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Chapter 1 - A stranger awakes







Everything was still black.
Where...am I?, she thought confused, ...why am I here?
Everything around her was so dark. She still didn't come to.
I must... awake... I have... I have to know where I am!
She heard some voices around her. She wasn't alone. If she only would come so...
"Who is she?", somebody asked.
"Where does she come from?", an other one asked.
"What is she at all?", yet another asked in bewilderment, "Such a person I never saw before!"
C'mon!, the stranger thought, wake up already!
She struggles through her unconsciousness untill she could open her eyes.

























She jumped up immediately.
"Who are you?", the scared stranger asked hastily.
Instinctively, her claws shoot out of her finger tips. She felt an enigmatical pain in her head. But the stranger took no notice of it. She was too terrified of these strange guys in front of her. These fish-like creatures shied away from her very scared of her quick reaction. They was as afraid as she.
"Who... who are you actually?", one of them wanted to know and stepped forward to her, "We're grubbs."
The claws pulled back slowly.
"I... I am...", the stranger answered unsurely but she got in a pondering silence.
She didn't have an idea. There wasn't some memories. Nothing. She only was here.
"I... uhm...", she tried to answer again but it still happened nothing.
She could not remember anymore.
"It seems that she really has fallen on her head...!", a grubb whispered to an other.
The stranger turned around to him: "What did you say?"
"You have drank off the cliff and landed here a little while ago."
"Really?"
"You don't know this?"
"No."
"Not at all?"
"No!"
The grubb marveled: "You really don't remember?"
"It is like I said!"
The fish-like creature and the other ones did show puzzled faces.
"You can not bring something to mind?", the grubb in front of her asked again.
The stranger shaked her head: "There's nothing I remember."
But yes! Right now!
A little memory almost like a forget dream hovered through her thoughts:

Jennadelle... Jennadelle...

"My name is...Jennadelle.", the stranger said lowly,"And I guess that's all I still know."
"Well, you still know who you are anyway. It could get worse!", the grubb said.
He eased up a bit. Now he turned around and looked after a cliff which was sizeable. He looked very long. Then he turned to Jennadelle and looked in her eyes with an astonished face.
"Actually, it really could get worse. That's for sure. I think your lucky to survive your fall!"
"Hmm...", Jennadelle said thoughtfully and scratched the back of her head. There she still felt a stabbing pain. Maybe these fish-like people were right. Maybe she was effectively felt.
Well, that doesn't help her with it...!
"Where am I?", Jennadelle asked the grubbs.
"You landed in our little village,... Je-Jennadelle.", a grubb of the group asked her.
"And where is that about?"
"It's right next to the Mongo River. Well... or what is left."
An other grubb seemed to get angry: "Oh, yeah! And how! If only that Sekto never did come! How good could we all live!"
"Wait a moment!", Jennadelle cutted in on him with a gesture, "Who is Sekto?"
First there was a dead silence. But then the fish-like creatures whispered to themself immediately:
"She doesn't know him?"
"She seems to mean business..."
"Yes she does."
"Like I said: she has fallen on her head."
The whole thing was a source of some embarrassment to Jennadelle. She just felt like a dork. But there was an other thing to worry about.
While the grubbs were talking to each other, Jennadelle had a look at the cliff which she was drank. It was really high indeed. There were even some birds which flew around the tip. The grubb was right.
She could be dead.
"Sekto is the bastard which stole our water and killed our guards for some paper!", a grubb announced finally, "And above all, he gives his wolvarks some moolah for this reason they kill anybody of us which tries to free the river from his damn."
Jennadelle looked at the grubb and didn't know what she should say now.
A little moment there was an embarrassing silence.
"It seems that you also don't know what a wolvark is, do you?"
Jennadelle shaked her head. She wanted eagerly to be somewhere else. Anything was still too strange. Too ominous.
"The poor girl...", a female grubb sighed, "She doesn't remind of anything indeed."
And the female grubb came closer to her.
"How can we help you?", she asked and wanted to rest her hand on Jennadelle's shoulder. But Jennadelle waved aside. She didn't like to be touched by strangers.
Even she didn't know why.
"Where can I find the next town?", Jennadelle asked.
The female grubb showed with her scaly fore-finger in an eastward direction right to the orange sunrise.
"You have to go through the woods there. After that, you come to a town full of clakkerz."
The female grubb winked at Jennadelle: "You'll recognize the clakkerz if you see them. But be warned. They don't like strangers very much. You should not approach them if you don't want to get troubles."
"...okay.", Jennadelle said, "I'll take care."
But then there was a worrying thought: What if she had a bad reputation? What if she was an... outlaw? Maybe she was wanted!
She had to take care indeed. She wasn't very well versed in this world... and in herself.
"Well, we hope for you that you can remind of anything soon.", a grubb wished friendly.
But Jennadelle left already.
The group of grubbs looked at her till she was outside the range of vision. Then they held down their jobs. But some of them still did stay.
"A poor girl indeed...!"
"Who is she? Maybe she's an endangered species like we are."
"Don't be that pessimistic. Someday there will be justice! We all will survive! Down with Sekto! Down with Sekto!"
"C'mon, we better do our jobs...! I think something's getting in my net over there."
"A fish? Could it be with all this low water here?"
"I guess so. But it's only a little, thin one."
"But I'm so hungry!"
"We're all hungry. But that's life. We only can wait and see. Hoping for a wonder..."
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So this is my fan fiction. If you see some mistakes in writting then pm me immediately! I only have one week to edit it...!
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Cool
You are very creative...But I'm not too good in English and I didn't find any mistakes
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Awesome story! Your occasional lack of knowledge in English gives the story a bunch o' charm, I like it.

Although 'quaffed' means 'drank'... so I don't know how someone can quaff off a cliff.
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Thank you for the comments


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Although 'quaffed' means 'drank'... so I don't know how someone can quaff off a cliff.
Okay, I edited it.
I think it's the only mistake I did... or are there some more?
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Wow. Nice, SM. Can't wait fer more.
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Hm, very interesting. You have made the point clear that Jennedalle is a girl without a past and doesn't now anything about where she is. I like it. Though, I would like a describation of what Jenndalle looks like. Or is she the same one from War of Arts?
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It's the very same.
This strikes an inspiration of a fan-fic for E'l Swift-O...
I've been waiting for this fic to come, and it has!
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Wow . I never thought that there are so many guys which read my story
Thank you.

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Though, I would like a describation of what Jenndalle looks like. Or is she the same one from War of Arts?
Yes, she is. Here is a picture.
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you wrote grupp once. but other than that it was awesome I loved it!!!!!!!!!!!
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Jennadelle stood in the woods now. Here it was a likable calm and the air was sweet with different odors from different plants... which were strangers. The ground was a bit uneven and the odd trees had big roots which sidled to anywhere. They also did above the ground. You had climp on them.
Jennadelle went some steps till she heard something abruptly.
There seemed to be somebody... yes there was! She saw a shadow disappeared! Immediately she hidded behind one of these odd trees and watched for possible dangers.
The hat wearing, big shadow which Jennadelle saw ran straight out the forest. He seemed to be in a hurry. It took Jennadelle's breath away. Hopefully, he didn't see her.
Then, right now, she slipped off the slippery root she stood before. It happened so fast and surprisedly that Jennadelle could not abide by anything and fell. Fell deep. From her tree it got precipitous downhill.
Bumm.
She fell hard on her stomach. Seconds later soils and leaves dropped on her.
"Ouch...", Jennadelle groaned under pain and shaked her head to get off the mud. As if her head didn't experience enough...
Short something growled loud. An animal or something. Right previous to Jennadelle.
"What the...?", she aked herself and lifted her head to see what it was.




















Five bad looking, snarling, little creatures with brown fur layed in front of Jennadelle's face. Their carnassials, which they showed Jennadelle snarling, were as big as their whole bodies.
And they were pissed off.
"Wow!", Jennadelle shouted scared and and jumped up a tree immediately.
And how she did! She could jump and climb like a cat.
Memories appeared at this moment. Jennadelle reminded of dark times when she jumped around, ran and climbed. She always was better and faster than the others.
But which others? She didn't remember anymore...
Well, on the tree she was safe for the moment. Jennadelle climbed higher and watched the strange creatures which presumably lacerate her if she didn't seek shelter. These animals still rested in the place they stood before. Jennadelle's heart was in her mouth by the scariness... while she heard abruptly a shot in the distance!
Birds flapped away from their hides loudly while the brown creatures began to growl and to spit. But they didn't flee. No, they stayed. Jennadelle wondered about this. She climbed a bit higher and felt that there was danger coming.
She heard a second shot. Then another one. And it became louder! Somebody came closer. And directly to her direction!
Jennadelle minimized between the branches as good she could.
Short after that she could hear wild stamping and scroop.
Jennadelle watched carefully under herself and then she finally saw who it was.
The hat wearing shadow which one she saw before was here again. He ran along her tree. Now, Jennadelle could see him much better.
He was a bearded guy with a sun-blessed cowboy hat, a lion-like face with shining green eyes, big leather botts, pale-brown pants with two belted bags on both sides and a loophole brown poncho. Furthermore he was hunted by a disgruntled guy. Jennadelle had a look at the pretty big, fat person behind him. His face beared a likeness to an ugly sort of frog. He also weared a hat, a too small shirt with dark pants and there were some cartridge on his outsized belt. And he carried again a big gun.
So Jennadelle didn't understand why the lion-head which was hunted did grin like this!
She was interested to watch this scene.
The frog-guy tried either to shot his prey or to beat him with the rifle over and over again. But the poncho wearing man, which ran on all fours like an animal, avoided the frog-guy all the time and the space between them always got shorter and longer. It almost seemed that the grinning lion-head willfully let him came closer sometimes. But why?



Jennadelle saw how the lion-like man his haunter induced straight to the place where the brown carnassials-animals stayed. Here he really could wait for his haunter for some seconds without the beasts did attack him. Although they standed right close to him...!
These five predators just growled low but stayed on the ground.
Finally, the frog-like guy came closer to the lion-head very fast and strucke out his big riffle to beat him a last time. But the lion guy avoided again with a jump and the gun landed with a such hard rumbling on the ground that all trees quacked for a little moment. Jennadelle had to grab hold of her tree. That guy was really strong!
But it became worst for him now.
First he tried to lift his rifle out the ground to continue with hunting the lion-like man.
But his gun was pinned. It didn't move a bit.
The frog-guy primarily pulled two times very strong but he still didn't get it out.
Only now, when his rifle pulled the other way back in one fell swoop, he confusedly watched at the end of his gun out for the reason.
And he scared terribly!
The little predators became deeply absorbed in the muzzle and looked at him with evil eyes.
"Oh! No!!", the frog face shouted but right in this moment he got attacked by these little beasts.
Bellowing with pain, the frog-like man made desperate efforts to get them off him. He fidgeted and galumphed till the ground abruptly began to crack. Surprisedly, the frog face looked at the ground under his feet. Even the beasts did. But it was too late to flee. The ground, which was primed with limbs, broke in like a trap and the frog-head fell screaming in a precipitous tunnel between plants and roots.
Something was clear. That all had to be planned before. And Jennadelle did know who was considered. She had again a look at the cowboy-hat wearing bearded man which standed at the end of the tunnel. He hold a sort of a crossbow ready. It was a strange fold-out and retractable one which was belted on his right arm. The lion-face opened his crossbow with a "clack-click-clack-clack-click"-like sound. But in place of some arrows or something he really charged... with a little animal!
Jennadelle looked closer. A spider?
The fat frog-like man sleded out the tunnel very fast. So the lion-head shoted his live ammo and hit him in his fly. The angry spider wraped the frog-like guy with its net up immediately and was done right before he finally fell on the ground. Now, the frog guy was riveted on the net. He lost his hat and his rifle while he was fell and they landed in front of his face now.
Jennadelle, which saw the whole scene with her own eyes, was lost for words.
What was this for a strange man with the crossbow? Shoting live ammo and running on all four?
Jennadelle climbed soundlessly to the next limbs to see better. And to draw near the events. She had to exercise caution.
Now, she mustn't get spotted! Maybe that was her death. It was the best not to tangle with him for sure. Just beeing soundless.
She watched how the man with the crossbow did a great jump and landed on his feet next to the captive haunter. All creatures which ones attacked the frog-guy took fly when the haunter was landed on the hard ground.
Now the two men were alone. A procumbent frog-face and a strange lion-head standing in front of him, baling the fists, watching at him threateningly.
"You jerk! You broke my favorite rifle!", the frog face inveighed.
The lion head put the big gun next to him in his paws. He eyed it skeptically. Then he hold the gun under his nose and sniffed the malodor of
sulfur and gunpowder. This stink let his shoulders cringe.
"Never liked guns...!", he just said.
Crack!
The rifle fell with a rattling sound in two pieces on the ground.
The frog face had a sad look at his broken favorite rifle.
"Oh, man!", he moaned, "what do you have to do now...?"
While the captured haunter did say this, the lion-like man took a piece of paper and had a look at it. Jennadelle saw it. It was a wanted poster with a picture of the frog man and bounty.
Now it was clear.
This man was a bounty hunter!
The outlaw still grawled about his bad luck but tried anyway to loom large. The bounty hunter grinned again.









clack-click-clack-clack-click


















"No, no! No! No! Look!", the outlaw pleaded hastily while the crossbow aimed at him, "Don't do it! Please! Nooooo!"

Boom!

This time it was a hard stone which hit the head of this outlaw very neatly. The frog guy passed out immediately.
Jennadelle watched this attentively. She saw how the bounty hunter closed his crossbow and put some sort of a can out his poncho.
He came closer the lying outlaw and hold the green shining opening in his direction.
Now the can began to soak up air.
And it did really hard!
It was so hard that this odd can even made it to soak up the big, fat guy too. He seemed to shrink en route to the can to take a seat there finally...
What the hell was this for a can? And who was this bounty hunter?
The cover of the can closed with a "plopp" and the bounty hunter put it back in his poncho.
Right in this moment cracked a little limb which one Jennadelle hold with her paw before. She could redress the balance but any moment was dangerous now... she was not soundless.
Jennadelle climbed quickly on the back side of the tree to be not spotted. It just took about two seconds and she was not louder than a squirrel.

clack-click-clack-clack-click

Jennadelle took her breath away.
It seemed the bounty hunter noticed that he wasn't alone...
This moment took awful long. Jennadelle still sat on the back side of the tree and listened to every sound she could hear. She knew that the bounty hunter with his unlocked crossbow still had to stand on the other side and watched out for strangers.
Go away!, Jennadelle thought, It was just a little, stray squirrel! Nothing else!
Nothing happened. But Jennadelle didn't want to had a look at the other side of the tree. So she listened attentively.
The bearded man still stayed very long just for a little, stray squirrel indeed. Jennadelle only could hope that the lion face didn't want to look the stranger up.
Then she heard steps... and felt how she turned pale.
Please not in her direction! Please don't! Go away!
But the steps became quiet...
Jennadelle waited till she didn't hear his steps anymore. And she breathed a sigh of relief. He was finally gone. Slowly, Jennadelle climbed down the tree. The last meters she dumped and landed soundless on all four. Then she stood up and knocked off the mud from her clothes. Thereby, she noticed that she had a belted bag around her side.
Sure, she forgot it.
Jennadelle also didn't remind what she put in there. So she had a look at this thing. Her fingers felt around for something long, metallike.
Finally, she saw that she hold a harmonica in her paw.
There appeared some memories again. Jennadelle didn't had any melody in mind but she perceive clearly to play. But first she looked around if she really was alone. It would be too bad to betray herself now. But the only things she heard was the rustling of the limbs and leaves of the trees in the wind. Sometimes there sang a lonely bird. But else, Jennadelle was alone.
A bit unsurely she put her little, silver musical instrument on her lips and blew gently in one of these innumerable holes. It sounded a little soft tone which gave Jennadelle's forgotten memories more food.
Wait... first I need to blow this hole... then this..., Jennadelle remembered more and more, And now this one. Right. Now this one here...
An unknown but familiar melody which she had in mind, Jennadelle played the first time. Or didn't she?
Mysterious memories... many persons... horned ones... ones with claws... who were they?
Loud screeching birds flew away and Jennadelle came out her thoughts. She paused scared and looked around. The birds were in such a hurry that they flew close to Jennadelle away without taking notice of her.
It seemed that something flushed them. It was a predator or something else for sure because Jennadelle didn't hear a shot.
She suspected that this forest was not safe for her anymore.
Hastily she put her harmonica back in her bag and ran the path to the next town.

She didn't forebode the lion which one followed her all the time...
He looked after her with his attentive, yellow shining eyes till Jennadelle left the woods.
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Ah, thanks.

Anyway, I really love the story of Jennadelle trying to find out who she is. I'm just dying to find out if her past has anything to do with War of the Art. Great stuff, still.
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But I wish I could write more thrilling and interesting anyway .
I like english... but I can't tell stories very well...


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I'm just dying to find out if her past has anything to do with War of the Art.
Not really . That's another story.
To fight in Wars Of The Art is just something like a hobby .
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But I wish I could write more thrilling and interesting anyway .
I like english... but I can't tell stories very well...
I don't think that is an issue here, SM.
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these chapters are both really good.
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Thanks!

Just a question... what is correct? (Example):

"Who are you?", the scared stranger asked hastily.
Or:
"Who are you?", the scared stranger hastily asked.

I just don't know how to use adverbs ...
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Oh wow! This is fantastic! It's absolutely brilliant and such a good idea! Both chapters are great and I'm really enjoying it.
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Just a question... what is correct? (Example):

"Who are you?", the scared stranger asked hastily.
Or:
"Who are you?", the scared stranger hastily asked.
Either one works.
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07-22-2006, 08:20 AM
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Chapter 2 - Two strangers come to town



It didn't take long till Jennadelle stood in front of the town gate.
"Hey, you! You stranger!", Jennadelle heard surprisedly a strong voice next to her.
She looked around.
"Yes, I meant you! Over here!"
Jennadelle spotted the watchman of that closed town gate which stood on a tower surrounded by a bulletproof pane and looked down on her. He spoke with a microphone which let his voice sound louder by a loudspeaker outside the pane.
"Who are you? I never saw you here before....!", the loudspeaker said.
Jennadelle didn't answer. She wondered about the look of this watchman. He looked.. like a big, grim chicken? This had to be the clakkerz which ones the grubbs talked about.
The watchman didn't wait for an answer anyway but said: "If you want to enter the town you also have to hand over your guns here, did you understand? Or else we can't let you in. The townsfolk always want to play it safe."
"I don't have any guns.", Jennadelle said.
"Nobody walks around these parts without a weapon. Now do hand over it! You'll get them back when you leave the town. We don't want any outlaws which make waves!"
"Mark my words I really don't have some!"
"Have I to come down to you and frisk you?"
Jennadelle shuddered to think.
So she spun and showed every side of heself with a bit upraised arms.
"Do I look as if I had something to you?", she sighed.
She saw the clakker eyeballed her suspiciously. Then he pointed at Jennadelle's belt with his white wing.
"And your bag there?", the watchman asked her provoking.
Jennadelle showed him her harmonica.
"I don't wear more than this.", Jennadelle stated and put her instrument back.
It took some seconds till the chicken pressed the button. Then the big town gate opened squeakily and released the path to town.
"Well, I believe you...", the loudspeaker said unsurely.
Jennadelle went to the town till the tower was some meters behind her.
"You may come to town. But if you'll make waves...", the grim clakker threated.
"I'm not going to do that.", Jennadelle just said.
The watchman glanced at her very suspiciously and the gate got close.
Okay, let's have a look at this town here, Jennadelle thought.
Here were some more clakkerz around. Some of them took notice of Jennadelle, some other ignored her simply.
She seemed to be not especially known. That was good.
Jennadelle got granular on this town here. There were trailers, little hutted, a general store, a practice, a jail and a bounty store.
The bounty store produced Jennadelle mysterious interests. She stepped up to it till she stodd right next the door. At its left and right were pinned some more wanted poster at the wall. Some of them were already stamped with a red colored "jail" on their faces and other ones still seemed to be loose.
Jennadelle didn't know why but she was sure that she could get some money here...
Because she didn't have some.
When she eyed the unstamped wanted posters the store door opened surprisedly right next to her.
And Jennadelle saw this bearded, big man standing in front of her.
It was just a peep. Almost unseeing eyes.
His poker-face didn't show a facial expression when he looked in Jennadelle's face with his deep-green, mysterious eyes.
Then the lion-like guy hit the road out the town.
I knew this man had to be a bounty hunter, Jennadelle thought a bit smirking.
Stealthily, she followed him till she saw him disappeared behind an other town gate. And the gate has closed.
Jennadelle just had to follow that guy. She felt it in her bones. She had to know who he was!
Straightway, she went to the bounty store where he did come out to get some informations about this bounty hunter and... to accept a possible order.
Jennadelle wanted to be a bounty hunter. Well, she couldn't get money in an other way anyway... and this way she also could find out where the lion head has went to follow him.
She entered this bounty store and saw a waiting clakker behind the counter.




He eyeballed Jennadelle when she came in.
"Oh, a bounty hunter!", he finally said, "New here, my lady?"
"...yeah. It seems so, I guess.", Jennadelle answered and came closer the counter, "Are here some jobs for me?"
"Well...", the clerk began, "you're a bit late I'm sorry. Some little moments ago another person accepted an order and left the town."
"Who was this guy?"
"The bounty hunter of our town?", the clerk asked.
Jennadelle nodded.
"Nobody knows really. He's just known as Stranger. You know nothing about him but he's one of the best bounty hunters around these parts", the clakker said.
"You don't know more about him?", Jennadelle asked.
"Nothing else."
"Hmm..."
Silence.
"What... what is your name, stranger?", the clerk demanded.
Jennadelle looked at him. She wasn't sure whether she should answer.
But she did it finally.
"I am Jennadelle."
"Never heard such a name."
"Could be. May I know what order the bounty hunter has accepted?"
"Just a minute...", the chicken-like man said and concentrate his attention at his hidden drawer under his counter now. His wing grabed in a chaos of stamped and unstamped wanted posters and some newspapers.
"Aha! I found it...", the clerk spotted and put a unstamped poster on the counter.
"That's Filthy Hands Floyd", the clakker introduced.
Jennadelle had a look at the wanted poster.




The clakker watched at her thoughtfully while Jennadelle looked at the poster. Jennadelle looked up at him now. Her eyes told that she was determined to do this job. Nevermind, whether someone is going to do this already or not. Jennadelle would be doing faster.
Now there was a silence in the store for a little moment while the clerk seemed to read Jennadelle's mind.
"I tell ya what, Lady!", he began finally, "And it's really important what I'm going to tell ya know! So listen to me."
His very strict voice left Jennadelle cold.
"Get cracking.", she said easefully.
First the clakker seemed to be offended by Jennadelle's calm, almost barefaced disposition. She seemed to dismiss him.
So he tried to sound a bit more greatly when he told her: "There's no return if you start a life as a bounty hunter. Understand? No Return!"
Jennadelle nodded which meant: "I know, I know. Do I get the job, now?"
The clakker was stony-faced: "You also have pretty more enemies. And probably less friends. Is this clear in your mind?"
"Yeah, it is.", Jennadelle answered.
First the clerk behind the counter opened his beak to say something else. But when he saw the too strong will in Jennadelle's eyes which one he could not repress or to argue it into doing another job, the clakker gave up his wisdoms.
"Well!", the clerk surrendered, "Wait a moment..."
And he went to the back room. Jennadelle heard how he searched through drawers. First things first.
"Somewhere here it has to be...!", the clakker mumbled while he paced up and down the room, opening every drawer he could find.
Jennadelle waited impatiently. She wondered how far this Stranger was already. If this clakker guy keeped Jennadelle waiting, she never could stand a chance to overtake that other bounty hunter and snap his booty up. Somehow.
"Ah, here it is!", it sounded out the back room.
With an oddly familiar, can-like thing in the hand the clerk came back the counter. It wasn't the same can Jennadelle saw in the woods before. This one looked like new. The clakker showed it to her.
"That's a so-called can trap.", the stony-faced clerk said, "Me as a bounty store clerk have the job to give this thing everyone who wants to be a bounty hunter."
Jennadelle wanted to grab at this dark-colored can to see it closer. But the clerk partook of it immediately before Jennadelle could touch it.
"This can trap soaks up anything what is lying on the ground when you aim its opening to your booty. And, of course, it must be used for outlaws only! Such ones which you get bounty for, okay?", the gimlet-eyed clerk told her strictly, "For nothing other but outlaws! Nobody else. That's the law!"
Jennadelle nodded again. And this made the clerk more mistrustful. That was also the reason why he still was hesitant to do give her the can trap. Slowly, he delayed her this can-like thing. Jennadelle grabed at it but the clakker still didn't loose his hold on it. Jennadelle wondered about it.
"Can I trust in you that you're not going to abuse the can trap for illegal purposes?", the clakker asked strictly.
"I'll only use it for outlaws.", Jennadelle answered.
The bounty store clerk let hear a chagrined sound from himself that means: "I trust in you but I always will keep an eye on you, you strange lady!"
Finally, he loosed his hold on the can and Jennadelle let slide it in her bag.
"Where can I find this Floyd?", Jennadelle asked.
The clerk hesitatingly answered :"You better should go out the same gate which one Stranger left the town. If you saw him."
"Yes, I did. And then?"
"Then you just follow the road till you come to a place with trailers. But be alert. On your way you could meet some outlaws already. So look out for them. Floyd is noted for holding trailers up which normally drive to our town to give us their wares. The wares are important for our general store. Since Floyd and his minions plunder our trailers we can not keep the general store because we can't sell a thing."
"I see...", Jennadelle just said.
She turned around and went back to the door when she heard the clerk saying: "Take my advice, my lady! If you really plan to run across Stranger to steal his booty... then forget it! He doesn't like competitions if you know what I'm talking about. He always works alone. And until now neither outlaws nor other hard guys could mess with him ever. Nobody did!"
Jennadelle was rooted to the spot. She never assessed Stranger's reputation that hard.
At that time she has saw him in the woods she has perceived him as one of the "normal" sort. Someone who engineered traps, messed around with outlaws and traped them finally.
But Jennadelle has underestimated him apparently.
"Well...", she said with a look behind, "I'm going to find that out timely."
The Clakker did a throw-awaying gesture with his wing and just said: "I did warn you... and now hit the road already!"
Jennadelle just grinned self-confidently. Then she left the bounty store. Out to the glaring sun light. Through the creaking town gate out... to the dusty, dangerous places.
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sweet i love this story im just wondering is jennadelle going to remember eventually how she came about falling off the cliff or is it juts going to be left alone anyway good job
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07-22-2006, 10:49 AM
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Don't worry she'll remember who she is and what her destiny is in the oddworld . But it takes some chapters till she'll do. Her memories are just... big and... I don't say too much

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When she eyed the unstamped wanted posters the store door opened surprisedly right next to her.
And Jennadelle saw this bearded, big man standing in front of her.
When I was writing my sister read this and she dreamily said: "Do write: It was love at first sight..."
And I said: "Hey, Jennadelle's Wrath is not going to be a love story !"
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lol shoot her next time she says to make it a love story jennadelle and stranger sre just mates in the end i know this because of the thing you siad in steef art

"I just have to say: They're not really a couple. But very good friends. Or something like that..."
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Oooh Jennadelle's first mission as a bountyhunter Can't wait to read more

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this will be a great next chapter I cant wait to read on.
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yeh please continue please im dying to read on perhaps you should release this as a book when its finished i would definatly buy it
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W000 such inspiration. I love it. I wish I could write like that.

Did this happen after Stranger soon I see this being a cat like creature whom believe that she thinks she is two-legged. If this the case where is stranger? If this wreck the whole mysterism of it then DON'T tell me cause that makes this story so good. Its trying to guess what going to happen next.
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Well, I don't tell a thing.
But Jennadelle really has two legs .
So that's not the big, bad mystery of the story (and of Jennadelle's part).

I'm working on the translating of the next chapter but it's longer then the other ones. That's why it takes so long ().
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