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Odd of War

This is the already highly-anticipated sequel to "Abe's Expoddition" and will continue that story, possibly to its completion. As the title indicates, this fanfic will be full of the epic action that makes books worth reading.
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THE PROPHECY

Yeah, there’s a prophecy. No good story doesn’t have one. That means this is a good story. Or something like that. I don’t want to brag. So just shut up and listen to the prophecy, already!

Out of the cold Dark, a hero shall rise.
A hero with Oddworld marked in his eyes.
A being of power, untried but true,
His destiny’s path I’ll reveal to you.
The darkness shall fall, trampled underpaw,
But only if the hero keeps the law.
The law of Oddworld, old Abe knows it best,
Its marking has long been burned on his chest.
Instruct this new hero, make straight his way,
And he shall free us from the Dark some day…


Yeah, that’s the prophecy. Preeeetty sappy one, if you ask me…but who am I to be asked? I’m not a critic. I’m just an old Mudokon shaman, name of Jake, who’s been cranky long enough to be happy all the time.

No, I’m not writing this down. You’re just reading my thoughts in your head. I can’t read. Abe can’t hardly read, either. I don’t know how this link between us has opened, friend, but delve deep into it and follow with me as I experience the legendary Abe and his travels. If you follow me, you might be the only one who ever remembers this, the last legend, for if we fail, no one on Oddworld will be left to tell the tale…
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oh my,you you you.................... i lost text................this............GREAT XD
this is super...i cant find the words to explain how great is this!
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I would write more, but I am exhausted. Busy day, you know. Plus, sleeping sometimes gives me fresh new ideas for the future of my fanfic Oddworld.
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yeah,im exhausted too,so i start babbling stuff.... especially if i was awake 24/2
EDIT: could i get a book with your sign if im not a dummy :3 when you publish it
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You make me feel like I'm some kind of OWF celebrity! Leave that up to Max, Nate, Xavier and those guys. I'm privileged to be in their digital presence.

Anyhow, new story, new character.


CHAPTER ONE

Another day at the arena.

Fangus Klot flexed his tight muscles and watched the ripples of power run down his arm. Once upon a time, he would have thought the sight impressive. But after days, weeks, even months of captivity, having strong muscles was simply a sign of slavery. Only the ones who had to work hard every day could cultivate muscles like these.

It was a totally backwards society these Vamps had. The muscular were seen as the low-class, because the high-class people could afford technology to do everything for them and had almost no muscles.

But the Vamps had no need of muscles. Vamps had a different body structure than Fanguses did, allowing them to perform unOddworldly feats with arms the size of sticks. Klot found it embarrassing when a being a quarter of his weight could defeat him.

But the Vamps wanted Klot. Not because of his muscles, but because of his fierce fighting spirit. The Vamps—conquerors of the entire southern hemisphere—only killed their enemies in battle, but because they desired to see some sport, they took the strongest of the conquered peoples and trained them to fight against enormous beasts taken from the plains of Vamprah, the Vamps’ native country. These “gladiator battles,” as they were named, were the epitome of excellent entertainment in Vamp terms.

Klot was the best of the best gladiators, because he, unlike the others, had a will to live.

All the other gladiators—tough members of other species, including Sligs, Mudokons, Steef, Gloktogi, and Chroniclers—cowered in the shadow of the Vamps’ iron will, and though they did well in the arena, they eventually lost the will to live and let themselves die.

Not Klot. He knew that someday, somehow, someway, something would happen that would free all the captives from the might of the Vamps…but that day couldn’t be today. Today, the Vamps’ star had risen high and his was being ground in the mud of the arena.

He walked down the hallway toward the Pit Entrance, head held high, shoulders thrown back proudly. He was the greatest gladiator in the Vamp Empire, and he knew it.

He just needed to make sure everyone else was aware of that, too.

“Ladies and gentlemen.” The Vamp voice echoed through the Gladiator Complex with the usual soft lull. “Welcome to the greatest gladiatorial match of all time. The match today features Klot, the famous Fangus gladiator, in combat against the granddaddy of all monsters.”

Klot felt a chill run through his bones at these words, but he did not stop walking toward the door, nor did he let any of his anxiety show on his face. He was Klot. He was powerful.

“Klot versus the Zyxlag!”

Klot reached the Pit Entrance; one blow of his fist smashed the lock, and the door swung open. He stepped into the light of the arena floor.

The floor of the pit was hard and unforgiving rock; he had skinned knees, elbows, and face on this floor many more times than he could count. Around the top edges of the pits were the grandstands: hundreds of the most privileged of Vamps gathered around, hissing their approval for the famous gladiator.

Klot threw back his head and roared.

The crowd hissed louder, cheering for his display of power.

A Vamp appeared out of the door behind him. Vamps stood an average of eight feet tall, extremely lanky and thin as bones, their skin a dark brown covered in grayish-brown fur which they kept trimmed to an acceptable level. Their faces were stretched into snouts, and their mouths were full of amazingly sharp teeth built for tearing meat.

The Vamp held two items in his hands: Klot’s six-barrelled repeater pistol, and a sword.

Klot took the weapons wordlessly. The sword he attached to the magnet on his back baldric, while the pistol he took in a two-handed grip, aiming it down at the floor.

“Steady,” he said. “Nothing to fear.”

At ten feet tall, he was taller than most Vamps, and far, far stockier. He was a lot like a Steef in composition, except he only had two thick legs as opposed to the Steefs’ four skinny ones. Five feet across the chest, his muscles would have made any female Klot faint with enthusiasm. He wore nothing but a tattered kilt that fell to his knees, and a broad-brimmed hat that kept his face hidden in shadow from the Vamp television cameras surrounding the ring.

He focused his attention on the huge barred gate at the other end of the pit. So he was to fight the Zyxlag, was he? The largest and most deadly monster in all of Vamprah, its name was a curse and its legacy was a legend.

But Klot was not afraid.

Fear was not a part of him.

“Release the Zyxlag!” the Vamp announcer called.

The gate opened.

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CHAPTER TWO

Four motorcycles plowed across the landscape, throwing dust into the air as they crossed the barren plains of Glukksonia. Their riders were three Sligs – one a soldier, one a country Slig, one a SKRUT special operative – and a strangely blue-skinned Mudokon, all dressed in their best and with guns holstered by their hips.

“Will you turn that stupid music off!?” Abe screamed over his shoulder.

Oner, bouncing his head to the music, shouted back, “Respect the classics, dude!”

“Turn it off!”

Oner shook his head. “Can’t do that, man! Rock an’ roll is my life!”

Abe shook his head and concentrated on driving. Ever since they had left the Mudokons and Sligs behind at the town of Denzling, Oner had been listening to the most awful electric guitars and singing, blasting out of his brand-new helmet-model iPodd. Oner insisted that the infamous Lulu the Glukkon – the very same one that Abe had busted many years ago – had made some great music in his time, but to Abe it was just a bunch of jumping and shredding.

He gunned his controls, and his motorcycle leaped out in the lead. He was tired of talking to Oner, who never seemed to understand that life was a serious business and that sometimes serious situations called for serious thinking about the current situation. But Oner didn’t get it. He just turned up his rock and roll.

Rock and roll, flop and roll,
Abe thought irritably.

He had only known the SKRUT Slig for a few hours now, but it already felt like he had known Oner for hours. SKRUT – Slig Kommando Radical Uber Troopers – were supposed to be the toughest of the tough, the best fighters the Sligs had to throw out, but Oner was the most laid-back, least-serious Slig Abe had ever talked to.

It still felt weird to know that his only companions on this, his newest mission, were all Sligs he had just met this morning.

This morning. The horrible morning when everything had happened.

The prison breakout, Munch’s appearance, the death of Fragg, the arrival of the Keuja, the destruction of Mantin City. It had all happened that same day.

It had been the longest day of Abe’s life.

And now? He was going to a place he had never returned to in his entire career, a place he had hoped never to see again: RuptureFarms. A huge heap of ruin on the west border of Glukksonia, the place where he had passed his first test and become known as the hero he was today.

But RuptureFarms was a plaything in comparison to the monstrosity that was the Keuja. He vividly remembered the nightmarish earthquake the monster had caused that had destroyed the entire front section of Mantin City…

But Bigface’s spirit had told him to return to RuptureFarms if he wanted to stop the Keuja. The knowing would come to him there.

Abe would do just about anything to stop the Keuja now.

“Abe!” The shout came from Cloud, the young Slig who had proved his courage in battle by commandeering a jetcopter and attacking Munch earlier that day. “I think we’ve got trouble!”

Abe glanced briefly over his shoulder –

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oh my odd! that was amazing ! more! more!
oh and if you do ever publish your books, would you be able to send me one? i'll pay as much as you want!
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Thank you. I'll probably have another chapter up later, but right now I'm extremely depressed after arguing for hours in the "God debate" thread.
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Very cool title. Reminds of the "Art of War" by Sun Tzu.
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The title is derived from "God of War," but this fits Oddworld. Sorry this chapter took so long to get out.

CHAPTER THREE

The Zyxlag was a true monster: roughly twenty feet long, it resembled a giant caterpillar, except that its body was caked in tough scales that could reflect nearly any kind of weapon. Two huge arms extended from its sides and ended in huge three-toed claws that could grab him and crush him with little or no effort. Though shaped like a grub, the Zyxlag could move with great speed; it was out of the gate and wriggling across the pit floor in seconds.

In the grandstands above the pit, the Vamps had begun to chant. “Zyx-lag! Zyx-lag! Zyx-lag!”

Klot would have found it annoying, if he had cared.

He was too busy fighting. He threw himself into a sideways roll, pulling back on the trigger of his pistol with both index fingers. Lasers blasted out of each of the six barrels in sequence, pounding the creature’s armored black eyes with fire. The Zyxlag screeched loudly and spat greenish acidic saliva from one of its ten mouths; Klot leapt out of the way and let the acid burn its way into the floor.

Not today, he thought. Nor any other day.

One of its huge clawed hands snapped out for him, and those huge claws filled his vision instantly – Klot rolled in the opposite direction, and reached his right hand up onto his shoulder to grab the energy sword clipped there. When he came up out of his roll, the sword was in his hand, an electric charge streaming down the blade.

The claw reached for him again. “Hi-yaah!” He hacked at it and sent a dazzling burst of lightning up its arm. The creature yanked its arm back, but only to lash out with its other arm from behind.

Klot whirled around, swinging his sword, but the claw was too fast. It caught him in the stomach with devastating force and powered him into the far wall of the arena. He thought he heard something snap inside, and felt as if his guts were on fire.

But he got back up again, deactivating his sword and firing again with his pistol. He was Fangus Klot, the greatest gladiator in the Vamp empire! Even if he was a captive, manipulated for the Vamps’ greedy desires for entertainment, he was powerful and he would let no one down, least of all himself.

The Zyxlag spun around, whipping its huge horned tail at him. Klot ducked, and the breeze from the horns whooshed through the fur atop his head. The tail came back around for the return swing, but Klot was still on the ground, pumping lasers at its unprotected belly with his pistol.

The monster screamed in pain and spun around, launching acid from its mouth. Again Klot rolled away, still on the ground, but part of the saliva caught his left arm, burning away a small portion of skin. His only reaction was to grunt, and switch the settings of his pistol from LINKED FIRE to SIMULTANEOUS FIRE.

Now, when he pulled the trigger, all six barrels fired at once. It would not fire as quickly, but pack more punch when he got a hit.

He got back up to his feet, only in time to see its claw reaching out for him again. This time, there was no time to dodge, and he felt himself grabbed up in its huge claws. Those claws began to constrict around him –

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If anyone is wondering why he's called Klot and not Fangus, Fangus is the name of the species. Klot is his name. I based his character off Stranger's, just taking the cool parts and making them better, since nobody liked Stranger.
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CHAPTER FOUR

Abe saw the other motorcycles approaching down across the plains from behind them, and immediately whipped his head back around to the trail ahead. “Increase speed! We’re being followed!”

Oner immediately gunned his engine and roared his bike forward on the back wheel, but Cloud and Crak both glanced briefly behind them before pressing forward on the speed bars. Abe pushed the bars as far as they would go, and had to struggle to keep his skinny arms on the handlebars as his bike bounced and thudded across the rough wasteland.

He spared another look behind him. Whoever it was, they had quicker bikes; they had already gained a lot of ground on the party of Keuja-stoppers. Abe frowned and kicked at his bike, wishing he could urge more speed out of it.

“C’mon, stinkin’ bike,” he growled. “Faster.”

“Abe, we’re pushing all we can out of them!” Oner replied, as if sensing his thoughts. “We’ll have to bring it to a battle!”

“Not if we can help it!” Abe shook his head. “We’re not built for fighting on bikes!”

Something loud burst behind him, and suddenly the ground ahead was being pockmarked with bullets. Apparently their pursuers had machine guns built into their motorcycles, a very useful feature when chasing after slower bikes.

“Dodge an’ weave, fellas!” Oner shouted. Abe was pleased to note that Oner had actually removed the iPodd from his helmet.

He immediately jerked sideways on his handlebars, steering his bike into a steep skidding turn to the right. Sand and rock sprayed out from under his wheels as he corrected his slide; ahead, Oner was weaving back and forth as if he had been born on a motorcycle. SKRUT were, if nothing else, trained well to do their special operations.

Abe hoped Cloud and Crak could handle themselves well on a bike, because at 55 mph across the open wasteland, it would be a very bad thing to do to crash one’s bike, particularly when being chased by enemies with machine guns on their bikes.

Abe turned his bike back to the left, hearing the bullets whizzing through the air all around him. Some of the bullets struck the hard metal of his tires, and bounded off again. Several of them struck in sequence, and suddenly Abe was sliding across the sand in a harsh diagonal line, leaning quickly toward the ground.

“Wha—!” There was no time to gasp or even to curse. His head was only inches from the ground, and he tried to pull himself back up into the seat, with little avail. His bike spun and skidded, throwing gravel widespread.

Bullets sprayed the ground inches from his leaning face. He yanked on his handlebars in the opposite direction from his fall, and nearly overcorrected and threw his bike over the other way, managing to regain his position in his seat as he did.

"I hate this job," he growled, and threw the speed bar all the way.

Then one of the enemy motorcycles showed itself, as it pulled up alongside him. The bike was painted matte black, with an extended front area and short tail, a machine gun mounted on the hood. Sitting in the seat was –

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CHAPTER FIVE

There was only one last, desperate thing Klot could do, to keep himself from being crushed by the Zyxlag’s closing claws: he powered up his sword and threw it at the beast’s eyes.

There was a thin layer of laser-resistant armor over its eyelids, but they could not stop the lightning from chaining up into its eyes.

The Zyxlag screeched, a horrendous sound that chilled Klot to the bone, and opened its massive claw, flailing its arm to send him spinning away. He hit the floor of the arena and skidded face-first across it, but as soon as he stopped, he was rolling back up to his feet, holding up his pistol.

But it appeared the Zyxlag was finished with fighting. The huge caterpillar was writhing around on the floor in obvious pain, tail and arms lashing out in any and every direction, still emitting that ear-piercing, brain-stopping screech. Klot could not even hear the Vamps; if they were hissing, it would be pleasure, but if they were laughing, it would be disapproval of his actions.

He ducked the Zyxlag’s tail, which again skimmed his head, and felt a great sense of relief. He had beaten this mighty monster, the greatest of all Vamp pit beasts, without help from anyone but his trusty weapons.

Still, he thought, if I hadn’t had the electro-sword, I would have been in deep water.

But he had had the sword, and he had defeated it. Now he just had to make sure it did not crush him in its painful throes, perhaps even death throes. A door hissed open in the side of the pit, and he turned toward it to see one of the Vamp attendants moving toward him.

He could not hear the Vamp through the Zyxlag’s screams of pain, but he could read the mouth: You’ve won! You’ve won! You are the greatest gladiator in all of history, Fangus Klot!

Fangus nodded coldly. Truly, he was the greatest. He knew that for a fact. Never had there been a gladiator who had never lost, before he came along. Klot had beaten his gladiator trainer – a huge Steef – on his first try, and had passed each and every match with differing varieties of ease and pain.

“I am the best,” he said to himself – not in a bragging way, but simply because it was the truth. “I am the best.”

He deactivated his electric sword – ducked a claw-swipe from the Zyxlag – and gave both the blade and the pistol back to the Vamp. It always made him heavy-hearted to return his weapons; no captive, even the greatest gladiator in history, was allowed to keep weapons on his person in the Vamp Empire.

But his sorrow for being a captive was completely eliminated by his joy at being a winner. The only time he had ever lost a fight was when the Vamps had come through the Fangus’ grassland territory, burning and pillaging as they came, and killed his father and brother, enslaved his people, and eaten his whole flock of Devil Sheep.

Someday, he would have revenge. But first…

Klot entered the exit passage, and spread his shoulders as wide as they would go. First, he would bask in the glory of his might.

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Thanks! Fangus is already obviously a flawed hero, as he shows absolutely no modesty in defeating the Zyxlag and declaring himself the greatest in a matter-of-fact way.
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CHAPTER SIX

An Intern?

Abe kicked his bike into a harsh slide to the right, speeding his cycle toward that of the Intern. What was that creature doing? It looked almost exactly like those of Vykkers labs, except in replacement of their ball caps they had bowl helmets for save motorcycle travel. A Snuzi gun was strapped down near its feet.

The Intern’s reaction was to jerk ahead, but Abe’s slide could not be stopped. The Intern snarled – revealing that its lips had not been sewn shut – and spun left. Abe ducked his head out of the way of the Intern’s high handlebars, and the two bikes missed each other by mere inches, throwing dust high in the air.

Before Abe could even correct his spin, the Intern had whipped around to come about right behind him. The machine gun blazed, and hot lead zinged through the air, rebounding from Abe’s bike and nearly connecting with his foot.

Like that attachment, do you? Abe thought, taking his feet momentarily off their places. Well, try this!

He suddenly threw the gearshift into FULL REVERSE and turned right. The Intern’s bike sped past him, so close this time that it took some of the paint off and would have taken off Abe’s leg had he not moved it out of the way. The Intern tried to reverse as well, but Abe threw the bike back into FORWARD and sped by the enemy again, leaving the Intern choking in his dust.

Abe realized that his heart was actually beating quicker than usual. Is it my mind going crazy on me, he wondered, or am I actually enjoying this?

He took his mind off his driving for an instant to check on the other party members. Oner was whooping like a demon, firing off his pistol at two Interns who were trying to get the better of him. Crak and Cloud…

Abe grimaced. Oh no. No, no. Not now…

Crak lay facedown on the sand behind them, a long skid trail leading from his downed bike. Cloud had dismounted beside him, and stood over the fallen Slig with laser weapon in hand, firing at the Interns circling around. The Interns had not yet started firing their weapons, but Abe knew they would.

Abe snarled, then pulled on the handlebars and swung into a banking turn back toward Crak and Cloud. Why did he have to do this? Why had he even agreed to have two untrained Sligs in his party, when it could have just been him and Oner, the best of their two kinds? Now he was going to suffer for allowing them on his team!

But, after all, this is what heroes do.

He hoped Oner wouldn’t just speed off into the desert; if they were going to help Crak, they needed all the firepower they could muster. Abe braked beside the two Sligs so hard he fell forward over the handlebars, but he managed to turn his awkward stop into a somersault, coming up beside Cloud.

“Keep firing!” he shouted. “Shoot the Interns or their engines!”

“Can’t you see I’m trying!?” Cloud roared, his voice strained as he pumped away flashing bolts at the Interns.

Abe pulled his carbine out of its holster. “Don’t talk back, soldier. Didn’t your trainers ever tell you that?”

The Interns began to close in…

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CHAPTER SEVEN

The instant Klot exited the gladiator’s section of the stadium, he was met with a rousing ovation of hisses and sneers from the crowd of Vamps, all baring their teeth in a display of their widespread approval. He accepted their enthusiasm with slight nods toward various dignitaries spread among the crowds, giving little bits of acknowledgement toward those in charge.

He did not smile. He was not just happy that he had beaten the Zyxlag and become the greatest gladiator in the history of the Vamp Empire, he had been the greatest Fangus ever to exist, surpassing all achievements set by his entire species before him. Just the thought of that was staggering, to say the least…except that he’d known he was greater since his birth.

I am Fangus Klot, he thought to himself, and imagined shouting it aloud. Fear and honor me as I am due.

Suddenly, the hissing of the crowds ceased, and a long line began to form in the crowds. Klot recognized what was happening: one of the important Vamps had arrived and the others were forming an aisle for him and his guards to walk through.

The guards were taller Vamps than normal, dressed in shining silver armor and wielding strange guns that looked more organic than object, faint wisps of blue energy lacing up and down the twisting barrels. These Vamps were the best of the best, their faces concealed behind HUDs of helmets: the Imperial Guard.

Behind them came Emperor Essir himself. Or, as Klot usually thought of him, Emperor Fathead.

Essir was not the fittest of Vamps; not only was he quite round around the waist, his tall batlike ears were slightly drooped, as if he were not strong enough to keep them at full-mast all the day. Still, there was no denying that his apparel was regal enough; from the way the garments shimmered and slid around his wide frame, Klot estimated they must have cost more than a million denarcs.

Out of protocol rather than respect, Klot bowed his head and bent his knee in obeisance to the ruler of the Vamp Empire. “My emperor,” he said quietly.

The Imperial Guard spread out, forming a semicircle around Essir’s sides and back, staring coldly at the crowds of Vamps that surrounded the emperor. The Inrik guns they carried seemed to pulse brighter as they were turned slowly to point at many of the Vamps, as if the Inriks themselves longed for their wielders to pull the triggers.

“Gladiator Klot,” Essir returned. His voice was deep rather than high, an oddity in Vamps, but one that made him sound impressive – his voice was not unlike that of Klot himself. “You understand that you have surpassed all beforegone records and defeated the challenges of the arena.”

“I do.”

Essir shook his head slowly. “Then you must also understand that I have no further use for you.”

Klot felt his blood run cold as ice. “What?”

“A gladiator who has no further challenges is of no entertainment to anyone,” Essir said. “You must remember, Klot, that you are but a slave; to give you wealth and peace for the rest of your life would be merciful…too merciful.”

Klot slowly rose to his feet; he stood a good half-head taller than the emperor, and his muscles stood out like cords on his arms. “I could kill you where you stand –”

“And my guards would kill you in return.” The emperor shook his head. “Do not pretend to be serious, Klot.”

Essir leaned forward and said softly, “I have not yet said what is to become of you.”

Klot breathed in and out deeply. “I am a slave. You would have me return to that life and help build your empire.”

The most unexpected thing happened: Essir began to laugh. The Vamp sound for disapproval was not at all what Klot had been expecting, for it meant he had given the emperor the wrong answer. Slowly, the crowd around them also began to laugh – not because they understood, but because they always had to agree with their emperor.

“Look at this wretch,” Essir scorned. “He thinks I would ever let him live.”

Klot felt his breath leave him. “You…what?”

“You heard me.” The emperor folded his hands behind his back and turned to walk away. “Guards? Execute him.”

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CHAPTER EIGHT

Oner had managed to defeat both his opponents with some quick shooting from his SKRUT-model pistol, when he suddenly noticed that Abe, Cloud, and Crak were no longer anywhere in the area.

Incompetence, he thought. Defeats the idea of having partners at all…

But the point of this whole mission depended on Abe, and Oner wasn’t one to dismiss his duty, even if he did take it lax some of the time. Most of the time, even. So he kicked his bike into a sharp turn and rocketed back across the wastelands.

He scanned the terrain, glancing at each bump and dust cloud. Why’d I ever agree to team up with anyone besides Edur? Oh, yeah, ‘cause of that stinkin’ Keuja-thing that’s tearin’ everything up…

He saw flashes of white light from somewhere to the side, and turned his head in that direction. His eyes widened, as he saw several Interns on motorcycles going in a direct line for the other three members of his party.

Oner grinned, and toed his bike faster. “Not in my turf ya don’t.”

He saw where the white flashes had come from: Abe was standing in place, his hands put together at his chest, his head bowed. Oner recognized it as his famous “possession” stance.

Possession of minds, Oner thought. That’s something that could be even more useful than an electro-nunchuk…

One of the Interns gasped as Abe’s consciousness entered his body, and Oner grinned as that Intern threw himself into a swerving turn into one of the other riders. The two motorcycles crashed to the dusty ground in a squealing tangle of metal and flesh.

Nice one, Oner thought. But can you do this?

Oner reached down to the gun at his side and yanked it free. Settling his arm into a classic shooter’s stance, he gripped the handlebars with one hand and took aim on one of the Intern’s heads. He pulled back on the trigger and that Intern toppled sideways off his bike; his legs were strapped onto the bike, so the body scraped the ground in the instants before the motorcycle crashed.

“Yo!” Oner raised his gun and fired into the air. “Leave us alone, you buzzards!”

One of the Interns glanced over his shoulder at Oner – and Cloud’s lasers took him through the chest. That’s a bunch down an’ a bunch to go, Oner told himself, and took a bead on another –

Then there were more bullets fired from behind him, and he felt a hot pain in his legs, and the world turned black –

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CHAPTER NINE

Klot had not seen the Imperial Guard at work before, but he knew that to be given the privilege of guarding the emperor, they had to be pretty impressive when they unloaded their guns into someone, and Klot didn’t want to stand around and become that someone. As the guards whirled toward him, moving for Emperor Essir to pass between them, raising their Inriks to their shoulders to fire, Klot moved.

He threw himself forward into a roll, grabbing the first guard around the ankles with his huge hands, attempting to plow the guard off his feet. The guard fell forward with a short cry – but before Klot could take advantage of it, the other guards fired their Inriks. Klot dove to the side, allowing seven bolts of Inric energy to blast the fallen guard to death.

All around him, the crowd of Vamps were running for their lives, screeching aloud in fear. Some males were pulling pistols from their pockets in self-defense, but Klot had no time to take notice of them; he was too busy putting his hard-earned gladiator skill’s to use against the emperor’s guards.

Inric bolts sizzled and fried the air around him, some spattering out against the stone floor of the Gladiator Complex. Klot rolled around on the floor, trying to get out of the way of the guard’s shots. He had no plan in mind except survival; was he going to merely escape the complex, or if he was going to fight back against the guards.

Any way he looked at the problem, he was still a wanted being. He ducked an Inric charge that would have blown his head off. Wanted by the Vamps, no less, the beings with the largest empire on Oddworld. What was he going to do even if he made it out of this deathtrap, past these super-armored Imperial Guards who were no longer even guarding their emperor –

That was it! That was the answer! If he could take Emperor Essir hostage –

He was so taken up by his momentary thought that he did not think to keep up his pattern of ducking and dodging, and an Inric bolt flew straight and true at him from behind.

Inric bolts were the Vamps’ greatest creations in war. Since the Vamps wanted land for their empire, they did not want weapons that caused overextreme collateral damage, they had designed the Inrics. Inric energy, tapped from the natural reserves of light and darkness combined, did damage to living flesh and bones only, causing no damage whatsoever to vegetation and inanimate matter. Of course, there was always the threat of armored enemy war machines, but the Inric guns always had extra mounted laser devices on the sides that could burn through almost anything.

Thus it was that, though the Inric bolt struck his hand, it did not burn through it; instead, the energy contained in the bolt dispersed through the bloodstream of his hand, setting his nerves afire. Klot fell to the floor, screaming in pain. Behind him, he could hear the footsteps of the Imperial Guards as they moved in for the kill –

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CHAPTER TEN

Abe couldn’t remember the last time he had felt so groggy. His head spun and whirled as if he were in the washing machine set on Turbo Mode, and the land around his eyes was covered in darkness. Either it was night, or he was simply in a place where no light could get through.

He sat up, pushing himself up with one arm, and groaned. He was sore all over, more than he had been after a hard day’s labor at RuptureFarms. The ground under his hand was made of large rocks, and was certainly not the most soothing substance for his aching body to lie on.

But at least he wasn’t chained, and all his limbs were still attached.

Abe decided not to waste time asking thin air where on Oddworld he was. Instead, he twisted his head around in a quick semicircle, peering into the gloom that surrounded him.

Mudokon eyes were not the best in the darkness, but he began to make out shapes nearby. Three Sligs lay on the ground around him…probably Cloud, Crak, and Oner, though he couldn’t be sure with the bad lighting. And standing in a circle around the four of them were –

Abe blinked several times, trying to get the better of the darkness. What were those tall, catlike creatures standing around them, holding guns that glowed with blue energy?

He pushed himself up onto his knees –

“Down!” one of the creatures ordered, in a voice that was strangely soft and smooth. “Don’t make me shoot you.”

Abe sat back down again, nodding. “So I see taking a quick walk is out of the question…”

He turned and slapped one of the Sligs. “Hey. Rise and shine.”

The Slig yawned and stretched, opening his eyes. “Shine, you say? I sure could use a little light to brighten things up…”

Abe frowned. It was Oner, of course. “You recognize our captors?”

“Those guys?” Oner sat up and shrugged. “If I had my helmet, I could…but they probably stole it, whoever the Odd they are.”

Abe sat silently in the darkness, staring around at the catlike beings with a thousand questions running through his head. Who were they? What were their intentions? Why had he never seen beings like that before? What were they doing here now? What kind of guns were they wielding? What were they going to do to their captives? What had happened to the Interns?

This was one of the times Abe really, really wished he had a good gun with him. And preferably a whole regiment of Mudarchers to back him up…

Looks like I’ll have to make do without those, he thought.

“Whaddaya say we do?” Oner whispered.

“You’re the expert. You tell me.”

Oner shrugged. “Hey, gimme a weapon an’ I’m a powderkeg. But weaponless, armorless, and helmetless…all I’ve got to fight ‘em with is my stinging wit.”

“Sometimes that’s all we have.” Abe frowned. “I could try to possess one of them, but they’d probably shoot me before I could get a hold of one of them.”

“I can cause a distraction.” Oner grinned past his face-tentacles. “I’m good at that sort of thing….Then while they’re occupied with you, you possess one of the hairy freaks.”

Abe’s frown grew deeper. This wasn’t much of a plan, but, hey, it was a plan. “Wake Cloud and Crak and inform them of the plan. I’ll check how well trained these creeps are.”

Oner nodded and turned to the two unconscious Sligs. Abe picked up a chunk of rock the size of his head and threw it overhand at one of their guards.

One second, the rock was there, flying toward one guard’s head. The next, the rock was blown to pieces by a sudden laser that came from the guard’s gun.

“A foolish attempt,” one of the guards hissed. “You seem to think we Vamps are so easily defeated.”

So these things were Vamps? Abe grinned fearlessly. “Any good prisoner has to know his guards’ capacity before he attempts escape.”

“Attempts,” the Vamp repeated. “Not successful.”

“We’ll see,” Abe replied.

“We have orders to keep you alive and guarded, blue one…do not make me cross the line.”

Abe turned to the three Sligs, who were all awakened by this time. Oner had already told them about the plan in that short time.

“I don’t think it’ll work,” Abe said. “These guys seem professional.”

“An easy enemy,” Crak muttered under his breath. “Someday, we’ll fight an easy enemy. Just spit in his face an’ he’ll go away…like that’s ever going to happen.”

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CHAPTER ELEVEN

Emperor Essir stacked the papers on his desk and shook his head. Ever since his guards had killed the famous gladiator Fangus Klot and thrown his body into the waste management facility to become something useful, more and more papers of complaint had come in from Vamps throughout the empire because he had terminated their favorite form of entertainment.

He folded his manicured fingers and set them on the desk, staring at his ever-present secretary. “I don’t want any more of these complaint letters to get through to me,” the emperor growled. “They’re becoming a nuisance. Don’t they realize that Klot was of no further use to anyone, since he had completed all his challenges? And he was just a slave!”

“He gave hope to other slaves,” his secretary said. “They’re working – ”

“That is something I cannot abide!” Essir shook his head. “We can’t have slaves with hope.”

The secretary looked bemused. “Why, my lord?”

“I can’t believe I’m not having you flogged for this.” The emperor tapped his fingertips against each other impatiently, adopting a reprimanding tone. “Any slave with hope for the future will try to escape from us. It is the law of slave and empire.”

“They’re working harder – ”

“Just because they think they’ll achieve some kind of freedom if they gain ranks in the slaves!” Essir pointed out. “There is no other reason.”

The secretary looked quite grim. “What is your command, my lord?”

Essir pounded the desk. “About what?”

“About the slaves. What shall we do about their hope?”

“That…” Essir rested his chin on his thumbs, pondering the question in his mind. It was an easy enough thing to recognize this hope as a threat, and completely another thing to know what to do about it. “On that case, I will have to ponder. Leave me.”

“Yes, my lord.” The secretary bowed and backed out of the room.

Emperor Essir sighed and leaned back in his chair. He had thought it would be an excellent idea to rid his people of Fangus Klot; the gladiator was too powerful and too strong-willed to be a good slave, and the people loved him almost as much as they did their emperor. It was all for Essir’s – and the empire’s – good that Klot had been put down.

But apparently the people didn’t think so…

Essir smiled. He knew just the way to remove hope from the slaves and raise his popularity with the people…and it was in perfect barbaric fashion, too.

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