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02-03-2004, 09:02 AM
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Chapter One

Archibald scuttled quickly along the smooth metallic floor, carrying a flat metal tray covered in an asortment of equipment in his two lower arms, whilst his upper arms flailed around expressing. Archibald was talking to himself again.
"I don't really want to do this!" his voice squealed out, echoing along the wall.
"It's tough now, you stupid boy. You've gotta do it! We have no choice!" came the same voice back.
At the end of the long corridor was a large door, high enough for 4 vykkers on top of each other, and as wide as two vykkers standing abreast.

"Dicky!" screeched Archibald.
"Shaddap!" he replied to himself, "Theres no one here and you know, lets get on."
"smartass" he muttered,
"What was that!" he said in his ever high pitched voice.
Archibald now stood in a large wide round room, the walls were padded and brown with large brown pipes running along them. At various points in the room there were large, clunky computer terminals with large smoking computers behind them.
Archibald scuttled up to one, kicked it with his forward right leg and tapped the screen with his top right hand.
"Nothing, you idiot. Let's get on."
Archibald tapped the screen two more times a bright green light appeared upon it. Once the computer introduction had finished, a wire frame green picture appeared showing an incredibly strange picture.
"Excellent!" cried Archibald. He tapped the screen a couple more time, huffed, then turned to the operating table in the middle of the room.

Quickly brushing off a rat which was nibbling on the first subject, he began to work.
"No, that doesn't go there you idiot,"
"Will you just shup up? Do I look as though I need your advise?"
"Of course you do, now watch, it goes like this!"
Patient number one quietly moaned in it's drugged sleep.
"Eww, you didn't need to do it like that, that's just digusting."
"Wheres Dicky? He needs to clean up this revolting mess, look, it got all over me."
"I know, I know.... DIIIIICKY!!" he screamed.
Minutes later the doors opened again. This time a young intern entered, his lips were messily stitched up and drops of blood kepy dripping from where the blood wouldn't clot in one of the holes.
"Clean up this revolting mess, Dicky."
Dicky said something inaudiable and then began to slowly clean away the blood and flesh that had caused the mess. Once he had done, Archibald moved back to subject one after studying the mian terminal once more.
"I told you it goes like this.... Get outta here, Dicky!"
Dicky left the room.
"OK, ok, you were right, so what? It's still gonna work."
"I know, I know" he replied once more as he rammed the scalpel in the soft elum tissue.
"Subject one is almost ready!" he cried jubilantly.

End of Chapter One

Can I have some feedback on this? I would like to continue with Chapter Two soon, so expect to see it once I know what somebody thinks.

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02-03-2004, 09:32 AM
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02-03-2004, 10:28 AM
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Me like.... More needed, I must also compliment you on your banner, t'is pretty.
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Chapter Two

Archibald sliced expertly into the soft tissue of the neck of the elum, carefully he removed skin, tendon, muscle, bone and finally the entire neck was severed, leaving only the elum brain attached the stumped body by a wind pipe and some veins and arteries.
"Careful, careful!" Archibald screeched
"I am! I am! If you would just stop shouting at me!"
As he said this, his hand slipped and sliced into the main arterty.
"Oh, poo! Now look what you've done you idiot.."
"Sorry, sorry, he said whilst trying to stop the constant flow of blood from where the long neck once was.
"Well, call for Dicky then."
No, you call for him. I did last time."
No, you didn't, I did!"
Archibald sighed, and then screamed; "DIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIICKY".
Three minutes later the clumsy intern shot through the door again, muscling a rat off his shoulder and too the floor. He hummed stupidly and then instantly began to stitch up the artery while Archibald moved over to the next table. This one held an elum.

"So, what exactly are we gonna start doing to this little fella, then?"
"Shaddap and move, first we'll need the main saw, we need to hack him apart at the pelvis."
"I know you idiot." He said as he grabbed the long serated saw from the blooded metal tray.
"Wait a minute.... will the mud blood and the elum blood? It may kill them both?"
"It's too late for that, you shoulda thought of it earlier, now, lets start a-hacking."
Arnitald lurched forwards, almost slipping on two of his legs, and as if he was fighting with himself, he slowly brought the large saw down on the soft mudokon blue skin. The mudokon's head was plumed with many feathers, his chest had three spiritual tatoos on and each of his hands held a tatoo. His eyes showed signs of once being stitched with Eye-stitch 3000, but they had been removed since, probably through burning. Or thats what Archibald made of it anyway. Archibald moved quicker on subject two, he didn't exactly have that long left to finish the experiment, and that caused a slight rush. The saw struck the flesh, ripped through it mercilessly while blood spluttered everywhere, soaking the soft operational bed with a sticky, smelling, bloody substance. An hour later, Archibald lost patience with himself again.
"No, you blasted idiot! Why the hell did you do that way, we'll be lucky not to rip through his kidney now."
"Why don't you just let me work. It's not my fault I make mistakes ya know, you're a lot to blame as well."
"Ok, I'll shut up, but make sure you get it right. Look, look at the computer screen, that shows us."
Grudgingly, Archibald scuttled towards the main computer terminal once more and looked at the picture of the half elum, half mudokon. It reminded him of a centaur from ancient myth, it had the elums legs, tail, body, and everything below the neck, and it had the mudokon shamans abdoman, torso, arms, neck and head. A magnificent creature.... apparently.
"OK, I've looked, now can I get back to my work now?"
"OK, go ahead." he replied to himself.
Whilst scuttling back he glanced at the smaller screens and noted that both creatures were still as healthy as ever, still breathing fine and pumping blood normally, despite their horrific operations. When back at the operating table, Archibald slowly cut through the rest of the flesh, and through the bone. Quickly stuffing each and every vein and artery with cotton wool, he began to put the two pieces together, beginning by placing the tables closer together.
He pushed them until the mudokons table banged into the elums, and then he lay in such as position as so they could just be sticthed together, but first came the msot important part.
Slowly, he unblocked artery and vein after artery and vein and connected them together in such a way as so the creature worked perfectly, with two hearts - one elum one near the legs, and one mudokon one near the neck.
"Brilliant!" he cried to himself.
The next part including fixating bones togther so they would grow into one another, but jointed in such a way so it felt like a normal spine to the mud, and then he bagn stitching furiously into the flesh and skin with the brand new Supa-StitchX. This type of thread slowly disappeared into the skin and kept flesh together through every type of torment. As he did this, he carefully glued parts of elum to mudokon, until it looked like he had smoothly created a mergence from elum brown fur to mudokon blue flesh.
"Now, what do we do?"
"Now we wait and see, we keep him behind bars at first, to see how his brain works... and then..."
"We'll see.."
"Exactly!" he squeuled as he pushed the table through the doors and onto into the cage room, when a bunch of fuzzles were furiously squeeking.
"Shup up!" he shouted.
"Who me?" he said to himself.
"No, the fuzzles"
"oh... yeah, shut up you idiots!!"
The fuzzles slowly quitened down as they watched the mulum get casually tipped into a large cage.
"Perfect!" he said. "Let's get some food."
Archibald scuttled off down the corridor to the eating quarters, leaving the mulum in the animal storage section.

End of Chapter 2
hmm, a bit of a weaker chapter, they get better soon.

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