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12-18-2003, 10:32 AM
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A Truely Great War

A Truely Great War
Chapter One


The towering general stood high above his magnificent army, there were below him, covered the ground as far as the eye could see, and every single one of their eyes were rooted on him. Like robots, he thought as he stared out, every so often one would move the weight of his gun to the other shoulder, or check for the umpteenth time whether he had enough ammo. Everyone knew what was happening, the time had come, and the magnificent glukkon began to roar out to the crowd, “You know why you are all here! You all know what must be done! You all know that we WILL BE VICTORIOUS!” And after only those words, and enormous cheer erupted from the sligs, every one of them caught up in the frenzy of screams and adoration. There were a force of death; nothing could possibly stop this great might the glukkons had once only dreamt of. “NOW GO!” screamed the general. His voice was magnified many thousands of times by the microphones nearby. Then, he watched.

There were in a great desert, around them were enormous structures, all metal, all large, all dominating. The general himself was stood on a large podium directly in front of a magnificent building, the front of the building was in the shape of his lustrous face, and his eyes were great white spotlights which lit up many miles of the desert even in the darkest of nights. Below the sligs were orderly and keen to move, it began at the back line. They all turned one hundred and eighty degrees, then walked calmly, yet efficiently out into the distance, and then the same happened with the next line, and the next, and the next; and so it went on. Their large machine guns were packed full of ammo, there masks freshly cleansed and re-fixed, their metallic legs oiled and fuelled. It was a beautiful sight. From the sides of the infantry shot up hundreds of sligs into the sky, up and up they went, each with a large bag of grenades on his back and a machine gun over his shoulder, their helicopter blades would do most of their work. Once all the fliers entered the air, still in formation, they all began to move, easily catching up with the early lines of infantry.

The general stood, anticipating what was next. He couldn’t wait; his head was sweating bags full and he kept shouting at his main slig guard for the simplest of mistakes, but he knew deep down that he would have to be patient; many thousands of lines of infantry had to move out of the way before they came. When the sligs had all finally started moving into the distance, below the great podium, the amazing building suddenly began to open enormous iron doors. Once they had moved right up into the building, from the darkness emerged a new power. Great tanks. The tanks rolled slowly out, magnificent in size and stature, every one identical, every one had the face of the general as it’s foremost shape, and behind that face was an almost spherical machine of iron and steel, with a large gun on the top, surrounded by 6 machine guns. Each tank had ten sligs inside it, and each one moved at approximately seven miles per hour. The general watched with tear covered eyes, his plan was coming together, soon he would be successful, and have riches beyond imagination.


As the tanks slowly moved out of their chamber, and across the desert, creating large clouds of dust as they did, another 6 lines of the air support launched their wings into the air, and followed slowly at the tanks pace. Soon would be the time of clashing.


Chapter Two coming soon

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12-18-2003, 12:31 PM
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Chapter 2

A few hours later, the entire slig force was one enormous long line, stretching from one side of the horizon to the other, the tanks were all in the middle with infantry support on the flanks and behind them, they were moving at a slow pace, almost a leisurely pace. They all knew their prey weren’t going anywhere, so they could take the time, and they did. In one of the tanks, Ammokeeper71 had just jumped up onto the top of it’s uneven spherical surface, and began to push a great heavy missile into the main barrel, it was then that a flier came down holding his gun shamefully.
“Oi, gimme some ammo for me gun now.” Said the hovering flier,
“What the hell? Where’d all yur other ammo go? Everyone has a full gun” answered Ammokeeper71
“Just gimme the damn ammo, bitch, I don’t have time for this shit.”
“Tell me what the hell you did with the other ammo first.”
“I had an accident, does it matter?!”
“You had an accident? And you expect me to give you more ammo!?” His voice had become raspy with disbelief
“It aint my fault it fell outta my gun… who designed these things anyway.”
The slig who were atop the other tanks, loading them, had all looked around to see what was happening. They watched with glee.
“You aint getting any ammo from me, so get the **** outta my face.” Said the ammo keeper
“What the ****s wrong wit you bitch? Just gimme the goddamned ammo.”
“That’s it, you ****ing annoyance, I’ll see you in hell” he said as he shot the slig once in the chest, then once in the fuel tank. Ammokeeper71 was quickly back inside the main bulk of the tank before the small fuel tank exploded in a flurry of metal, blood and green flesh.

“What the **** happened out there?” said TankDriver34 who had been watching all the time through his tv screen.
“Nothing, where the hell’d my scrab cake go?” replied Ammokeeper71
“Nowhere, it’s on the table” said the driver, and then he laughed to himself. He had enjoyed that small piece of entertainment.

Back outside, the rest of the ammo keepers had finished loading their main barrel, and were also entering through the top most door of the tank, back to their food, games or drink.

*

The first night of the crusade came somewhat quickly; it had seemed to the army. Before they knew it, they were almost drowned in the darkness. The seven visible moons gave only a little light, that of the mudokons, that of the gabbits, a couple with other strange predominating symbols on, and the usual two normal one’s which were nearly always showing in the sky, a small and a big one, it was almost as if the smaller moon was orbiting the larger moon which was orbiting the great planet.

Though sligs had amazing night-time vision, which was only enhanced by their goggles that they constantly wore in the armed services, they still had to follow regulation orders, and that was to put on the medium sized flash-lights that were the eyes of every glukkons on the front of every tank, and then the ground before them was washed in whiteness, in was in this white light, impaired slightly by the goggles, that the farthest right flank of infantry caught a flash of shadow in the seemingly dead forest. The one who spotted it first quickly gave a shout, but he knew he wouldn’t be quick enough in gathering the entire army’s attention.
“Quick, everyone, I saw something in the forest!” yelped 54762.
“Shaddap” replied 8767, “No one aint gunna hear your whiny little voice”, and just as he said this, he heard the ancient war cry of the mudokons as about fifty mudokons leapt out of the forest, each on an elum, each armed with a deadly spear, and heading directly for 54762, 8767 and the other nearby sligs.

Gun fire was immediate.

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12-18-2003, 01:29 PM
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Chapter 3
The mudokon rider’s and their keen elums were blinded by a sudden flash of fire from the barrel of at least seventy guns, those who didn’t die, or get pulled back by their scared elums, continued through the air, and into the sligs. Where the true horror began, they swung around recklessly, swinging their spears across and through the un-agile sligs who stood their ground and shot, but shooting simply wasn’t good enough for the mudokon’s that remained, these wear the greatest of warriors, trained from the day they hatched from their eggs to ride an elum with skill and care, and it’s exactly what they did. The elums leapt through the air, barely missing bullets, and charging into the sligs, crushing the weak green forms, or slicing them with the dangerous spears.

When only four mudokons and elums were left, they continued to fight, but one them caught sight of the three elder shaman in the depths of the forest. It was still very dangerous, but as dangerous as when they first launched the ambush, and so it continued. Flying sligs had began to enter the fray, dropping the odd grenade in flurry of blood only to blow up loads of their own troops, and, after hearing screams through the ear pieces, they started shooting with machine guns. Three mudokons were left, the elums were tiring. They couldn’t last long, and so, the leader who was marked in many equisetic designs shouted an order about the gun fire, and the elums began to head towards the forest. Little did they know that they had jumped too far into the slig ranks, it would be almost impossible to get out, all they could do was jump helplessly, avoiding all the bullets they could.


“Shall we help ‘em now?” said the first elder shaman.
“OK.” Replied the second, and all of the shaman began to chant.
The first two had opted to possess two random sligs that were close to the leaping elums and mudokons.

“We’ll cause a distraction, get outta there” said the first mudokon through his new glazed slig voice, and the two possessed sligs began to maniacally and rapidly, everywhere. Blood covered them both, and all three elum and riders, but they had made a small path, which the slums gladly shot down, until the two possessed sligs were quickly killed by a flier above.

The elums moved quickly, avoiding all the lead they could, and they were doing well. When they were only about ten metres away from the end of the alive sligs, they heard a whistling sound behind them, and it definitely wasn’t a bullet. One of the mudokons quickly turned his head, and saw a large smooth missile, about thirty centimetres long, shoot through the air towards the floor where they were, and he screamed out in fright. That was, until the third mudokon finally finished his chant, as he did so, the three mudokons and their trusty elums quickly disappeared and reappeared in their village, the same happened to the three shamans. The missile hit the ground, and killed another thirty sligs; there had been many casualties on this small skirmish.

“What the **** did you launch a goddamn missle for!?!” screamed Driver6 at Engineer56663 in the hull of the nearest tank to the carnage.
“I was getting’ bored with the annoying little muds, they were pissin’ us all off, the missle woulda finished em off good and propa.” He replied angrily, “And it did.”
“That may be, you idiot, but you killed a whole load of our own army! You know the missiles aren’t for usin til we get to them villages and shrines, now you can get the hell up there and re-load the main barrel. We’re stopping here for the night, many of the reckless sligs went and ****in' well used up all their ammo, all the ammo keepers are gonna be busy”
“And if I don’t go up there to re-load the tank?” said Engineer56663 while keenly eyeing a nearby gun.
“Then I’ll just press this button here and call the general, ****face.”
“Goddamn you, I’m goin” he said finally, leaving the gun resting on the wall, and going up to the top. On the top of the tank, (tank sligs don’t wear metallic legs, they're just sligs with masks), he slipped over a big bundle of ammo and fell of the edge of the spherical death bringer, but luckily the ammo keeper quickly gathered up the magazines and continued giving them out to nearby sligs. Engineer56663 grunted and slowly climbed back up the ladder and began reloading the missile. From the barrel, which was pointing the way he had recklessly shot it, he saw the bloody carnage after that battle. At least one hundred sligs had been killed and only fifty mudokons. In future, they would have to be much more careful, and much less reckless, though Engineer56663 was sure this great stationary army outnumbered every single mudokon force they would come up against, here in the east of Mudos.

Once all the idiotic sligs had been given more ammo (about seventy in all), all the sligs quickly went around the supply trucks, over a hundred of them had been following the army from about two hundred metres away from the word go. Now was the time for eating, and eat they did; all sorts of foods from all around Mudos and abroad. Some had even snuck in a few pieces of Clakkerz meat, but sneak it in they had to, for it was illegal to eat such things; and the sligs loved it almost as much as scrab cakes, though most just ate gruel. Lots of it. From the large trucks, which appeared almost as large lorries, three sligs manned each one, each slig armed to the teeth with the option of flying equipment or legs. Everyone knew what chaos could ensue at dinner time, sligs were orderly in the army until it came to the point of eating, then they let their primitive instincts guide them. Fights were extremely frequent, even over dishes of gruel and bottles of water.

*

The sligs quickly finished their meal, it never did take long, and they all rushed back to their formation, ten to every tank, and the rest surrounding, and once they were in formation, all but a dozen fell instantly asleep, most resting against their guns. The night-watchers stood in the middle of it all watching every side for the slightest sign of danger. Danger didn’t come that night, the sligs were expecting it, but it didn’t come. None of them had even thought that perhaps the closest village able to fight them were recovering from their skirmish. Sligs never seemed to think much before leaping into action, perhaps that was the general’s biggest mistake, for if he had assigned a few glukkons to go with the army, there would be no fights; they would all follow the glukkons orders. But without the glukkons overseers, they were rabbles who were looking for a fight with anyone, even their own kind.


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12-22-2003, 05:33 AM
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Will no one reply?

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12-28-2003, 03:41 PM
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try to cut down with all the swearing mate.
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I wait all this time for:
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try to cut down with all the swearing mate.
, I would, really, but they're sligs and I'm not going to turn them into things that they are not. They swear, it creates the fell of their society. So... any comments regarding the story?

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A couple of sp mistakes, but no biggie.

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01-24-2004, 09:35 PM
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Next coupla chapters are going to be nearly all mud.
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01-24-2004, 09:58 PM
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Chapter 3

"What should we do?" asked Jo.
"We will wait, we always wait." replied the shaman.
"Shouldn't we at least arm some of the men? Shouldn't we prepare? The sligs are coming, we need to defend ourselves!"
"Arm the men, open the storage and let them choose themselves between sling bow and spear, then open the stables, let the riders rider; but stay here. In the village." Said the shaman. As he said this, Jo, the supposed leader-figure of the small village ran off to do as advised, it wouldn't take long, everyone in the village was a a nearby clearing between some of the houses anyway.

Once the muds had been armed, most opted for either spear or bow, but some choosing sling, they all gathered around the fortress building at the front of the village. Jo had quickly counted out at least one hundred and fifty there, everyone else either couldn't fight, or were elsewhere, doing some of the other tasks in preparing the small village for an attack.
"What will happen?" braved one mud at the front, near to Jo (who was on elum-back).
"We will wait, as we always have. The sligs wont send many to attack us, they know we are small. They know it is pointless to send their whole force. We will survive this."
"I am not so sure of that," said the shaman, and as he did so; everyone heard a thunderous noise. They all quickly turned around, looking for what had made that noise, and saw a tank slowly entering through the main gate some twenty metres off, the tank had carelessly smashed straight through the weak wooden gate.

"Quickly, go now, everyone" Jo said as he turned his elum and ran to meet the tank. Before Jo got close, he was quickly gunned down by one of the mounted machine guns on top of the tank, and as he fell he noticed loads of others were dying the same way. Their arrows didn't harm the tanks, their rocks in the slings merely bounced to the ground and their spears broke on impact.
One the muds began to realise they were no match for the tanks, they began to rout and panic. Scared, many tossed their weapons aside and ran fruitlessly into their tent-like houses, or in the fortress to keep safe.

The tank fired a missile, or leapt forwards and instantly destroyed seven houses, it had attempted to stop the muds routing but it didn't work. it only panicked them furthur. but the sligs had other things with them, in an attempt to round up the muds, from behind the wreckage of the gate shot up thirty flying sligs. Once in the air they shot forth and dropped grenades and bombs wildly, killing many and destroying houses.
Muds were on the floor, arms over their heads whimpering. but it was no use, bombs blew up nearby and instantly destroyed and killed them. Grenades landed by their faces and blew them to pieces, and some were ripped apart by the insanly powerful six machine guns atop the tank. It was mayhem. It was slaughter.

Inside the fortress, the twenty or so muds who were there would hear the screams and death from beyond the thick wooden walls. They heard bombs exploding, their houses collapsing, craters being created. They heard the death of their friends, they heard the screams of despair and pain as the sligs mercilessly ripped them apart limb by limb with the guns, keeping their screams alive as long as possible. The shaman who was within the fortress began to chant, he was trying to posess a slig. Namely one of those within the tank but before he could successfully do so, the tank turned its attention to the relatively weak fortress of the mudokon village.

Another missile came forward, faster than the eye could see, and pummelled into and through the fortress, blowing up and ripping down the walls, destroying all inside and screating fire and death. The sligs had killed them all and not a single slig had been killed. It was ruthless and unmerciful, not a single mud had been spared. The order to take them as slaves had not be given yet. The muds had no chance.

From out of the top of the came twn sligs, without legs. They jumped down and each of them got a pair of legs from compartments in the lower reaches of the exterior, and them grabbed a large heavy bag each from the comparments. They spread around the village placing landmines everywhere, inches under the soil. Once they had covered the land in a couple of hundred landmines, they hopped back into their tank and began to move away from the village. Their work there was done. The landmines would easily kill any other mudokon who happened to come accross the village, to see what had happened or to re-build.

The tank rolled over blood, mud and corpse, crushing the bones and flesh of the mudokons, leaving their (and the elums) bodies to the carrion that quickly decended upon it.
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01-25-2004, 04:02 AM
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Well, you're good at writing fighting scenes, I can see. I want to see where this goes, so keep the chapters coming.

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