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The Wrath of Roid

This is a bit of a violent story. It should be read by people with a strong stomach and a tolerence to swearing (Although there's only one swear-word). But this a fic I thought up because I found out that Munch was originally going to have a second personality because of all the experiments done to him. It's a bit of a bad fic really. Okay, here goes.



It had been several years since Latamire Munch’s adventure. He called it his ‘Odyssey’. But he was glad that it was finally over. It was just he and his children. His perfect life was completed with the occasional visit from his good friend (and Mudokun Saviour), Abe.

It was just a normal day for Munch and his children (Which were now about five years old in human years now). Munch loved it when his children raced around while swimming. His youngest daughter, Chu-Chu had gone on land to look for flowers to throw onto the water. He had warned her not to go too far away from the water. So he was sure that she would be all right. It wasn’t.

He surfaced just to look around. His eldest son, Sky had come with him. He heard a scream. He saw Chu-Chu hopping quicker than she ever had done before.
“Daddy!” She screamed, “Help! There’s Vykkers after me!”
“What do we do?!” Sky yelled, starting to panic, “This has never happened before”
”Leave it to me, Sky. Get your siblings and get them as far away from here as you can. I will find you after I’ve sorted out the problem”

Munch swam quickly to the shore. The vykkers saw him. One of them smiled wickedly.
“So here comes the Daddy” One laughed and showed a large injection filled with a brown liquid. He then held it up.
“Daddy! He’s gonna give me a needle! I dun wanna needle!” Chu-Chu sobbed, frightened. Another vykker grabbed the sobbing girl. He was smirking.
“It won’t hurt a bit, little gabbit,” he said, showing his sharp teeth. Munch was paralysed with fear.
“Come any closer, Daddy Boy and your little girl will get this needle,” The vykker holding on to Chu-Chu laughed. Chu-Chu shook, tears falling down her face.

Munch suddenly felt it. Pain. He screamed. He knew what was happening. He threw himself onto the ground as the feeling of burning started inside him.
“No!” He yelled at himself “Not you! I’ve kept you suppressed for all of these years, you’re not getting out!”
“Just relax, Latamire,” A different voice came from Munch’s mouth “I can make it all better”
“No, Roid! You’re not getting out!” Munch yelled.
“I’ve been kept in for too long…now it is time for you to switch off,” Roid commanded in his harsh voice. Munch’s eyes were glazed over for a few seconds. Before a transformation took place. Muscles formed on Munch’s body. Red markings glowed. Large claws formed onto Munch’s hands. Even larger teeth formed into Munch’s mouth. His eyes grew pale, pupils forming into vertical slits similar to a cat’s. The foot grew large and clawed. Munch was no longer Munch. He was Roid.

Roid stood there. The vykkers were laughed at him. Chu-Chu was standing there, staring at what her father had become.
“What are you?” She said to him.
“My name is Roid…and I’m going to help you” Roid smiled. He moved with speed. The vykkers realised that he was gone. They immediately tensed up. They liked it when they were in control of a situation.
“Where’d he go?” One murmured. “Where’s he go?!” He immediately felt a wet hand on his shoulder.
“Looking for me?” The harsh voice said. The vykker couldn’t say anymore. For with lightning speed, Roid had twisted its neck so far that its head and spine were ripped away from it. He then disappeared again.
“Oh shit! Maccus!” The vykker known as Scrab-Eye yelped as he looked at the headless corpse. Chu-Chu looked at the corpse, scared. This wasn’t her Dad. It was a monster. Scrab-Eye and the vykker known as Finger looked around. Finger didn’t let go of Chu-Chu. He wasn’t going to give up that easily.

Scrab-Eye felt a tapping on his left shoulder. He didn’t turn around.
“Turn around…now” There was something in Roid’s voice that forced him to obey. Scrab-Eye turned around, looking into Roid’s eyes. Roid was still holding Maccus’ spine in his hand. His spine was actually metal so it had an electric charge running through thanks to Roid’s sonar. Without warning, he shoved the electrified spine into Scrab-Eye’s chest, electrocuting him and burning him to death, also destroying the needle that he was holding.

As the charred corpse fell onto the floor, Roid stepped up to Finger.
“Let her go…and I will let you go” Roid said. Shaking, Finger released his grip on Chu-Chu. Chu-Chu hopped up to the water. Finger still stood there, frightened.
“Sorry…” Roid said suddenly “Your time to escape is up” With that, he pounced onto Finger and placed his mouth gently around Finger’s throat.
“Daddy…please let him go” Chu-Chu pitifully said “He’s sorry” Roid didn’t seem to hear her. He suddenly and forcefully ripped Finger’s windpipe out with his teeth.
“DADDY!! STOP!!” screamed Chu-Chu. Roid looked over at Chu-Chu. Chu-Chu gasped in fright and hid behind a rock.

After a few mutterings from Roid, Munch stood where Roid once was. Blood was still dripping from his mouth. He could hear Chu-Chu sobbing with fright. He hopped up to the rock. Chu-Chu tried to sidle away when she saw him. But he was faster than she was. He hugged her, tears dripping from his eyes.
“Chu-Chu, I’m so sorry” He said, “I’m really sorry” Chu-Chu was shaking. But she hugged back.
“Daddy, I dun like Roid…he’s mean” Chu-Chu sobbed.
“He’s not coming back. He’s not going to hurt you either. Never ever” Munch said.

“Munch” A familiar voice called. Abe stepped out of the bushes. He saw the corpses and yelped as he stepped in a pool of blood formed around Scrab-Eye.
“Oh no…” he muttered to himself. “I hope he didn’t…”
“I’m here, Abe” Munch said.
“It was Roid, wasn’t it?” Abe asked.
“Yes…I don’t know what happened, he got out…I couldn’t stop him” Munch murmured. Abe ripped off part of his loincloth and wiped Munch’s mouth.
“It’s not your fault. What matters is, is that none of your family was hurt. It’s worse to attack a friend in madness than in enemy in hate” Abe advised. Chu-Chu was still standing there.
“Mr Abe…” she said, “Will that Roid ever come back?” Abe knelt down so he was eye-level with her.
“He might” Abe said “But Roid is still Munch. And Munch would never hurt his family” Chu-Chu nodded. Abe ripped off another part of his loincloth and wiped her eyes. Chu-Chu nodded and went back into the water.
“Will she be alright?” Munch asked.
“She should be. Have you actually told any of your children about Roid?” Abe asked.
“Only five of my sons and three of my daughters” Munch nodded as he remembered.
“Tell all of your family” Abe said hurriedly “Tell them about Roid. It’s the only way they can also help keep him suppressed” Munch nodded.

The children took the fact that Munch had another personality well. But Munch and Abe still lived in fear. When would Roid next surface? And what would happen then?



Okay, hope you liked it. Although I like all reactions to fics (Apart from stuff like 'OMG, taht waz suxxors' and stuff like that). And frogive my spelling and grammar.

PS If the fic offended you, just tell me and I will remove it.
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05-28-2007, 09:43 AM
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More like: OMG TIHS WOZ SO AMAZING! That was incredible!
This is the best story of yours so far! It's so odd! Woohoo! Well done, you should be an author!
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05-28-2007, 04:20 PM
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I like this story of Munch's family! Why are so many people timid about putting their fics here and saying "I'll take it off" and stuff like that. I don't see it as that offensive. Good description of the killings anyway. The only criticism I have is I think the names of the vykkers are kind of weird. I couldn't see one being called Scrab Eye, because they don't associate themselves with the nature in Oddworld.
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wow, I like it...I skipped right to the action though...
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Keep it up this is getting good!!!!!
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Jordon-boi is your avatar kratos yay a kratos fan
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