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09-20-2001, 02:00 PM
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Wilfred's Beginning

This is a very short story. I hope you like it.

The Slig and the Vykker watched the egg. The shell started cracking. Finally, a male Mudokon had pushed his way through. He wasn't an ordinary Mudokon, though. For one thing, he was fertile. But the most unusual thing about him was his body itself. He was white, with a blue spot on his stomach. His white eyes were almond shaped and had a natural blue "armor" around them. Instead of three fingers, he had five. His arms were more like wings, even though he couldn't fly. He also had a white tail that tapered down to a point, with a blue spike on either side of the tip. On his back, in an alternating double-row, were several long, blue, rectangular plates, more for defense than attack. His ponytail was a light blue, and no other color. The Slig watched the Mudokon hybrid for a while, to see that it was breathing properly, then called in his Glukkon boss, Grenhik. "Ah, good. It hatched." "Sir?" "Yes, I can see that he's fertile. He was created that way, wasn't he?" "Sir." the Slig persisted. "What!?" "He's standing up." The three watched in amazement as the two-minute-old hybrid pulled himself up and took four shaky steps. Finally, Grenhik said, "Well, I think that the search for a perfect slave is finally over." "But, sir," the Vykker interrupted, "every slave must have a name." Grenhik only thought for a moment, then said, "Wilfred." "Wilfred?" Wilfred thought, "Is that my name?"

Eight years later, Wilfred was miserable. He had the meanest Slig in the Barracks. Of course, he was stuck polishing the floor. The Slig guard, Crelik, walked past him, patrolling. Wilfred's arm was getting a cramp. He switched to the other one, but that did him no good. Crelik saw him stop to rest his arm, and pretended to be coming back on the patrol route. He stopped when he reached Wilfred. He raised his gun. Then, as he brought it down, Wilfred crouched and tucked his head under. The plates on his back folded down and interlocked, forming an armor. Crelik's gun struck the armor, and the butt broke off. It hit the newly polished floor and slid off a ledge. All the bullets tumbled out the back, which wasn't there anymore.
"What the-" Crelik was scared now. He called Grenhik in, and told him what had happened. Grenhik looked down at the crouching Wilfred. "Get up!" he commanded. Wilfred stood up and turned to face him. "How did you know that Crelik was about to beat you?" Wilfred could only stare. How had he known? More importantly, how could he answer whan he didn't even know for himself?

Tell me what you think. Look for the second (and final) chapter at 4:00 p.m. tomorrow at the most.
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09-20-2001, 02:12 PM
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It's a good story. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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09-20-2001, 05:26 PM
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4:00pm which time?

nice fic though...i like it...
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09-20-2001, 06:20 PM
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Oh, sorry about any confusion I may have caused about the time. What I meant was 4:00 p.m. U.S. Central time. Oops. There goes another of the many blunders I make on the World Wide Web. Sorry.
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09-20-2001, 08:41 PM
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I didn't mean to double-post, but I can't stand to keep people in suspense if I have a lot of free time. So, here it is.

Four years later, the incident was all but forgotten. Crelik wouldn't touch him with a sixty-foot pole. (He wouldn't even get that close, anyway) Grenhik moved him to Feeco Depot, where Ghirak, the very same Slig that had witnessed his hatching, volunteered to guard him. He was much nicer than Crelik. He never beat Wilfred, and would share information when he got it. One day, Wilfred asked, "Ghirak, why am I so different from the other Mudokons?" Ghirak responded, "You are a crossbreed." "I'm a hybrid?! I already know that one half of me is Mudokon. But, what's the other half?" Ghirak chuckled, then said, "It's a long story." "I don't mind. I'll even work while you're telling me." "Okay, here goes. The other half of your genes comes from a species of bird called Luna." At the word "Luna", an image materialized in Wilfred's mind. A white bird with white, almond shaped eyes that had armor around them. A tapered tail with a blue spike on either side. Long, blue, rectangular plates on its back. A long neck and hand like wings completed the image. Ghirak continued, "Lunas are nocturnal and live in the mountainous regions of Oddworld. They are very plentiful and multiply like rabbits. Does that explain it for you?" "Yes, but how was I able to sense that Crelik was about to beat me? And, when you said 'Luna', why did an image form, even though I knew nothing about them?" Ghirak thought for a moment, then said, "Oh, I almost forgot! Lunas have psychic abilities. You must have inherited them." Just then, Ghirak was called to a meeting. "I'll see you later, Wilfred." Wilfred thought nothing of it and continued polishing. Then, he sensed concern and worry. He searched further, and found out that it was Ghirak. Ghirak came running back a few minutes later, and said, "Wilfred! We have to get out of here! The Glukkons have decided to start using Mudokons as a food source! Come with me!" Wilfred got up, and ran after Ghirak. In a hallway, two Sligs caught them. The Sligs tied them up in a room with several pedestals. Grenhik was standing on one of them. He hopped down as one Slig pulled out a whip. "Start with the Mudokon." Grenhik told the Slig. In the instant that the Slig pulled back the whip, Wilfred searched Grenhik's mind. As the whip whizzed through the air, Wilfred focused on it, and his eyes glowed. The whip suddenly curved as if it had a mind of its own. It hit Grenhik directly on top of his brain lobe. Grenhik screamed in pain and collapsed. Both Sligs turned and ran as fast as they could in the opposite direction. Wilfred's eyes glowed again, and the ropes that bound them untied themselves. Both of them started running. They were almost at the door, and they had several Sligs chasing them. The door was closing fast. "Wilfred," Ghirak yelled, "roll!" "But, what about you?" "I'll hold them off! You just get out of here!" Wilfred folded his back plates down and rolled out the door. As it was closing, Wilfred heard a gunshot, and Ghirak screaming. He ran away from the factory as fast as he could, tears streaming down his face.

When Wilfred had stopped crying, he found he was in a forest. There were many trees and bushes around, and at least half of them had fruit growing. Wilfred knew he had many things to do: Build a shelter, find a good food source, survive, perfect his psychic skills, and make friends. The good thing was: He had the rest of his life to do it.

The end (for now)

How did you like this one? I'm planning on a plot where four seperate storylines become one. (grumbles) Oh, great Now I have to think up another one.
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09-21-2001, 08:11 PM
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09-22-2001, 08:22 PM
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That's a good story, Super slig, and... uh, wait a moment. *reads last part again* Hey, have you been reading my thoughts? That was exactly what I was planning to do! That with four stories becoming one... Oh well, exellent fic, super-sliggy

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09-22-2001, 09:24 PM
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nice fic...

to think, i used to read only factual stuff. now all i read is fact & fanfics...
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