my story of oddworld

lindsey · #1 12-06-2002, 08:02 PM

(sory if I spell some stof rong but heres the story)

chapter 1 brew

my name is mat one of millons of mudokons and out of 50 muds I drank brew and that made my live miserabile it stardid abut a month ago my tribe has ben warnd of brew and so have I but one day a brew vendo some how got to my trib thay seid not to drink it but as a tenagd mud I didint lisin and I drank it and as any mudokon I got sick and past out wen I woke up and herd some one toking one of the mud fell for the brew mister good he said nawe put it to work and past out agen I woke up in a cage with an electric wall but it was in bad shap and I cude fit thruw it what showd I do

A go threw
B stay thare
C look and see if thars a nuther way to get out

TheKhanzumer · #2 12-07-2002, 12:38 AM

lindsey... PLEASE CHECK YOUR SPELLING BEFORE YOU POST! Unless you have an excuse (like you are less than six or english is your second language) you have no reasion for it.

Sorry but it had to be said. Also, the reason people might seem to ignore your posts is because most of them are very pointless.

Once again sorry but someone had to say it.

And I think he should D) Use his urin to short circut the electric wall. Seriously.

sO fReAkIn oDd · #3 12-07-2002, 01:18 AM

Lindsey, you can't spell, please do something about this before you write anymore fics.

You also completely ripped-off my "three choices" idea from my story, "The Tales of the Shrink". This seriously pisses me off!

Don't write anything in the Fan Corner unless it can be understood through your gross typing and if it is something that you didn't steal from someone else's fic, specifically mine.

Kaimana · #4 12-07-2002, 05:07 AM

Gentlemen...I would appreciate it if the young lady at least recieved a comment, of good nature. Yes she does not spell good. So she may have used ideas from your fanfics. But the young lady is still a newbie. And by the way your attempts to correct her, is maybe not the best. Lets try it this way shall we. As long as her posts are not spam, and you are not interested in it, perhaps you should ignore it? Because she doesn't seem to listen much

But according to her she is trying. So lets see how it goes alright?

lindsey · #5 12-07-2002, 02:03 PM

what I can make a intrative story can I I wont be making any more fics for a waile so stop just becas I cant spell dosnt mean I can post a fan fic and I spell as good as I can I nead more vots

TheKhanzumer · #6 12-07-2002, 09:04 PM

I said I'm sorry didn't I Kai. I really didn't mean to come of too harsh and if I did I apologised for it.

lindsey · #7 12-07-2002, 09:55 PM

well its D that I will try

chapter 2 vikkers
well I looked for a spot to get out and fownd a vent and went threw it just as I climed threw it I fell finding that it was biger then I thawt when I hit the grownd I died I hered some one but I code not tell what he was saying I woke up but not me I was a ratz I look up and saw to thing vikkers thay were abot to be cut in hafe what showed I do

A try to wigille out
B stay thar
C try to stop them from cuting me

oko · #8 12-14-2002, 06:02 AM

i think i'll take..........a!i kinda like this fic

lindsey · #9 12-18-2002, 01:17 AM

i nead more vots pleas

Facsimile · #10 12-18-2002, 01:44 AM

I pick A.
Who is your avatar of?

lindsey · #11 12-18-2002, 09:09 PM

I dont know but I like it just a cupil more vots
(I wish I look like her)

Stripe · #12 12-25-2002, 03:56 AM

*A*.... A Rat has to do what it can do best....Wriggle and BITE!
Plus that nice long tail could have the potential of a nasty snap!

Go for it Kiddo!

Big_Bro_Slig222 · #13 12-26-2002, 12:59 AM

C. Show em' what your made of.

note. Linsey, that girl on your avatar is from final fantasy 10 i believe, here name is Rikku.

lindsey · #14 12-30-2002, 02:39 AM

its ben a long time a gets it

I wigild out the vykkers saw me and got sawbones I ran like ****
runing from the sawbones thay finaly stoped faloing me I was in a strang plas thare whas water and o my I nerele fantid the plas had at lest 10000 gabbit eggs and mud egg to

A look and see if I can try and get bac to a mud
B rescue the eggs
C for get both and ecape

Joshy · #15 12-31-2002, 11:49 AM

Even though i dont get the story and what you're writing, i'll choose "b" since its the right thing to do.(wonders how you can save 10000 gabbit and 10000 mud eggs with only 2 hands and 2 seconds to live)

Stripe · #16 01-02-2003, 03:02 AM

The only logical choice would be *C*.
Besides, since when do fanfic writers let silly logic rule -all- of a story?

Unless the rat can in someway communicate, he's gonna have to escape and get help....somehow. Most muds would be underguard or in cells,....Hmmm.......who do we know that can move freely through an entire industrial complex crawling with sligs glukkons and other unpleasant critters, silent, unseen and unnoticed Hmmm? How big and how strong -are- ratz anyways?
Any one know?

Facsimile · #17 01-02-2003, 06:52 AM

:

Originally posted by Stripe
How big and how strong -are- ratz anyways?

Um, they're just rats, spelt with a 'z' and freakishly odd looking.

Splat · #18 01-02-2003, 06:49 PM

Well, its not what i'de normally suggest but your, well, a rat, so c, run like your being chased by a herd of scrabs!

lindsey · #19 01-07-2003, 04:09 PM

C gets it im bord so hear it is

whell knowing that I cant get the egg i left I fond the loding doc whare the big windos are i jumpet know if didin jump I wood get killed any way then I fell on some thing it whas a blimp it whas on the grownd but the top whas like a baloon

naw what
A look for a shaman that can make my a mud agen
B see what is in the blimp
C go do any thing I whant

dark_xinos · #20 01-09-2003, 12:30 PM

Oh, I hate it when peaple tell me I spell bad. I was not that good either a short while back.

A, Go there.

(sorry, but... the only thing i think is hard is that you don't put periods in the sentences.

*gets beaten by everybody on forum with stick*

Edit: Oh, i'm still not perfect... darn!

lindsey · #21 01-14-2003, 12:49 AM

stop telling my that i spell bad I think I know that so evre buty stop it

Al the Vykker · #22 01-14-2003, 08:38 PM

I would have been very appreciative of someone to notify me of this problem earlier. Next time, please click report this post to moderator if there is a problem somewhere. I hope the problem has been settled. But I hate not being informed about something under my nose in FC. Thankyou Kai for trying to mediate. But next time please inform me so I can help settle some things. I am apreciative of the apologies given, and as stated thanks for the extra help. I dont see any further problems so hopefully the intervention was helpful. If the spelling becomes a problem for you please either ignore the topic. Ask her nicely to check over it, or have her ask me to edit them so everyone can be happy. This way further incidents can be avoided, and problems can be settled quickly.Thanks.

-Sincerely Al the Vykker FC Mod

lindsey · #23 01-14-2003, 11:29 PM

what good will it do if I edit it it just rong what is the big problom im just trying to rite a fanfic