The less-incredible journey
I will be writing a fan fic about a Mudokon and a Slig that travel together to find whatever. They don't meet until the 2nd part.
Ok lets start!
Chapter one
How it all began
Lance walked into the shopping plaza in a native village. Looking at each of the wares, he noticed a pack a food that said could last for 2 months tops. He pulled out his burlap bag that held his moolah.
"Excuse me, I would like your bag of rations that could last 2 months tops." said Lance. The merchant was a blind mudokon.
"Yes,yes he wantssss it does he?" the blind mudokon.
"Okayyyyy. Here just take 50 moolah." Lance said,handing him the moolah and taking the bag. He promptly ran away. He was looking through the rest of the market, and he spoted some sligs walking through also,holding a wanted poster that had a picture of LANCE. Lance froze. These sligs were looking for him. Just before he was about to run, one of the sligs spoted him.
"There he is! GET 'EM" It yelled. Lance ran. The sligs ran. Lance turned a corner and ran into a slig. They both fell over.
"Huh? What hell?" Lance said. The slig walked next to him just as Lance blacked out.
What do ya think? It will get funnier later.
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this is great!
this is the best oddworld story that I have read in a long time, (you just need to work on your dialogue a bit more). Other than that your story is perfect! just promise me that you will keep righting additions to this story!
(but written by misty)
