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Happy Short little tidbit, "Cal's work-related accident"

Okay, this is more for me than for everyone else, so I can grip characters properly, but you might like to see it. But, I'm better at drawing than writing As you might have guessed, it's about my character Cal's work-related accident at Vykkers Labs. A wee bit o' coarse language, so be warned. The characters I have here are, of course, Cal, he's an Intern working at VL. Grumpy, anti-social, and addicted to prescription drugs, he's pretty much the same as all the other Interns.
Pens (real name Luke) on the other hand, is happy-go-lucky, mischeivous, and laid back. Also a bit rebellious, and Cal's roomate. Cal... hates him.

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‘Hey, wake up.’
He could feel someone poking him.
‘Dude, you’ll be late for your shift. Wake up!’
Cal mumbled something, and turned over. He liked sleeping. He didn’t get to do it very often.
‘Sigh.’ He heard footsteps walking away from him, followed by the faint sound of running water. Then-
‘BWAAAUURGH!!’ Cal screamed in shock, jumped clumsily out of bed, and landed face first on the floor, blankets entangled in his awkward legs. His roommate was laughing hysterically.
‘Shaddap, Pens.’ Cal glared at his attacker, nicknamed ‘Pens’, who had just poured a glass of freezing water all over his face.
Getting up, he looked into the cracked and dirty mirror across the room. Pulling out a drawer from under the sink, he looked inside, and took out a small box, labelled “Chill Pill”.
‘Hey, Pens...’ Cal stared into the box, which was empty.
‘What?’
‘I’m outta Chill Pills, can I borrow some of yours?’
‘Git y’own.’ Pens replied blankly, sitting on the upper bunk of the bed. ‘You gotta be the worst user of them things, y’know? I mean, not even the Interns from room #64 are that bad, and you know how-‘
‘Oh, shut up.’ Cal was already peeved, and not having any anti-depressants to start the day with was even worse. Fishing around for some substitute, he found some random generic-brand goo in a tube and squeezed it into his mouth, found his headphones under the chair (‘The hell are they doing there?’), and opened the wardrobe to look for his ‘uniform’ (you couldn’t really call it that, but he did because all the Interns in Vykkers Labs did) - purple-and-yellow striped speedo’s, and matching baseball cap.

‘Mmkay... when’s your shift? Isn’t it the same as mine?’ Cal looked back at Pens, who was relaxing on the bed.
‘Nah. I got someone to cover for me.’ replied Pens, grinning smugly. Cal sneered, and turned to step out the dormitory door.
‘Don’t forget to stitch your mouth.’ Pens hollered in a teasing, sing-song voice.
‘Ah, ****-!’ Cal darted back and began a frantic search for a roll of surgical thread and needle, then haphazardly started to sew his mouth shut. The reason this was done is because the Vykkers hated to hear Interns whistling, which they often did when listening to the tunes on their headphones. To most of them nowadays, stitching and unstitching your own mouth at the beginning and end of each day was as regular as brushing your teeth.

Once that had been taken care of, Cal made his way to the Main Work Hall. Looking around, he could see he was definitely late. Vykkers, Interns, Mudokon Scrubs, the whole shebang was already there. Hurrying to the reception desk, he signed in and received his work papers.

TUESDAY:
6:00 Fuzzle testing – lab #347
7:30 Fuzzle testing – lab #296
8:00 Chemical research – lab #54
9:00 Fuzzle testing – lab #13

Cal looked down his timetable, and saw that it went on like this for a good 16 more hours- most of it being fuzzle testing. Sighing heavily, he turned to the left of the reception desk-
‘Hey, it's Cal right?’ one of the inferior Vykkers stepped out from behind the desk. ‘Humphrey wants a fuzzle delivered to his lab, number 13. You’re passing by there aren’t you? I saw it on your table somewhere.’ He said, shoving a small cage into his hands. Cal rolled his eyes, but didn’t protest.
‘He’s doing something to a gabbit in there, I think it’s surgery, so be careful you don’t stir him.’

Number 13. He finally found the damn room in this damn maze of a damn laboratory. The automatic doors opened with a swoosh, a he strode in. Humming off-key to his music, he walked to the central operating pit, and realized something was wrong.
Wasn’t there supposed to be a gabbit in the holding chair? Cal looked around, wondering if he was in the right room.
There, backed in a little corner, was the gabbit, surrounded by about four or five fuzzles. All looked at each other, apprehensive. Then Cal scowled, as if to say “alright punk, get back in the chair, or someone gets slappy-punchy.”

Oh, he could never have imagined what would happen next...
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05-15-2007, 08:20 AM
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Cool story, I think I know what happens next...:madfuz:...Darn, I can't get the emoticon.
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So Cal's the Intern who got attacked in Munch's Oddysee (apparently)!
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05-15-2007, 12:16 PM
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Nice story. I think Interns mouths are permanently stitched though....
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He can have a bit of liberty of his own, can't he? Anywho, nice work. Would like to see more.
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Oh, this is good! ^.^ I'll love to read more!
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This great. You really have a talent for writing stories. Poor Cal. Attacked by angry fuzzles. No wonder he lost his eye. Poor guy. I actually feel sorry for him. Good work with this. Keep it up.
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Nice story. I think Interns mouths are permanently stitched though....
I just thought it'd make more sense that the Vykkers allowed them to temporarily remove them while they eat & sleep. They wouldn't want all thier employees dying from starvation and/or sleep apnea. It'd also explain how the Intern's stitches stay tight, seeing as they're constantly being re-applied, while the Mudokons of Rupture Farms loosened in time.

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while they eat
I never thought about that. They'd starve.

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Oh, indubitably. *nods* :3
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It'd also explain how the Intern's stitches stay tight, seeing as they're constantly being re-applied, while the Mudokons of Rupture Farms loosened in time.
Wasn't it just Abe's mouth that was stitched up? I must have been wrong.
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Wasn't it just Abe's mouth that was stitched up? I must have been wrong.
In AO and AE (or at least AO), any slave caught talking would have been shot. They all got their mouths sewn, so they couldn't talk, but of course they loosened enough over time enough for them to talk. After they were rescued, most of them got their stitches removed completely, but Abe kept his as a reminder of his past.
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Wow, I love your story! Please post more!
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Ohh, thats good, mate! MORE!!!
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Post I smell a game of lay-the-blame...

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Wow, I love your story! Please post more!
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Ohh, thats good, mate! MORE!!!
XD... I wasn't intending to post any more, BUT if you insist, I might find the time to overcome my insipid laziness and come up with something XD but I wouldn't want to give too much away, it'll spoil the comic I'm trying-but-not-really-but-will-get-around-to-be working on!
[EDIT] Here we go!

The gabbit’s fearful, innocent look suddenly turned to one of great malice as it looked Cal straight in the eye, catching the attention of it’s fuzzle companions.
'...Git ‘im!'

Cal’s eyes widened, taken aback. He didn’t have time to think of how to act; the fuzzles had turned vicious, and were on top of him before he could blink. Sinking their fangs into his legs , he screamed in fear and pain, in the hope that someone would hear him.
Nobody did.
Cal felt one of the little terrors latch onto his face, and as he instinctly teared it way with his hands, he felt an agonising blast of pain from his left eye, and trailing down across his face. The same fuzzle came back and crashed into his head, knocking him down. He tried to scramble back up, lest they try to kill him while he was down, but to no avail. As he noticed how much blood had pooled on the surgery room floor, how much he had lost, he succumbed to exhaustion, and lay limp.
Presuming he was dead, the rabid fuzzles and the insane gabbit stopped their attack, and made their way to the door.
As Cal lifted his head to stare once more at the creatures, he noticed something about the gabbit; it had a little glowing thing on it’s head, probably a headport. That was the last image he saw, before he finally slipped into the black void. He would never forget it.

***
How could they have gone so far? It’s-‘
‘I don’t care if it’s impossible, it still happened.’
‘This is all Humphrey’s fault. He’s the one-‘
‘He’s not to blame, it’s the first time something like this has happened.’
‘He leaves that thing alone for five minutes, and-‘
‘We know what happened. But we can’t let this leak out to the press.’

The two Vykkers went silent for a moment, both thinking the same thing. If M.O.M, F.U.D TV or even The Daily Deception got a hold of this... well, Vykkers Labs would have a lot of explaining to do.
One turned to look at the hospital bed, which now contained the mauled Intern, covered with bandages, and unconscious.
‘...Will he be alright?’ he asked. The other Vykker sighed.
‘We’re not sure. He lost an incredible amount of blood. Not to mention...’ his expression was that of hopelessness, ‘We... couldn’t save his eye. He’ll be half blind for the rest of his life. That is, if he survives at all. He sure won’t want to be working here anymore, in any case.’
‘I can’t say I blame him.’
Suddenly, another Intern burst into the room, carrying a handwritten note. Handing it to one of the Vykkers, he then stood back by the wall.
‘What do we have here?...’ said the Vykker, then read it. His facial expression turned from potential hope, to a mix of rage, disgust, and horror.
‘What’s it say..? Have they found the gabbit?’ asked the other. Snatching the note, he read:

Gabbit had been sighted. Followed by veritable army of fuzzles.
Several attacks on employees, with heavy casualties.
Extensive damage to equipment, including several
Snoozer insallments. Gabbit has escaped through poop shute.


Judging by the poor handwriting, the messenger Intern had written the note himself. A tense, uncomfortable silence followed.
‘...This... is a disaster! What are we going to do?! This beast will bring about the end of Vykkers labs, if it hasn’t already! What are gonna doooo...’ the Vykker erupted in uncontrollable sobbing and howling. The other Vykker and Intern looked at each other.
‘Get Humphrey here, immediately. And show him the note, if you haven’t already-‘
‘That won’t be needed, Avery, I’m here.’ Came a familiar voice from behind the dirty, bloodstained curtain. Humphrey stepped out, his face grave.
‘Humphrey! You idiot! You peabrain! You left a gabbit to his own devices-‘
‘We all know, Elliot. There’s no reason to repeat it. The matter has been stabilized; all employees have been notified, and we are certain the animal is no longer aboard this ship.’
This did not settle things, however.
‘Oh, so you expect everything to be okay now, I suppose?’ the Vykker named Elliot cried. ‘We still have damages to pay for, not to mention the harm done to all our research...’
‘Calm down. These things will settle with time. Crying will not solve things.’ Humphrey stated blankly. ‘And as for this fellow...’ He turned to Cal, who was still out cold. ‘When he wakes up, I want a full-detail explanation of what happened. He was the first victim, and the only one in the room at the time. For all we know...’ he turned to glare at the others, ‘He could well be fully responsible for this.’

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Oh, Love it!! Poor Cal...
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Oooh, Poor Cal. I actually feel sorry for him for what happened. I feel bad for him. But a lovely fic and a good way to describe what happened.
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Nice story. Humphery sure is acting like a bastard....
Oh, and Marvark. Interns mouths are perminetly stiched. I read it in the book....
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But I'm not going from the book, am I? >.< I'm allowed to have a little imagination of my own, aren't I? I just thought it would make their lives simpler and easier, is all.
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Of corse you are! Iwas just saying...
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Well then
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