chapter from beginning till end


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I really don't know how you find the time to write all this. I find it hard to even make time to read it. But it's good, so all's well.

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Ooh, have you read it all, Meech Munchie?

Wow, I'm really happy you liked it so much, Sci! I was a little worried about this one.
Only two more chapters and your theory may (or may not) be confirmed!

On the topic of two more chapters, I have a slight problem because in 10 days' time, I'm going on holiday for two weeks. This means that there will be one more chapter of Part 6 left to post when I go away. I will probably be taking my laptop with me and might be able to post while away, but it will be slightly hit-and-miss.
So either I can post the last chapter early or risk making you all wait an extra two weeks to read it.
Hmm...
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I am Posting this Chapter a Day Early.

Sort of for reasons mentioned in my last post.
Right, as I said I am going away on holiday to Jordan at the end of this week and so may not be able to post the last chapter of Part 6 for two weeks, unless I post it on Friday. So here's the deal!
If I get four (or five, if I feel stingy on Friday) replies or more to this chapter before Friday, then I will post the last chapter of Part 6 before I leave.
Otherwise, I will try and post it next week from Jordan, but this may not be easy and if I find myself unable, you will all have to wait an extra 2 weeks. I won't be taking my laptop with me, I've decided, so that will complicate things slightly if it comes to that.
So yeah, if you want to know what happens, post! Anni is glaring at all you people who didn't reply to the last chapter! Grrrrr...

Anyway, must get on! Big revelation is coming this chapter! Anni's in danger and she's not the only one. This chapter has been written and re-written and I think I smoothed out the worst of the kinks today. Also, I forgot to mention it last week but we are now in W@RF 5.
On mit das show!!! (Mein Deutsch ist nicht sehr gut.)


Chapter 44

Anni was sat on the floor in the corner of the lab, far from the door but also far from Dek and Stivik.

Dek was leant back against the table they had strapped her too, looking stunned. Stivik was still furious with panic.

“She was unconscious,” Dek muttered, rubbing his eyes, “She couldn’t have woken up so soon.”

“She was waking up from the tranquilisers way earlier than she should have! She shook them off; she did something!”

“Oh please, what could she have possibly done?” Dek asked grouchily.

“The same thing she did to those straps! They didn’t set fire to themselves! She did something!”

“Calm down, Stivik. She’s never shown any signs of powers before-”

“So what?! Maybe she’s kept them hidden, kept them secret.”

Anni let the shouting drown out, wondering. Had she done it? Could she? She had never had any powers before; she had never done anything strange. Could they have been living in her all this time, secret, untouched? Another idea occurred to her and she whispered to herself, “Nova?”

“You’ve got to do something about her!” Stivik barked, making her look up. Dek was slumped back against the table again and he waved a claw.

“This is beyond me.”

“What does that mean?” Stivik growled.

“I mean I was hired to be a doctor, not to make decisions about how to deal with disobedient mudokons!”

“So go and tell Arnie; go and tell him now before she does anything else.”

Dek glared, “I’m not going anywhere. You go and tell him! She’d be safer left with me than with you!”

“I don’t care about her safety! I’m not leaving her here unguarded-”

“Boogie’s right there!”

“Oh yeah, a big-bro with his mind turned to mush by steroids and a vykker who I bet has never held a gun in his life. No thanks, no way am I leaving a dangerous mud in your hands.”

Boogie ignored Stivik’s insult. Dek glared, “She is my patient! I’m perfectly capable of keeping her in check.”

“Have you dealt with a native mud before, let alone one with powers? I didn’t think so.”

“Hey,” Anni yelled, jumping to her feet, fists balled in anger, “How about you both stay here and I’ll go and tell Arnie?”

“Shut the grhzz up, mud!” Stivik roared, then to Dek, “I’m not leaving her.”

“Fine!” Dek yelled, throwing his arms up. “Fine. I’ll go and talk to Arnie and come right back here, and if you do anything to her while I’m away it’ll be your head!”

Stivik sneered triumphantly. While they were distracted, Anni glanced at the desk behind her and grabbed a syringe from a rack there. With all her heart, she wanted to be out of this room. She had to get out!

She heard the door close and turned quickly; Dek had left and now Stivik was leering at her. She looked back hatefully, holding the syringe behind her back. Boogie, big and impassive, slumped back against the wall beside the door to the room of cages.

The three of them waited in silence, unmoving from their places. Minutes passed by sluggishly.

There was a bang from the cage room, and all of them jumped and turned. Boogie looked through the door. “The scrab’s awake,” He said uneasily.
Stivik shrugged, impassive.

“I… I should check its cage is properly closed,” Boogie said, sounding uncertain.

“You locked it, didn’t you?” Grunted Stivik.

“Uh, I think so, but…” He glanced over his shoulder at Stivik, and then at her, and then stalked into the other room. She looked over at Stivik. He was grinning madly and walking towards her. She glared at him.

“Tell me how you did it, mud.”

“I didn’t do anything.”

“Uh huh, sure. Then tell me how you kept it secret so long.”

“I said, I didn’t do anything! I don’t have powers; I’ve never had!”

He was right in front of her, leaning over her, smirking, “You think you can get away with this now? You attack me, then Razor and now this. When Arnie hears about it all, I’m gonna watch you die. I might even kill you myself.”

Anni suddenly lunged at him, bringing her arm from behind her back and ramming the syringe she picked up into his side. He yelled in anger and pushed her away, then swung his gun at her. She was caught on the shoulder and thrown to the ground. She crawled out from under him and he grabbed her by the arm, but she pushed him off easily, scrambled to her feet and ran to the door.

Boogie was there, drawn by Stivik’s yell, blocking it, glaring at her. She drew to a halt, looking up at him helplessly, “Please let me go?”

“Nice try, mud… Hell! What have you done to him?”

She turned around. Stivik was lying on the floor, writhing and gasping for breath. She stared, open-mouthed.

“What did you do?!” Boogie yelled, shaking her by the shoulder.

“I… I…”

With an impatient curse, Boogie shoved her aside, ran over to Stivik and yanked the syringe out of him. “Oh you little bitch!”

Anni found herself trembling and breathing hard. What had she done? She hadn’t even thought. Stivik suddenly fell still, horribly still. What had she done to him? What if she had…? She stumbled back and fell over. This couldn’t be happening. This couldn’t be real. She felt like she was going to faint. She might be a…

Boogie picked up Stivik, out of his pants, and heaved him onto the table. His gun, attached by a thin wire to his mask, hung awkwardly, its barrel resting on the ground. “Go and get the vykker!” He roared at her. “Go and get him, now!”

She turned and ran.

She found him standing outside the boss’s office, looking irritable, evidently unable to find the glukkons. As she bolted towards him, he looked up, surprised, “What’s-”

“It’s Stivik! I…” She gasped for breath, “I injected him with something… I wanted to get away…” She gasped tearfully, “He’s unconscious…”

Dek stared at her incredulously, and then yelled, “Well, come on!” They raced back towards the lab.

She burst through the door a few seconds before Dek, “What’s going on?” He demanded.

“He’s not breathing,” Boogie said, “He stopped about a minute ago.”

“What did you inject him with?” Dek yelled.

She started looking around the floor for the syringe but then Boogie held it out. “Here.”

Dek glanced at it once and then yelled, “Oh, you STUPID GIRL!” He raced towards the other end of the room and pulled a huge syringe out of a drawer, and then he ran back and injected it into Stivik’s chest.

“Listen, Anni,” He said raggedly, then put his hands on Stivik’s chest, “You feel this, where his ribs part at the bottom?”

She reluctantly reached out her hands, trying to avoid touching Dek’s claws until he swore impatiently and she let her skin touch his, suppressing a shudder.

“Right, I want you to press down there, sharp and hard. Do it now.” She did so. “Harder than that, idiot! Now, do it twenty times.” While Anni tired herself out, he started unbuckling Stivik’s mask. “When you’ve done twenty, you check if he’s breathing. If he’s not, you do it twenty more times, understand?”

He pulled the mask away and Anni got her first look of a slig’s face – the sunken, ugly, puffy eyes, the wrinkled, shrivelled skin, and the tight, cadaverous cheeks. She tore her eyes away and found she had lost count of her presses. She started again from one.

Dek was rifling through more drawers, pulling out a stethoscope. When Anni paused in her compressions to check Stivik’s breathing, he put the metal disk on his chest.

“Alright, twenty more.”

The physical exertion of the compressions soon had her exhausted and oblivious to what was going on around her. Her world became aching arms, sweaty skin, putting her head close to Stivik’s horribly ugly face to listen for the sound of a breath.

On the fifth check, she yelled, “He’s breathing again!”

Dek shoved her forcefully aside and checked for himself. “At last,” He muttered and began bustling around Stivik with stethoscope while she stumbled away and slumped to the floor in a corner, looking up at the slig. Her heart was racing; her momentary elation was sinking. Dek was pulling a machine up beside Stivik’s bed and fiddling with the controls; what if it didn’t work? What if he died? That would make her a… a murderer! The very thought made her sob aloud and soon she was crying heavily; she couldn’t stop herself.

“Boogie,” Dek said suddenly, “Take Anni through to the other room and put her in one of the cages, well away from that scrab.”

She looked up in surprise, her vision fuzzy with tears, but was too tired, too frightened to object as she was pulled to her feet and led into the next room. She heard the scrab howling as she entered, but it seemed to be coming from far away. She was put in a cage not quite big enough for her to lie or stand straight in, and she curled up against the bars.

When Boogie returned to the lab, he found Dek dropping two chill pills into a glass of water. “Are those for him?”

“They’re for me,” Dek replied without humour and downed the water, looking faintly disgusted by the taste. “Stivik should be ok, now. There’s nothing more I can do for him, anyway. Another hour and he should be back on his feet.”

“You locked Anni up to keep him safe?”

The vykker snorted, “To keep her safe. I can guess what Stivik’s first thought will be when he wakes up.” He hurried over to the corner where Stivik had collapsed and picked up his gun, before stashing it away in a cupboard. “At least this way I can make sure he stays away from her.” He started putting Stivik’s mask back on his face.

* * *

The scrab had settled down to sleep and Anni was leaning back against her bars, just beginning to doze, when she was woken by a shout. The door banged open and Stivik appeared, leaning heavily against the wall. “Where is she?!”

“Stivik, calm down.”

“CALM DOWN!? ARE YOU ALL LIVING IN SOME FANTASY LAND? SHE TRIED TO KILL ME! THAT’S TWICE!”

Another headache was building in her head, not agonising but none-the-less horrible, and she raised her knees to her chest but gave no other reaction. The scrab stirred.

“It’s too late to do anything about her, now.”

“Too late? Having her here’s putting the security of the whole factory at risk! Deal with her now before she kills us in our sleep!”

“I’m not disturbing Arnie now,” Dek said firmly, following the slig into the room. The scrab rose to its feet and rose threateningly to the vykker. Anni smiled darkly.

“Then get rid of her now. Any sane glukkon would! If Arnie doesn’t have her killed then he deserves to be killed himself! What have you done with my gun?”

“I’ve put it away until you calm down!” Dek growled. “Look at you; you can’t even stand without support. You need rest, before you exhaust yourself.”

Stivik turned his hateful look to the vykker but Dek stared back with equal resignation and eventually Stivik growled, “Alright, but you keep the girl locked up here all night!”

“Yes, yes. I’d like to have a proper look at her in the morning, anyway,” Dek grumbled. Anni snarled.

“Good. Don’t let her out,” And Stivik stalked away.

“Get some proper rest,” Dek called after him, then, “Boogie, go down to the cafeteria and see if you can bring up some food for the mudokon. If any of the other mudokons ask, tell her she’s hurt and I’m keeping her here over night. Tell them she mustn’t be disturbed.”

He left the room and she sat, watching the scrab sullenly, until Boogie came in with some food for her, which she took and ate ravenously. While she was eating, Boogie, under Dek’s direction, stunned the scrab with a Snuzi and moved it into another cage, which had wheels. She glowered at Dek as he gave the big-bro instructions.

“We’re putting it in the lab’s other store room so it won’t disturb you in the night. It’ll be quite comfortable,” Dek told her as Boogie wheeled it out, evidently meaning to comfort her.

She glared, “You should let her go,” She said bluntly. He dismissed her with a flick of a hand and left, taking her empty plate.

When he returned for the last time, he brought a bundle of luxurious bedding, “This is from my bedroom,” He told her as he fed it through the bars of the cage. “I imagine it’s rather softer than what you get in your bunks.” She didn’t reply but remained sullen as he pushed a pillow through onto the floor (the first feather pillow she had seen, let alone used) and placed a battery powered lamp just outside the cage where she could reach it. He switched it on and straitened up. “I’m going to bed, now. I’ll check up on you in the morning. Your friends know you’re safe. Do you want any sleeping pills?” She gave him such a malicious look that he left in a hurry, flicking off the light as he went through the door. The pale blue-white light of the lamp filled her cage but deepened the shadows around her.

She put together her bed, wondering if Javi, Dean and Kix would believe what Boogie told them, that she was hurt. Would Javi and Dean let Dek keep her alone all night?

She lay down and turned off the light, but sleep wouldn’t come to her. Even with the sheets she was cold, and so lonely. She shuddered at the thought of her isolation. She wanted so badly to hear the breathing of other people around her. She wanted to know Kix was in the bunk above her, just a call away. She curled up, feeling tears come to her eyes which she struggled to hold in. What would happen to her now? Would Stivik come for her? What would Arnie do when he heard of what she’d done?

Anni,’ Said a voice in her head, making her jump.

She lay very still, barely breathing as she strained her ears to listen.

Anni, do you want to be trapped here forever?’ There was chastisement in the voice, and anger.

She swallowed, “I know you made that fire,” She said to the empty room, and then groaned, “Why did you do it? You just got me in more trouble!”

She opened her mouth and spoke in a deeper voice, “We can’t live here. We’re not meant to be here. We shouldn’t be trapped, in a cage, in walls.”

She squeezed her eyes closed, and said in her own voice, “They’re stronger than I am. I can’t get out.”

“They’re weaker! Weaker than us! Weaker than the power we have!”

“Power? That doesn’t mean anything! What does that even mean?”

The voice spoke again, softer, tinged with icy desire, “There’s more to come than just fire… Oh, so much more! You have no idea, Anni…” Anni shuddered. ‘Just let me take control when I want it; it would only be for a short while.’ It said, now only in her head.

Anni, shook her head, her eyes tight.

Just for a short moment. And we can have all we dreamed of.

Anni shook her head again, “I’m scared,” She breathed.

The voice was silent, though Anni strained to hear. Slowly, sleep crept over her, like a shadow.

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That line comes from the W@RF RPG (I won't say where just yet 'cus that post gives far too much away). It is possibly the single most important line in the RPG for the creation of this story. srsly! The whole of Anni's story comes down to that line; what led to it? And what will it lead to?

Also, if you really, really want to tick off a slig, what's the best way to do it? I'd say using spiritual powers and stabbing him with a syringe would do the job fairly well. Stivik is not a Happy Bunny.

Everything's coming together. Time is running out. Everything in Part 6 will unite in the next chapter and the rest of Anni's secret will finally be revealed. So post, or you might have a long wait!
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The fucking quote button won't work, so I'll just copy/paste....ahem..

"How's THAT for a cliff-hanger?! I didn't know she could do that! Did you know she could do that?! Did she do that?! What just happened?!"

OMG... no wai!!!1!!one I was never expecting that! Nicely written chapter Boogie makes me laugh to myself, typical brawn and no brains xD
Now to read the next chapter!
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Another well crafted chapter, Splat!
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Anni is glaring at all you people who didn't reply to the last chapter! Grrrrr...
Hey, it's not my fault I have a real-life as well! That was good filler for the hacked period, I really don't remember what happened there. But see, I told you a while ago that we got hacked and lost some of the RPG

And once again you're making things logical like with the explanation behind "shred attack." Good stuff.

I remember that original argument between Dek and Stivik too. I think in the RP he was a lot calmer, but of course it's a lot more realistic with him being utterly freaked out I guess Anni's just lucky that it won't be long now till he leaves, or I'm sure he'd eventually find some way to kill her

Now, if I post two more times in a row does that mean you'll have five replies and you'll post the next chapter before you go? XD
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