Bob The Mudokkon

dark_xinos · #1 02-24-2002, 12:18 PM

This is my first story, so PLEASE reply and tell me what you think...
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Joe was a Mudokkon, that lived in a medium sized village, right outside of the Necrum Forest. One day while he was woundering around in the forest, he saw two unarmed sligs putting up a sign saying: "Necrum Mines: The perfect place to be if ya need a job". Joe dident really care much for sligs, but went up to ask about the sign. Joe already new about it, sence they started to build a train rail that lead to "how knows what". "So, whats there ti mine" Joe asked as the sligs turned to look at him." "A special ingredience in our new brew." One of the sligs replied. Joe was woundering why the rail went through the old berrial grounds. But he dident think much more about that. Joe also dident have anything to do anymore, so he did a quick desition to go home and ask his mum if he was alowed to work there. His mum said "why not?" And a week later Joe went to the Mines and quite quickly got a badge, and was half rudly sent in with a hatchet...

More comming soon...

dark_xinos · #2 02-24-2002, 01:18 PM

... A slig lead him down to where he was to be. He got a spot by a wall and the slig told him to start digging. "For what?" Joe asked. The slig grinned, "for bones... he he." And the slig left. "BONES?!" But i thought we where supost to dig for a special ingredia... oh no!" The door was locked. A nother Mud came over to him and said that it is a trick. "A trick?" Joe asked, "Ive been here for three days, and they wont let me go home... they wont even give me money for this." The mud said "Something tells me that i shouldent have acsepted this job..." The mud agreed. "Im Joe" Joe said. "Im Cloach" Cloach replied. I wanna get outof here!- he cuntinued... "Lets go" Joe said. They ran down a hall and through a oval door. On the other side of the door, there was a minecart rail. And a slig with a shotgun told em to freeze. "this is it" Joe thought. "You there" the slig said to Cloach. "Start scrubbing the track!", Cloach did as he was told sence he wasent going to do a muteny against a armed slig. "You with the hatched!" He continued... " You follow me...

Cool Paramite · #3 02-24-2002, 04:41 PM

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAARGH! HIDE THIS BEFORE ODDBODD FINDS THIS OUT! CHANGE HIS NAME! QUIKLY!

(Bob the mudokon is one of ODDBODD's characters.)

The story is pretty good.

dark_xinos · #4 02-24-2002, 06:01 PM

Oh thanks... I dident know... By the way... eh... lets just say i "typed whrong" while i meant to say Joe... he he.

Molluck · #5 02-25-2002, 01:43 PM

Lucky....otherwise ODDBODD would of ripped off your head and drunk out ya brains!!!

(did that make any
sense?) Oh and the story is fine so don't mind me carry on.....

Al the Vykker · #6 02-25-2002, 07:09 PM

Great Story so far!

mitsur · #7 02-25-2002, 10:43 PM

The title says Bob the mudokon but the charicter is Joe

*thinks about it*

dark_xinos · #8 02-26-2002, 12:00 PM

Thanks guys!

The slig led him down the track. After a short while the slig stopped at a voicelock. "i have to do something!". Joe thougt.
When the door opend Joe was shuved in a smal room with a rock wall, and spraypainted text saying: Tunnel 3. The door slammed shut after him and the slig yelled at him to start working. After about 5 minuts joe noticed a quite thick vent in the sealing. He reached up with his hatchet and hocked it on the bars on the vent. Then he pulled him self up and jerkt at it until the bars fel outof place. A electrick cord, was hanging down. Luckely there was rubber serounding it. Joe started to climb. He was to afraid to kill the slig, becuas he wasent that desperate yet. He manegded to find a nother vent, so he started to crawl trough. Then he cam to a new set of bars right infront of him. There was a ledge right under. After the ledge there was a 300 meter deep valley. On the other side he could se a slig leading a group of muds to ther work spot. There was a nother slig under him. He took a quick desition and kicked the bars. And squezed out and landed on the slig. Joe picked up the slig and tossed him down the cliff. And started for a door about 50 meters away...

dark_xinos · #9 02-27-2002, 01:07 PM

"get em" Joe could here a slig say behind him. And then the massive barking of hungry slogs. Joe dove into the door, and came out, only finding that the slogs had gained distance on him. "there, a leadge!" he thought. He hoisted up just in time for the slogs to miss his feet. Joe lay there panting... "what a nightmare". Joe found a note, saying when the mine opend... He looked at the date, and figuerd that that was about 2 weeks ago. He hadent been in the forest enough lately, so he dident know about it sence yesterday. He could heare a train not to far away. Joe started at that direction. After a while he stoped in a shadow. In front of him was a "Train Inspector glukkon" (TIG). The TIG was cursing at the slig that had been in respons to ceep the train safe. "I found a hole in the was" said the Glukk. "Im sorry sir... But we dident lose that many bones" said the scared slig. "You're fired!" Yelled the glukk. Then the TIG turned at Joe and came closer. Joe shiverd. But the GLukk just went past him.

(please tell me what you think guys!)

MunchOnThis · #10 02-27-2002, 01:13 PM

I think your story is great dark_xinos!!!

dark_xinos · #11 02-28-2002, 09:44 AM

Joe was just about to sneak aboard the train, when it started to move. It was going faster, and Joe ran biside it. But couldent see a way to get in. Then he noticed the hole that the bones had fallen out of. He grabbed it and was hanging on. He also noticed a ledge to put his feet on. The train was going quite fast now. "Uh-oh" he said. He saw a smal plattfor with a slig on it. He was going to collide... "Bang!" Joe fell onto the plattform, but the slig flew away from the impact. The slig screemed al the way down. Joe was crying. He wanted out.

dark_xinos · #12 03-02-2002, 06:51 AM

Then he heard the alarm go. Joe was very worried. "No im done for". he thought. He went to the only door that lead of the plattform. Luckely it was open. On the other side was a M.O.M news screen. Joe put his hand on the sencer and it turned on. The intro music played and a slig started to talk: "A guard has reporded chanting in the south part of Necrum Mines." The sene changed and there was a slig standing with a mikcrophone near his face. "There was this blue guy! He just came in and chanted. My freind got possed." "What did you do" asked a reporter slig. "I shot him. Then I ran and pressed the alarm". Then the show was directed to the slig on the spinning plattform. "We suspect that it could be the mudokkon terorist that destryed Rupture Farms. His is Abe. Were giving out a 10 000 Oddworldian reword, bring him in dead or alive". Joe had heard of Abe. "What if abe destoys these mines just like he did with Rupture Farms"?

Silversnow · #13 03-02-2002, 08:46 AM

Really cool, not too new idea, but still a really sweet story. They shoot at each other, how adorable...

dark_xinos · #14 03-09-2002, 08:15 AM

He wonderd of. While walking, he saw a mine on the floor. It blinked red and green. "what kind of mine is this...its spinns around like a blender!" He took his hachet and hacked out a few smal stones in the wall. He took one and backed up. He through it ant the mine and it blew up. He fell over. Then a flying slig came a flying. "FREEZE!"

paramiteabe · #15 03-12-2002, 11:00 AM

Great story I like it. It reminds me something like the holacaust. Like a sad story. keep up the good work.

dark_xinos · #16 03-12-2002, 03:57 PM

"Now im done for!!" Joe thought, while the flying slig flew towards him... Joe just managed to role to the side, avoiding the sligs propeller. "Shmo!" The slig grunted. Then Joe heard a sound... A weird mistical sound... The slig shouted help and flew around in panic. Then a beam of whiteish, blue bubble thingies came a flying towards the slig. Then the slig laughed. And the white bubbles reapeard as he started to spin. SPLAT! The slig exploded. Joe ran to a shadow. and a mudokon lumped down from a ledge. "Hello" the misticle mudokon asked... "eh, hi" he replyed... "follow me" he said. "Eh, ok..." They walked a bit. Then Joe said: "whait a sec". "Yeah?"... "Where are we going?". "The mud laughed. "Im Abe". Joe was filled with thoughts..."So you are going to rescue me?" Joe asked... "I will try said" Abe. They continued to walk. Then Joe asked a simple dum question, and Abe turned his head to awnser (still walking) and just was going to reply and he triped on a sleeping slog on a very hi ledge... And Abe fell over the slog, and also down the cliff. The slog woke up and growled at Joe. Joe kicked the slog, so it flew down. "Great!" he thought... Now what?

dark_xinos · #17 03-23-2002, 12:27 PM

"Poor Abe!" Joe thought. He layed down on the ledge and looked down. There was a ledge under him! He cdroped down and he was facing a electric wall... Luckely there was a lever, wich he pulled and it turned off. He walk in and noticed he steped on a button on the floor, and the electrick wall powerd up again. He tryed stepping a few more times but it wouldent dissapear. So, he did what he could and that was to walk down the corridor wich he had endid up in. There was a sleeping slig wothout pants on the floor, and a voice lock in front of him. The voicelock was controlling the door beside it. Joe picked up the slig and it screemed. "Shutup or I will through you into the electric wall back there" Joe yelled at the Slig. The Slig shuttid up. Then he told the Slig to work the Voicelock... and after a while he did. When the Slig had done the little Voice thing Joe carried him to the Elecrick wall and through him in anyway. Then he ran back past the open door and found himself in a room with another mudokon, who was scrubbing the floor looking very depressed...

dark_xinos · #18 03-25-2002, 03:56 AM

Joe was standing in a shadow for the moment, when noticed what this room was. "The Boiler" he read on a sign. He grinned, then he thaught of Abe, and everybody else. "I cant save them" he thaught. The he noticed a digital sign. And on the sign where sets of numbers...
"Slaves: 75
Excapes: 73
Dead Slaves: 0"

He looked at the scrub, and he said quietly to himself... just us two left... And then, the Alarm whent back on and Joe heard a slig screen freeze, and exploding bombs...

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That was short but i gotta go to school now...*hurries*

MunchOnThis · #19 03-25-2002, 01:45 PM

I love your story!!!!!!!!
Carry on pwetty please???????????!!!

dark_xinos · #20 03-25-2002, 05:41 PM

Finaly! I was getting worried... *harkles throught*....

Joe stod up, looking towards the direction of the mayhem. Then he saw Abe jump down and hide in a shodaw. Shortly followed by the flying slig, wich flew over to where Joe was, stoped, turned, and whent back. Then Abe came running up to us, and he looked at me and lifted his chin to say hi.

Then he said:
"You two!" The other Mudokon stood up and said hi, in a sad voice. Then the Slig came back, and Abe jerked bothe Joe and the other Mudokon into the shadow.
"Im gonna pull the final wheel and then this place will blow!" Abe whisperd to Joe.
"Got an excape plan??" Joe replyed in panic.
"Yes, where taking the emergensy exit over there"... And he pointed.
"Hay, cheer up! Where getting outa here!" Joe said to the sad Mudokon. The Mudokon looked a little happier and agreed to help.
"Ok." Abe said... " You guys open the Emergensy Exit, and il turn the final wheel.
"Agreed!"

They ran to there positions and did what they needed to do... Soon the Slig came back [again] and started to chase them to the Exit.
Joe turned his head, seeing how the slig got hit by a falling boulder from the destroction of the mines.

Then came the open hole in the wall and they jumped. Notecing that they just lept from a about 50 meter high tower, and where plunging very fast into the forest was terrafing to them (ofcourse)...
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Tune in next time and see the exiting conclution! Whill Joe, Abe and misterirous Mudokon survive?
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MunchOnThis · #21 03-25-2002, 05:44 PM

I love suspence dark_xinos!!! Can't wait for more of the story!!!
*grins broadly*

mitsur · #22 03-26-2002, 12:54 AM

Hurray!Great Story!Reply or I will kill you!

dark_xinos · #23 03-27-2002, 02:52 AM

Abe whissled down and landed on a big tusk. "hmmm*groan*hmm" mummerd Abe.

The other two whent right past Abe and broke through a series of branches, slowing them down but still wipping them...

*Thud*

They laid on the grown groaning in pain, when Abe crashed down over them. Luckely he only landed on Joes foot, but nothing more.
"ouch!" Joe moned at Abe. The Mudokon that they dident have time to speak to yet was standing up, looking into the forest wich glowed wounderful orange way in the sun. Then he turned and said: "Thanks guys! But i really need to get back to my famaly..." and he started to run into the woods, but stumbeld, and screemed at his injured leg. "Comon, lets help him!" Said Abe.
"There is a sacred location where he can be heeld" Joe said, looking back towards the burning mines.

"Ok, lets go!" And they picked up the mud and carried him off.

"Whats you're name?" Joe asked.
"Its... Ben." He replyed.

"Okey then. Ben, you're going to be fine" They told him and carried him of towards and past the mines.

MunchOnThis · #24 03-28-2002, 12:36 PM

It's a great story dark_xinos!

dark_xinos · #25 04-05-2002, 04:49 AM

Anyway...

They where walkin for about 30 minuets, and they reached a wierd place. Wooden bamboo-like spikes where sticking out from the ground and some of them had brewbottles stuck on the tops.
"Okey, down the ledge through the bushes" said Joe.
"What?! Thats suecide!!" Ben yelled at them.
"No, its a secret heeling place!" Joe replyed to him.

They hosted down, carfully not hurting Ben, and stood in the entrence of a dark cave.
"Common!" Abe said. And they went into the darkness. Soon they came into a ring of torches, where a mudokon stood.

He was wearing a neckless ov claws and a smal round blueish- green-red mask over his face. He turned and said.

"Hello".

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Umm... thats it for now...ok?

dark_xinos · #26 04-13-2002, 06:30 PM

Hi! Abe said, as they carried Ben onto a big round rock table wich was coverd with ancient magic mudokon simbols.

"Ah, thus has a cracked leg! Dont worry my fellow mudokon. Well have you back on your legs in a snap!"
Ben, growned in pain when he thought of what the Heeler had said.

Then the Heeler started to chant and Abe and Joe backed of a bit.
The Heeler starded to glow, and a yellow light burst from his body and head blinding all of them, and Ben screemed in pain, but then he stoped. Sat up. And looked at his leg, feeling it and serching for tender spots. But he could find nothing. He moved his foot around in circles. He stood up, yet now expresion on his face. Then he took a step. And a nother. Then a smile, slowly came to his face. He loked up at them and said:

"You know. For all theese years my back has been hurting. but know. My back has stoped hurting.
And now. I can reviset my famely"

As if he dident care about his leg, he was so happy that he couldent do anything but smile. A "thank you" wouldent have been enough for what the heeler had done.

"Now I must get home and see my wife and kids." And he hurried out of the cave.

dark_xinos · #27 04-21-2002, 06:27 AM

Abe and Joe left the cafe after talking with the healer.

The walked and they walked, they saw the Scrab and Paramite statues at the entrence to there Modoomo & Mudenche voults
(misspelled), and Abe told Joe that he needed to get a heeling ring to save some friends back in the ruins of Necrum mines.
"Ok", Joe said. "Whell im going now... good bye!" Abe said as he jumped into all whell.

THen Joe noticed how exteemly hungry he was. He looked despreatly around for food. After a few minutes he found a berry bush. Wich he quickly eat all the barries from. He started to feel tierd, and with berrymuch all over his face, he fell asleep.

Next morning he wolk up finding a fuzzle licking the berrymush from his face. The fuzzle hoped up with fright when Joe wolk up, and scurried off. "Hay, come back!" Joe called in the direction the fuzzle left of. The sun blased hot that morning, and Joe figured it was around twelve aclock. Then he starded moving towards his home. After a very long walk he saw his village. He burst into ar a run...

Then he saw that the village was empty. And a few sligs where in walking around. But far in the herison, Joe could see a large number of Mudokons being led by sligs, out into the dessert.

Joe snuck into his house finding the funeture having bullet holes, and the table was bloken.
Then he herd a sligsvoice behind him say.
"Hay Flink! Theres a scrub here!"
Joe turned and saw that the slig was poining his gun at him. And a nother slig came running. "You thought you could escape huh? Whell, you are going to SoulStorm Brewery aswell!!"

MunchOnThis · #28 04-21-2002, 07:23 AM

I love your story!!! See I told you I still read it!Keep up the good work. I'm still currently working on my fan fic Special please read if you wish.

•[cyrus]• · #29 04-21-2002, 10:21 AM

I really like this fic! Keep writin more! I love it... I love it! But because I havn't Been here too read it, this took me a WHILE to finish up to yur last post.

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