another chapter, please tell me what you like and what you think i need to fix.
Chapter 3: going haywire, but against who?
The mudokons were packing our bags, I would have stayed, but I continued to think, and wondered off. I heard voices coming from inside a hut and my name mentioned, I pretend to collapse on the hut. “Did you hear that?” said one voice, “probably just that lazy gluckon, and to think Abe is worried about him because he is rumoured to be mullocks son!” replied the other voice. “Didn’t he die anyway?” “Look, it doesn’t matter, that glockon is a softy, he can’t do anything to us and he’s no use to us anyway”. I stepped back and ran into bobby, who was stuffed into a small bag and placed on my back by a mudokon. “I’m not enjoying this!” shouted bobby from the bag, but was interrupted by the leader, “you’re ready! Now get out of our sights!” said the mudokon leader and 2 mudokons ran up and set our bags and pushed us off. “Good luck!” shouted the mudokons and I could hear the softest sound of cheering and clapping. I was encouraged as we walked onwards. Finally the noise from the village disappeared, or maybe they had lost interest, but I didn’t look back, I was already extremely exhausted as we approached a massive desert.
“this place reminds me of when I went with Abe searching for necrum”, Tam said, “why aren’t you still with him?” I asked “let’s not go into that” he said softly as bobby began to shout. “I’m getting sick of this bag, It’s embarrassing, I’d rather walk!” he moaned. But Tam replied shouting, “you get to be carried, and you’re complaining! “I don’t think my arms can take this wait!” I moaned, “Fine, come on you!” Tam said to bobby as he launched him onto his back. We continued to walk along and bobby would throw out bottles of tea and spooce, every time we became thirsty. after a couple of hours, I became stronger and faster, but I became more exhausted by the minute and finally collapsed, or that was what I was told when I woke up hanging on a twisted tree. Tam kept on moaning about having to drag me onwards. “We would quickly wither if we stay In this heat, quickly, lets move before morning!” he shouted and beckoned us onwards. It became pitch black and I grew tired but I continued to limp across the dry desert and towards another village. We didn’t really know where we were going, but everything seemed to be on the other side of the long desert and Abe seemed to have quickly gone through the desert and survived, he seemed to have faster speed than a steef or even a train! We finally reached land, I was so relieved! Tam then gave us a bottle of soul storm brew each. “Where’d you get this?” I asked, “I thought you didn’t use anything made by an industrialist, or at least your enemy!” I blurted out and was replied to by “we’’, it’s just to give you energy, just for moments like this” he said guiltily. We ventured a little bit onwards, I the shelter of some trees, and then took out some animal mats and went to sleep. Bobby took off his mat and lay on the layers of weeds and thorns in an effort to avoid the increasing amounts of flies.
I woke up in a paddock filled with moisture and sunlight; I was being dragged by Tam. He realised I was awake and shouted “look, mudokon activity is over there!” he shouted, I shuddered and yelled out as I saw a huge gluckon city ahead, it wasn’t a monstrous factory that destroyed environments and killed thousands, it was a place home to thousands! It was then I realised what the sunlight really was, beams of light from screaming alarms, fires and burning torches. Bobby screamed as we entered the city, chaos had formed and glockons and other industrialists were running everywhere. “what are you doin’?” yelled a slig, “ya tryn’ to be one o’ them crazies?!” yelled a gluckon from a window. A slig fell from a window above us onto the ground and started twitching. “we can’t help them now!” yelled Tam, “lets just get to Abe and stop this mess!” we began to move as fast as we could, passing whooshing bullets and arrows, spooce was flying everywhere, we followed the eager, cruel, running mudokons, often, when they saw us, stoped and got knocked out/ killed or ran away in a random direction, sometimes even laughing and becoming a sitting clakker. We moved faster and faster along the cobble-stone paths and barley missing crashing cement. “it’s him! It’s Abe!” Tam shouted as we appeared into a clearing, we had climbed more than half of the giant hill witch the city was built on, now we were in what looked like the main square, Abe was leading a crowd of mudarchers.
“Stop!” I shouted, and was joined in by bobby. “We can’t just stop and get hit!” Abe shouted, “Then exit this city!” I replied. “You betta’ leave my brothers alone you cruel mudokons!” bobby shouted. “I thought we told you to leave that slig at your little abandoned office!” a mudarcher next to Abe shouted. “only he’ll suffer from bringing him”, Abe said calmly, “what do you want anyway?!” Abe shouted, dodging a bullet shot by a charging big bro slig. “I want peace between all races of Oddworld, mudokons and gluckons at least, most of us aren’t doing anything bad at the moment, we just hate eache other!” I shouted, “I want no more deaths between us!” there was a pause, “you’re crazy said a vyker, eaves dropping from an above window, stated laughing, followed by a running screaming slig and then the mudarchers surrounding Abe, another vyker came out of another window and asked the vyker what happened, he too, started laughing. A mudarcher came back to earth of shot it out of the window and ran over towards it, poking him with his spooce bow. He was then shot repeatedly by the watching big bro slig. Before the mudarchers sprang into action, Abe ran towards us and shouted at the mudarchers to come too, we were then joined in by many other mudokons that started to appear. Then Abe spoke, “This is going to be hard, but if it helps the creatures of odd, I’ll help.” “I think you are all taking it just a little bit too far!” bobby said and I struggled to get away from my thoughts.
*edit* new chapter, this one's a little bit short.
Chapter 3: to the drawing board!
We ran towards a small house, and hijacked it. Inside was the vyker laughing at us earlier. “Oh my odd!” he shouted as mudokons pinned him to the ground. Then he started laughing. After a couple of seconds the house was filled with red light and alarms going off. Then I noticed a button on the small green walls, the only problem was that the button was vyker-shaped. “Push the button and we’ll spare you!” I shouted, the mudkons released his mouth so he could speak. “What button, oh the self-destruct button?” he said sarcasticly. “Just press it!” Abe shouted. “Why should I? Remember, no war, no harm to anyone?!” he shouted. “We could make an exception” bobby said back, stroking his tentacles. Then I saw mudokon pointing outside as bobby and Abe reasoned with the vyker. “Fine!” I heard the vyker say and then the alarms die down, but it was too late. Sligs were assembling outside the house, and mudokons trying to get in. “guard the house!” I shouted and Abe immediately started ordering mudokons to guard the possible entrances of the house, which was practically everywhere. Once we were ready, everyone not guarding stepped close together, and started to organise a plan.
We grabbed everything useful in the house that we could find, including the vyker, and formed a tight formation, using mirrors and paintings as shields and the rest of the items as weapons. Abe stood at the front, holding the vyker, bobby and I stayed in the middle, and the majority of the other mudokons were around us, guarding bobby and I. We went through the main door and marched down the street. The industrialists laughed at us. “We have a hostage!” the mudokons shouted. “Who cares?”, said a gluckon, “Yeah!” Said a slig and then the industrialists went crazy, firing at us. “NOW!” said Abe and mudokons appeared at the roofs of the houses, chanting. Then everything went wrong. The chanted industrialists started to kill each other and other industrialists. “Die!” shouted some mudokons and then I yelled. “You’re not supposed to kill them!” yelled Abe. But the chanting mudkons kept on killing, and then the big bro got possessed and started shooting the mudokons around me, then aimed for me. “DIE!” it said and I ran, followed by Abe. I diced to help bobby survive, if I couldn’t. I passed him to Tam, who wasn’t far behind Abe, and only a couple of stops behind me. Tam then started to run faster. “Slower!” bobby screamed, “You’re going to drop me!” then he looked behind me shoulder and then screamed, “Ok, faster!” soon Tam raced past me, and then Abe caught up with me, holding the vyker, who had now decided to help Abe run instead of being dragged along or trying to break free. As Abe passed me and turned around a corner, followed by a few other loyal mudokons, a gluckon stepped in front of me and yelled, “you’re doing great, all the industrialists have decided to have peace with those cool mudokons, who have also decided to have peace!” my happiness soon disappeared when the gluckon exploded, and I realised that the laughing mudokons on the rooftops, had just possessed him. Then I moved faster, but it was no use, I was too slow and tiered. I dodged the mudokons he had been shot off the rooftop and then made my way to the exit of the city, dodging bullets, then I slipped on the cobblestone path and collapsed, then I closed my eyes.
Apparently, the mudokons had carried me away, out of the city and into a nearby village, killing industrialists, dangerous wild life and mudokons who tried to kill me on the way. “where the hec am i?” I asked the mudokons around me. “Please”, said Abe, “Call us muds”. “You’re alive!” shouted Tam and some other….muds. “da boss is back!” yelled bobby exitedly. “So, what are we going to do now?” I asked, “We have to change the industrialists mind” Abe said, “we can’t just go perued them with violence”. “This could be difficult I addmited and then I started to slip back into my thoughts. I wanted the peace on oddworld but it looked like it was unicheivable. There didn’t even seem to be a way that the industrialists and mudokons in modus could create peace. “you’re forgetting about me!” said the vyker, “if you want peace, well, it’s possible, think about it. Why wouldn’t one of them big bros just take over a factory, why doesn’t a mug kill the little slig riding it, why don’t my brainy speacies just kill maggie or the interns just sluagter all of the vykers in vyker labs while they are doing operation?” “Because everyone has good inside their hearts, waiting to be unlocked?” replied Tam. “Sort of”, replied the vyker, “but if that was true i could just pop into some doc’s office and cut free the good in my heart. You see”, he continued, “we all want a good time, we all want to be happy, whatever way that is, but there are some things we cannot do and there are some ways to pursue people to do them. My point is that everyone will be on your side if it is in their benefit but true allies will only be on your side if its in your own benefit.” A one of the muds started crying. “Aw, that made my day, here have a wowey pop”, said the vyker, handing him a lollypop out of his apron. “What is this vyker going on about?” said a mud, “how do the “real allies” become an allie in the first place?” asked another. “Oh, I give up!” moaned the vyker, “don’t tell me I didn’t try!” he said and then collapsed on the ground. “We should teach those industrialists we have rights!” shouted some muds, “or we need them!” shouted some more. “we just have to find a way how” I said. “Maybe we should build a city?” bobby said. “Wait a minute!”, said Abe, “maybe the gluckon should persuade the industrialists to make peace!” I didn’t like the idea, I stood there and watched the clouds pass away, then new ones appeared, darker and bigger. Everone around me was organising the next journey and getting equipment, we just didn’t have a decent idea.
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Last edited by mudling; 04-10-2005 at 05:55 PM..
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