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04-16-2005, 07:56 PM
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A Clakkerz Tale

I was bored a few hours ago, so I wrote a story.

Here's the first 3 chapters. The next lot, I'll post tomorrow.

Enjoy!

A Clakkerz Tale

Chapter 1 - Rovens Surprise

Roven was a wandering Clakker merchant he had tried to sell everything to every species… it didn’t work. You see Roven, being a clakker and all didn’t see many of his kind around the parts he travelled through. He went sailing on his boat which was made from junk pieces mostly from parts he had found at the side of paths he was walking down. And when he wasn’t sailing he was walking or using his cart, he had to pull his cart because a small tribe of steef he came across (The Larshiraas) did not want to pull it for him.

Anyway one day when Roven was walking down the pathway of a jungle on an island just off the coast of Mudos looking for a small village to rest in when he heard a loud boom, Trimeer Crows flew out from the surrounding trees near the boom. Roven ran with his cart to where the boom was… bad idea! He got to a huge clearing and he saw some dust looming around the middle. He stood there waiting for it to clear, and when it did he couldn’t believe what he saw…

Chapter 2 - HELP!

It was a Glukkon, of course Roven didn’t know this. He was standing there surroundd by 25 of his slig lackies. Roven wasn’t the smartest of Clakkerz, he had trouble counting them all. He had to find a hiding place before they spotted him. Just before he took a leap into a bush he noticed what the bang was, it was the clearing of a mine entrance. He wanted to see what was inside it but he had no time for that just yet. He took a leap into the bush and landed in a nest of boombats all Roven had time to say was “just my lu…” KABOOM!! Roven came flying out of the bush and landed in front of the Glukkon. This Glukkon was the boss of a construction company was called General Werkz, The general spat out his cigar in disbelief. He shouted at the top of his voice “ Can someone tell me what the heck this thing is doing here?!” A Vykker Scientist stepped forwardhe sounded very nervous as he said “ Um Sir… I believe that this creature is one of the ones I have studied…I.. I Believe, Sir that it is a Clokkar” A Angry intern stepped forward “mmm mmm hhmmm hhmmm!!!”
“ Oh really? My mistake, its pronounced Clakker”
“Lock him up!” Said General Werkz. The sligs all stood around Roven and picked him up “Woah! This guys heavy!” muttered a slig. The next thing Roven noticed was that he was locked up in a cell, The area around him was all dark and damp, He also noticed there were a column of cells along the wall he looked into the cell to his right and there was a dusty skeleton of a small creature that looked like it had small arms and some sort of flipper type foot, Then he looked into the cell to his left and he saw a aging, very thin blue-ish green creature.
Roven slumped against the wall of his cell. Thinking about how long it would take for him to get out of here. He was just about to doze off when he heard a slight mumbling noise. He opened his eyes and saw the thin aging creature sitting upright in his cell. Roven got closer to his cell bars and began to watch the creature. It was mumbling in a low droning tone. Roven could see small blue lights circling the creature.
“Hey!” Roven whispered. “What are you doing?”
The aging creature jerked out of his trance and looked at Roven.
“What does it look like I’m doing?” The creature said, sounding annoyed. It took a few moments before he regained his senses. “Oh! I’m sorry! It’s just that I havn’t practiced this ritual in such a long time.”
“Never mind that!” said Roven “What exactly are you doing?”
“It’s an ancient Mudokon…”
“I’m sorry, what?” Roven asked.
“Mudokon, havn’t you heard of a Mudokon?” The creature asked.
“Well, uhhh, no. Should I have?” Roven asked.
“I dunno. Well, that’s me! Abe! I’m a Mudokon.” The Mudokon said. “Anyway, it’s an ancient Mudokon ritual.

Chapter 3 - A foreign friend

“Say it with me now Mud-ok-un” explained Abe.
“Oh I get it now” said Roven, he carried on “So how do we get out of here?
“I’m not sure ive been trying for months, any ideas? By the way, you see that skeleton in the cell next to you? Well if we get out of these cells I want to bring it with me, He used to be my friend. He was a rare creature called a Gabbit, He had a name too, it was Munch, he was my best friend. Well, his species, they're amphibious. They need water to survive. He died during the night, after an extremely hot day. Anyway enough of my sad story lets get out of here!” said Abe, wiping a lone tear from his right eye.
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Nice 3 chapters, please finish!
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Ooh...that was so sad! Poor Munch having to suffer before he died! It seems that a lot of time has passed from the time of the quintology to the time of this story. Great story, Coolmanbizkit! Keep it up-it's very good!
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Please write another chapter! Poor munch!
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Ill write the next chapter soon.

I cant do it just yet because my sister is using the laptop, and the story is on there

EDIT: Im gonna start the next chapter now
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Sorry for the double post, but here it is!

A Clakkerz Tale part 2

Chapter 4 - The Escape

“So do you have any ideas of a way to get out?” Asked Abe.
“Hmmmmm, maybe I have something in my pockets. Let me take a look.” replied Roven. He searched his pockets, taking everything out “Ah, this might do the trick.” said Roven.
“What is it?” Said Abe, while trying to think to think of what it could be.
“Im not sure what it is, it just looks useful” said Roven.
Roven fiddled with the lock on the cell door. “YES! ITS OPEN!!!” Exclaimed Roven
“R..r..really?” said Abe with a shocked look on his face, Roven cautiously walked out of his cell looking left and right. Roven then opened Abe’s cell, letting him out. Abe and Roven then walked over to Munch’s cell and bowed their heads. Abe walked into the cell and stood next to Munch’s skeleton. He chanted for a minute, saying words Roven had never heard before. Then Roven asked Abe what he did Abe just replied saying “ I prayed for him”

“Oh, shall we go now then?” Said Roven
“Yes, we mustn’t get caught by the guards.” Abe said.
“Ok, I’ll just follow you then” Roven told Abe
Abe walked out into a narrow corridor, with Rovan following closely behind him.
“So… which way?” Asked Roveen.

Chapter 5 - A Dead End

Abe and Roven felt like they’d been walking for hours. It felt like they were in a huge maze and they couldn’t find their way out. Suddenly they saw a shadow of a small two legged creature come round the corner one after the other, five of them in all. Each with a slig commanding it. Abe knew what they were and he knew it meant trouble.
“Ok, when I say run, We turn and run for our lives.” Whispered Abe.
“Why, what is it? Dinner? Why are we whispering anyway?” asked Roven
“See those things coming round the corner? Well, they’re slogs, savage little bastards. We are whispering so they don’t hear us, so don’t make any sudden moves or any loud noi..”
“Ha ha ha ha what a funny name Slog! They cant be savage, they have tiny little legs ha ha ha!” Roven laughed so loud that it echoed through the whole corridor, The slogs turned to face them and bared their huge teeth.
“RUN!” Abe shouted.
They turned round and ran for their lives. They were running blind, turning every corner they could. Knowing that if they stopped, they would be ripped to pieces.

They came to a laboratory where some Vykker scientists were looking through microscopes and reading huge reports.
Abe and Roven ran into a little side room and pressed some of the buttons on the wall trying to see which one closes the door, just before the slogs entered the room the door closed Abe and Roven stood there in silence. All they heard from the Vykkers was,
“Hello little Sloggy woggy!” The first Vykker said. As if he was being greeted by a little pup.
“Uhhh Larry you really shouldn’t be doing that”
“Why not? Its not dangero.. AHHHHHHH!!!”
“Oh no don’t come for me too ARRGH!!!”
There was growling and crunching noises coming from behind the door. The slogs were finishing their meal.
Then there was a short silence, the next thing they heard was footsteps leaving the room.

Abe and Roven walked out of the storage room they were in and looked around. Before leaving the lab, something caught Abe’s eye. It was a small, shiny computer sitting on one of the vykker’s desks.. Abe couldn’t believe what he saw… Soulstorm was back!

Chapter 6 - Return of Soulstorm Brew

Coming Soon….

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YAY!!! I like those chapters!
I wanna see chapter6 soon!
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Great, fantastic, Coolmanbizkit! I LOVE this story! I can't wait for more!
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I think Chapter 6 is my favorite so far. Just kidding, it's a cool story, keep it up!
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Thanks Guys, chapter 6 will either be here later or tommorow
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Ahhh!! double post again! Sorry guys.

Well here it is.

A Clakkerz Tale Part 3

Chapter 6 - Return Of Soulstorm Brew

Abe kept reading what was on the screen. He read it out loud so Roven knew what it said too “Soulstorm Brewery has reopened, with a new formula! It says 'Mudokon bones are old, we now use Steef bones'. Those big headed bitches! They found them in this very cave. Apparently, it's an ancient Steef burial ground." Abe explained. "What on mudos is a steef?!” Abe asked Roven
“Well a steef is a creature back where I come from. I knew one, he was called Stranger he was an odd fellow also a bounty hunter… Anyways what’sa Soulstorm brew?” Roven asked.
“The Glukkons, Those big brown Reldo fruit look a likes you saw made this drink. It was very addictive, I had to... well... it's a long story, never mind. Long story short, I found out they were making the brew from Mudokon bones and I had to stop them. So now they moved on to them steef bones eh?” Said Abe
“So are we going to stop them?” Roven said
“YES! Of course we are!” Exclaimed Abe “I think we might need help though”
“Nah, I think we'll be okay!” Roven said while trying to sound brave.

Chapter 7 - This Place Just Got Stranger

Roven and Abe walked up to a huge bulkhead door, When it opened they were both amazed at what they saw, Huge pieces of machinary everywhere! They heard footsteps coming from somewhere near them. Then they heard “Hey, what are you doing?”
The next thing they knew, General Werkz was hanging down infront of them wrapped in some kind of web. Then a Steef dropped down from a high up platform, not just any steef it was Stranger.
“Stranger? Is that you? What are you doing here?” Roven asked
“Well im’a here collecting a bounty, I heard that this ole bastard has been destroying steef ancient burial grounds. He's lucky I've got to take him alive” Stranger said.
“Is this that stranger bounty hunter guy you was talking about?” Asked Abe
“Yup this guy here is Stranger” Said Roven
“So… want to help us destroy this place Stranger?” asked Abe
“Yeah, since im’a here I might aswell help out a lil” Stranger said. "So, what's next?"

Chapter 8 - Budda bing budda BOOM!

Coming later or tommorow…
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Nice chapters coolmanbizkit! I can't wait for chapter 8!
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Yeah! Please finish!
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Nice chapter, Coolmanbizkit! I'm glad you put Stranger in the mix, too!
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