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Undercover Operations

here's my fic. i had it on a word doc, but i don't know what people are gonna do if they only had it on the boards.

UNDERCOVER OPERATIONS

PROLOGUE

As he approached the fence, Orim paused, wondering, not for the first time, whether this was a good idea. Despite what people told him, he didn’t believe that the Glukkons would have built this fence without good reason. Glukkons aren’t known for throwing away hard-earned profits, after all.

He turned back, and saw the others looking at him, expectantly. They’d all been over the wall, including his brother, Arim. If he turned back now, he’d be a laughing stock forever.

He approached the gap in the fence, heart pounding. The story told to them by the shamans was that the Glukkons had tried to exploit the Great Forest, but that something had stopped them, and they had covered up the whole operation, and built the Wall out of frustration at the forest, or possibly to keep in whatever had kept them out. There were creatures in there that Mudokons know only from myths and stories, or so the rumours go. Certainly those few brave individuals who have explored deep into the dark depths have told of strange beasts, or at least unknown creatures.

He steeled himself as he reached the bushes that masked the gap from the slig patrols. He parted the bushes, and peered through the gap.

If anything, he felt disappointed. He had expected the other side to be dark and humid, like he’d been taught the jungle was like at ground level. What he saw was a grassy hill, not unlike the one his friends were waiting on behind him. He shielded his eyes from the glare of the bright Odd sun, and tried to estimate the height of the hill. Not big enough to hide the trees, if he could believe the rumours of their size. Of course, it’d be stupid to expect to see full size trees. After all, this was the edge of the forest. Even so, he’d have expected to see something.

He decided to climb the hill out of curiosity. It’d be a shame to come this far and not see even one tree. He didn’t know what to expect, but he never would have expected what he saw. He gasped.

“The others have to hear about th–”

CHAPTER 1

“So, are we all here?”

Rettick groaned. He wondered why Greeb bothered asking. It wouldn’t make any difference if someone wasn’t, nothing important was ever said here. The Slig Revolutionary Movement was a joke. In the past, there’d been hundreds of them, and Glukkons would shiver at the mention of their name. And now? 10 members. Ten. There was no hope of revolution here; they should change their name to the Slig Getting-the-hell-out-of-here Movement; that was all they ever planned. Or thought about planning.

He glanced round idly, and noticed something. Surprisingly, they weren’t all there. He made a quick metal count of the others, and only saw seven. He wondered who was missing. Greeb was there, of course, sounding inspiring despite having next to nothing to say. Tillyn, optimistic as ever, was completely taken in by Greeb’s tough talking. Rettick wasn’t sure, but there was definitely something… Odd about Tillyn. Gormanul was his usual silent self. Crim was sulking about something; Odd knows he’s got a lot to sulk about. Jal, one of the Muds, was the only person apart from Greeb to be saying anything; he was going off on one of his rants again. Meet was sitting thoughtfully on the desk, while Sillan buzzed around his head.

Who did that leave?

“Where’s Sal? And Groz?” Rettick asked, making Greeb pause just as he was getting to the really good part of his speech.

Greeb looked round, and noticed that they were two members short. “Well, erm… I’m not sure. Who answered their names?” In fact, no-one had answered any names, but Greeb didn’t like to admit that he wasn’t paying attention.

“Shush…” whispered Gormanul, which was a particularly long sentence for him.

The room went silent, and they could hear footsteps. Not metallic, so not slig footsteps, it was probably a mud or a glukkon. They all held their breath.

Groz rounded a corner, at full speed, and would have been waving his arms if he had any. “Patrols! They’re checking all the Barrack rooms for mud slaves hiding under bunks and things! They killed Sal as she slept, and they’re moving fast!”

CHAPTER 2

“Quick, take up the floor panels!” cried Rettick, “Jal, you take Meet and Sillan down below and keep quiet! Greeb, Gorm, you’d better go too!”

Greeb shook his head, “No, we can stay up here, we could pretend we work here, like you and Tillyn. You’d better go though, Groz.”

Groz bit his lip and nodded in agreement, and hurried nervously out of the door.

Greeb glanced at Rettick, “Poor Kid,” he said, sympathetically. Grozit Jr. was the adopted son of the factory manager, Grozit Senior, and lived in constant fear of being found to be involved with revolutionaries, even if they were pathetic revolutionaries.

“Perhaps we’d better act normal, and pretend we don’t know they’re coming,” suggested Crim from the floor. A couple of years back, Crim had been involved in an accident, and broke his spine just above the tail. It had been thought not to be serious, but it had resulted in his being unable to use the Vykkers’ mechanical add-ons, like Pants or Wings. The Glukkons had judged him to be unable to continue profitably with his job, and he now lived on Glukkon Disability Benefit – ‘Shut Up, Stop Whining, and Look After Yourself!’ Having to fend for himself had given Crim a pessimistic outlook on life, and a very practical nature.

“You’re right,” Tillyn agreed, and fell onto his bunk, faking sleep. Crim and Rettick sat down to a game of Gales [the slig version of Draughts], while Greeb and Gormanul pretended to exercise.

“Right, lads,” shouted the sergeant Slig, who led the patrol into the chamber, “We want to look everywhere, leave no stone unturned. Crax, you check those cupboards, Taarl, you check under the bunks – All of them, including the ones folded into the wall – Briori, Tunk, you keep an eye on these five, they look guilty about something.”

“But Drak, - ” began the slig addressed as Tunk.

“You’ll call me Sir, I could have you thrown in the pits!”

Tunk grimaced, “Sorry Sir, but shouldn’t this lot be at work now?”

Rettick shot Tunk a quick look of hatred, and vowed to kill him if he ever had the chance.

Drak, thought for a second, “Yeah, you pieces of shit, why aren’t you at work? Get to your posts!” They began to move reluctantly towards the doorway. “Wait! The Boss said we should look out for volunteers for some suicide mission he’s got to send out. By not doing anything useful, I think you’ve just volunteered! Come on, guys, this lot don’t have the intelligence to hide anything, you’d better move on, Taarl, you’re in charge, I’ll catch up later, I gotta take these ‘volunteers’ to the Boss!”

“Yessir,” Taarl and the others filed out.

“Alright, you lot, follow me, except you,” Drak addressed Crim, “You’re a cripple, aren’t you? You just make yourself useful somehow!” and he led Rettick, Greeb, Tillyn, and Gormanul away.

CHAPTER 3

After Drak had taken the others out, Crim banged on the floor.

“Guys, they’ve gone, and they took the others with them!”

At Crim’s signal, Jal’s one arm pushed up one of the floor panels.

“With them? Where?” he asked, urgently, as Meet and Sillan joined them.

“I don’t know!” Crim whined, “The Sergeant said they’d been volunteered for something, so they’ve probably been taken to the Drill Hall!”

“Then let’s go!” exclaimed Jal decisively, “We can at least see where they’re being sent to.”

“What if we’re spotted?” pointed out Meet, stopping Jal in his tracks.

“Well, we’ve been able to move around before, haven’t we?” asked Jal.

“Yes,” replied Crim, “But only with one of the others pretending to be guarding us. Now that they’re not with us, heads will turn our way.”

“And then heads will roll,” muttered Meet cynically.

“Well, what if Sillan pretended to be some new kind of Slig flying equipment for you, Crim?”

Sillan buzzed angrily.

“Are you Crazy?” shouted Crim, “I’m not sitting on him! We’ve never had a test flight, what if he malfunctions under my weight?”

“He’s carried mining equipment before, hasn’t he?” pointed out Meet, not knowing how close he was to an untimely end.

Fortunately for Meet, Crim would never have been able to reach his neck, so he settled for a hard stare.

Sillan beeped urgently.

Meet cocked his head briefly, listening to Sillan, “Yes, but you’ve never had problems with balance before, have you?” Meet’s nasty experiences under the knife of the Vykkers had left him with small Slig-type mechanical legs, permanently attached, a mechanical arm, and an almost telepathic understanding with Sillan, a prototype of the Drones, the next generation of Magog Security [fast, efficient, unpossessable, and best of all requiring no wages. The only reason Sillan was rejected was because he had opinions]

Sillan bleeped insistently.

“Well, I suppose you’re right,” confessed Meet.

“Well, what did he say?” asked Jal.

“He said he might unbalance when the weight is on top of him.”

“Thank Odd!” Crim offered up a silent prayer of thanks.

They sat around, thinking.

“So, are you, like, totally incapable of wearing the pants, Crim?” enquired Jal.

“I can wear them, but I can’t control them, because of my severed nerves.”

Jal looked thoughtful, “Sillan could control them…”

Crim almost exploded: “I’ve told you, I don’t want to put my trust in that lump of metal.”

Sillan bleeped his agreement.

“He says he wouldn’t put his trust in a chunk of meat, either!” translated Meet.

Crim’s eyes narrowed.

CHAPTER 4

When Orim awoke it was too dark to see anything. The last thing he remembered was a sharp pain on the back of his head, and then darkness. He tried desperately to remember where this had been. Over the wall, he thought, My Rites of Passage. I had to go over to prove myself. But he couldn’t remember seeing the trees. Had he dreamed it all? No, he thought, My bedroom is lighter than this; Where are my fireflies? That led him to the uncomfortable question of where he was now.

The floor, for he felt sure nothing this hard could be a bed, was cold. He banged the floor. Metal. That ruled out a cave, and he realised that it also meant that he was unlikely to be among friends, as all his friends had stone or wooden floors.

He forced himself to sit up. Now that his eyes had gotten accustomed to the dark, he could see that it wasn’t really pitch black, but that there was a faint purple light coming from somewhere [it was too faint to make out where; it seemed to come from all the walls, floor and ceiling]. What makes purple light? he asked himself, Nothing natural. Crap.

The Glukkons. That had been what he’d seen. Instead of acres of trees, he’d seen a desolate wasteland full of Glukkon machinery and Slig guards, as well as a few things he didn’t recognise. It didn’t make sense. He’d always been told that they couldn’t cut down the trees in the Great Forest. After all, if they could, why hadn’t they before? This raised a lot of questions, but answered one: He was obviously in a prison cell.

He felt around on the floor, thinking that there’d be prison food, when suddenly he was blinded by a sudden rush of light from a doorway that just opened to his left. As he watched, the light was blocked again by some all-too-familiar shapes…

CHAPTER 5

“Ok, does that feel comfortable?”

Crim trembled, making himself wobble on his legs. As Jal steadied him, he addressed Sillan: “If I fall off, you’re scrap, understand?”

Sillan bleeped. Meet stifled a laugh, and made no attempt to translate for the others.

Jal cleared his throat. “So, the Drill Hall, then?”

Crim swallowed, and nodded. “Let’s go, then.”


When Grozit Jr. returned to the bunkroom to find it empty, he immediately assumed the worst.

“Guys? You there? What happened…?”

He banged on the floor panels but got no response. He looked for a note or something to say where they’d gone, and when he didn’t find one he looked for traces of blood.

“C’mon, where are you?” he whispered desperately. He was so busy searching for clues that might lead him to the others that he didn’t notice a figure loom in the doorway.

“Ah, Junior, there you are.”

Grozit Junior spun round and found himself face to face with Grozit Senior. {Writer’s Note: From now on, Grozit Jr. will be known as Groz, and Grozit Sr. as Grozit. It’s simpler that way}

“It’s about time you and I had a little talk…”

CHAPTER 6

Rettick had never seen a Vykker before, and now there was one right before him. They were in the Drill Hall, along with about 50 other Sligs. Greeb, Tillyn, and him were stood together on the front row, but Gormanul had been stood at the back with the Bigbro Sligs.

“…Very dangerous and possibly mad.” The Vykker, despite being just over half the height of the Glukkons, seemed to be running the talk, and Snikkit, the Glukkon Vice-Moolahmaker of the factory, could barely get a word in edgeways. “He was last seen heading towards the forest, and as this was the nearest large-scale industry in the area…” [he and Snikkit exchanged glances suspiciously. Rettick wondered what they were up to] “…we decided to base our search here.”

Apparently, one of the scientists had been working on a formula that did something to people’s bodies [Rettick had never been good with scientific words] that enabled them assume any shape they wished at will. Unfortunately for the Vykkers, he had then ‘gone mad’ and run away, taking the formula with him.

A Slig, wearing pants Rettick didn’t recognise, tapped the Vykker on the shoulder. The Vykker covered the microphone with a hand, and the slig whispered something in his ear. The Vykker looked shocked.

“…Escaped?” he exclaimed, before remembering the audience and lowering his voice again. After a heated exchange, he uncovered the microphone and spoke into it.

“There appear to have been some… complications. Dr Mildar was working on a particular project at the time of his, err, madness. It appears that, while we were focused on recapturing our professor, one of these creatures has been neglected and allowed to escape. It appears to be heading in the direction of the forest, so…” [he exchanged a glance with Snikkit. There was definitely something going on there, Rettick thought] “…there shouldn’t be any serious problems. Just keep your eyes open.

“I am pleased to note,” he continued, “the high turnout here. It is good that so many of you volunteered for this mission, but there is really no need for such a large operation. A small party, possibly 10 or so, is all that will be necessary. Thank you.” The Vykker sat down. He seemed unhappy at what he had just said, and Rettick guessed that Grozit and Snikkit hadn’t let him have as many as he wanted. He noticed Drak, the slig who had brought them here, moving among the crowd, picking out sligs to join the party. He reached Rettick.

“Oh, it’s you, is it? Well, I think you and your friends will be just desperate to go on this suicide mission, won’t you?”

Rettick gritted his teeth. “I suppose so, sir.”

“Right, you’re in.” Drak addressed Snikkit, “I’ve selected some of our best, sir!”

“Well done,” Snikkit congratulated him, “You will, of course, be leading the party, won’t you?”

“Me? But, I’ve worked hard! I picked out the volunteers!”

Snikkit smiled, “As you said, we need the best on this mission.”

Drak’s face fell, and Rettick almost felt sorry for him. He suspected that Snikkit probably thought that Drak was getting a bit too powerful, and wanted rid of him.

Snikkit addressed the crowd, “Oh, by the way, whether or not you have been selected for the mission, all of you will be kept in solitary confinement until the operation is complete. After all, we wouldn’t want any vicious rumours being spread, would we?”

And he smiled in that way he had.

CHAPTER 7

“Name?”

“I’ve already told you, my name’s Orim.”

“We want your real name.”

“Why have you assumed the form of a Mudokon?”

“Where is the formula?”

Orim was tired of these questions. He’d told them the truth, and they’d not believed him. If only he knew what they wanted him to say, he could say it and be done with it, but they hadn’t given him any clues as to what they wanted to hear. Whatever he told them just made them angrier.

He was strapped to a low table, and there were shapes around him. He could vaguely make out a Glukkon and two sligs, and the other shape could be a Vykker, although he’d never seen one before, so it was difficult to be sure. Another thing that made it difficult to make out what was around him was the bright light they were shining in his eyes.

He wondered how long they’d been asking him the same questions. It seemed like forever. He’d tried to make out more of his surroundings, but the light had made that difficult, and his captors got angry if he looked away from them. All he had been able to make out was shelves stacked with what looked like medical equipment. The room seemed to be bathed in the same purple light that his cell had been, although the main source of illumination was the light in his eyes. The purple light seemed to emanate from the walls, giving the room an eerie atmosphere. He noticed that the Glukkon did not seem comfortable with these surroundings either.

“What do you want me to say?” The words just slipped out as he was thinking them. One of the sligs whacked him with its gun, and the glukkon shouted at him.

“Don’t get Clever!”

The Vykker seemed bored. “Maybe he’s telling the truth. We should throw him back to his cell. If we observe him, we can determine whether or not he is Dr. Mildar.”

The Glukkon seemed unhappy being ordered around, and stormed off. At the Vykker’s word, the two sligs untied Orim and hefted him onto their shoulders. He caught brief glimpses of the corridor on the way to the cell, but could make out nothing but the same dull purple glow that seemed to come from everywhere. They reached the cell, and Orim was thrown unceremoniously inside. He turned to ask if he could have some food, but the door was slammed and bolted before he had drawn breath.

CHAPTER 8

“When I first came to this area, I had nothing. My last business venture had ended disastrously, and I was practically penniless. The others all thought I was mad, setting up a Weapons factory in the middle of nowhere. It just didn’t seem profitable to them, what with transportation costs in getting the Weapons to those who need them. What they didn’t know was that I had a reason for placing the Factory where I did.”

Groz looked up, interested for the first time since his father had started the little lecture. Grozit often gave Groz these lectures, to try and educate him in the ways of Profit. They were often all the same, but this was something new. Grozit seemed to be on the verge of some great confession.

Grozit pressed a button on his desk, and one wall lit up with a map of the local area.

“The Great Forest, as it is known. A vast expanse of jungle, basically. In total area, it takes up nearly a third of Mudos, and its extent into the other continents is still unknown. It holds an incredibly large amount of natural resources, and yet it has not been exploited. How can this be? You’d have thought that such a vast area of natural resources would have disappeared long ago, in the early years of Magog expansion, wouldn’t you? In fact, there have been many attempts down the years at opening up logging and trapping operations in the area, and all of them, every single one, has met with failure. Something has happened that has brought the operations to a halt. A Landslide, destroying expensive equipment; an attack by wild animals, killing the site manager; something that has made it more trouble than it’s worth.

“A certain entrepreneurial executive, namely me, became curious about this phenomenon, and decided to investigate. I thought it quite unusual that disaster would always strike when large-scale operations were undertaken, and yet individuals or small groups can walk with comparative safety in the forest. Unfortunately, my investigations were expensive, and I went bankrupt, losing my business. That was when I decided to set up my next business venture closer to the forest, so that I could continue with my operations at a lower cost. This has worked successfully, and after only four years I discovered the reason for the failings of the large-scale operations. There is something in that forest with powerful – and you may laugh at this – Magical abilities. Once I knew about this, I was only a short step away from finding a way to counter the phenomenon. Take a look at this.”

Grozit pressed another button, and the map image zoomed in on the edge of the forest. Groz’s eyes widened. Where he would have expected to see acres of trees, there was only barren wasteland. The camera panned across, until it settled on the image of a thriving industrial area, complete with small temporary factories and accommodation and heavy earth-moving equipment. As Groz watched, one of the mighty trees fell, and he could see a small party of slig carrying a huge corpse to what he assumed was the temporary meat-processing plant.

“This is a real-time image. You are watching what is actually happening as we speak.
This huge operation is all the result of my project. The forest is so huge that we have barely scratched the surface. What we have here is a tremendous expanse of resources. It will take us centuries to work our way through the forest, and we’ll be making huge profits all the way. Well, what do you think?”

Groz was speechless. This was too much to take in. “Why do you want my opinion?”

“Because you will inherit the business when I die. This business can conceivably continue forever. There are a few more details that you need to know, such as how I was able to succeed where so many others have failed, but you will learn all of this in time.”

“Why are you telling me all of this?”

“Because I feel that you are old enough to handle it. There are certain rites of passage that all young glukkons must go through, and you’ve reached that age.” Grozit smiled happily. “Today is the day of your first Corporate Takeover.”

CHAPTER 9

“Can we stop for a while, now? This is a little painful, and I’m sure Sillan wouldn’t mind a rest, either.”

Sillan buzzed in approval.

“Okay, I suppose we could wait for a while.” Jal sighed. They hadn’t got very far, but Sillan and Crim had been working hard, and it hadn’t been easy for them, especially when Crim started to fall over.

“Maybe you could have a scout on ahead and see what we’ll be up against, Sill?” suggested Meet.

Sillan made a kind of sighing noise, and flew off down the corridor.

“Is it really going to be worth all this trouble?” asked Crim, “I mean, by the time we get to the Drill Hall, they’ll probably have all been sent off somewhere. Even if we do get there while they’re still there, what are we going to do?”

“We’ll burn that bridge when we come to it,” Jal replied, “We’ve got to do something, or we’d - ”

“Someone’s coming!” whispered Meet, “I can hear footsteps!”

“Quick! Into position, Crim!”

“Where’s that Drone got to?”

“No time to worry about him, we’ll just have to bluff our way through it!”

A heavily armoured slig rounded the corner, and stopped when he saw Jal.

“Shouldn’t you three be at work or in your cells?”

“I’m just escorting these two back to their cell, it’s the end of their shift.” said Crim, quickly.

The slig nodded. “Just get there quickly, there’s something happening in the Drill Hall, and something tells me we’re all safer if we stay away.” He turned and started to walk away.

Crim sighed with relief, but it was short-lived. The slig turned back.

“Oh, yeah, you’re meant to stand to attention when you see a superior slig, I’ll let you off if you just do it now.”

Crim froze.

“Well? It’s not difficult.”

Crim licked his lips, “Couldn’t I just salute?”

“I’d prefer it if you’d stand to attention, if you would.”

Crim tensed up, “No.”

“What do you mean, No?”

“I’m not going to stand to attention. I respect you, but I’d prefer to acknowledge that with a salute.” he saluted, as if to prove himself.

The larger slig looked at him suspiciously. “What are you –”

Sillan hit him in the back of the skull, making a crunching sound, which was not the most pleasant sound the others had ever heard.

There was an uncomfortable silence.

“Is he dead?” asked Jal quietly.

Meet crouched down. “Looks like it.”

Crim groaned. “So we’re murderers now?”

“Self-Defense?” hazarded Jal.

“Yeah, right,” Crim laughed hollowly, “Like the Gluks would care. They’ll just throw us into the pits without a second thought. We don’t have any rights, you know.”

“We’d better be somewhere else.” pointed out Meet, “He said something about the Drill Hall, so it looks like we’re heading in the right direction.”

“Couldn’t we do something about the body?” Crim looked down at the huddled shape with disgust, “I mean, it’s not just that it seems disrespectful, but the sooner someone finds the body, the sooner they’ll be after us.”

Jal sighed. “Alright. Sillan, pick the lock on that locker, will you?”

Sillan buzzed quietly, and got on with it.

“He didn’t seem that bad.” Crim mused. “I mean, there’s some who’d have beaten me to death for not standing to attention.”

“We can’t be looking back. It’s done now, and we’ve got to focus on staying alive. If we have any hope of one day overthrowing those Gluks, there’s gonna be lots of deaths anyway.” replied Jal as he lifted the body into the locker. He was surprised at how light it was.

As they moved off slowly and silently in the direction of the Drill Hall, the silent lens of the Security Camera followed them slowly…

CHAPTER 10

Groz collapsed onto his bed. His luxurious sheets had never seemed so attractive. He had been on his feet for nearly two hours, while his ‘father’ had taught him some of the tricks of his trade. He’d watched as his father had mercilessly bought out a small logging industry near Paramonia, and then ruthlessly liquidated the industry for immediate profit so that he could use their equipment for his own logging industry in the Great Forest.

Logging in the Great Forest. That came as a bit of a shock. His tutors had always taught him that the Great Forest was protected by evil magical forces. He’d never believed them, he’d always thought that that was just superstition, that there must be a more scientific explanation for their inability to chop down those trees. So to be told by his own adopted father that not only was the magic all too real, but that his father had somehow managed to overcome that magic and begin exploiting the forest, had come as a shock to Groz’s system.

Groz sat bolt upright. His friends! They were in trouble! He’d allowed his father to distract him, and they could be dead or something by now.

He pulled on his trousers. They were unfashionable clothes for glukkons, but they allowed him to run at full speed instead of hopping everywhere, and he reckoned he’d need his full speed soon.

Where could they be? he wondered. I last saw them in the dorm earlier, but they weren’t there when I went back there. I know, I’ll head for the Security Office; maybe the cameras will have picked something up.

Pausing only to shove his security card, mobile fone, and pistol into his deep pockets, Groz began running full pelt down the corridor towards the Security Office.

CHAPTER 11

Rettick sat on a bunk, bored out of his mind. The rest of the team didn’t seem to be in any higher spirits. There was him, Greeb, Tillyn, and Gorm, sitting together, not talking. There wasn’t really anything to say. They’d been locked in this dormitory since the meeting in the hall, and conversation had worn out long ago. Drak, the sergeant who’d been put in charge of the mission, was sitting dejectedly on his bunk. He seemed to be convinced that none of them were going to be returning from the trip.

Of the others, Rettick recognised one of the three bigbros as one of the patrol who had ransacked their dormitory earlier that day, but was unable to put a name to the face until he was introduced as Briori. The other two bigbros were unfamiliar, and were introduced as Lork and Frag. The two remaining sligs were called Nad and Volt. Volt had been fitted with a pair of wings so that he could act as a scout for the group. He was a bit pissed off at that, because it stopped him from getting any sleep. Nad was sleeping, possibly just to piss off Volt.

Rettick wondered how much longer it would be before they were sent off, and whether they were going to come back.

Greeb leaned over to Rettick and whispered, “This could be our chance!”

“What for?” asked Rettick.

“To Escape!”

“What, you mean get away? Never come back?”

“Yes!”

“What about Crim, Jal, and the others? Do we leave them here?”

“Well,” Greeb was silent for a second, “No, we’d come back sometime, obviously.”

“Okay, but we’ll have to lose the patrol sometime, unless they’re prepared to come with us. Where are we going to go?”

“Somewhere. Anywhere. We can burn that bridge when we come to it.”

Rettick noticed Volt trying to listen in, and motioned to Greeb to be quiet. If we ever come to it, he thought.

Chapter 12

Quettil hated being caught sleeping on the job, so he’d rigged up a detection system. As soon as someone entered the outer lobby, Quettil’s alarm rang. He had it set up far enough away so that he had time to wake up and pretend he hadn’t been sleeping before the angry glukkon – they always seemed angry about something – rounded the corner. Or so he thought. The fact is that Glukkons rarely run, as fashionable clothes don’t tend to let them. Unfortunately for Quettil, this Glukkon didn’t seem to care much for fashion, for he wore trousers, which were almost unknown among Glukkons, so Quettil was taken completely by surprise when he rounded the corner at full pelt almost before Quettil had even sat up fully.

“The security camera tapes, where are they?” the glukkon asked, yanking open a drawer with his toes and inspecting the contents.

“I wasn’t sleeping!” Quettil shouted, leaping to his feet, “I was checking… Camera Tapes? What do you want them for?”

The glukkon stopped his rummaging, and turned slowly. “Were you asleep, just now?”

“What, No!! I was checking my eyelids for holes! Camera Tapes, now where could they be…?”

The glukkon smiled. “Do you sleep on the job often?”

“I wasn’t… I think they’re…” Quettil tailed off, as he saw the expression on the gluk’s face. “They’re in that box in the corner.” He gestured vaguely.

“Well, get them out for me. Thank You. Well, I don’t think you’ll be needed any more, have the rest of the day off.”

Quettil couldn’t believe his luck. “Yessir!” He saluted.

“Oh, and by the way,” the Glukkon switched on the standard stern ‘I-could-have-you-liquidated-so-watch-it’ voice, “Don’t let me ever catch you asleep on the job again! Just this once, I haven’t seen you and you haven’t seen me, agreed?”

“B’s!” Quettil saluted again, for good measure, and sped off down the corridor. It was only two hours later that he realised he had no idea who that glukkon was.

Groz waited until the slig was out of earshot, and then whooped for joy. He’d done it! He must have got to the security tapes before any tapes of his friends had been discovered, or else the alarm would have been raised. Unless there was no tape evidence, or his friends had been dealt with too swiftly to need the alarm… But he didn’t allow his mind to go down that route, he merely silently thanked his Advanced Blackmail tutor for forcing the lessons into him, and began to sort through the tapes. He discounted any that were from before he left them, then settled down for a long vid-watching session.

CHAPTER 13

The trigger mechanism seemed smooth enough, but the cock could stand a little more oil. As he examined the definitely substandard piece of weaponry that had been set before him, Rettick wondered again if any of them were actually intended to return from this expedition. That Vykker had seemed sincere enough, but Rettick couldn’t shake the feeling that Grozit and Snikkit could have been pulling the wool over that guy’s eyes, and simply using the opportunity to get rid of some thorns in their side. Take Drak, for example. He seemed to have been enjoying his latest promotion far too much, so Snikkit could have decided that that sort of ambition was a threat, and sent him off. As for the rest of them, Drak had obviously been given orders to send troublemakers and slackers to the Drill Hall to be ‘volunteered’. The more Rettick thought about this, the more probable it seemed, so he decided to stop thinking about it for a while.

He glanced at the others, all of whom seemed to have been kitted out with the same shoddy equipment. Greeb and Drak seemed to be looking at theirs with suspicion, possibly having similar thoughts to those Rettick was having. Tillyn had hardly even glanced at his weapon, and seemed, bizarrely, to be genuinely excited about the trip ahead of him. He was talking animatedly to the slig known as Nad, who seemed extremely frightened at the prospect, but Tillyn seemed to be having a great calming effect on him. The other sligs seemed to be merely bored, with the exception of Volt, who finally had a large enough space to enjoy his wings.

A door whooshed open to Rettick’s left, and Snikkit entered with his ever-present slig bodyguards.

“Right then, you pathetic excuses for… err… Right. Rest period is over. From now on, you’ll have a harder time than you’ve ever had before in your pathetic lives. I’m sure you’ve all heard the stories about that forest, and I’ll tell you now: they’re all true. Most of them, anyway. That jungle is the most dangerous place in Mudos, and you can bet that’s where you’ll find that scientist of theirs. This’ll be difficult, but you can handle it. You know I’m unhappy about sending you away, but the Vykkers have us over a barrel. It was hard enough getting them to forgive us for the Gimmakon incident, if we aren’t seen to be at least trying to help, they won’t conduct any more research on our behalf. This formula is important to them, so try hard. We want them to owe us one.”

Rettick wondered how much of this was true. After all, he reasoned, if it really was that important, they would have been given better equipment.

“And as for this creature that has escaped, just stay out of its way.” He reached into his jacket pocket. “Apparently, the creature was fitted with a tracer sometime before it escaped, so this radar should come in useful. If you see a dot on the radar, just run the other way. I’m told its cry sounds like a scrab, and we all know scrabs don’t live in jungles, so you’ll know when you hear it. Besides, I’ve heard tapes, and this creature’s call is a much more bloodcurdling, terrifying sound; you can almost hear the gnashing of its sharp teeth as it longs to sink them into the soft, unyielding flesh…” Snikkit paused to wipe the foam from his mouth. “Anyway, the flyer that will take you to its last known position is through here.”

One of his guards gestured to the open door, so the team walked through. Before them was the most decrepit, worn out flyer that any of them had ever set their eyes on. As soon as he laid eyes on it, Rettick had no doubt about their likelihood of survival. Volt flew inside to inspect it, and the others followed.

“This thing’ll never get off the ground!” Volt sneered, “Not unless we’ve got a really good autopilot. Where is the autopilot, by the way?”

Snikkit smiled in that way he had. “You have pilot experience, don’t you?”

The colour drained from Volt’s face. “Well, I can use wings, but this is completely-”

“Well, then, I’m sure you’ll manage,” Snikkit smiled again, “Here are some charts that will guide you to Dr. Mildar’s last known position.” One of his guards drew a set of battered sheets of paper from its pants, and Snikkit turned to leave, his entourage not far behind.

Volt looked dubiously at the controls.

CHAPTER 14

“Well, that’s that, then.”

Jal looked up at the huge doors to the Drill Hall.

“There must be some way in!”

Crim groaned. “Do you seriously expect them to still be in there? We’ve been wandering the corridors for hours! By now, they’ll have been sent back to work or executed or something.”

Jal looked up again. The doors seemed impossibly large; they had probably been made that way to intimidate the slig workers. He sighed. Whether he liked it or not, it looked like Crim was right. “Well, there will probably be some answers in there, anyhow.”

Meet spoke up: “That still leaves the problem of how to get in.”

Jal thought about it. “We could send Sill round to see if there are any air vents or anything…”

Sillan buzzed angrily.

“You remember what happened last time,” pointed out Crim, “We don’t want a repeat of that! If he goes round, I’m going to.”

“What about us?” asked Meet, “What’s our reason to be here if you’re not here?”

“We’ll have to hide in a cupboard or something until they’re back,” suggested Jal, “Come and pick some locks, Sill!”

Once Sillan had picked the locks on a cupboard, Jal and Meet stepped inside, and Crim closed the door. After a while, the click of Crim’s heels faded away into the distance, and they could no longer hear Sillan’s constant hum.

“And now, we wait.” whispered Jal.

They waited, listening to the quiet sounds of the factory working. After a while, the clicking of the machinery resolved itself into footsteps.

Meet cocked his head. “Listen,” he whispered, “Hear that?”

Jal listened. “Crim?”

Meet shook his head. “No, and not another slig either; the pants make a metallic sound. Not barefoot, either, so probably not a mudokon. Glukkon?”

Jal hissed. “Shall we try and take him down? There’s only one of him, and he’s got no arms!”

Jal hissed this a little louder than he’d intended, and caught his breath as he heard the footsteps pause, then continue, more slowly, and getting gradually louder.

Meet whispered very quietly to Jal: “Idiot!”

They were both surprised when the glukkon knocked on the locker, presumably with his foot, and spoke.

“Jal? Is that you?”

Jal almost laughed out loud. “Groz! What are you wearing? Can you reach the handle?”

“I think so…”

Light exploded onto the faces of Jal and Meet. Had he been capable of it, Groz would have hugged them.

“You daft idiots were caught on camera killing that slig! I hoped I’d got there before anyone else saw it, but I was still worried. Thank Odd you’re alive!” He paused. “Where are Crim and Sillan?”

Jal pointed down the corridor. “They went to see if there was any other way into the Hall.”

“Don’t bother. There’s nothing in there. There was some kind of meeting there a while ago, but that’s over now.”

“But Greeb, Rettick, Tillyn, and Gorm were taken there earlier, by the patrol!”

Groz froze. “But… All the sligs in the Meeting have been kept in confinement ever since, and the camera tapes of the cells don’t show any of our guys! They must have been sent away! Or… worse…”

Jal looked thoughtful. Meet spoke up: “Well, let’s go, then!”

Jal looked up. “Where?”

“Well, we should get Crim and Sill, and get away somewhere, like back to the dorm.”

Groz shook his head. “No… Let’s go completely.”

Jal looked at him in disbelief. “You mean, leave the factory? How? We’ve tried before.”

Groz held up his security card between his toes. “Dad gave me this today; he thinks I’m old enough now to be trusted. It’ll open most of the doors in the factory. We can even operate a flyer with it if we can get to one.”

“That way, then,” Meet indicated the corridor Sill and Crim had gone down, “We can meet the others as we –”

“JUNIOR!”

Grozit Senior’s voice came round the corner, making the three of them jump.

Groz tossed his security card to Jal. “Go!” he hissed.

“But what about –”

“I can keep him busy while you escape! I’ll find my own way out, some other time! Just get out of here!”

Jal looked at the card in his hand, then back to Groz. Grozit Senior’s footsteps were coming closer, and were accompanied by those of a slig.

“Goodbye. And… Thank You.”

Jal turned on his heel and ran down the corridor, Meet close behind.

Groz turned to face his father. To his surprise, he recognised one of the sligs who accompanied him.

It was the one from the Security Office, and he held a security tape in his hand. In the other, a rifle barrel stared at Groz, along with those of the other three sligs.

“Oh, you’ve been a bad boy this time, Junior…”

CHAPTER 15

The flyer flew out over the forest, a great vista of huge trees below them. But in the cockpit all eyes were on the map and the vast array of controls before Volt.

“Do you still not know where we are yet?” Lork was getting impatient with Tillyn’s frantic searching on the map.

“Look, if you think you could…” Tillyn paused and looked him up and down. Bigbros weren’t well known for their intelligence and map reading ability. “It’s hard to read this map; there aren’t any landmarks around here to compare.”

Nad glanced out through the See-Thru™ Plastic windows. “What about that hill over there; that could be this hill here,” he indicated a hill on the map, just north of where they were supposed to be heading.

“I think that’s just an area of very tall trees, but it’s our best shot,” Tillyn turned to Volt, who was doing his best to pilot the craft. “Volt, just set us down on the other side of that hill, will you?”

“Bastards!”

All other conversations ceased, and all eyes were on Volt.

“What?” asked Greeb.

“Who?” asked Frag.

“Whoever got this flyer ready for the trip! We haven’t even got enough fuel to get us over that hill, let alone get us back to the factory again afterwards!”

There was a stunned silence. Tillyn spoke up. “How far can you get us?”

“Nowhere!” shouted Volt, “We’re out! We’re going down!”

“Shit!” Lork knocked Volt away from the controls, to try and sort it out himself.

“What are you doing?” screamed Volt, as he tried to regain his position at the controls. Lork held him away with one arm, taking care to stay out of the way of the whirring rotor blades. Hissing with frustration, Volt held up some sort of blade, and rammed it into Lork’s arm. Lork instantly collapsed to the floor, and Volt grabbed the joystick. Ignoring the shocked expressions of the others as they stared at Lork’s motionless body. “Brace yourselves; tie yourselves to the seats or something. I’m going to make the best landing I can, but it’ll be bumpy. Better tie him up as well,” he gestured to the body on the floor, “He’s not in a position to do it himself.”

In silence, the others did what they were told, doing their best not to look at the glazed eyes of Lork, as they tied him, then themselves, to the seats.

Rettick looked up. “What about you, Volt?”

“Someone needs to steer this thing in to land,” he replied, “Besides, I’d never be able to tie myself down with these wings on.”

“But couldn’t –”

“Hold tight!”

CHAPTER 16

“Now, what’s this all about?”

“Nothing, I just –”

“Don’t lie to me! You’ve been consorting with terrorists, haven’t you? We’ve got video footage, so don’t try and deny it!”

“They’re not really terrorists, they just want more equal rights for workers.”

“Not terrorists? Do you know how difficult it was for your father and I to wipe out the Slig Revolutionary Movement last time? We lost a lot of slaves and troops in the Prados Uprising, before we destroyed them. And now we find you working to help them to become powerful again? I can scarcely believe it!”

Snikkit paused for breath. He was enjoying this. Grozit Senior had put him in charge of the interrogation of Grozit Junior, as he’d been unable to bring himself to do it himself. Snikkit was giving it all he had. It didn’t really matter what the outcome was, as there were only four members of this so-called ‘Revolutionary Movement’ still at large. Snikkit had decided to just enjoy himself. With a bit of luck, he might be able to get this little bastard shot, too.

There was a knock at the door.

“What is it?!” Snikkit didn’t like being interrupted.

The slig outside swallowed. “The Boss says you gotta get to his office, sir; there’s some kinda problem.”

Snikkit was silent for a second. Then he turned back to Groz. “We’ll finish this some other time.” He turned to the slig. “Get him down to the cells.” And with that he strode out hurriedly, wondering what the problem could be. Surely not those four pathetic ‘Revolutionaries’! Grozit isn’t stupid enough to let them cause trouble, is he? Snikkit hadn’t been worried like this for some time. Even that idiot of a manager could deal with them, surely! It must be something worse, or he wouldn’t have sent for me. He was still reasoning with himself when he reached Grozit’s office, and saw his manager, several Junior Administrators, and some slig guards gathered around a Vidscreen. Pushing his way through the crowd he saw that it was, indeed, worse than just four revolutionaries.

The Vidscreen was divided into four segments, each of which showed part of the factory. And in each screen, there was a band of mudokon native terrorists marching through, kidnapping honest workers and killing their guards. As the terrorists moved off the screens, the views were switched to a different part of the factory. It was clear that this was no small gang. This was a full-scale attack.

“Oh shit.”

Grozit looked at him, then turned to the slig Sergeant-Major beside him. “Evacuate all remaining workers and guards to the secure quarter, then close the bulkheads. They’ll never get through those.”

Snikkit couldn’t believe his ears. “Surely you’re not going to run and hide! We should wipe them out!”

“If we did that, we’d lose more troops than if we just seal ourselves off. This is the third attack this month. We can’t afford this type of losses. When the main section is evacuated, we can flood it with gas. The terrorists won’t know what’s happening. We simply wait.”

Snikkit wanted to carry on arguing, but didn’t want to make an enemy of the slig Sergeant-Major. He gritted his teeth.

“Yes… Sir.”

CHAPTER 17

“Are you sure we’re going the right way?”

Jal wasn’t. “Sure I am! Groz told us, didn’t he?”

“If you say so.”

“Besides, this card of his opens all the doors, doesn’t it?”

“So? If we’re not going in the right direction, it won’t matter how many doors we can open, we could just be going in circles! Look,” Meet pointed at the door appearing round the corner ahead of them, “I’m sure I’ve seen that door before!”

“How can you tell?” Jal said as he reached up to insert Groz’s security card into the lock, “They all look the –”

The door burst open in a blast of energy, shards of metal flying everywhere. On the other side, about 60 mudokons stopped chanting and ran forward, past Jal and Meet. A couple stopped.

“Where are you going?” asked one.

Jal stuttered. “Out, I th-think.”

“You’re going the wrong way, then,” responded the other, “Come with us.” And with that they ran ahead to catch up with the others, Jal and Meet struggling to keep up.

“This way!” shouted the mudokon in the lead, and they all followed round the corner.

“Where –,” panted Jal, “Where are we going? Who are you?”

A nearby mudokon spoke up: “We’re from the local tribe, the Mudoris tribe. We’ve come to free slaves from the evil Glukkon supervisors.”

“So – So you’re done here now, are you?”

“We can’t find any more slaves or guards. That means they’ve evacuated the main factory. That usually means some kind of trap. So we’re leaving.”

“Head for –”

“There’s a guard!”

They turned to look down the corridor where the Mudokon had pointed.

“Yo guys, what’s happenin–” Crim began.

“He’s unarmed!” said a mudokon, before running up and pushing Crim over. Sillan swooped down and knocked the mudokon to the floor. The others began to move forward.

“Stop!” shouted Jal, “He’s on our side!”

Like the efficient military machine they were, the mudokons lifted Crim onto his ‘pants’ and helped the mudokon Sillan had knocked over to his feet. Then they forgot the incident had happened, and focused on escape again.

“Does anyone know where the Flyer Hangar is?” Meet spoke up.

The mudokons looked down at him. “Down that way,” said one, “But why should we go there?”

“Jal’s got this card thing that could start the autopilot in a flyer.” He pointed to the card in Jal’s hand.

As one, the mudokons began to run in the direction of the hangar. When they got there, there were no flyers, but a huge Crawler squatted at the far end.

“Shall we go in there?”

“Would the card work?”

“I don’t trust it.”

Crim sniffed. “Can anyone else smell gas?”

The arguments ceased and they ran for the crawler. Crim began to fall behind, so Sillan lifted him off the pants with his force fields, and flew at full speed for the hatch in the top. When they were all inside, and the hatch was sealed, Jal was pushed to the front.

He looked at the vast array of dark, silent controls before him, looking for a slot that would fit his card, and trying to see a button marked ‘go’. At last he founf the slot and inserted the card. The whole crawler came to life. Lights came on the air, recycler began to hum, and the control panel before Jal came to life.

“Good Morning! How can I help you?”

The voice seemed to come from all around them.

Jal cleared his throat and swallowed. “Err… Hello?”

“How can I help you?”

“We’d like to go to…” He turned to a mudokon beside him. “Where are we going?”

“The plains to the west.”

“The plains –”

The crawler lurched into movement, and headed for the opening hangar doors. Jal grinned at the mudokon beside him. They were on their way.
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i decided to post the latest chapter separately, since i don't know how many people saw it on the old boards, and people wouldn't notice it in that big block of text.

CHAPTER 18

“He’s coming round. Look, his eyes are opening.”

“Rettick? Are you alright?”

Rettick opened his eyes to see the concerned face of Tillyn and the ever-stony face of Gormanul looking down on him. He sat up, and passed out again.

When he came round again, he sat up more slowly, and looked around. Drak was still out cold on the floor. Volt lay on a stretcher beside the mangled remains of his wings. One of his arms was twisted at an unnatural angle. Briori sat beside Volt, holding a medikit. Lork had apparently awoken from whatever it was Volt had injected into him, and was standing at the doorway of the flyer trying not to look at anyone.

Rettick tried to speak, but his mouth was too dry. “Where…”

“Greeb’s gone off to scout out the area with Nad and Frag. They won’t be long.”

Rettick looked down at Volt. “He…”

Tillyn followed his gaze. “He’ll live, if any of us do. His wings were damaged irreparably, but they seem to have protected him from the impact.”

Impact? thought Rettick Oh Shit, that’s right, we crashed, didn’t we. Crap.

He looked at his surroundings. The interior of the flyer was smashed up, but the hull seemed mostly intact. Remarkably, the See-Thru™ Windows had survived the impact. The lights had gone out, and he wondered why he could still see, as he’d always been told that mo light reached the ground in the forest. A quick glance out of the open door gave him his answer. They’d never reached the ground; they’d hit one of the huge upper branches. The one they’d landed on was easily as wide as the Flyer Hangar in the factory, and he could see other branches that looked even larger. He’d never believed what he’d been told about the scale of the forest until now.

Greeb popped his head round the door. “How’d you like your Giant Bugs?” he said, holding up a scorpion almost as big as him, “Boiled or Fried? Or Raw, which is all we’ve got.”

Tillyn looked dubiously at the scorpion. “How do we know that thing’s not poisonous?”

Greeb grinned. “We saw a small furry creature eating one. That reminds me, how’d you like your Small Furry Creatures? Baked or Grilled?”

Tillyn sighed. “Raw’ll do me.”

“That’s good, because that’s –”

“– All you’ve got. We know.”

Briori looked up at Greeb. “Why are you so cheerful, anyway?”

Greeb sighed. “You and Lork don’t know this, but I didn’t actually have a jon at the factory I used to work at Rupture Farms. I loved my job. I was the Security Gate Operator, so I got to sleep a lot. When the place closed down, I realised I’d been presumed dead, so I took the advantage, and stowed away in crates to the Factory, because it’s far away from Cartel Central. It’s closer to the Wild Lands and the Great Forest. That’s why I chose Grozit’s factory: because I wanted to explore unknown places; I didn’t want to be cooped up in a factory all the time.” Greeb sighed again, “Well, I haven’t had much chance so far.” His eyes lit up. “This is my chance! We have the opportunity to actually live in the Forest!”

Lork turned from the doorway. “Live here? You’re crazy! Fuck it, we’re gonna Die here! There are hundreds of creatures out there who’d love to make a good meal out of you or me! This place just isn’t safe for us, we belong back in civilisation!”

Greeb suddenly became angry. “You call the Cartel Civilisation? Even this place is more civilised than back there! Things may kill and eat us, but they never mean it personally, they need to kill to survive.” He advanced on Lork. “Back there, the Glukkons enslave us, humiliate us, and torture us, and that is worse than death. And do they need to? No! They wouldn’t all die if they just gave us some rights, would they? And what about the other slaves: the Mudokons had the right idea. Just kill them all!”

Lork drew himself up to his impressive full height, which was almost twice that or Greeb. “You’re insane! If it wasn’t for the Glukkons we’d still be crawling around on our fucking hands!”

Incensed, Greeb swung a fist up at Lork’s face. It was a futile gesture, as Lork caught his fist easily in one hand. Lork raised his fist to return the blow, but stopped. He was staring at Greeb’s upper right arm. Greeb followed Lork’s eyes, until he was staring at his own SRM tattoo.

Lork looked Greeb in the eyes. “You, you’re one of these Revolutionary nutters, aren’t you?”

Tillyn stepped forward. “In fact, he was our leader.”

Lork looked between Greeb, Tillyn, Rettick, and Gormanul, in a state of rising panic. “Your leader?”

Briori looked around in confusion. “What’s going on?”

Lork indicated the others. “We’re surrounded by these crazy revolutionaries!”

Briori sighed. “Do you really think it makes much difference out here?”

Rettick stood up, staggering a little. “Exactly! This argument is pointless. I can understand how you feel about the Cartel, Greeb, but I can also sympathise with you, Lork. I think we need to get out of here, if only because we have a duty to those we left behind in the factory to give them the same freedom we have.”

Lork put Greeb down. “So where do you think we should go, then?”

“Well, we can’t stay here, that’s for sure. Despite what Greeb says, we won’t survive here for long. But neither can we return to the Cartel. Lork, surely you’re clever enough to work out that, if they send us out into the forest with faulty rifles and only enough fuel to get us out here, then they probably don’t want us back. I’m guessing we’re all troublemakers in some way, and Grozit used this as an opportunity to get rid of us. If we did get back there, they’d probably just execute us.”

Greeb looked up. “Well, where then?”

“I’ve been thinking about this since we left the Factory.” Rettick took a deep breath. “We have to go to the Mudokons.”

Lork snorted and turned his back on Rettick. Greeb and Briori stared at him in disbelief. Even Tillyn seemed slightly disappointed, although Gormanul was his usual stoic self.

Greeb was the first to speak. “The mudokons? Are you sure? After all we’ve done to them in the name of the Cartel? They hate us!”

Lork half-turned back. “And we hate them.”

Rettick insisted. “No, listen. They hate the Cartel more than they hate us. They probably know we’re as much slaves as they are. If we joined them in an attack on the factory, it would prove to them that we are their allies.”

Lork turned and approached Rettick. “I don’t think you quite heard me. We. Hate. Them.”

“Hate them or not, we’ll never survive without them. We can’t go back, as I’ve explained. The only other option is to survive alone in the wild, and do you really think we would survive long? It’s a long time since our race lived in the wild, and we’re not suited to it any more. We’d never survive without weapons.”

Tillyn spoke up. “But do you really think we can overcome centuries of hatred between us and the Mudokons? I don’t think they’ll accept us, and I’m sure there are many like Lork who’d never accept them.”

“And I think we could learn to survive out here,” said Greeb, “The mudokons lived under the thumb of the Glukkons for centuries, and they’ve learned to cope. We could do the same.”

“The Mudokons had the help of the native mudokons to learn how to cope in the wild.” Rettick became angry. “Don’t you see? Unless we’re going to cross the fucking Ocean to find our own people, the mudokons are the only people who can help us to adapt! Now, I’m leaving first thing tomorrow, to try and find my way out, to the mudokons. You people can do what you like, but if you’ve any sense, you’ll come with me.”

There was an embarrassed silence.

Tillyn raised his hand. “I’m with you.”

Gormanul followed suit. Hesitantly, Greeb and Briori raised their hands. Lork looked at the others and snorted, leaving the flyer in disgust. The others looked to Rettick, who followed Lork outside.

As he approached Lork, he realised that they were, indeed, on a high branch, and that it was even wider than he’d thought.

“Lork, why are you so averse to the idea of joining the mudokons?”

Lork tensed up a little at the first words, then relaxed a little.

“The process of turning sligs into Bigbros is not permanent. Unless we receive doses of steroids once every three days, we return to normal. The pain –” Lork tensed again “– The pain of this is agonising, and we become very tense and aggressive. It’s happened to me before, once. I was trapped behind one of the melting pots. No one noticed I was gone until four days later, and it took another two to find me.” He turned to Rettick. “I have two shots left. That’ll last me about a week. After that, unless we get back to the factory, I’ll start the change. And I don’t know about Briori and Frag. They might have even less doses than I do.”

Rettick said nothing for a while. “If we do get out of the forest, and join the mudokons, we can steal more steroids from the factory. Especially if we attack.”

Lork looked at him. “I just hope I last that long.”

Rettick nodded towards the flyer. “Let’s get inside. It’s getting cold.”

Everyone was looking at them as they entered, but they said nothing. There was another embarrassed silence. Rettick cleared his throat.

“Were Nad and Frag far behind when you returned, Greeb?”

Greeb shook his head. “Not really, they should be back soon.”

“How did you ever persuade Nad to go out there? He seemed scared out of his wits just by being here.”

“Someone ,” Greeb shot a look at Lork “told him that if we didn’t catch any food, he’d be the first to be eaten.”

Lork drew himself up. “It got him out there, didn’t –”

Rettick stood up. “Guys, I said that to lower the tension, not raise it! Let’s get some sleep. We leave first thing in the morning, right?” He looked at Lork, who said nothing. “Right?”

Lork slowly nodded.

Tillyn spoke up. “I’ll take first watch. When Frag and Nad get back I’ll fill them in.”

“Right”

They fell into an uneasy sleep.
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oh c'mon guys! here's the next chapter, but no more go up until i get some feedback. other writers get feedback, why not me?

btw, did anyone notice that there was a NEW CHAPTER at the end of all that fic above???



CHAPTER 19

Snikkit hurried down the corridor. The Boss had called for him again. He waited outside the office until he heard Grozit order him inside.

“You called, sir?”

Grozit turned in his chair. “Yes. It seems we have a little problem.”

“Again? We only just saw off those Mudokons!”

Grozit smiled, a sure sign that he was angry. “Yes, but before we made any action, they had already freed most of our workers. Do you know how many we have left now?”

Snikkit was wise enough not to answer, so Grozit continued. “Eighty-seven.”

Snikkit gawped. “We couldn’t run even one Warehouse with that many! We’ll have to request more from Cartel Central.”

Grozit frowned. “Well, that’s where the main problem is. We’ve requested so many workers recently that they’re bound to send an investigator round soon to see what’s going on. This investigator will look everywhere, and we can’t risk anyone finding out about our little untaxed logging operation, can we?”

“Well, no…”

“Exactly. So I suggest we put our plan into action.”

Snikkit thought a minute. “You mean the guards –”

“Yes.”

“Do we have enough Drones to run efficiently? I remember we had some troubles with personalities in the early Drones.”

Grozit smiled again. “The Vykkers have ironed those problems out now. We can rest assured that all of the Drones are now guaranteed completely loyal and personality-free.”

Snikkit sighed. “I suppose you’ll be wanting me to sort out the details.”

Grozit merely smiled.

Snikkit turned to exit. I’ll wipe that smug smile off your face one of these days, he thought, just you wait. We’ll soon see who has the power in this factory.

All around the factory, Slig Guards had their weapons confiscated by mindless Drones, who suddenly seemed to be everywhere. Most had never seen a Drone before, never seen these silvery ovals that hover at head height, and deliver sharp shocks to anyone who disobeys.

Instead of guarding slaves, the sligs became the slaves, and were given strenuous tasks, the sort that they had never had to do before, although they had forced the mudokons to do it enough times. Guards who had previously bashed mudokons for slacking off found themselves being zapped by the Neural Stunners built-in to the Drones’ bodies for the same offenses. Sleeping, an all-time favourite pastime for the guards, suddenly became next to impossible, with the ever-present Drones watching them at all times. Those sligs who did not need to move far had their pants confiscated as well. All wings were confiscated, and Bigbros were kept in confinement until their steroids had worn off.

The sligs were learning what it had been like for the mudokons, and many vowed never to hurt another mudokon, if only they could escape.
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Hey, I'm reading it too! *thinks* is anyone reading mine, that's what I'd like to know...
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I think your fic is one of the best out there. I'm definitely reading it when I can. great characterization. though it seems people don't read the fics much here... or at least respond. I'm posting one of my own that apparently nobody gives a flying fleech about. oh well... *gusty sigh* keep it up though. *attempts to give a thumbs up, realizes that it is impossible, given the glukkon nature, and merely grins*
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I think it's one of those "conditioning" cases, like Pavlov's dogs - only instead of "Bell rings, dogs then slobber" it's more like "New fic. Mustn't reply..."

*laughs* Ah well. Wars aren't the easiest things to write, so I'd better get on...
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thank you! i love you people!

i think the reason people don't tend to read many fanfics is that they are all writing their own. i admit that i haven't had time to read many, what with my fic, my homework, and real life.

i'm sorry, teal. i intend to read all of your fics, as soon as they are all up here, but i'm not sure what order they come in. you posted the order on the ezboard, but that's dead now.

anyway, here's the next chapter, since you've all been such nice people... it's another long one, where i've tried to put some tension into it, with arguments and things.

CHAPTER 20

“We’re lost.”

“No we’re not.”

“Ok, where are we, then?”

Rettick sighed. “I don’t know, but we’re headed in the right direction at least.”

Frag spoke up. “Well, how do you know that?”

Rettick pointed up into the sky. “The sun rose over there, so that’s… the west? Is that right, Greeb?”

Greeb shrugged. “How should I know? I’ve never had to navigate before in my life.”

“Well, I’m sure that is west, so we’re heading north, which is where we want to go.”

Nad shivered. “I told you, we’re lost. You’re going to get us lost, and then we’ll all die here. We’ll be eaten, or poisoned, or… or.. or starved, or…”

“Calm down!” Tillyn comforted him. “We’ll be okay. Rettick’ll get us out of here, and I’m sure Greeb can keep away the predators, and we’ve got three bigbros hunting for us. We’ll be okay.”

Suddenly, a bloodcurdling screech rent the air. All ten sligs froze.

Briori leaned over to Drak. “Do Scrabs live in the forest?” he whispered.

Drak shook his head.

“Then that must be that creature!”

Frag leaned over Rettick’s shoulder. “Do you still have that radar scanner they gave us?”

Rettck reached into a pocket and pulled out a black box with a round black screen on it. There was a bright white spot at one edge, moving towards the centre.

“Shit! It’s almost on top of us! Run!”

“Which way?”

Rettick pointed to their right. “That way!”

They began to run. Volt, strapped to Gormanul’s back, could not see where they were going, and began to panic. Nad was terrified, and most of the others were scared. The screeches got louder.

Greeb found his breath. “Shit, that thing’s fast!”

Drak panted. “Let’s change direction, see if we can lose it. Left!”

They turned left. The Crossbreed followed their every move.

“How’s that thing following us?” panted Frag. “I thought they had no sense of sight and bad hearing.”

“Smell?” hazarded Drak.

Frag shook his head. “It wouldn’t know we’d changed direction yet if it was following a scent.”

Lork grabbed the Radar. “Gimme that!” He tore the back off it to reveal a mass of circuitry… and a flashing white light. Their eyes widened.

“A fucking homing beacon!”

“That’s how it’s following us!”

“The bastards! They really wanted us to die, didn’t they?”

Nad moved forward. “Get rid of it, then!” He snatched the beacon from Lork, and swung his arm back to throw it out into the forest. Unfortunately they were stood on a particularly narrow branch, and his foot slipped. As he flew off the edge, Tillyn made a grab for his hand, but missed. Nad’s scream echoed through the trees.

“Nad!” called Tillyn.

They rushed to the edge, and stared over. They lost sight of Nad’s falling body in the darkness long before it would have hit the ground, and there was no sound but the echoes of his scream. There was a stunned silence, while they tried to take in the fact that one of them was dead. They had all lost friends before, but that had been at the hands of the Glukkons, and their friends had merely ‘disappeared’ when they were deemed to be troublemakers. None of them, except for Greeb, had ever had to actually watch anyone die before. They sat down, and Gormanul let Volt down from his back, and laid the stretcher on the branch.

When the shock had worn off a little, Greeb glance at the radar.

“At least the creature’s changed direction.” He looked up at the others. “He didn’t die in vain.”

Frag sighed. “We should get moving. The creature may be back at any minute.”

Lork stood up. “Right, but I think we need to sort some things out here. For a start, I’m not following some crazed revolutionary to my death at the hands of mudokon terrorists. Not any more. We followed him for nearly a week now, and now we’re one less. We can’t afford to lose anyone else. What we have to do is return to the flyer and try to get the radio equipment working. The guys at the factory will pick us up.”

Rettick started at him in disbelief. “Have you not been listening to a word I’ve said? Grozit wants us dead! That’s why we’re out here. That’s why there was a fucking homing beacon hidden inside the one thing that we’d be sure to keep with us at all times. That’s why we didn’t have enough fuel to get back, anyway.”

“He may want you dead, but I’ve served the Cartel well all my life, there’s obviously been some kind of mix-up. When I get back there, they’ll see the mistake they’ve made, and I’ll be given my well-deserved promotion.”

“Lork, you’re not thinking clearly. I think your steroids must have started to wear off.” Frag and Briori nodded, but the others just looked puzzled. “You’re acting irrationally, it’s just the comedown from being a bigbro. If you’ll just try and stay with us for a couple more days, the steroids will be out of your system, and you’ll be normal again.”

Lork snorted, and turned away. He began to run back the way they had come from.

“Lork!”

“Don’t be an idiot, come back!”

“Leave him.”

Rettick stared at Greeb in disbelief. “Leave him?”

“We have to stick together. If we go after him, we’ll just lose each –”

“Tillyn! Gorm! Stay here!”

Tillyn had begun to chase after Lork, and Gormanul wasn’t far behind. After a few second, they were out of view. Rettick turned to Greeb.

“Fine. You just protect yourself.” Without waiting for a reply, Rettick set off in pursuit of the three runaways.

“Rettick! You’ll just get us all lost!” Greeb turned to the others. “Try and stay with me. It’s all coming apart.” And he set off after the others. Drak, Briori, and Frag followed him. No-one thought to pick up Volt, who lay there.

“Guys? Come back! Someone help me!” He crawled on his one good arm, his cries echoing through the empty forest.
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phew! i'm gonna take a break from writing, as i've now written up to 27, so i've got 7 chapters to post before i have to write some more. i think i will write more before then, just to stay ahead of myself.

you'll be glad to know that your eyes can rest, too. chapters 21 to 26 are all short chapters, so you won't have big long blocks of text to read!
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Hak: *scratches head* Thought Til' were a lass...?

Oh, there you are. *grabs his arms and tries to haul him back to her fic* Come on, I need you over here. Damn, you need to lose some weight, boy...

Hak: *sniffily* Yer could jus' say please, Boss Lady... tata, Ret... cool fic... *lumbers off*

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i hadn't meant to give away the fact that Tillyn is female yet, so i'm referring to her as 'he' until i reveal it. which should be quite soon.

none of the other characters know that she is female. even she has no idea. effectively, she acts male and is treated as a male until they all find out she is female.
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This is a great fic. Keep it up!
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i know what you mean, teal. there's going to be a war in my fanfic, and i'm dreading it.

here goes. more arguments in chapter 22. they're becoming a habit...

CHAPTER 21

Supervisor Dran looked down at the mangled corpse of one of the construction workers and shook his head. “The same creature that did the rest?”

One of the guards nodded. “I saw it. We pumped tons of ammo into it, but it didn’t seem hurt at all. It just turned and ran back into the forest.”

Dran shook his head again, and scratched his feeding tentacles. Up until about a week or two ago, the logging had been going smoothly. They had been exceeding their targets, and they had learned to cope with most of the animals from this part of the forest. The labs had, of course, helped with that.

That was when the attacks had started. A creature that they had never seen before had begun to attack the workers. Those who had seen it said that it looked like a cross between a Scrab and a Paramite, and the Mudokon workers believed strongly that it was the Shrykull, some ancient Mudokon god, and that it had returned to free them from the slavery they suffered. From what Dran had seen, it seemed to be more likely that it was just going to kill everything, but the stupid mudokon workers steadfastly refused to fight it at all, even while it was ripping them apart. 17 workers and 2 slig guards in just over one week. To make matters worse, top management back at the factory had expressly forbidden them from sending out a hunting team to find and destroy the creature, insisting that ‘The Matter is Under Control.’

“Fuck Them.”

The guards seemed surprised. “Sir?”

“Fuck the Bosses, we’re gonna find and destroy this thing. Organise all of our guards. Arm them with the best weapons we have, and bring along all 500 of the traps. The strongest traps.”

“Sir!”

CHAPTER 22

As Jal approached the table, things went quiet. Some of the smaller conversations continued, but the main topic suddenly seemed less appealing to the other mudokons.

They had been on the move in the Crawler for almost a week now, and they were nearly back to the Mudoris village. Jal had been surprised at how far it was. Granted, they had stopped the crawler every night while they slept, but it still seemed amazing that five of these mudokons had walked this journey in three days on the way here.

The crawler was easily big enough to accommodate 100 passengers, and there weren’t that many there. Even so, Crim, Meet, and Sillan decided that they should share a room, as the only non-mudokons on board. Jal had agreed to share with them.

Now that they were almost home, the terrorists were having a party. Jal was late, because he’d been trying to persuade the others to come. They’d refused, on the basis that they wouldn’t be welcome. Jal had to go on his own, despite his previous insistance that there was no prejudice in the minds of the Mudoris tribe.

But when that conversation stopped, Jal had a fair idea as to what it was about.

“It’s Crim, isn’t it?”

The terrorists looked uncomfortable. They had no leader, as such, but an old mudokon called Bil seemed to be a kind of spokesman for them. “Some of us are just a little… reluctant to reveal the location of our village to a slig.”

A mudokon beside him snorted. “We could handle that cripple, no problem, but he’d set that machine on to us, and I’m not sure if we could destroy it.”

Bil turned to him. “Don’t be so blunt, Int!” He turned back to Jal. “We’re just not quite convinced that your ‘friends’ aren’t really spies for the Magog Cartel.”

Jal’s eyes hardened. “Are you accusing us of trying to –”

“No! Not you!”

“I’m as much one of them as I am one of you.” Jal was getting angry. “Do you know how I lost my arm? I used to work in the Soulstorm Brewery. It was Hell. We were tortured daily by the Slig guards. I used to blame them, just as you do, and see them as cold, heartless killers. We had almost lost all hope, but then we heard about a terrorist called Abe, who’d single-handedly shut down Rupture Farms, and was still free.”

All other conversations in the room had ceased, and all attention was on Jal.

“Eventually, Abe infiltrated the Brewery, and our hopes began to rise. He killed most of the guards, and we followed him blindly. While we were running, I slipped and fell into a saw.” He waved his stump at them. “My arm was severed, and I lay in a pool of my own blood. Abe and my previous ‘friends’ didn’t even look back, they just left me for dead. Most of the guards were dead or had run away, but two sligs who had been left behind to try and slow down the mudokons saw me, and risked everything to get me to safety. One of them patched up my shoulder, and they hid me in their dorm. If they’d been found out, they’d have been executed, but they risked that to keep me alive.

“The day after rescuing me, one of them was on patrol. He didn’t want to; none of them did, but they had nowhere to go. While on patrol, he was attacked by some of the terrorists. I assume Abe wasn’t there, or he would’ve just been possessed and killed. Crim tried to protest to the mudokons, and persuade them to take him with them, but they didn’t listen, and attacked him. He was lucky to escape alive, but his spine was broken, and he was unable to use his pants any more. I helped Greeb to get Crim to safety, and the three of us left the brewery. We stowed away in freight trains until we were as far away as the trains would take us. This was the Weapons Factory. We’d intended to carry on until we reached the mudokon villages, but we found kindred spirits in the factory, and resolved to help them to escape.

“Now some of us have escaped, but it looks like we’re no safer out here than we were in there.”

The terrorists looked at each other, in embarrassment. Int was the first to look up at Jal.

“Look, Jal, we didn’t mean –”

But Jal was already on his way out of the door.

The other mudokons tried to get back to their old conversations, but the feeling of joy at returning home had gone.
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actually, 22 was a bit long. ah well, 23, 24, 25, and 26 will all be quite short.

then 27, oh boy, that's intense info-giving, and probably quite hard-to-read. i wouldn't really know. i never know what its like to read what i write.

ch. 27 might be confusing, as it writes down things i've known for a while, so i may have left gaping holes in my logic.

all that is still to come...

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here's the next two chapters.

while i'm here, can i advertise my new Guild of Fanfic Writers? it's the solution to all the frustration you feel when no-one responds to your fanfics!

CHAPTER 23

Not for the first time, Rettick cursed himself for leaving the others. He’d been angry at Greeb’s cowardice, but Greeb had been partially right: they shouldn’t run off individually to look for Lork. What they should’ve done was to stick together and look for him. He cursed Tillyn as well. That idiot was always acting on impulse, without thinking. If he’d waited for the others to sort themselves out, they could have all looked for Lork together.

He looked around. He couldn’t see any of the others. He’d lost sight of Tillyn and Gormanul a while ago, so he’d doubled back to try and find Greeb and the others, but this forest was a maze. Most of the trees looked the same, and there weren’t many landmarks to choose from. He wasn’t even sure he was on the same level as he’d stared on. He looked at the branches below and above, but if they were there, they weren’t in sight.

Movement. He was sure that bush had moved. [There were bushes bigger than the biggest tree he’d ever seen, just growing on the branches of the huge trees out here.] He’d been lucky not to have any close encounters with the wildlife up to this point, but he’d seen plenty from a distance. There were creatures with teeth longer than his leg, but even these creatures couldn’t deal with the really big animals. On the lower branches, Rettick had once seen a herbivore the height of a small house and the length of a train. And yet he saw the creature killed by something almost too small to see at that distance, which Rettick assumed to be very poisonous. All in all, Rettick wasn’t keen on meeting any of these creatures. He backed away from the greenery. Whatever the thing in the leaves was, it was about twice the height of a slig, but probably ten times as deadly.

He caught a metallic gleam, and relaxed slightly. Nothing in the forest was made of metal. Nothing he’d heard of, anyway. “Hello?”

Lork walked guardedly out of the bush. “What do you want?”

“Lork! You stupid bastard! You’ve split up the group!”

Lork looked down at Rettick. “None of you had to follow me. I only want to find my own way back, without you nutters.”

Rettick put on a concerned tone of voice. “Lork, you’re not in your right mind, you’re coming down off the Bigbro steroids. You’re acting irrationally. If you just try to act normal for a day or so, you’ll be fine.”

Lork flared up. “No! I’m thinking more clear now than I ever have before.”

“It just seems that way, because you’ve been a Bigbro for so long.”

“I don’t care. I’m going back to the Cartel. Are you going to try and stop me?”

“I’m not going to let you kill yourself like –”

Lork’s fist slammed into Rettick’s head, knocking him off balance. He grabbed Rettick by the neck, and lifted him off the ground. “You should leave me alone!” He threw Rettick at an upshooting branch. As Rettick slid to the ground, he strode up to him. “Now, are you going to –”

Lork stopped out of surprise. This surprise was due to the claw that was now protruding from his chest. His corpse slipped off the claw, and Rettick saw the creature. It was over three times Rettick’s height, and had three legs and pink skin. As he looked up, he saw that it had four arms, but it was the head that he recognised, just before he passed out.

It was the head of a Vykker.

CHAPTER 24

Nad opened his eyes, and wasn’t sure if he had. Shit, it’s dark, he thought, I must be on the forest floor. I wonder how I survived the fall. That question was answered by the soft fungus-like abject he appeared to have landed on. He couldn’t feel his legs, but it felt like at least one of them was wedged behind his back. Probably broken.

Now that his eyes had gotten accustomed to the dark, it wasn’t totally dark. There were natural lights in the form of glowing fungi, and he could make out the vague shapes of the objects around him.

One of them moved.

Nad froze. He focused on the thing that had moved. He could make out the rough height. It looked about twice his height, and its head was silhouetted against a bright patch of fungus behind it. The head looked vaguely scrab-like.

So that’s what it looks like, he thought, I’m glad it can’t see me.

His back was really starting to hurt. He knew he should keep still and quiet until the Crossbreed had gone, but he had to bend his leg out from under his back. He felt behind himself. The shape didn’t feel leg-shaped. It was squarer. He pulled it out, and recognised the flashing light of the homing beacon.

Oh, shit. He glanced up at the creature. Its head was facing him, and looked closer. He thought quickly. If he got rid of the beacon, the creature should follow it instead of him. If Frag had been right, the creature couldn’t see, hear, or smell him. He threw the beacon over the crossbreed’s head.

Without waiting to see if it followed the beacon, Nad stood and ran. His legs seemed to work fine, and he ran as fast as he could. He didn’t know what the creature was doing, until he felt a sharp pain in his back. He saw its leg sticking out of his chest. Or maybe it was an arm. Whatever it was, it hurt. He fell to the ground, and heard a metallic clang. The creature must be trying to eat my leg, he thought detachedly, With any luck it’ll choke. Then he felt a painful sensation on both sides of his head. The creature had his head in its mouth. As the pain increased, Nad offered up a prayer, to anyone who was listening, that it would all be over soon.
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commendably twisted end... though the sudden intro of the vykker was COMPLETELY unexpected. I thought their skin was grayish... hmmm... but things aren't always as they seem are they?

when one gives a critique of another's work, it should never be "I liked it. it was cool"

so I must put this thought out. there has been a lot of slig revolutionary fics out there. I understand why... but I find the phenomenon interesting...

oh well

keep it up man, we're waiting for number twenty seven
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ack! seems like both you and grid are chapter crazy . Anyway, very interesting yeah Mainard your right there are a lot of slig fic popping up...
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really, you should have expected the Vykker, as they were sent out into the forest to find a runaway vykker.

yes, there are a lot of slig fics. when i started writing this, i thought it would be new and original. then i joined the forums, and got depressed at the number of people with the same idea.

i've just finished Chapter 32, and [oh, Odd, this'll sound bigheaded] i think its my best chapter yet. i'll get it posted in while, i just want to give out these little teasers.

here are 25 and 26. they're quite short, enjoy the shortness while you can...

CHAPTER 25

“Any sign of them?”

Frag shook his head. “Can’t see anyone. They’ve disappeared.”

Greeb sat on a crossbranch and held his head in his hands. “We have to decide what we’re going to do. We could spend forever looking for the others. I would have been happy to spend the rest of my life in the forest, but Rettick’s right; we’d never be able to cope. Besides, we have a duty to those we left behind at the factory to try our best to free them, too. I’m fairly sure we’re heading the right way, and we must be close to the edge, because the trees seem to be getting smaller and further apart. You can almost see the bottom if you look down. We could get away, and try and find the mudokon villages.” He cleared his throat. “It would mean abandoning those who are still out here, but they will undoubtedly head for the edge as well. What do you think? Do we go on to try and free our fellow sligs or do we try and find the others?”

Frag was nodding. Greeb guessed that he’d want to head out of the forest, as would Drak. In fact, when Greeb thought about it, he himself was probably closest to those who were lost, so if he wanted to leave, the others would follow.

“We’ve forgotten Volt.”

Greeb looked up. “What?”

Briori waved his arms. “No-one remembered to pick him up earlier. And I’ve no idea where we were then.”

Greeb cursed. “That’s Six we’ve lost, now!”

Drak spoke up. “We should carry on. If we stay out here, we’ll all be lost.”

Frag nodded. “I agree.”

“Me too.” Briori said.

Greeb almost smiled. “Straight this way then? That’s the way we’ve been heading.”

The others followed silently, thinking their own thoughts.

CHAPTER 26

“Lost him.”

Gormanul nodded his agreement. “Turn back?”

Tillyn shrugged. “I guess so, but I’m not sure which way we even came.”

Gormanul pointed to his left. “That way.”

“You’re sure?”

Gormanul shrugged. “ ’s as good as any way, really.”

They walked for about ten minutes, before Tillyn held up his hand. “Look!” Ahead was a battered corpse. It was barely recognisable as a slig. “It doesn’t look like one of our party. We must be close to the edge.”

“ ’s not eaten.”

“Shall we take a close look?”

Gormanul nodded, and they approached the corpse, but they weren’t ten feet away when the ground erupted. A net about twenty feet across lifted them, the corpse, and everything else on the branch up into the air. “Shit!” Gormanul tugged at the ropes, but they were very strong, and didn’t give. After struggling for a while, they settled down to wait and see who had caught them.

After twenty minutes or so, a slig approached along the branch. He was talking into his mobile fone. A voice that anyone who knew Supervisor Dran would have recognised crackled on the other end.

“Where are you?” came Dran’s voice

“Trap 215, 300 metres up, sector 21L.” the slig responded.

“The creature?”

The slig shook his head. “A couple of runaways, by the look of it.”

There was a pause. “Wait there for the Flyer, then send them back here. Oh, and remember to reset the trap afterwards. That creature’s still out there somewhere.”

“Aye aye, sir!” The guard put his fone away, and grinned at Tillyn and Gormanul. “You’ve got an interesting time ahead of you, guys!”

And he settled down to wait, watching their futile attempts to escape.

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that'll do. thanks!

and now, the one mainard's been waiting for... [fanfare] Chapter 27! it's crudely written, as i had a lot of information to give out in a short chapter, so it's not a fun one to read. it explains a lot, though.

CHAPTER 27

The first thing that greeted Rettick when he regained consciousness was a familiar face.

“Volt! Are the others here?”

Volt shook his head. “They left me, and ran off to find you guys.” He indicated something behind Rettick. Rettick slowly turned to see what he was talking about. He saw the creature that had killed Lork and, he reluctantly concluded, saved his life. It seemed somehow less threatening now. Maybe it was its current lack of two-foot claws.

“What is it?”

“He’s the Vykker we were sent to find in the first place.”

Rettick stared at the so-called Vykker in disbelief. “It has a Vykker’s head, but it’s so… tall.”

The creature spoke. In contrast to its tall, powerful shape, it had the reedy, nasal voice of all Vykkers. “My body was one of the first things I got rid of. It wasn’t very convenient for life in the wild.”

Rettick thought for a while. Now that he thought about it, this creature did have the same basic shape as a Vykker. It had the same number or arms, legs, and heads, anyway. “You took the formula. You can change your shape at will, now, can you?”

Dr. Mildar nodded. “This is how my race could have been, if we hadn’t become so reliant on our technology. In reality, our arms and legs have become almost vestigial. All I really did was lengthen my limbs and tone up my muscles.”

“The claws…”

Mildar smiled, or looked like he was trying to. “I didn’t need them any more, after I had used them.”

“So you…”

“Got rid of them, yes.”

Rettick nodded, nervously. “Does it hurt?”

“It did the first few times, but you get used to it.”

There was a pause. “You rescued Volt.”

Mildar nodded.

“Saved his life. And mine. Why? For that matter, why’d you come out here at all?”

Mildar sighed. “Were you ever told how the Great Forest is ‘impenetrable’? How everything that goes in it is killed?”

Volt nodded. “People used to tell us that there was a magical spell put on it by Mudokon Shamans.”

“I never believed it, though” said Rettick, “I mean, there’s no such thing as magic, is there? It’s probably just very dangerous, although come to think of it, we survived for a long time, and we didn’t even run into any wildlife at all. Except for weak, edible things.”

Mildar half-smiled again. “You only survived because I was keeping the wildlife away. And the Crossbreed.”

“How?”

Mildar pulled an oval device out of an unseen pocket. It was a homing beacon, like the one in the scanner, only it wasn’t flashing. “It has an on/off switch. I kept leading it away when it got close. I just had… a lapse of concentration.” He drifted off, his eyes glazing over, then snapped back to reality. “Anyway, you’re wrong.”

“You mean there is a spell?”

“No, there was. And it wasn’t put there by mudokons, it was there since the beginning.”

Volt looked confused. “The beginning? The beginning of the world?”

“Not quite, but it was there since just after the continents, when the landscape started to form, and the forest grew. I’m a bit patchy on mudokon mythology, but as far as I can gather, there were these powerful, god-type beings in the world then, and they were worshipped by the early Mudokons. And Glukkons.”

Volt snorted. “Glukkons only care about profit!”

Rettick, who knew Grozit Jr, said nothing.

Mildar continued. “No, they used to be a spiritual people, like the mudokons. The change was partly the mudokons’ fault. I suppose my people were partly to blame, as well.” He drifted off again, but pulled himself back. “Anyway, that’s another story. The point is that one or two of these powerful creatures decided that they liked the forest, and saw the change that was happening to the rest of the world. They decided that the forest should remain safe, so they put a kind of ‘staying’ spell on it. It didn’t stop things from changing, but it separated the forest from the outside, in a way. Creatures and People from the outside found that they never really wanted to enter the forest for bad purposes, and even the odd ones that did found themselves unable to harm it. Your friend Greeb, for example, said that he’d always wanted to visit the forest, but that was because he wished it no harm.”

There was a pause, then Rettick realised something. “You mean you were listening in on our conversations, too?”

Mildar looked embarrassed. “Not all the time. Why, shouldn’t I have been?”

“It’s just that we have this thing called privacy.”

“All right, I’m sorry. There are more important things at the moment. To continue, those on the inside also became unwilling to leave, and things developed separately on the two sides of this invisible barrier. In fact, the glukkons got so pissed off that they actually erected a huge wall around the forest, which discouraged movement even more.”

Volt looked thoughtful. “So what happened? You said there’s no spell anymore.”

The tall Vykker pulled a flask out of his pocket, and took a swig. “One of the people who found himself drawn to the forest was a young Glukkon Executive called Grozit. He didn’t mean the forest any harm. Not at first.” He took another swig from the flask. “He came to explore during his time off, despite the warnings he received from his fellow executives. They all thought he was mad, but he didn’t care what they thought. He went deep into the forest, and discovered a set of ruined temples.

“Quite a while after the spell had originally been placed, the ‘gods’ dispersed. They were no longer needed, and legend has it that they return when they’re needed. Some died, only temporarily, others went away to far away places. Many, including one that was known to early mudokons as the Shrykull, merely vanished. At least one decided that it loved the forest too much to leave, and opted to sleep in the forest until the time came for the gods to reawaken. This god, I forget its name, lived in the temples of the forest mudokons, and slept. It was this that Grozit discovered.

“Basically, he got talking to this god, and convinced it not to destroy him. Now he realised the commercial potential of the forest, and planned to exploit it. If he hadn’t met the god, the spell would have had him killed, but he sort of converted the god to his side. He persuaded the god to let down the spell to allow exploitation of the forest, in return for which, Grozit agreed to introduce it to the Cartel culture, and share the profits. When he returned to ‘civilization’, he moved his small weapons business to near to the forest, and began the deforestation. He kept this a secret from the Cartel Central, so that it all went tax-free, and there were no competitors.”

Rettick looked unconvinced. “How do you know all of this? I thought you said you weren’t very good with mudokon religion.”

Mildar smiled. “Grozit obviously wasn’t very good at keeping secrets. When he got back, he made an offer to my labs, saying that if we helped him to exploit the forest by producing equipment to help, and by examining the wildlife for possible useful extracts, he would cut us into his profits, and allow us full research rights to all of the forest.” He took a swig from the bottle. “As you should know, there is a lot of competition between the labships, and we jumped at the chance to get ahead. We – or rather they – are now based entirely on-site. They analyse things that are brought to them, and design new traps for animals, or antidotes for poisons, that sort of thing.”

There was a long pause, while Rettick and Volt digested all of this new information. Then Rettick had a thought. “That still doesn’t answer my questions. Why did you run away, and why did you save our lives?”

Mildar sighed. “You can’t study these animals for as long as we have, without forming an attachment to them. Yes, we helped to trap them and kill them, but we were never in favour of wide-scale killing. We could see the value of the lumber trade and the meat trade, but Grozit had no idea what he was doing. The Magog Cartel has it all wrong. You don’t hunt things to extinction, then find something else to hunt, because sooner or later you’re going to run out of animals. What they should do is hunt in moderation, but allow the creatures to survive as a race. That’s what the mudokons do; they only take what they need, and leave the rest. I left because I didn’t want to see all these creatures disappear from the face of Oddworld. I resolved to stop this trade somehow, even if it meant losing my job and friends. At least I could live with the wildlife and the natives, if they’d accept me.”

Rettick and Volt waited for him to continue, but he didn’t, so Volt prompted him. “Why did you save our lives?”

“You remember I talked about the forest mudokons? Well, they still live here, millions of them. I thought that if I could get them on my side, we could take out the logging operation.”

“So what happened?”

“I sort of got on the wrong side of them.” After seeing their questioning faces, he elaborated. “When I first approached them, I pretended to be a mudokon. They found out soon enough, when I didn’t know any of the rituals, or even which one was the leader. They saw me as a threat, and attacked me. I was much more powerful than them, but I didn’t want to hurt them, so I ran away.” He paused, then looked down at the two sligs. “I want you to approach them for me, and explain everything.”

The two just stared at him, as if to work out whether or not he was mad. Volt found his tongue first.

“You expect them to listen to sligs?”

Mildar hesitated. “They are very… backward people. They have had no contact with the outside world for a long time, since before the Glukkons enslaved to mudokons. They’ve never even seen your people before, except for rumours of creatures on the southern continent, Pardos.”

Rettick held up a hand. “Wait a minute, you mean there are sligs on Pardos?”

A nod. “Living as they did before the glukkons came and captured some of them, in the trees. After the first few slave ships, the glukkons captured a queen, and never bothered coming back to Pardos. But that’s unimportant. Pardos in far away, and there are more immediate things to be done. Are you with me?”

Rettick hesitated, and then nodded. Volt posed a question. “How do you know that? I mean, Grozit never went to Pardos, did he?”

“Some of it I learned from the forest tribes before they blew my cover. Some of it I pieced together from various libraries. Vykker libraries contain a lot of little known information if you look hard enough. Even things that the Magog Cartel doesn’t want people to know about. Now, are you with me?”

Both sligs nodded their agreement.

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me? i can't afford holidays abroad.

i can't wait. i'm writing chapter 34, but i've only posted up to 28. so here's another. this introduces Ana, but she really comes into her own in chapter 32.

CHAPTER 28

“This it, then?”

“Just over that rise.”

The disagreements of the previous day had been overcome by the sheer joy of the mudokons at returning home. As the crawler moved up the ridge that led into the Mudoris valley, everyone on board was gathered on the bridge, including Crim, Meet, and Sillan. Crim was still unaware of the feelings of most of the tribe against him.

“You looking forward to getting home, then?”

Int didn’t even notice who spoke. “Three weeks we’ve been away. What do you think…” He trailed off when he saw that it was Crim who had spoken, but Crim didn’t notice his reluctance.

“I guess you’re pretty excited.”

Int recovered himself. “You bet I am!”

Jal was talking to Bil. “Do you think your village will accept us?”

“I’m sure they will.” Bil’s expression belied his confidence.

Jal let it pass. “How big is the tribe?”

“About 3000 strong.”

“So why do you send out small raiding parties like this? Why not make a full frontal assault on the factory?”

Bil looked at Jal as though he were mad. “We’re not that warlike. We don’t just –”

“Look!”

At that shout from one of the tribesmen, all conversations ceased, and everyone looked ahead through the viewscreen. The crawler was passing the crest of the ridge, and the Mudoris village was laid out before them. To Jal, it looked like paradise. There were mud buildings of all sizes down there, and the valley was green and forested. There was a wide river running through the centre, from which some villagers were drawing water.

Something was wrong. The villagers weren’t running to greet the returned heroes; they were running away. The warriors looked at each other in puzzlement. Then Bil laughed.

“Of course, we’re in a Cartel transport!” He climbed up the ladder to the entry hatch, opened it, and stuck his head out. “Hey! It’s all right! It’s just us! (You haven’t got a megaphone down there, have you, guys? Thanks.) IT’S OKAY! IT’S ONLY US! WE’RE BACK!”

Some of the villagers turned at the sound of Bil’s voice. After a little confusion, thet began to run up the slope towards the crawler. When they got closer, they began calling to the warriors, asking how the raid went. The first villager to reach the crawler was a tall, dark green female, who climbed to the top and threw her arms around Bil, who laughed.

“Ana! I’ve missed you! Have you been okay while we were away?”

“We’ve been counting the days!”

Bil had climbed out of the hatch, and the others were emerging. As they slid down the side of the crawler, they embraced their loved ones at the bottom of the slope. Jal emerged and sat beside Bil, who turned to him.

“This is Ana. Ana, this is Jal, one of the slaves we rescued.”

Jal didn’t spoil the occasion by correcting him. “Pleased to meet you.”

“Same here. Welcome to Mudoris. I hope you’ll be happy here.”

Jal shifted uncomfortably. “Me too, I suppose. Excuse me.”

He stood, and walked over to the entry hatch. He peered down, and waited till his eyes got accustomed to the gloom. He saw Crim, Meet and Sillan sitting at the foot of the ladder.

“Come on up, guys! Why’re you sitting down there in the dark?”

Crim looked up. “Why do you think? We wouldn’t be welcome.”

“Oh, that’s not true. Give me your hand, Meet. Sillan, you lift Crim up.”

Meet tentatively raised a paw, but Sill and Crim made no move. Jal pulled Meet out of the hatch, and looked down at the others. He frowned for a second, then turned away.

“Ana, this is Meet.”

“Pleased to meet you, Meet.”

“Pl’s t’meet y’Ana.” Meet naturally spoke brokenly, without proper vowel sounds. It had taken the others a long time to get him to speak properly at all, and he still reverted to his broken speech whenever he was nervous.

“You’re a Gabbit, aren’t you?”

“ ’s, s’pose so.”

“I always thought you guys were extinct.”

Jal spoke up. “We’ve never met any others.” He returned to the hatch. “You see, guys? Now get up here!”

Crim sighed. “It’s different for Meet, he’s a Gabbit.”

“Sillan, just lift him up here.”

Sillan gave a drawn-out hum, which sounded for all the world like a sigh, and grasped Crim in his invisible fields.

“Hey, what’re you doing? Stop!”

As they rose out of the hatch, a hush descended on the crowd.

“Err... Hi!” There was a pause. “Could you put me down now, please?”
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Heh, I meant going abroad to Pardos...

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i really do want to go to Pardos, but i don't think i'm going to have time in this fic. i had a kind of idea sorted out for my second, too, but i'm having a bit of a rethink [it was set on an Oil Rig, which may be too close to 'Tides of Odd' for comfort], so i may go to Pardos then.

you'll get a teaser about Pardos at the end of the fic, i promise you...

so many fics to write, and so little time... *envies Teal and all the other writers who manage to keep their Short Stories Short.*
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not much to say. her's the next one.

CHAPTER 29

They were walking at ground level now. The trees were short enough that light could get to them. The trees were still taller than any they’d seen outside, but they were far shorter than the ones they’d been walking on earlier. The thickest branches out here were 2 or 3 metres across, rather than 20 or 30.

Drak, who was in the lead, held up a hand. “Shh!”

They froze. Greeb whispered to Drak: “You heard something?”

Drak nodded. “I think so. I’ll go on ahead a bit. It seems a bit lighter here.”

Greeb shook his head. “You stay here. You’ve taken the lead for too long. I’ll scout ahead.” And he disappeared into the undergrowth.

He was moving for less than 5 minutes, when he saw a clearing ahead through the trees.

“The forest shouldn’t end this suddenly.” He fell to his knees, and crawled the rest of the way to the edge.

The sight that greeted his eyes surprised him, and at first he wasn’t sure exactly what he was seeing, but then he knew. He was a looking at one of the largest logging operations on the continent. It was so huge that the tree stumps stretched right to the horizon. He could see machinery for cutting trees, machinery for shifting earth, and machinery for killing things that tried to stop them. There were corpses of creatures he’d never seen before, some of which had been killed and left to rot where they were. In the distance he could make out what looked like a Vykkers’ Labship, sitting on the clear ground. There were other buildings dotted around the landscape: buildings that resembled barracks, slaughterhouses, sawmills, and many other different shapes, several of which were entirely unfamiliar to Greeb. There were teams of mudokons and sligs pulling the huge trees and animal corpses to the sawmills and slaughterhouses, or sometimes to the Labs. Activity was spread about the forest edge, and Greeb was in between two logging teams. When he looked to his side, he could see the forest edge stretching away, raggedly.

He turned to return to the others, and was confronted by an angry-looking mudokon.

The mudokon shouted over his shoulder. “I’ve found another one!” And he charged at Greeb, swinging a large staff of wood at his head. The wood connected, and Greeb sank to the ground, unconscious.
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yeah *flames red* sorry about missing the whole vykker thing. I guess I just skipped over it somehow. oops... oh well.

I love it. the chapter was a whoo hoo richeous success... good job man. more priase later, after i've finished reading it all... gheh
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which one? 27?

your fic is fecking brilliant, btw. it's already my second favourite ever [after Only Hyoo-mun], and on its way to the top!
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it is so hard to finally offer praise after having read all of it in that big chunk... my brain just kinda spaced out at the thought of all the great things I had read. this story is the story I come to this site to read... well this and grid's. and teal's, but of all I love this one. the character's are so interesting... I love the inclusion of the Odd theme into it too... making a deal with an Odd. sounds a bit like what's in my story, but without copying... I don't get mad about the whole Oil drilling thing, if you want to set one in an oil drilling operation... well... as long as the oil isn't alive and pissed off at it's lot then it's not really copying is it? if you want, go ahead. you'd make the blighted oil empire of Dark Seas proud... and hey... I could mention your company in my fanfic...tha'td be so cou! ^_^
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i think it would make more sense if i mentioned yours.

hey, is Dark Seas a huge corporation, a small business, or a small part of a business? if you like, i could share some of the plot of my second fic with you, and we could coordinate our fics! we'd soon show that damn Teal/Dragadon/DH/Twisted alliance!

shall i post the details here, in another topic, or shall i email you/talk on icq?
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