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.: The Chroddicles - Morbodd :.

Hello readers. Welcome to the Chroddicles, as series of intriguing tales, awful uprisings and...brutal ballads. The first story, simply titled Morbodd, follows the life of an employee way out in the fringes of Paramonia, he must re-learn how to survive as a crack down leader straight from the Magog Cartel gains control of the facility. Friends will burn, enemies will collide and all will unfold below.

Ok so I was going to wait till I'd written a few more chapters but never mind, here we go:

MORBODD, Introduction

The chronicler flexed his cramped fingers and completed the script with careful scrutiny. The evident majesty of the terminating circles and detailed characters never failed to please the lawyer. The calligraphy of the eastern mudosian language was a vast and legendary set off ancient letters that looked quite out of place in the modern industrial world. The writing had been unchanged since well before the Age of Alchemy that had driven the glukkons into the dark confines of their factories, not even they could annihilate the ancient style, though they were never quite satisfied with its continued existance. In one final scratch, the quill fell dry and the creature of law cursed and rolled his tired, bloodshot eyes. His inkpots were empty and he so hated switching to those new biro pens, blasphemies against the art of writing that plagued every office supply store in the cities. Their clumsy points were no match for the broad quill that compiled such beautiful work so effortlesly across the paper. In fairness, one had to commend the industrious benefactors of the biro pen for they made writing in high eastern mudosian quite impossible but were adequate for the new industrial Magog Speak, a bastard hybrid of previous styles amalgamated into one monotonous, dull monstrosity. No doubt a secretive attempt to further indoctrinate the idol masses while at the same time making the native way of life harder.
In earlier times, one could simply walk a short distance to the local writing craft shop and purchase a new quill and inkpot for less than 200 moolah. More expensive than the biro pen but nevertheless, a worthwhile endeavour. But now, one had to travel into the bush and try to find a town still reeling from the industrial age before all the old ways dried up. The chronicler sighed and completed the text in biro, it was just thirty characters extra but the whole document had been ruined. He would have to type the blasted thing out. He kicked his chair back from his dimly lit desk and searched for his typewriter. The chronicler worked in a quiet, dingy office room with little natural light. The metal walls rose up around him in a circle and the floor was punctuated only with grey filing cabinets and two wooden tables, one covered in tattered scrolls and the other, at the moment far cleaner than its partner, bore a single flickering candle and a now unmoving quill pen. The tyewriter was dusty and cold, its bakelite structure made a hulking shadow from the candle and much to the chronicler's disgust, quickly made four small dents in the old pine table with its legs. Much like everything else dedicated to the industrial prestige, the chronicler hated it. Of course it was an instrument of writing, precise and neat but it was unnecesarily bulky and one had to take a course in mapping ones way across its type pad. Of course, it was not a mudosian variant, those great beasts were enormous and only contained a small fraction of the total characters in the alphabet. The magog speak typewriter had 26 simple letters and a number of punctuation marks. The law creature settled back down into his chair with a thud and sank into its comfortable leather cushion. The grim room almost buzzed electrically as the chronicler flexed his wrists and began to type his thoughts out. No matter what instrument he used to write a letter, there was little more satisfying in life than finalising a document. He began in an exclamative mood but tore the sheet up and brought his draft to the front, he didn't want to start again and besides, what he had was perfect for the uncanny and interesting case he had been assigned to, his letter read as follows,
To the delegate guard of jail-00213,
I am writing to inform you that convict 1322041 is to stand trial for his supposed crime, he will no longer be executed as was the courts original ruling. It is quite uncommon for a mudokon to stand a trial for a work related incident but it has come to my attention that this subject has sufficient evidence to suggest his actions were justifiable and that his persecution, at the least, should be minimized massively if not revoked entirely.
If you fail to heed this document, you yourself will find that soon you will be sent to Skillya under report of failure to conduct yourself to the law of common order for Mudos. Please see attached documents 4412 and 691 for more information.

Yours sincerely,
Solicitor E.J. Ghine. Study Superior for Mackinson and Sons seperate law firm.


The short letter was perhaps not quite as good as the chronicler had envisioned but he turned it over in his mind and concluded that it would suffice since the delegate guard would most likely be barely able to read, words such as 'justifiable' rarely came into a sligs conversation, the stupid beasts had a basic set of comments which delved about as deep as 'freeze' in syllabic content, either that or those horrific noises that signalled some sort of joy, the chronicler had noted such noises upon visits to work stations with slig guardians, they were a disgusting, cricket like noise that the glukkons should have stopped. Of course stamping out all native ritual was first priority.
Ghine looked at the document, nodded to himself and slipped the paper into his briefcase before locking it carefully and placing it by his door. He couldn't face the long walk to his lodgings and he had slept in his office before so he dragged himself to the clock, scrunched his eyes up and checked the time, he couldn't quite make out the numbers but it was certainly late so he grabbed a half empty soulstorm bottle from the foot of his desk and glugged it down noisily before slumping in his seat. as he dozed in and out of conciousness he regailed on his case. How had the mudokon made such an endeavour, surely it must have taken no end of cunning, intellect and deceit? Ghine had to meet him in person.
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Reminds me of that post-apocalyptic thing I wrote.

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I'll read it if you edit that font to the normal one. I can't stand that other font.
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Nope, that's the font I wrote it in and that's how I like it, you don't have to read it. ;|
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What Dynamithix said. Can't stand fucking serifs.
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O_O Tis my favourite font. Anyway, I'll maybe revert the font next chapter...if you'll be so king as to give me some feed back on this.
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If you make no effort to make text readable to your readers, then don't expect them to want to read your stuff. Easy as that. Usability is very important on the web.


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Chapter I

"Well, what do you think?" Asked a pale face mudokon, brimming with excitement.
The other mudokon looked over the popper with cold, calculating eyes, he tossed the carbine in his hands, looked down the barrel and squeezed the trigger, well, some slig was now missing a weapon and the Magog Mudokon Front had another one. He breathed heavily and rested the gun against the wall. It gleamed against the dull flashing platform lights but the weapon was poorly maintained and the mudokon new just from sight it would be too risky to use in a battle. It would only make for spare parts.
"All right, four hundred, no, two hundred food stamps or sixty luxury stamps, its up to you, the gun's ok but it's condition is crap, I'll have to fix the bloody chamber before I can even take it apart," He smiled but the tone of his voice was agitated.
"Just four hundred? I was told you'd get me enough to get by Morbodd, this is bulshla. Right, well," the pale faced mudokon sighed thoughfully, "I'll take the luxury items, I need a lung buster bad and I might try to put some on the employee stock markets."
"Waste,"
"Yeh well, what do you know Morbodd?"
"A lot."
Morbodd heaved the rifle over his shoulder and brandished sixty small purple stamps with the letter 'L' written on them in bold, red font, the approval chip was good and the pale face mudokon nodded at their legality after a short inspection.
"Well, I'm off, gotta get back to work, no doubt I'll get another beating but if that new slig does it, I'll push him into a grinder, bloody newbs, don't know their place...I been here six years-"
Morbodd growled and closed his dormitory door behind the mudokon rudely, he hated early morning calls and the product of the conversation was nowhere worth the sacrifice of an extra cycle of sleep. He was slowly getting more and more tired. He had entered his twelfth year of work now and life was dull and muck.
It was a grim morning, he looked through his curtains and the barred window outside into the forest. The oil facility was complete now and the fumes billowed out of the smoke stack already choking the once beautiful Paramonian atmosphere. It was a crude building, it looked like an enormous slanted iron tower. At least six hundred feet high, probably higher, and fat at the base, with each story getting thinner. It was so sharply out of place in the natural forests that it was a shocking contrast. Morbodd had watched the place build up, he had worked on the machinery, he had built up the second level, he had fixed the elevators, and now, he was bored. He had been transferred here from Rupture Farms 728 on his fourth birthday shortly after maturity, it was a dim recollection of grainy memories but it was sufficient enough to force the Mudokon onwards in life. Perhaps he'd get lucky and get moved again. Then again, Odd, in all her wisdom, was quite happy to allow her children to stagnate in Glukkon facilities, why would he get out? He didn't even want freedom. He just wanted change.
He thought about the ancient stories that sometimes circulated the building, stories of heroes, mythological god beasts with ruinous powers invested in Mother Odd herself. In all honesty he didn't want any saviour, some single mudokon rampaging through the facility, blowing everything up and making those that didn't escape, redundant or worse, dead. The stories of the Great Oddysee and the Great Exoddus were always going to pass around, even the Scrabanian Stockades had some twisted form of the parable to share. The story of great hero Abraham, saviour of the opressed mudokon, desrtroyer of the glukkon cartel. Well, it had been fifty years since he first destroyed Rupture Farms and what good did it do? Temporarily shutting down the factory, stunning Molluck. The stockyards, he should have set the creatures free or something. Not 99 wretched mudokons. And what was the problem with sligs? Morbodd had worked almost all his working life and he had made some good friends, sligs, even slogs. Of course social standing dictated the sligs would never descend into the ranks of the unwashed masses but nevertheless, you could tell a friend was a slig when it didn't beat you for being ten minutes late. And if you could catch the odd word with them, it all helped to strengthen a relationship that could be life saving in a dangerous situation. Of course the paramonian sligs were never intelligent, you have two types, those who blunder around stupidly, enforcing strict laws, shooting any worker who runs and generally blithering their way into a short life. Or you get the marginally more brainy creatures. These sligs go on to live long and prosper. They are cold and calculating in their jobs but still lack the brain power required for extended conversation. There was a fascinating account of a slig under the name of Fillin who around thirty years ago had killed a mudokon and went on to find the ancient slig temple, of course this was obviously legend, but it was just another story that circulated through the depths of the forests.
"1544, you up?" The sudden voice from behind the cell door startled Morbodd and threw his contemplation out the window were his dreams followed quick suite.
"Yeh I'm up sir, just getting my loincloth on," In panic, Morbodd flung the gun into the shadowy corner behind his bed, he should have taken in apart, some sligs didn't even know what a deconstructed rifle looked like.
"Piss off 1544, I'm coming in, I'm your fucking resident guard, fucking telling me not to come in, stupid mudokon," The slig's voice trailed off into grumbling.
Morbodd hated the slig, he wasn't a friend, one of the more intelligent sligs around, an efficient worker who had more powers than the pumped up big brother sligs that wandered the more high security pathways. The slig barged in almost immediateley and eyed the mudokon suspiciously, not because of the gun but because he hated all mudokons.
"What 'ave you been upto little mudokon?" He asked, shining his custom blitzpacker against the light.
"I been sleeping Resident Commander, what have you been doing?"
The slig growled and hurled Morbodd across the room with a swing of his weapon. He crashed against the wall and rolled his head.
"Don't ever fucking speak to me like that again," he turned to leave but stopped and grinned under his grisly tentacles, "You don't want to know what I've been doing but I'll give you a clue, Accident 23412 was no weapon malfunction, you'll here about it in Sligs Weird no doubt, like fucking cleansing it was." He slammed the door behind him and Morbodd could here him barking down the corridor, no doubt an attempt at laughter.
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.: Chapter II :.

Dull pounding on the central gates awoke the sleepy slig guard. He slipped and crashed in a heap off the back of his chair. The slamming did not stop and the slig groaned and clasped his head. He had no doubt overdone it on the alochol rations last night. He checked the CCTV outside, it was another slig, funny looking, with a custom mask. *fucking hell, shut up,* He flipped a catch and opened the doors but also secretly summoned two big brothers just in case there was trouble.
The slig marched in through the long entrance corridor and stood in the rig lobby. It's head was down at the floor and it wore a sort of shawl. The security slig noted two holstered blitzpacker pistols inside it's belt, just poking through the covering and a long carbine rifle packed onto his back, nestled in between two shoulder packs.
After a minute of silence, it looked up and cocked its head at the security slig who silently hoped the big bro's would hurry the hell up and get over here now.
"Who are you? I need ident," the slig began but the creature before him simply held up his ID card and then withdrew it into one of his pockets.
"Listen, I'm gonna have to take...you back outside...if you don't...speak up,"
The newcomer flipped a catch on his custom mask and a funny clicking began to sound, his eye visors glazed over from red to black and a whirring noise took over and sounded quietly from his mouth piece, "I am Unit 19, albino subject eight. I am your new guardian superior and have been directed across the whole of Paramonia to bring up productivity in this new facility."
"But...we've only be working for...four months," the security guard exclaimed.
"Yes, I was told to come over here after the first month, it took me three months to get here."
"What, did you walk or something?" The security slig laughed at his joke but the albino slig simply stared grudgingly at him.
"Yes, I did. I started from the Slig Barracks but received a free lance job, something important, got paid handsome and then walked here."
The slig's jaw dropped, "But your legs, they would have seized up surely?"
"I am an elite ranger, all my gear is custom made, custom spec and has been bought for fair sums of moolah, all worth it though. I am the best fighter in Mudos."
"Oh yeah?" A deep voice came from the gloom of the internal factory doors. It was security. One of the big bro's stepped forward and another followed suit, each one carried super blitzedge knives but one of the two also carried a heavy snuzi.
"Are you causing trouble for security bitch?" Asked one who had a remarkably extensive vocabulary.
"Yes," the slig began sarcastically, "Yes, I'm causing trouble, look at all the dead bodies lying around, look at this guard pissing himself over he- oh, you haven't have you?"
"Right, get out of here freak, you should have died back in the birthing complex. Fucking mutant."
Unit 19 albino subject 8 suddenly went rigid, his eyebrows stiffened and he retracted his visors to reveal scarred small eyes.
"Do you know how I survived in a birthing complex in the slig barracks?"
The two big brothers stared at each other and then looked back at the albino, perplexed.
"I spent five months hiding, eating slurgs from under a sewer grate while repetetive searches were made to find me and kill me, I killed a slig without pants, I stole his weapon and pants and began a nine month slaughter of two hundred of the three hundred sligs in my block. I broke into the resident glukkon executive of the slig barracks room and shot him in the legs, he requested to be saved and I allowed him to live, in return, I was allowed to live, and fight and hunt. I spent two years in death watch and then the last three in a rogue faction known as the Elite Ranger 200. Now I'm here, and for fuck sake. You think I'm a mutant? Look at you, you were scrawnier than this stupid fucker at some point till you got your greasy fingers on 'roids," The slig smiled and pointed at the security slig who stared angrily into space.
"Fuck...you," shouted one of the big bro's and in a remarkably underthought move, he fired a salvo of poorly guided shots at Unit 19 who smiled and lunged behind the security sligs desk.
Shots ricocheted off the wood but it wouldn't be long before the big bro's simply tore through the place with bullets or knives. Unit 19 leapt into the air and darted forward in one fluid motion, the sligs bullets missed their target and Unit 19 kept running until he was adjacent to both enemies. He gripped his pistols and slung them into the air before leaping up and bringing them crashing down on the beasts' heads. They sunk down into heaps and Unit 19 smiled before firing two shots off, one into each sligs skull.
"Springs, springs in my legs, I can sprint and jump, not like you lumbering bastards," and with that he fired off another shot at the security slig, the bullet hit its mechanical legs and brought it crashing down into the floor, it sobbed like a child and Unit 19 turned away in disgust.
"I have a meeting with the Jr. Executives, they won't be happy about your trivial attempt to finish off their most expensive asset, well, perhaps, if you'd been successful." He laughed and wandered into the gloom of the drilling room.
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Morbodd looked up, there was a grim, putrid smell eminating from an extractor fan above him, fleech nest. He swerved sideways and caught his breath. He could hear them snoring, bastards, nevertheless, their casualties would take on the forms of lazy sligs not mudokons and while Morbodd knew some sligs that he would rather protect from death by sand paper tongue, it was them or him, and sligs, are a hated species.
He moved on and made out to be doing work until the slig patrols had passed then, he checked both sides of the corridor and slipped behind some piping where he waited for a rush of steam before crawling backwards on all fours, he felt for a ledge with his callused feet and then fell three yards down, he landed with a thud and was in the boiler sanctum. He was late, late for a very important meeting. Six angry pairs of eyes stared at the new figure with folded arms, sighing in dull montone, in key to the steam rushes.
"Idiot. Late, as always, Morbodd you better have an excuse,"
"Fleech nest, you lot probably are perceptible enough to have seen it...well I can only presume seeing as the council is one down."
The council talked amongst themselves and then focused back to Morbodd.
"So, what do you have? Anything new?"
"Yes, weapons, well, a weapon...parts...I stripped it for parts, no ammo though, could fix up that old snuzi we have I suppose." He sighed, why was he so good with weaponry?
In all his life Morbodd had never fired a weapon yet he could strip a gun in minutes, help the rebellion with detailed reports on the ability of a specific weapon, what he could do was endless in posibility but what he allowed himself to do was limited. As far as he was concerned, he was a double agent. Sort of. He made sure that despite the number of keen young mudokons ready to get massacred by tactical slig teams, there was never any physical action. Sure, maybe the odd worker would attack a renegade guard but this was never a crime commited by Uprising.
"Morbodd, we're thinking of raiding Slig Quarters 32 tonight, you have to be out by the first cycle so that we can go by the cover of darkness." Shit.

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The squad looked around hastily, some had clubs, the leaders carried poppers and Morbodd, a finely tuned Magnum with a custom built silencer, all the power without the overwhelming explosivity of the sound. No muzzle flash either-
"Focus Morbodd!" Hissed 24, the chief mudokon, an old fellow who had been transfered from a micro-brewery as retirement after twenty five years of perfect service to the Magog Cartel.
"No you focus you old bag, check it," Morbodd smacked his compatriot a little too hard with the stock of his pistol, the mudokon nearly choked and would have punched the agressor right in the kaw had it not been for what Morbodd was pointing at. A slig, on guard.
"Let's take him," spoke 47 gleefully.
47 was the youngest mudokon in the team and had not yet grown into the dull machination that was scrub adulthood. His time would come but for now he was imbued with an anatagonising vitality and bounce that the squad could ill afford, how he would make it even to teenage years was a mystery.
Morbodd almost swallowed his tongue as the mudokon tensed to charge, "No, look, spring loaded carbine, primitive but loud as fuck, and he has his finger on the trigger, muscle twitch could set the thing off, have the whole force on us in a minute flat!" 47 calmed himself and grunted with irrefutable proof that he was an inexperienced fool. Again.
"Schmuck," muttered 24, cuffing 47 over the back of his skull with a callused hand.
"Terra." The group turned to look at Morbodd who was squinting at the guard, "Terra, that't Terra, we can't kill him, he's a pretty ok guard, let me off the hook for being late, even filed a witness report proving I wasn't at a slig shoot up three years ago."
"We have to," 24 placed his paw on his friends shoulder who turned around shocked,
"No, fucking hell we don't!" Morbodd stood up and walked off, "I'll not be a part of this, he's a good guy,"
"Fuck, come back Morbodd, shit!" Was all the group could muster as their compatriot faded into the gloom, the last thing he heard before he turned a corner was the quiet yet audiable sound of a silenced rifle firing off and then the clank of metal legs collapsing, grating along the floor, why hadn't he made a big thing out of that? He could have ended the damn rebellion there and then, all about personal interest, a tear rolled down his cheek.
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It's a good story! A bit heavy on the cursing, but good nontheless. 50 years since RuptureFarms and SoulStorm Brewery, 23 years since "Abe's Expoddition"!
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Which was Abe's Expoddtion, one of yours? I forget.
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