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This is my new FanFic

Beginning.

I was sitting in my cage, waiting for my Creator to see me. Until now, i only lived 4 hours, although it seemed like 4 years to me. At first, i thought it was kind of a person, to Create life, it was something beautyful. But I was soon about to descover the worst, thing ever.
My name is Chippi, and my Creators name is Krocher.
I had never seen my creator, and was so exited. Then it happened, there came 5 creatures. i wanted to see witch of them was my creator.
"Here it is! Your experiment, Sir" A creature said. It had 4 arms, a big head and strange legs. Those creatures would call them self Vykkers.
"It doesn't look like the others you created" Another vykker said.
"I know. I wanted this to be different. Just imagine this: A cute little creature with enormous powers! No one would thing it could do any harm, and thats why it would be easey for it to spy on our competitors, And kill undesirable persons" Another creature said. This one HAD to be my Creator. He didn't have arms, but he was higher than the other creatures. He had two shining eyes.
I crawled around in the cage to see them from diferent angels.
"What is this one called?" One of the vykkers asked.
"B01" My Creator answered.
B01?? What was that kind of a name? I didn't like it, it was just that i really felt that my name was Chippi.
"No. My name is Chippi" I said. But they didn't answer, they just looked at me.
"Hallo? Why don't you answer?" I asked.
Still no answer.
"What were those sounds Sir?" one of the vykkers asked.
"I don't know, its an animal. " My creator said.
"No! Don't you hear me??" I asked disperate.
But the vykkers and my Creator only looked at me.
"Are you shure that it doesn't try to say something?" A vykker asked.
"Very shure. I don't want a talking moron. I want it to obay, thats all" My Creator said.
Those word made my stomach to flip over. To obay him? That was all? was my life going to be as a servsnt or something like that?
My happyness desappeard. Of course i couldn't talk their language. Only my. Was i really only an experiment in their eyes?



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Chapter two: The training

The next day was a terrible day.
I woke up by hearing some terrible noises. I looked around, and saw, a green creature with mechanical pants(I think they were called Sligs) beating up a modukon(Or at least i think it was a modukon). I began laugh out load. I don’t know why, but i just seemed to be amused, watching the slig beating up the poor guy.
”SHUDDAP! Don’t cry like a coward” Yelled the slig to the modukon.
The modukon finally managed to get away from the slig. All became silence again.
After a while, one of those vykkers came. He had a bowl in his hand. I looked corious at him and the bowl. The vykker was now finding his key to the cage. A locked the door up, and to both his and my surprise, i let out a horrible snarl.
”How do you dare to enter MY territory” I shouted.
The vykker seemed to be scared, cous he ran away, screaming. But he left the door was open. I was now i n my cage, with the choise to leave or stay. And i cowardly choosed to stay. Why? I don’t know, maybe becous i was too scared of the outside. The only place i felt safe at that time, was in my cage.
5 other vykkers, and my Creator, came running.
”Did you leace the door open?” my Creator shouted angryly
”I-i... It-it .”.was the only words the vykker i scared of could say.
”Well, luckily for you, B01 hasn’t escaped.” My Creator said.
My Creator stared me in the eyes. Then i stared at his, tried to send a dangerous look. My Creator was the first that looked away, i smiled satisfactionly, I won.
”I want it trained, only to obay me” My creator said calmly.
I could just slap him right now. It was lucky for him that the door between he and me, was closed.

It’s wierd how those ”Inteligent” creatures think the same way. Just becouse you don’t speak their language, or body language. I use howls instead, like the most ”natural creatures”.

The training almost killed me. I had to make all kind of stuf like jumping over wall, run, climb on walls and learn how to use the spy equipment. They treaded me like a baby. They always had to say the same word twice or more. They pointed on the camera and said ”Camera” again and again. I just got so angry, that i teard a vykkers head of, but that wasn’t so clever. They tortured me for hours.
Since then, i promised myself to not obay Krocher. I don’t even want to know him as my Creator anymore.
”We have to” i heard someone say.
”I feel kinda bad about this. It seems to be so cute, and wants only freedom.” I heard another voice.
”We have to. Krocher gave me the order. He said that we had to kill it. It’s just too hard to control.” The firs voice said.


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08-28-2003, 08:00 PM
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I like it. Keep up the good work
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I like it very much, but I think you should check your spelling and things like that.
And what does Chippi look like?

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I allready made Chippi before i sarted to write this story.
He looks very cute, but the truth is that you don't want to insult it.
It may tear of your head.

I know they arent very good, but i shall try to make it better
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Sorry for waiting

Well, as i said in my first story, my word didn’t work, and i don’t dare to wright directly in the post. It happens that all my work disapears from time to time

Chapter 3

Escaping

”No i don’t believe you, Moby. Krocher wouldn’t be that stupid, he wouldn’t throw years of work out just becous it failed the first time.” The second voice said.
I saw saw the two Vykkers walking over to me. Moby sighed.
”Ok, i did not get orders, but seriously, you could be the next one without your head. Didn’t you see how he riiped that vykkers haed off?” He said
”We could be killed if we do this” the other vykker said.
”I know, but i have a plan.” Moby said.
”No i can’t let you do this, it’s just as much alive as we are. It’s not a doll you know. I think that it is why he is so wild, he doesn’t wan’t to be treated like a baby.” The first one said.
Fineally someone who understood me. It was like this vykker was not like the others. I could easily get out of my cage if i wanted, but i wante to see what would happen. To know this vykker a little more.
”I don’t care” Moby raised his gun and pointed it at me, ”Bye, Bye B01” he said.
But before. I realised it, the second vykker shot Moby.
”Oh my God! What did i just do...” He said.
”What about getting me out of here?” I said. But i knew he didn’t understand me.
”What?” The vykker asked.
Then i tryed to make my tongue, work as their, ironic that i didn’t know how.
”Wh-what?” I repeated. I sounded strange even to myself, but i think it worked, cuz he looked all strange at me.
”Did you just say something?” He asked surprized.
I nodded.
Then i tryed again, ”G-gat mih aut of hire” My accent wasn’t the best, but think that it’s amazing that i learned their language in some days. I smiled. The vykker looked more surprized, he could probarbly not believe his own ears. He took a key and opened up the cage.
”You’re free” He said.
I got outside and began to run away, but i stopped.
”Shouw mih tha wai” I said. I didn’t know the way out of there.
”Come with me” He said, ”You know that i’m riscing my life for this...”
He ran away, and i folowed him...



Well chapter stops here. I just wanna know, do you even LIKE this story, are you even reading it
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Yes, this story looks pretty good. It'll go places. I say, in my humble opinion, that it should be kept up.

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YEEPA! Yay, thanks for the reply, I'm still working on next chapter.
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Happy

Of course, of course, of course.

OK... I’m sorry for the waiting time, but i haven’t really had time for writing these days, you know, homeworks and school.

Chapter 4 Free


Whe got out without trouble. The sligs had a day-off and Krocher had trouble with the security cameras. Let’s just call it a lucky day.
I was glad for getting out, but i was scared. Scared of the new world...
We only started to talk to each other when we were about 10 miles away from the factory.
”So, now your far away from that cruel place, i must return” The vykker said. He never told me his name, and i never asked about it.
”return?” I asked, ”but why??”
”Every creature hates vykkers” the vykker replyed ”And my home is at the factory, thats where my friends are and all. I’ll just say that you kidnapped me” He smiled. I smiled too, a sad smile.
”Well, gutbai” I replyed, and turned my back and walked away without looking back.
While i walked i practised my language(The industrial language) and learned it very quick.
For hours i just walked a direction that i didn’t know where it leaded. Just away from my previous home. I suddently heard something that sounded like a howl, and guess what... It WAS a howl. A big furious scrab had just seen me. A fear ran through me very quickly, as the scrab attacked me. But i was strong. I took it’s mouth and held it tight.
”Let go off me” it howled.
I was so surprised, that i slipped it. It cautiously examined me.
”Strong he is” Howled the scrab.
I then felt something wierd. It was like i had this feeling to say something.
”What?” I howled back. Then i was really surprized.
I could talk scrab language, that was something i wouldn’t expect. The scrab looked just as surprized.
”it can can talk scrabish, does it understand too?” the crab hissed to itself.
”Who are you?” i howled.
”It asks me and i will answer” the scrab hissed. It was wierd the way the scrab talked, that was proberbly the way they did...
”It knows i am a scrab, my name is shhhshihshsii, i come from the Icku temple. Will it ask more, it doesn’t know much” It replyed.
”shhhshihshsii” on scrabish means Guardian.
”Will you attack me again” I asked Guardian.
”It it useless against such a powerful creature. What is it? Where does it come from? Why does it speak scrabish?” Guardian asked.
”I aaaam.... I don’t know what i am. But my name is Chippi, and i come from a factory... An evil glukkon created me. I wasn’t meant to be on this world” i answered sadly.
”It is a creature of Mother Nature. Every creature is meant for this world. Even Glukkons. It will understand, when it learns more. It will find it’s place in the nature. It must.” Guardian howled.
I looked at it. Speechless. I didn’t know that scrabs was like that at all.
”I don’t know where to go ar what to do. Help me to find my place” I hissed back.
”It has to follow it’s heart. All scrabs learn that. It has to go now. I cannot help it more.” Guardian Sayd and ran away fast.
I had to sit down. This was getting really wierd. It was just me, sitting here in this wierd world, without knowing what to do. ”Follow your heart” Guardian told me.
I looked at the horizont, and fell asleep after some time.

Like it??? Then stay tuned more will come...
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