Spectral Orion

[super_slig]

This is just something that I came up with, and it will be a "forum exclusive". That means that only forum members are reading it. I have not even told my parents.

I trudged along with the rest of the troops. We (They, really) had been going from village to village, burning them to force the Mudokons out. They all had become just a little above animals in civility. Me? I was an outcast. Just because I happened to not get that "Y" chromosome. That's right, I'm female. I had contracted a fever on one of the trips, and I could barely hear the sound of my own pants. It was getting harder to see. Darkness engulfed me, and I accepted it, tired. I heard another Slig say, "But, boss. Marie passed out." I then heard a Glukkon's voice respond, "So, what? Females are weak, anyway." I heard no more. When I woke up, I found out that they had left me behind.

Oh, no. Writer's block. Brain dead. I'll think of more later.

[Sl'askia]

*knows the feeling*

Echa: females weak eh? I'll show that melon head who's weak! *clutches a fist*

chill Echa...no pounding on other peeps characters...

Echa: *grumbles*

anywho...great start, I hope your writers block passes soon. um..*looks around and whispers* if ya need to 'borrow' one of my bombs jus' let me know k?

[super_slig]

Okay, I think I've got something now.

I wandered around for a while, half dazed. I finally reached a river. My fever was so bad that it was like I was seeing things through gauze. I heard a voice to my left. Hungry enough to not care who it was, I approached it. I saw a white Gabbit in the distance. I ran over to him, hard as it was, and said, "Excuse me. Would you know where I could find food?" The Gabbit turned around, and I recoiled in fright. Its eyes were completely white, and the pupils were clouded over. I screamed and turned to run. In my feverish state, I couldn't see where I was going. I fell into the river. More blackness arose, and I was more than happy to welcome it. I woke up, coughing and sputtering. I heard a voice that sounded far away say, "I thought you would never wake up." Through blurry vision, I could make out the shape of a Mudokon.

Well, what do you think? This is my very first first-person story, so I want to know if I'm good at this.

[Cool Paramite]

Your story is good.

This is just something that I came up with, and it will be a "forum exclusive". That means that only forum members are reading it. I have not even told my parents.

MY stories are forum exclusive too. I don't want them to discover it! You will know what I mean in chaps coming soon. In my next fic, a slig queen will be the main! You got what that means?

[ September 29, 2001: Message edited by: Cool Paramite ]

[super_slig]

All right. Here's the next part.

"Wh-where am I?" I managed to get out. "You're in my hut," the Mudokon replied. That's when my vision cleared enough to see the Mudokon. He had golden skin. Imagine that! His wide, pink ponytail hung down to his ankles. He was wearing a white loincloth that had a few dirt stains. "My name is Orion," he said. "What's yours?" "Marie," I replied. "Well, Marie, I should assume that you are as much of an outcast as I am." As I looked at him, I could see that he was right. Afraid that I was staring too much, I glanced out the window. I saw something in the yard that was sticking out of the ground. It looked like a grave stone. Orion gently slipped his hand under my tentacles to move them into a bowl of water. I jerked back. Something about the feel of his hand wasn't right. Orion laughed, then said, "Okay, then I'll do this another way." He placed the bowl underneath my tentacles. He also served me some food. A few hours later, I was tired. He led me to a bed, and he must have thought I was asleep because he turned around abruptly, and his ponytail swished to the side. What it revealed drove me to fear beyond comprehension. In his back were three perfectly round bullet holes.

Well, I shouldn't spoil it just yet, so I'll write more later.

[DarkHoodness]

Hey, what a co-incidence. . . Blue, that female mud of mine in the RPG, has a brother called Orion.
Anyway, good fic.
- DH

[Danny]

my fics are forum-exclusive too, like most people's. i mean, we all have websites, but most of the readers read them on the forums [although i have sent a fic to AB to see if she wants it on OWweb, i think she's reading it first...]

[super_slig]

Okay, here's the last chapter. I hope you like it.

I fumbled for a knife that was on a table nearby. When I had finally grasped it, I plunged it into Orion's back. As if to confirm my thoughts, there wasn't a drop of blood; not even a stain. He turned around, and the expression on his face could only be described as evil. Summoning what must have been the last of my strength, I jumped up and bolted for the window. With much effort, I managed to climb out and run into a forest. The last thing I remembered was a tree that I didn't even know was there.

When I woke up, I saw a Glukkon staring down at me. His expression was much softer than the average Glukkon's. Then, I noticed that I could see clearly. As I leapt up, I realized that I felt strong. The Glukkon said, "Thank goodness, it worked." "What worked?" I asked. A Mudokon stepped up and explained, "You had a pretty bad fever, there. If we hadn't healed you with herbs, it probably would have been fatal." This came as a surprise to me. If I hadn't found out about Orion, then I would have died; all because the Glukkon leader didn't care and Orion probably didn't know. Then again, how much do ghosts know. That is, if Orion really was a ghost. The group continued to explain that they were an enviornmentalist team, and all the members had one thing in common: they were all outcasts. I joined them, not wishing to go back to the industries.

That's it. What do you think? Oh, and Echa? You have my full permission to beat up that Glukkon. Do whatever you want to him.

[Sl'askia]

really cool..that was quite a surprise ending...

Echa: *cracks knuckes* here..glukky glukky glukky....