Scourges journey

[sligco]

this story has a prequil but im working on that one so heres this one

Chapter 1 :day 1
Scourge walked out of the hut that him rebel acid and trey had made from lumber"what now"scrourge asked rebel "we find a way to survive whith out anyone else finding out that we're steefs"rebel said and walked over to there fire"how"acid asked"they found us out"scourge looked at him"we'll think aboute this later for now lets hunt"scourge said acid and trey nodded"im gunna stay here "rebel said laying down scourge trey and acid walked away"we'll hunt on the way to the ruins then on the way back"they hunted and got a few slegs and a paramite they soon arrived at the ruins of there old facility scourge found his steefs armor and his ancient steef blade he put his armor on and put his blade on his back then met trey and acid in the center of the ruins he stabbed his blade in the ground"now lets go hunt"scourge shouted acid looked at him"how didnt your blade break he said"ours are all broken""I guess im lucky huh"scourge said"ok than lets hunt"scourge said and whent out in the woods he found a scrab and stabbed it in the throte and picked it up he soon came to a baby sleg

ok thats chapter one the others are longer

[outlaw king]

Okay , there is one main thing here that needs to be taken care off and thats GRAMMAR . This story is very hard to follow ,the sentence " what now " scrourge asked rebel " We find a way to survive without anyone knowing were steefs"rebel said.

Try write like this : " What now? " Scrourge asked rebel . " We have to find a way to survive without anyone knowing we are steefs ! " . Rebel said .

Thats easier to read . Also , fix up on your spelling ( whats a throte? )

Just some friendly advice

OK