George's Escape

[Abe16]

uh, hi I'm making a story called Georges Escape,Hope you Enjoy.
chapter 1:
It was like another ordinary day at work. Sligs were on patrol, vykkers were inventing and glukkons were yelling. I was a mudokon scrub. I work in area 1-3. I work with three other muds called Fautso, four eyes and pigpen. Fautso is blind but smells something he likes, four eyes is a computer geek (LOL) and pigpen is a dirty mud.

One day at work I was cleaning the pipe gutters when I heard a glukkon over a fone say something like...well it was all crinkled, I only heard the words perish, and kill. Then I thought that we were in trouble. Then i thought that if we were in trouble, that Abe guy would rescue is! If he gets the news.

so thats Chapter 1.

[Biggy Bro Slig]

I want to here more!

[Abe16]

Thanks Biggy Bro Slig!

Chapter 2:

I was scared out of my wits by hearing him say "Perish" and "Kill", that I barely eat, sleep and clean! I was scrubbing the walls one day when I overheard some sligs talking about what I heard lastnight. "So, did you guys hear what number 19 was talking about?" said one of the sligs. "Hey!Shut up! it's supposed to be a secret!" said Num.19. "Uh guys I have a funny feeling that, well... maybe we're being watched." said Num.73. "ah! go take a chill pill!" said num.12. "anyway!Number 19! Spill it or I'll do it for you!" said num. 12. "I don't know what to spill!" Argued Num. 19. "What did the boss say!" yelled 12. "HEY GUYS!!!!!!!!!!!LOOK! A MUDOKON!!!!!!!!!!!GET HIIIIIIIMMMMM!"

"Oh crud!" I knew I was in trouble then. Soon I was in a corner, surrounded! I never knew it was going to end this way, until I saw that one slig was beating up another! and, WOW! was that a gabbit I saw! Electricuting one! then I knew it was Abe! He came to rescue me! "Hello! follow me!" Abe called. "Okay! but hold on! i ned to get my friends! "AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!" There, in that very spot was blood, spray paint saying "We're taking your little buddy's to the experiement room for testing!" and a piece of mudokon hair. Now i was mad.

End of chapter 2!Will write more soon!

[Abe16]

Okay!Chapter 3!

I was ready to take a punch at someone," Hey! look! footprints!maybe we could follow them!" As I started to run, Abe caught me and told me we need to do it secretly. So we hid crouched, ran,hid,crouch,ran and finally made it to the experiment lab, "well,this is it!I'm walking in there!" I said, "Wait!" Abe said and pulled me back.A slig was guarding the door, Then I heard Abe chanting!"Yodoyodoyodo,"Then before i could blink! Abe possessed the slig! I couldn't belive my eyes! Then abe blew up the slig! "wow !that was amazing Abe!" well, it's all in the lips!" said Abe. Then the door swung open."well, that's that!Why don't we throw them in the recycler!Hah!" said a vykker, "sure, I need some laughs." said another vykker.

I had to save them!"NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!" I screamed. "No! george, Don't!" Abe called after me! "WHAT!" screamed a vykker, that woke up my unconsious friends! "Whu! Ahhh!" Cried four eyes. " This is unexptable!" said four eyes. "I'm in danger and hungry!" Cried fautso. "Ack! I'm getting clean!" cried Pigpen also."ALLRIGHT! TIME FOR NAP-NAP!" yelled a vykker with a snoozie gun. DUN DUN DUUUUN!

Chapter four later or tomarrow.

[odd chick]

Those chapters are a good start, Abe16. But things are happening a bit fast. Not that it's a bad thing-it's good to read a story where things aren't drug out so much-but the events are happening a bit TOO fast, if you know what I mean. Other than that, it's a pretty good story! Keep it up!

[Kimon]

I agree with oddchick. Your story is good, but you're chapters are 2 paragraphs long cuz you don't stop to explain. Detail makes the story interesting, man.

Otherwise good work though.

[Abe16]

Thanks for the tip!

Chapter 4:

"Yaaaaaaaaaaa!!!" screamed pigpen.Pigpen just jumped on the vykker! "ack! I'm dirty! I'm dirty! someone clean me! "How's about some blackmailing vykker? Your most embaressing photo?" Four eyes taunted, "Ack! which one!Arg!" The vykker said. "the one with the water!......Ha! I sent it through the internet!" Four eyes said in a proudish way, "NOOOOO! my life is ruined! Somebody shoot me!" The vykker screeched, just then I pushed the vykker in the recycler, 'AHHHHHHHHHHHOOOOOOOOOOOOOHHHHHHHEEEEEAHHHHHHH!" the vykker screeched in pain. "well that's the end of him." said me! "but what about the message you heard!" Abe said. "Maybe that slig saved the message!" I said, "let's go" said pigpen "I'm hungry!" said Fautso. 'Yodoyodoyodoyodoyodo" Abe chanted and blew up the slig. "All right! lets find this messahhh!How the heck am i supposed work this keyboard!" I said. "Like this! geez, am I supposed to teach you everything!" Four eyes complained.

"Shhhhh....Shhhhh....Shhhh all right! Shhhhhh, All the mudokons will perish if they don't do a good job!shhhhh, And will shoot to kill any mudokon who slacks off shhh, will be terminated, shhhhh, especially George and his friends! who have been reported snooping around, shhhhh, but most importantly that And guy!shhhhhh, Luteninent Drake, reporting out!" "........AHHHHHH! he knows about me! ahh! i gotta get outta here! Uh!" I screamed, we're not going until we save all 245 mudokons in this place and put it out of buisness." said abe with a mischiveously smile.

"Sir! Abe, George and his friends have been reported at number's 67 and 42's office looking at the fone files." said slig num.11 "Blast! can they make my job even HARDER! Send five big bros and 19 sligs there with slogs! I'll be in my office doing privet work!" yelled Luteninet Drake. "Yes sir!" said num.11. "oh boy! we're in big trouble!It won't be long now until..." A big bro inturubted me! "hey do you hear somethin?" Uhoh!" we all said in horror.

so, how do you like! Chapter 5 later or tomarrow.

[odd chick]

I really like the dialogue you use in this story-it seems to fit the characters' personalities perfectly. Great chapter!

[Abe16]

Chapter 5:Part 1


"Hey! I said did you hear somethin?" He said again, "Yodoyodoyodoyodoyodo" Abe chanted softly, "Hey look at tha...urggggggahhhhhhhh!,.....Hey ya wussy pantsie!" Abe made him say, "wutch you call me!?" said another bigbro "You deaf! take this!" said the bigbro, bambambambamabamabamabamabam!!!!!! Went the gun, "ArrrggggguuhhhhAHJHHUHHHH!" screamed the sligs, slogs, and bigbro, Then Abe blew him up, "Whew! Abe ya did it again buddy!" I told Abe encouragedly. "Well, ..thanks," "com'on my schmatics say that more sligs will be arriving soon." Four eyes warned. "Then let's g..." Abe was caught off non other than, Lutninent Drake! "So,...You think you can rescue your friends and put me out of business eh... well you got another thing coming!"

Sorry to make it short but I have to go to school, I'll finish part 2 after school,

[Abe16]

Chapter 5:Part2:

"uhhh,urr, UH?! A boiler release button!" cried Four eyes! "Oh no you don't! you're being put in the detention center!" Lutenent Drake commanded. "take these 3 trouble making dweeps to the detention center, but put George and Abe to the tear X-tractor!Hahahahahahah!" Laughed Luteninet Drake. "Oh, We are so screwed," said Abe, george nodded in agreement, Just then a slig came up on the speaker, "HELP! The mudokons are going crazy! the ones outside are trieing to break andchanting Abe and George!" CRASH!" UHOH! that was the dooahhhhhhhhh!" screamed the slig. "AHHHHHH! My CAREER IS OVER!" screamed Luteninent Drake, Then George hit LT. drake in he eg, "YEEEOU! YOU LITTLE DEMON!" LT.Drake cried furiously, "Com'on Abe! hit the boiler access button!" George screamed, Push! "ERRR...ERRR....ERRRR! Factory will now self distruct in 5 minutes" Abe ran to the microphone and yelled, "Get out of here right now! this place will blow up!!!!!" Every mudokon ran outside, KABOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMMMM!!!!!!!!!!!!! "YAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!" Screamed LT. Drake in pain and all the other sligs with him, And all lived happily ever after, and LT. Drake passed away.

THE END
So that's it, hope you enjoyed it, because I got alot more where that came from.

[Kimon]

Yeah, keep it up!

[odd chick]

That was an interesting chapter-the best one you typed! I liked it-it was so full of chaos and explosions! Keep up the good work!