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08-14-2001, 09:28 PM
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'Shriek'

Here is the first chap. *grin*

Chapter 1

She groaned as she woke up, head hurting somewhat. She opened her eyes and looked around confused. She had no idea where she was or who she was. She noticed a large body of water next to her and looked at her reflection in it. Then she realized that she had no idea what she was either.
Staring back at her in her reflection was a creature with silver eyes, light green skin with darker green stripes, small head with three facial tentacles on a long neck, fairly broad shoulders, and a torso that tapered off into a 4 foot long tail. A row of spines ran from the base of her neck to the tip of her tail and her weight was being supported by two strong arms. Her hands each had three fingers and a thumb; each tipped with a hook-like claw.
She stared at herself a moment longer, not sure what to make of herself. Then she turned from the water and attempted to walk, only to stumble and fall flat on her face. She squawked in surprise and got up to try again. After a few more moments (and a couple more stumbles), she managed to get the hang of walking.
As she walked about she looked around, she was in a grassy plain with a few sparse trees.
She jumped when she heard a shriek-like howl behind her. She turned around and saw another creature, this one had a beak-like mouth with its lower jaw longer then the top, no eyes, red and yellow in color, head resting on a strong neck, and four talon tipped legs.
She backed away from the creature, frightened, her instincts telling her that this creature meant her harm. She tried to run but stumbled and fell. She looked up and saw the creature advancing on her, head low and hissing menacingly. She let out a short frightened cry and covered her head with her hands.
There was another howl, this one from another direction, and the sound of someone or thing running up to her. She crushed her eyes closed, not wanting to see what else was about to attack her.
Who or whatever the owner of the second howl was, ran right by her and, from the sound of it, had started fighting the first creature. After a lot of noise, one fell quiet and there was a dull ‘thud’. She whined as she heard the winner walk up to her.
“Yer ok miss?” a deep gentle voice said to her. She forced herself to open her eyes and look up at the owner of the voice. She jumped up, surprised at what she saw…
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08-15-2001, 02:51 AM
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08-15-2001, 11:26 PM
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as you wish *grin*

Chapter 2

Standing before her was another like her, only a male. He was slightly larger then her, had dark green skin, yellow eyes, and spines that went from halfway up his neck to the tip of his tail. His eyes looked her over with a kind gaze and he rumbled slightly.
“Well yer look alright.” He said with a kind smile, “Name’s Spider, and yer are?”
She looked at him puzzled, not quite getting what he was saying. He looked at her with a somewhat concerned look on his face.
“Can yer speak?” he asked.
Somehow, she managed to figure out what ‘speaking’ was and managed a few words: “I…can…little.” She said.
“Ok…do yer have a name?” he asked, and waited patiently for her response.
“What is name?”
“It’s what yer call yerself, like my,” he pointed to himself, “name is Spider.”
When she didn’t respond he said, “Yer don’ have a name?”
“Don’t know…I…don’t remember…anything.” She said with a sigh.
“Yer have no memories of yer past or who yer are?”
“No…” she sadly shook her head, tears welling up in her eyes.
“Hey, don’ cry…” he said as he nuzzled her neck comfortingly, “Yer will remember, jus’ give yerself time that’s all.”
Tears still streaming down her face, she pushed herself up against Spider’s chest. Spider, a little surprised, wrapped an arm around her comfortingly. “It will be ok, I promise….” he rumbled softly. After a few minutes she calmed down and pulled away from him.
“What can I do?” she asked.
“Well…yer can stick with me as it is obvious that yer can’t really fend fer yerself yet…”
“Ok, what do we do now?”
“First lets get out of the open. Ter many dangerous critters roam about out here. Follow me.” Spider then turned and started heading for a patch of trees. He looked back occasionally to see if she was able to keep up and noticed she was still a bit wobbly with her walk, he slowed his pace. After a while they reached the shelter of the trees and she laid down, tired from the walk. She whined when her stomach rumbled painfully.
“Hungry?” Spider asked. When he saw her nod, he said, “Alright, I’ll be right back.”
She whined in panic when she saw him start to run away from her. He stopped and turned back.
“I will right be back, I promise.” He said as he nuzzled her reassuringly before running off again. She watched him run all the way back to where they were before. She saw him pick something up in his jaws and start running back. As he came closer she realized that he was carrying the now limp body of the creature that was threatening her before. He dropped it in front of her when he arrived, and laid down beside her, panting slightly.
She looked at the body, not quite sure what to do with it. Spider noticed this and bit into the carcass, ripping it open. He then ripped off a piece of the flesh and handled it to her. She looked at it a moment, then took it from him with her jaws. She chewed a little, then swallowed. By then Spider had another piece ready for her and she took that too.
After a while she was full and felt sleepy. She snuggled up next to Spider, who again was surprised, and fell asleep. Spider sighed, ate his fill, and fell asleep as well.
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08-17-2001, 12:46 AM
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Chapter 3

As she slept, she dreamed. Faint images she couldn’t quite make out teased her mind. She could make out the emotions that came with them: pleasure, pain, fear, and sorrow. She twitched in her sleep, the emotions where disturbing to her. One particular suddenly struck and the emotion that came with it: shear terror. She feel like she was running for her life, and pain was assaulting her body. It was too much…
She jolted awake with a loud shriek, waking Spider up.
“Ow!: he mumbled, “watch the voice will yer?”
She looked around confused, the emotions she was experiencing in her dreams still had her firmly in its grasp. With another shriek she bolted, surprising Spider.
“Hey, where are yer going?” He said as he got up and went after her, “Come back! Its ter dangerous fer yer ter be on yer own!”
She couldn’t hear him, the feeling of fear and terror still holding her. She kept running, blindly, shrieking loudly in terror as she went. She stumbled at the top of a steep hill and tumbled down the other side, landing in a heap at the base. Bruised, shaken, and scared, she lay still as Spider run up to her.
“Yer ok?” he asked as he looked to see if she was hurt.
She didn’t respond, she was too petrified to move or speak. Spider not seeing any major injuries, laid down beside her and put and arm around her. He didn’t know what spooked her, but he did know she needed comforting. He rumbled to her as he nuzzled her neck.
Eventually she buried her head in his neck and wrapped her arms around him, sobbing.
“It’s ok…” Spider rumbled softly, “It was only a dream…and dreams can’t hurt yer…”
“Then…” she sobbed, “why did I feel pain during this one? Why did I feel sorrow and fear?”
Spider was at a lost for an answer…
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08-18-2001, 11:00 PM
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hmmm no replies...is everyone getting tired of my stories? *sighs*

Chapter 4

They laid there awhile, Spider comforting her. Finally Spider stood back up.
"Come on...stand up. Lets make sure yer ok." He said gently.
She complied and stood still as Spider looked her over.
"Yer can relax Shriek...yer know I won't hurt yer." Spider said.
It took her a moment to noticed what he called her.
"What did you call me?" she asked as she turned to look at him.
"Shriek...I called yer Shriek." he replied.
"Why Shriek?"
"Well...yer needed a name and yer partically blew my ears out with that shriek of yers a while ago, so it suits yer."
"But then...why are you called Spider? You don't look, act or sound like one..."
Spider suddenly looked sad. "That..." he said, "is from a story I am not ready ter tell..."
"Your past life is that bad?"
"Some parts more then others...I'd rather not talk 'bout it."
"I...I'm sorry...at least you have a past..."
"That is true...sometimes I wish I could forget it, but I know I can never forget it...or I'm doomed ter repeat it...Lets go, it's time ter hurt fer dinner."

They walked quite a ways before Spider scented something. He lowered his head to the ground, determining the age and which direction the owner went.
"What is it?" Shriek asked.
"Elum...a whole herd from the looks of it." Spider replied, "This way and keep yer voice down."
Shriek nodded and followed. Soon they came across the elum herd, which was peacefully grazing.
"What now?" Shriek whispered.
"Yer stay here and out of sight. I'll handle this." Spider then suddenly moved away and Shriek watched in interest as he stalked the herd. He moved quickly and quietly from hiding place to hiding place, watching the herd the whole time, getting closer and closer to them. Shriek purred slightly as she continued to watch him; she found him quite handsome.
He's strong and smart... she thought, nice too. I wouldn't mind spending the rest of my life with him...why am I thinking like this? she thought.
Her brief inattention made her lose sight of Spider. She looked but couldn't spot him. Suddenly something spooked the herd and it started stampeding; right toward her....
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08-18-2001, 11:12 PM
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I pretty much like it. But you always have so many stories to follow. No offence. Oh, sorry for going off-topic, but... You don't think that you could post a picture of yourself? That would help me on the sim-story.

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08-18-2001, 11:15 PM
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heh i would but my boyfriend has them all. I can give you a description if you like...
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Yes I am female. The name does throw ppl off, sorry.
Anyway...this fic is finished. I decided to split it into two seperate fics as after one point it changes too much for it to stay as one fic. Need to think of a title though...*groans*

Chapter 5

Spider had just brought down an elum when he noticed which way the herd was running.
"Oh no...Shriek!" he cried as he ran as fast as he could toward her.

Shriek was so petrified that she couldn't move. She could only watch frozen in fear as the herd came rapidly closer and closer to her. Just before they got to her someone grabbed her and rolled her off to one side. The, whoever it was, laid on top of her, keeping her flat on the ground.
"Stay low and still." a familiar voice said.
"Spider?" Shriek muttered, but she didn't get a response.
After what seemed like an eternity, the herd passed and Shriek was allowed to stand up again.
"Are yer alright?" Spider asked.
"I'm fine...thank you." Shriek replied, still shaking.
"I'm sorry...I should've made sure the herd wasn't goin' ter run toward yer. I...I'm not used ter havin' someone with me on a hunt..."
"It's ok…we all make mistakes." she said as she nuzzled his neck. Spider moved away from her touch as he said:
"But this mistake could've cost yer yer life and I would have never forgiven myself fer it. Findin' yer was the best thing that has happened ter me since..." his voice suddenly cracked and he turned away.
"Spider?" she asked concerned, "Are you ok?"
"I'm fine." Spider said quietly, not looking at her, "Let's go eat."
As Spider lead her down to the carcass, Shriek couldn't help but think:
Is your past so painful that you feel you have to keep it locked up within yourself? I hope not...you would only be hurting yourself more....
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Chapter 6

Over the next few weeks, Spider taught her how to live out in the wild. He taught her how to hunt, climb trees, use her senses to the utmost, and a bunch of other things. Over this time she fell completely in love with him, but every time she show her affections Spider would turn away. She could see the pain in his eyes and could tell that he was forcing himself to hold back. She tried to get him to tell her why he was acting like that, why he was so reluctant to tell her more about himself and his past, but he would either say that he wasn’t ready to tell or just remain quiet.
One day…she got fed up with this….

"I've had enough of this!" Shriek suddenly cried and rammed into Spider; knocking him to the ground and pinning him.
"Shriek?" Spider said shocked, "wh...what are yer doin'?"
"What am I doing? I am going to find out what you have been holding in all this time that's what!"
”Shriek…I told yer…I’m not ready ter…”
“Not ready…not ready…you always say that! When are you going to be ready to tell me? Don’t you realize that the longer you hold it in the more miserable you will become?”
“Better I be miserable then someone else!” Spider suddenly snapped and he knocked her off.
“You make it sound like you don’t ever want to be happy.”
“Of course I want ter be happy. But fate doesn’t want me ter be!”
“Why is that? What has happened to you before.”
“I don’t want ter say. Now jus’ drop it will yer…”
“No…I won’t drop it. I’m going to keep bugging you until you tell me!”
He didn't know what came over him, he just wanted to stop her from trying to get him to reveal what he didn't want to reveal. He smacked her and when he saw the look on her face he immediately felt guilty.
"Shriek...I..." he muttered.
Shriek let out a mournful wail and bolted, Spider chased after her.
"Shriek!" he cried, tears in his eyes, "Come back!"
She ran for quite a while before stumbling and she fell. She didn't get up again, just laid there sobbing. Spider laid down top of her, holding her tightly yet gently with his arms.
"I'm sorry..." he sobbed, "I never wanted ter hurt yer...I never wanted ter hurt anyone..."
"Then why..." Shriek asked, sobbing still, "Why do you always turn away when I show you affection? Do you not care for me?"
Spider got off her and stood up, head down and eyes closed. Shriek looked up at him, waiting to see if he would answer.
"I der care 'bout yer..." he finally answered, "it's jus' that...every time I gain happiness...the world comes crashin' down around me, bringing pain and death ter those I love. Last time...it jus' hurt so much that I felt that if I wasn't 'round anyone I couldn't hurt anyone else."
"So by keeping yourself from getting close to anyone..." Shriek started.
"...I would only be hurtin' myself." Spider finished for her, "Yet I am findin' it harder ter der then I thought it would be. When I first saw yer, I wasn't...sure if I should make myself known ter yer. I was actually followin' yer fer a while before that scrab decided yer looked like a tasty meal. When that happened, I jus' reacted and I knew I couldn't go back after that, 'specially after I realized that yer had no clue how ter survive on yer own. And the longer I stayed with yer...the more and more I feared somethin' would happen that would take yer away from me. I don' want ter lose yer...ever..."
He sank to his elbows then and sobbed quietly.
"I...understand." Shriek said as she nuzzled his neck comfortingly. Spider returned the gesture and the two rubbed necks for a moment. Then Spider gently held her face tentacles with his own and stared lovingly into her eyes. He let go after a moment, carefully moved his tentacles out of the way, and kissed her gently on the mouth. Shriek recoiled slightly in surprise at first, but accepted it eagerly, purring slightly with pleasure....


Epilogue next...
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Epilogue

After that day Spider changed. He became more open to her and affectionate. He told her everything that had happened to him in his past and Shriek understood why he was so reluctant to show affection toward her.
“I understand why you were afraid….” Shriek said as they walked, “you didn’t want to end up getting your heart broken again.”
“Yeah…” Spider said, “but I’m through lettin’ what happened in the past control my life. I know I can never forget it, but I’m not goin’ ter let it hold me back anymore. I’m goin’ ter start livin’ my life ter the fullest.”
“Good.” Shriek smiled.
“And I’m goin’ ter start right now..” Suddenly Spider pounced on her, knocking her down onto her back. He had a playful glint in his eye as he stood over her. “with yer…” he finished with a playful smile.
“Well now…” Shriek giggled as she batted him off and stood back up, “you have to catch me first!” she then ran off with a laugh, Spider chasing her laughing as well.

Some distance away, Dragadon watched them with a happy chuckle.
At last my kin has learned to let go of his past and to live life as it is meant to be. To its fullest. she thought. Suddenly she felt a mental tug. What’s this; a summons from home? I wonder what is going on? She looked one last time at Spider and his new mate, Well my kin, it would appear I have to leave you for a while, I pray the fates be kind to you while I’m away.
Dragadon took to the air and went to heed the summon.


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I like it, short one. That's good, easy to read . A description of you would be fine, yes. Hm, "i like it" is so dry, what about... Brilliant story? Excellent? Anyway, it was very good. Tell me to shut up, please...

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