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11-14-2007, 12:58 AM
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Introduction


As the dark black clouds of pollution that covered the skies above the menacing factory slowly began to clear, rays of sunlight beams down through the clearing clouds onto the still factory. All was silent, the factory had ceased, the largest meat processing plant on Oddworld had come to a hault. Rupture Farms, was no more.
The factory was silent and empty, all Mudoken Slaves had dissapered along with the netorias fugitive, Abe. All employees, including the Sligs and Security camera had all run in fear when several massive lightning strikes struck the facility several hours ago. It was now an empty, inactive structure standing alone, like a tall dark looming cloud.
Inside the empty walls of the factory, the flickering of the few lights which remained on gave the place a dark gloomy feeling. Like you would feel if you stepped into a haunted house. A leaking pipe created a constant drip which echoed throughout the empty hallways, not disrupted by any noises.
All the Sligs left in such a hurry, they left their boss, Mullock the Glukkon inside Meat Saw Room No. IV, and the lightning bolts that struck the facility, had a good chance of frying the still working circut boards. This combined with the shock and terror, just drove the Sligs out without two thoughts of rescuing their boss.
Little did the Sligs know, that those several Lightning Strike actually hit Mullock and his right hand Slig, Kollum. They weren't no normal Lightning Strikes, they were summoned through some Super-Natural force unknown to the industrialists, and their targets were for Mullock and Kollum.
Anyone would think the two would have been killed from the two strikes, yet no, the two did survive, somehow, someway, they did not die, meerly knocked out.

Slowly Mullock opened his bright Orange eyes. He was groaning in pain and lying on the floor of the small Meat Saw room. Just next to him lyed his right hand slig, Kollum, who was still unconsious.
Mullock did not remember much, he could not pin point the events that led to he himself being naked and lying on the floor of the room, the last thing he remembered was capturing the terroist Abe in the Board Room.
What happened? Mullock thought to himself, Whats going on?
Lifting up him long arm he gently touched Kollum, trying to wake him up. He was going to need some help...
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11-14-2007, 01:50 AM
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I'm liking the sound of this. Not many people try writing fanfics in the eyes of the villain, and you've done it here quite nicely. Nice work. Marvak wishes to see more.
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11-14-2007, 03:08 AM
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This sounds good. I'd love to hear what Mullock does next. Oddey needs more to survive.
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11-14-2007, 03:28 AM
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cool, i like this-im not a usual reader of oddworld fiction, yet this is cool. set immmediatley after the happenings of abes oddysee i presume?
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11-14-2007, 06:05 AM
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That 's really good. He lives! xD Can't wait for more.
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11-14-2007, 07:50 AM
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That's a good story. I liked how you wrote it through the eyes of Molluck.
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11-17-2007, 12:55 PM
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Good idea, this has a lot of potential, I just hope you can pull it off, since Molluck is such a loved character, this could be hard.
But goodluck, you're done well so far.
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11-19-2007, 03:19 AM
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this sounds quite good, i hope its carried on.
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cool that was very good
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12-11-2007, 04:51 AM
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Your stories great
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12-11-2007, 02:10 PM
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Your story sound very interesting so far, keep up the good work.
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