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04-06-2004, 04:35 AM
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Couldn't be bothered to name the story as I have no idea what I'm going to do with it. All 1st person though^^

It must have been a friday night, alone in the apartment, watching some god awful soap opera on the TV when Jack came over, he was a nice guy, but he just couldn't help getting himself into trouble. So he turns up in my apartment, wanting a favour. He wanted someone 'Investiagted' now, this isn't investigation as in snooping around someones week old crap in their garbage, this is cold threatening and interegation.

Jack gave me a name, Nick O. He was a small time crime boss, got big dreams, but a small brain. Apparently Jack owed a greater power a favour, and they wanted him out of the city. Now Jack is a tough lad, been through alot, but threatening mob bosses just wasn't his stuff.

Easy job I thought, so after Jack left I pulled out my weapons case, I through the cigerette butt I was smoking out of the window and chose my weapons. A combat knife, just incase, and my usual pick, a modern 9mm Beretta, nice gun, but just doesn't match up to my other gun, a custom made revolver, quite old. I found my long coat and hat and went out to one of my informants, he'd tell me where to find Nick O.

The informant was helpful gave me an address, and even what room he'd be in. Hawthorn Hotel, rooms 1a through to 12b. I walked into the hotel and immediatly spotted which people there were the thugs in disguise, there was one waiting by the phones, just standing there playing with a cigerette, He'd be the first one to go as he had a distinct bulge under his jacket, the other two were sitting behind the desks. I walked up to the phone behind the goon and drew my pistols. I fired a shot through the wall of the phone booth, with the revolver, sealing the goon's fate, I then stepped out and shot the other two guards with a shot each, one from each gun. The bystanders started fleeing after the first shot.
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04-06-2004, 06:49 AM
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I reloaded my guns and slipped them back into my jacket. I started to walk down the corridor, a group of thugs pushed past me, shotguns at the ready. One called back to me, asking if I saw who did it, "No, I just got here, there was this short guy with dark hair running away from here though" He nodded and the group ran outside.

I walked up to a room with two guards outside. "Nick in?" I asked the one on the right. He asked my name and details, I told him that I was Lars Gravesend, an old rival of mine, if the details got out, he'd take the rap. I was told to go in, there was a short fat man with a cigar sitting behind a desk, in the corner stood a guard leaning out the window, with a shotgun beside him. another guard stood on his right, with a loaded magnum.

Nick asked why I'd come to see him, and I bullshitted some story about being after a favour. I asked him to get a trusted group of men to deliver a message. He asked what he'd get in return, I opened my jacket to reveal my guns, making the guards leap to attention, and grab a hold of their guns. "Relax" I told them, "I persuade people" He accept the offer. I scribbled the note "Jack, nearly there" I told the guard to deliver it to my apartment, if there was no answer,just wait for someone to go in there. The guard grabbed one of the guards from outside and set off.

So then it was just me, Nick, one guard inside, and one outside. I told Nicky that I'd be right back, I stepped outside and lit up a cigerette. I offered one to the guard by the door. He took the cigerette and then I offered the lighter with my left hand, when he lent in to light up I swiftly knocked him out with a blow to the back of the head. I tossed the body into a store cupboard. I then walked back into Nick's office, guns out. I cuaght them both by suprise. I kept the revolver trained on Nick, and the Beretta on the guard. "Ok, Nick and I are going to have a chat now... I wouldn't try anything either of you, wait I'd better make sure of that." I shot the guard's leg, sending him to the floor, I shot him again in the back.

Nick asked what I wanted, I told him. Him out of town, or him in a bodbag, either'd suit me. I kept my revolver pointed at him, while I walked backwards, locked the door and then walked up to Nick. I put my Beretta away and drew my knife. I slipped it around his neck."If you're not gone by dusk tommorow, I'll finish the job, understand?" He nodded. "And if anyone asks why you're leaving, you'll say that you needed some room to spread your wings, see?" He nodded again. I opened his draw, took the pistol from it, pocketed it, and then threw the wounded guards shotgun out the window. There was a knock at the door. The messenger was back. There was no other choice, I went back to Nick and put my gun to his head.
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04-06-2004, 07:17 AM
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Thats very well written! kudos!
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04-07-2004, 02:09 AM
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I used Nick as a hostage to escape, yeah I know it was a cheap trick, but it was either that or end up wrapped in a carpet and thrown off a bridge. Anyway, Nick left town, out of my story for a while. So about a week later I was chatting with Jack down the local, over a Jack and Coke, and then this goon appears in the door, he's carrying a pair of double barrelled shotguns, he looks around for a second and he spots Jack , He rasied his gun, and I push Jack to the floor. He fired the contents of one shotgun at us, missing by an inch. He then drops the shotgun, and aims his other gun. Before he got a chance to do anything else, I sent a bullet on a visit to the back of his skull, he fell backwards instantly, crashing to the floor.

Jack then turns to me, "Agh Shit" So I tell him to leave town, He gives me the keys to his place. "Stay there, take care of anyone who visits" So I ask him about payment. "Screw it, the apartment's yours, as is everything there. I'll be back in about 2 months, I need you to take out the guys who are after me, and the guys who issued the orders." I nodded. He then grabbed his coat and ran to his car waiting outside.

How I accepted I don't know, but I guess I thought it'd be good to clear up the city.
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04-08-2004, 06:31 AM
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So I went to his flat, well my flat, I poured myself a strong whisky and then re-arranged the place, I stuck the sofa so it was facing the door, so I couldn't be surprised, I Set up the TV infront of the sofa. I searched the kitchen and knocked myself up a meal. I sat infront of the TV watching some awful detective movie. I layed my beretta on the table and I then drew my revolver, I started to clean it and and polish it I looked along the sight of the gun, just as the door opened...
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04-08-2004, 09:57 AM
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I couldn't believe my eyes when she walked in, about 5 foot 2, short haired brunette. I raised the revolver so that the barrel was aimed no where near her. "Jack! Jack! Are you in!" she yelled. She turned to see me, with a gun drawn. She screamed repeatedly. After half a minute, seeing I wasn't moving she calmed down. She asked what the fuck I was doing. I explained it all. She wasn't happy. Jack had promised her she could crash here for a while.

Well I had no objection. So she went into the bedroom and unpacked her stuff. She asked if I minded having to sleep on the sofa. I didn't care, the sofa was far more comfy than anything I had at my pad. Evening fell. I watching an awful repeat of some soap opera. Then night came, I'd had a bit to drink, so I collapsed onto the sofa, into a deep sleep, at about 10 o'clock.

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It was about 3 in the morning when I woke up, whole place was dark, except for a crack of light being let in by the open door. Someone new was in here. I picked up my berreta and slipped a silencer on it. I saw a glint of light in the corner, heading towards the bedroom. I stood up and raised my beretta at the moving light. "Freeze Bitch!" I yelled. The light stopped, turned towards me, I suddenly fell into unconciousness.
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