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since the fourm being down seems to have deleted my thread heres the first two chapters.

the sound of slogs barking alerted the dark green mudokon.

" crap" he grumbled and got up from his sitting place. as he leaned over and grabbed an sharp stick to use as a weapon there was the movement of a smaller figure behind him.

" daddy?" it whimpered.

" it's ok honey, probably just some slogs that got loose from their owners. just in case I want you to stay out of sight, ok?"

the smaller figure paused before answering. " will you be back soon?"

the mudokon gave a fatherly smile. " I’ll come back, I promise."

sasitifed the smaller figure nodded and nestled into the bushes to hide. giving one more look to the others hiding spot he leapt to a tree branch towards the direction of the slogs barks.

" barky! mr.woof! there you are!" the smaller slig exclaimed as he embraced the two run away slogs. they enthusasitly returned his hugs with licks on his snout.

" you are such a goober, you know that?" the larger slig mumbled, watching his friend in disgust.

" your just jealous that they like me better then you, tren."

" yeah right yarbo." tren snorted. " as if I cared less about those yappy little chunks of flesh think of me."

" are you two quite done collecting those little monsters." snarled another slig, starting to come out of the foliage.

tren and yarbo gulped and went wide eyed.

" y-y-yes general xaiver sir. we've retrieved the slogs that got loose."

"good. now see that you don't loose them again of you will find yourself shot one face tenctle each." xaiver said cooly before turning back to the foliage. the sudden loud yelp from one of the slogs made all three turn. the slog that yarbo had dubbed "barky" laid on the ground, a sharped stick as a crude spear stuck through him.

" mr.barky!" yarbo cried.

" never mind the damn slog!" tren shouted as he unhostlerd his gun from his back. " there’s something here!"
for the next few minutes the only noises were that of mr.woof snarling and the sligs breathing. they stood close to each other, studying the foliage around them. xaiver hissed as his eyes shifted bak and forth angerly. he had things to do and did not want to be bothered with this.

"maybe it's..."

the last of yarbos started sentence ended in a hideous squeal as another crude spear found its way into his face.

" yarbo!" tren cried in shock.

xaiver ignored the grizzly scene and aimed his gun at the trees over them. " there it is! shoot!"

the sound of xaiver yelling and shooting off his gun broke tren out of his shock and he joined with xaiver at shooting at the figure. the figure moved quickly amongst the branches to avoid the fire. it suddenly ran out of branches and leaped out of the tree into the moonlight.

a dark green mudokon faced the figures. his feathers that were as most mudokons tightly braided were a vivid red, contrasting agasint his slate gray eyes. the mudokon snarled at them, the crescent shape scar around his right eye scrunched. the look frightened the remaining slog who whimpered and hid in the foliage.

tren stepped back in fear. " th..th..thats ben the death eye! don't look into his eyes sir!"

Ben smiled as he abruptly met eyes with tren. " am I that famous? I’m honored. your right though, you shouldn't look into my eyes."

tren didn't answer. his eyes were wide, almost trance like.

"tren?" xaiver said, poking tren. no reaction. ben smiled again, this time a feral,almost fierce smile.

" getting kind of hot out here,isn't it? in fact, I’d say one could burn up out here."

" what the hell are you talking about muddie? it's not even spring yet!" xaiver snapped at ben, starting to think that perhaps the mudokon was insane.

tren suddenly snapped out of his trance and begin to pant.

" it's...so hot. oh odd! I’m burning up! help me!" tren begin to frail frantically.

xaiver blinked in surprize. it took him only a few seconds to remember the tales about ben the death eye. the mudokon could supposeinly play with your brain ounce he locked his eyes with yours. any suggestion of his would become real to the victim. the effects were usually temporary but could be incredibly painful while they lasted.
ben chuckled at his handiwork. no matter how many times he did this it was always amusing. if using it too often didn't tire him out he would do this more often. he remembered about the remaining slig when something lashed out and hit him hard In the face, sending him stumbling back.

" shit! that hurt!" ben wiped the blood now trickleing from the bottom of his mouth and looked at his attacker. waving high over xaivers head, unnoticed in the dark earlier was a long metallic tail. the moonlight flashed on it's silver and gold paneling and the three sharp prongs at the end of it. it looked deadly, almost like a scorpions tail.

" nice toy." ben remarked as he wiped off more blood. " where did you get it?"

" thats not really any of your business mudokon." xaiver said cooly as he made the tail prongs touch,makeing an electric ball. xaiver quickly shot out the electric ball, grazing bens shoulder. ben grit his teeth in pain and stepped back as xaivers face took on a cruel look.

" you'll see that unlike my friends here I don't mess about." xaiver lifted his tai land lashed out, trying to hit ben again. ben quickly ducked and leaped at xaiver. ben grabbed onto a face tentacle and kicked for all it was worth. xaiver grunted and punched ben. soon the two were caught in a heap, rolling on the Forrest floor. they threatened and cursed each other, randomly punching and kicking. they rolled about so much they soon reached the small cliff face standing over the nearby river rapids.

" why don't you give it up mudokon?" xaiver hissed. " if you do I might not kill you."

" up yours." ben snarled back. " I’d rather die then let you take me as a slave." ben rolled again and with a kick of the legs sent xaiver off the edge of the cliff face, xaiver screaming in rage as he went.

" finely" ben panted and started up into a crouch. ben was still trying to catch his breath when xaivers tail came shooting from over the edge and wrapped around bens ankle. ben let out a sharp cry as he was pulled from the ground and smashed agasint the opposite cliff wall. there was a loud crack and ben eyes rolled into the back of it, seemingly dead. xaiver sneered and dropped ben into the river.

" I warned you." xaiver said with a smirked. he used his tail to grab a tree over him and pull himself from the cliff side branches that had caught him. after he got himself back together he got up and located tren who was laying on the ground, recovering. xaiver gave him a sharp kick.

" get up wuss. he's gone."

" y-y-you killed ben the death eye?" tren said in awe.

" death eye my metal ass. he was easy to get rid of. not my faultt you were dumb enough to..." xaiver stopped as the remaining slog's barking. " oh NOW what!" xaiver angerly swaggered towards the barking. ounce close he noticed the slog had something small trapped agasint a tree.

" move over mutt,let me see." xaiver grumbled and moved the slog out of the way to get a better look. his eyes widened suddenly in surprize. shivering before him was a pink lavender mudokon child.

a female mudokon.

chapter 2

" Ali! wake up before the guards come!"

The now grown lavender female mudokon opened one eye as an older gray colored mudokon shook her.

" aww jud, five more minutes."

" the bell for work already rung five minutes ago. now get up. do you want to get in trouble again?"

Ali merely groaned and turned over.

" wake me when I’m in trouble."

jud sighed. getting Ali up was always a challenge. luckily he knew what to do at this point.

" Ali, get up now." jud said. " or I’ll tell matterson the real reason why the buzzsaw came loose."

Ali grumbled and sat up. the thought of the gray glukkon boss getting mad at her again was enough to rouse her.

" thats dirty pool jud." she said.

" only doing what has to be done. now lets hurry before the sligs notice we're not working."

the two mudokons moved quickly from the cellblock and into the lumberyard. being late the workers were already in full swing. it seemed to be the two mudokons lucky day though as they managed to get to working line without the sligs seeing them.

" did you hear about Larry?" cal, a young mudokon said to Ali as she joined the line.

" no. what about Larry?" she asked.

" I heard he tried to escape last night." cal said.

" no way. what did they do to him when they caught him?" Ali said as she picked up a small bark peeler.

" well,i don't really know but I haven't seen him since last night." cal said with a worried tone. " I don't think he's coming back."

Ali was silent. it was easy to get cals meaning.

" ALI!" a voice suddenly screamed.

" uh oh." cal murmured and scrambled away from Ali.

" I didn't do it!" Ali instantly said, not even turning. she didn't need to turn to recognize the angry voice.

matterson.

the glukkon towered over her, his eyes set in an glare. Ali turned and smiled innocently.

" I uh,mean, good morning mr.matterson. things are going well I trust?"

jud shook his head at alis cheesy smile.

" believe it or not your not in trouble today Ali." matterson said. " I actually have someone here who wishes to see you."

"me?" Ali said surprised. after all, who would come just to see a mudokon slave. matterson moved aside, letting a dark purple vykker by. Ali instantly got chills. though vykkers in general gave her the creeps there was something about this one that got to her, despite her fear she smiled and greeted the vykker.

" um.. hi?"

the vykker merely smiled back, sending another chill down Ali's back.

" yes, thats her all right. no mistake about it." the vykker said. " I’ll be taking her now."

" yes mr. waneseny." matterson said to the vykker.

" take me?" Ali yelped. " take me where?"

" why, back to my labs my dear. "

Alis eyes widened at the word " labs". she had heard of vykkers tinkering around with innocent mudokons. it didn't take much thinking to know what would happen to her if she ended up there.already she was backing up,ready to run. she found herself bumping into two sligs that had slipped up behind her during the conversation. Ali's heart began to beat fast as the two sligs grabbed hold of her arms.

" now now, can't have you running off ,can we?" matterson said.

Ali looked frightened now, as did jud as he watched the scene helplessly.

" look, I think you probably have the wrong mudokon." Ali said, attempted to weasel her way out of trouble.

" I doubt that very much. you’re the only female mudokon here." waneseny said.

Ali inwardly cursed. being female had signaled her out before. now this time this signaling out could mean her life.

" well, shes all yours now.. good luck." matterson said.

waneseny nodded and the two sligs began to drag Ali off.

it was then jud had enough. he finely decided he had to act. moving quickly he shot out his leg and tripped the sligs holding Ali. the sligs of course not expecting jud to tripped them tripped over the leg and fell, letting go of Ali in the process.

" ALI! RUN!" jud yelled.

Ali didn't need a second cue. she was off like a shot out of the lumberyard.

" don't just lay there!" waneseny raged. " stop her!"

the sligs grumbled and got to their feet and after Ali. matterson turned on jud.

" you will be dealt with later!"

jud's face showed no emotion. at the moment he was more concerned about Ali and wether she'd get away.

chapter three comeing up in a jiff.
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I'm likin it! It's a good story. Bit of a mystery about Ali though...
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heres chapter 3

ali did the only thing she could do. she kept on running. trouble was, she wasn't sure where to run to. no way she was getting out the front gates and going back to the lumberyard would be pointless. the only thing she could do was run about blindly. she was skidding about the hallways of the main building when she heard the metallic steps of a slig. odd, there seemed to be a scrapeing noise accompying the footsteps. was the slig dragging his gun along?

" here girly,girly." a gravely voice echoed.

Ali stopped and looked about.

she saw him now, lighted by the sputtering hallway light. he was a big slig. not as big as a big brother slig but still rather bulky. he seem caught in a stooped postion, as if that bulk was too much for him to stand properly. a blood red stripe ran down his snout and over his left eye. what caught ali's attention though was the huge metal spiked gloves he wore. the gloves themselves were dull and splattered with rust. at least she hoped that was rust. the spikes however were sharp as the day they were made.

" there you are girly." he chuckled at ali as he strode forward. " ya wouldn't think of running from old impale would ya?."

" impale, what an apporite name." ali thought to herself, not dareing to speak to the menanceing slig. ali slowly began to back away, not takeing her eyes off of impale.

" there there little miss, theres no need to be frightened of me. waneseny wants you alive so i can't hurt you..."

the slig stopped and paused for thought before giveing an heart stopping smile.

" much anyways."

that was it. ali spun on her heels and ran for it ounce again. this only made impale chuckle before he stormed after her.

ali chanced a glance over her shoulder. she gasped as she saw how close impale was. she had thought that bulk would make him slow and ungainly. sadly it seemed to be the oppsite as he was only a few feet from her now. she turned her head back and tried to put on speed. unfortunely as she did so did impale. with a lunge he grabbed the back of her neck with his hard grip. ali let out a cry as she was yanked off her feet.

" ya shouldn't have tried to run from me darlin. now i'm going to have to teach you a lesson."

ali's eyes widened as she saw impale raise his right fist and aim at her face. she closed her eyes, readying to feel the impact.

suddenly there was a streak or gray and a metal tail wrapped itself around impale chest, lifting him up and squeezeing. impale gasped and released ali as he struggled for breath. ali opened her eyes to take in what was going on. her heart nearly stopped when she saw her rescuer.

xaiver.

ali didn't get it. why was the meanest slig in the lumberyard helping her?

" apprently you don't follow orders very well impale." xaiver snarled. " i belive the order was to bring her back unharmed."

impale only gasped, unable to get the air to reply.

" now, i suggest you start following orders before theres one less slig on the workforce if you know what i mean."

impale nodded quickly. with that xaiver threw impale to the floor and turned to ali.

" and i suggest you come peacefully."

ali sighed and got to her feet. she saw she had no choice but to go along.

" good girl." xaiver said with a sneer as ali walked over to him. impale snorted as he got to his feet.

" hmph, your no fun."

xaiver ignored impale and begin to lead ali off. impale was soon behind him.

" well, it's about time." matterson said as soon as he spotted the three.

" sorry sir. had a little trouble." xaiver said, casting a dark look at impale. impale merely snorted and looked away from xaiver.

" get her on the truck. i want to get going." waneseny said before turning away and heading off. xaiver started to lead ali off when without warning something hard and metal hit the back of ali's head, sending her to the ground. she heard impale laughing before the world turned dark.

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hours later a big bump woke ali up. she sat straight up, her head swimming as she did. her vision was still a bit blurry as she peered around but it didn't take her long to figure out she was in the back of a truck. now that she determined where she was she begin to peice togeather what had happened. she almost wish she hadn't.

now she rembeber the vykker, the chase, and being hit by impale. she also remebered now her desitnation. a vykker lab.

she shivered and wrapped her arms around herself. she was to be an experiment, no doubt about that. she couldn't help but wonder why her? why had the vykker come all the way from a far away lab just to take her.

she was so frightend she hardly noticed the slig sitting in the other corner of the truck.

" about time you woke up." it grunted, keeping a hand on his gun.

ali jumped in surprize at the sligs rough voice. she quickly got over her surprize and studied the slig. he was a deep green color, almost black she thought. contrasting agasint the black was the yellow drop shaped marking on his snout.

" what are you stareing at?" the slig snarled.

" uh, nothing."

the truck suddenly took a sharp turn,makeing ali belive she had left her stomanch on that turn. the slig lost his balance and ended up on the floor. ali had to work hard to hold in a giggle.

" hey! watch it up there!" the slig snarled as he stood up again.

" aw, dry up zander." the slig driveing shot back. zander murmered something under his breath but then turned back to ali. ali tryed her best to avoid his gaze as she thought about her current prediciment. there seemed no way out of this. as the truck continued on ali's thoughts were filled with a lingering sense of dread...
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Still great, sorry i took so long to read it. Keep it up.
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fienly,next chapter. read on!

In truth Zander wasn't very intrested in his job. Like most sligs he rather be doing something else then what he was assigned to. To Zander, anything that got him to stay around the other sligs longer was something he rather not do. He hated being with the other Sligs. There were many reasons for this. He thought of those reasons as he kept one eye on Ali.

Ali now was merely stareing ahead, a frightened look in her eyes. Zander could hardly blame her. Ripped from the place she knew as home and being brought to a Vykkers lab. Hell, he'd be scared too. He almost felt bad for the Mudokon. Of course,he wouldn't say that out loud.

" How much longer?" Zander called out to the front of the truck.

" Not too much longer." The driveing slig replied. " just about six more miles and we'll be there."

"good, i'm getting sick of sitting back here." Zander said.

If it were possible Ali looked more miserible then she had a few seconds ago. Not long untill she would be i na Vykker lab. There she wouldn't have a likely hope of escape. She would end up as a project. Suffering or possibley dead.

Now things could have gone that way. And it would of if it hadn't been for the herd of scrabs.

The scrabs were merely resting, a couple of them hissing and fighting eachother. The sudden rumbleing of the truck disturbed then. And a disturbed scrab is an angry scrab.

" Oh shit." Say the slig driver the second he saw the scrab herd heading towards the truck.

" No problem, just ram through them. the truck should be able to take the punishment." Said the passenger slig, though not without a waver in his voice.

" Ram through what? Whats going on out there?" Zander asked, hearing the conversation.

" explain later. hold on."

With that the driver slig slammed his foot down on the gas pedal.

" Hold on to ..wahhh!" The sudden change in speed sent both mudokon and slig went tumbleing to the back of the truck ending up piled on one another.

" o.k,that really hurts." Ali managed to mumble.

" Get the hell away from me!" Zander snapped at her as he pulled himself away.

" Hey,your the one who fell on me." Ali snapped back,temper getting the better of her.

" Don't you talk that way to me you damned muddie. I ought to.."

The truck swerved suddenly,sending the two tumbleing again.

" You know something, nevermind." Zander said,now under Ali.

" Shit! it got the tire!" Came the scream from the driver.

More bumps and swerves. Screeching from the scrabs could be heard. Ali was so frightened it was almost a blessing when there was an almighty crash and everything went black.

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"Ow,my body hurts." Ali moaned as she came to sometime later. She saw only darkness as her eyes focused. Was she still in the truck. She felt around untill she felt the steel sides,confirming she was still in the truck. On her feet now she walked blindly in the dark. She yelped as she tripped over something soft and went rolling. It was a luckey roll though as she went rolling out the now open doors of the truck. She landed onto her back,looking up at the starry sky. The sight made her almost forget the confuseing situation. Almost. She pulled herself up and looked about. The scene was choas. Chunks of landscape and bodyparts of the two sligs that were in the front. were strewn about. Ali made a face about the body parts, epspicely when she stepped on one of them.

" EWW!" she cried and imedditly began rubbing her foot in the dirt, trying to rid herself of the " ew,i stepped on something gross." feeling.

" Wah...whats going on?" came the moan from the truck. Ali turned to see Zander comeing from from the back of the truck,rubbing his sore head.

" I...don't know." Ali anwsered. " I woke up and found this scene. Something ripped apart those two sligs."

Zander looked toward the choas and gasped. Holding in his disgust he walked over to the scene and studied it.

" Scrabs." He muttered. " They look like they've been ripped apart by scrabs. They must have made the truck crash somehow."

Despite the sligs being her eneimes Ali couldn't help but feel bad. Unfoetunely there wasn't much she could do now. Instead she turned and slowly began to walk away.

" Hey, just a second. Where the hell do you think your going? The labs that way." Zander growled, pointing to the left.

Ali sized up the situation. One slig, with no gun. Suddenly she felt brave.

" You think i'm going there? Hell no! I'm staying as far away from that place as possible."

"Is that so?" Zander hissed as he advanced.

Ali backed away, her bravery leaveing her. She then turned and ran. Zander went after her.

The chase was on.
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Ah, the oh so common slig/mudokon relationship. Nice one, keep going. Great chapter.
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Ah, the oh so common slig/mudokon relationship. Nice one, keep going. Great chapter.
Heh, funny you should say it, but I think cherie was one of the first to do a story like this - I remember reading "Unlikely Friend" when *I* was a newb.

As an aside, cherie, how WERE you going to end "Wishes"? I are teh intrigued.
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glad you remeber the old stories teal. course now the storyline has changed somewhat ( no orcale being a big story change.). as for wishes waneseny was going to use zander to trap ali. ali is brought to his lab and she gets to learn about her past ( though i wouldn't have revealed it to the audience,i was going to reveal that in the fourth story). the others come to the resuce and zander overcomes his addcition pains to fight. ali's depressed after being rescued, her past weighing heavey on her mind.

interesting note for the oringel fourth story, jud was to reveal her past to abe ( being told by ben.) but with the story changes i made in this version jud can't do that since he never met ben now.
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wow,this is the quickest update i done i think. i got inspired and did the whole chapter within two hours. well,heres chapter five.

Ali left the road and ran into the woods. She was thankfull thease trees had not been cut down yet. They provided cover she desprately needed. Zander was close after her,surprizeingly fast for someone with metal pants for legs.

She was scratched at by low branches. She ignored the pain and continued on. She had not been running long when she tripped over a rock.

"Gotcha!" Cried the slig as he lept onto Ali's back,causeing her to yelp.

" Get off! Your heavey!" She yelled and swung her foot at Zanders face.

Zander grunted as she kicked his face and sent him rolling off. He quickly pulled himself up and snarled.

" I am NOT heavey...am i?" He asked, suddenly looking concerned.

Ali was confused by his sudden change of mood but decided to anwser him. " o.k,i geuss you weren't THAT heavy. But i didn't exactly apperciate you on my back."

"Oh,o.k. Thats all i wanted to...hey! your trying to distract me!"

"Me?" Ali snorted. " your the one who asked,not me."

Zander snarled and started towards her again. Ali wisely ran yet again. She lept over a low branch. She would have kept on running but an idea came to mind. She smiled as she pulled back the springy branch and waited for Zander to get in range. Zander appeared and headed toward her,not noticeing the branch she held back.

" Take this you jerk!" She yelled out and let go. The branch sprung forward and hit Zander,sending him flying back. Ali laughed and ran off. She was so happy over her trick she nearly didn't see the cliff.

"WOAH!" she yelped.

Ali stopped short,nearly going over the cliffs edge.

"Oh,thank Odd." She gasped, shaken by her near fall. Thats when Zander lept onto her back.

" This time i have you!" Zander snarled.

Ali pinwheeled her arms,trying to keep her balance. Unfortunely Zanders sudden weight sent her and a surprized Zander toppleing off the cliff edge. Both mudokon and slig screamed on the way down.

"Oh Odd,we're gonna die!" Screamed Zander, his claws digging into Ali's skin.

Foretunely and unfortunely the two ended up falling through a tree. Fortunely because the branches slowed their fall. Unfortunely because falling through the branches hurt like hell. Both cried out in pain multiple times, loud enough to be heard over the breaking of branches. They finely cleared the branches and hit the ground by the massive tree. There was a loud CRACK from Zanders arm and he screamed in pain before passing out.

Ali was a little more luckey. She hadn't broke anything but she had landed hard on her rump. Ounce she got her senses back she spat out what seemed like a tree worths of leaves that have somehow gotten into her mouth.

" I can't belive i'm alive." She gasped. She slowly got to her feet and searched herself for any broken bones or bleeding wounds. Besides a few scratches she was fine. Satisfied that she was o.k she looked over to Zander. She could see his slow breatheing. For some reason she was happy to see he was alive.

With that information she turned and began to walk away. A sudden feeling of guilt made her stop. A wild animal could find the blacked out slig and eat him if she left him like this.

"Stop being silly." Ali murmered to herself. " He wouldn't care what would happen to you if you were in the same postion. Why should you care about him?"

She Started off again but stopped and turned one more time. After a few minutes of decideing she sighed and walked over to Zanders body.

"I hope you apperciate this." She said to Zander though she knew he couldn't hear her. After a bit of struggleing she was able to lift Zander up onto her back, letting his head and arms hang over her shoulders.

" You know what." She grunted through clenched teeth. " I lied,you ARE heavy."

With that she started out into the deep woods.

Two hours later Ali had to stop for a break,her back in much pain from supporting Zander. She carefully put him on the ground and stretched.

" Odd,i wish he would wake up so i wouldn't have to carry him anymore." She mumbled.

After a long bout of streching she plopped onto a small brush of plantlife.

" I don't know what i'm doing" She said to herself. " I don't even have an idea how to survive out here."

"Well,for one thing dear,you shouldn't sit in Scratch Weed." A voice said.

Ali quickly turned her head. Standing there was a old light green mudokon. Instead of a braid of feathers he had one small gray feather sticking out of his scalp.

" Who are you?" Ali asked. " And whats Scratch Weed?"

The old mudokon smiled at her. " I am Oron. And Scratch Weed is a plant that causes weeks of itchyness."

" Oh...ACK!" She yelped and jumped from where she had been sitting. Oron couldn't help but laugh.

" Don't worry dear, If you wash the oils from the plant off in the river you may be able to avoid that." His eye then fell on Zander.

"Whos your friend?"

" He's not my friend!" Ali shot out.

Oron gave Ali a confused look. " Not your friend huh? And yet you carried him all this way?"

"What? How do you.."

" I've been watching you since you two fell off that cliff."

" Oh, Well you could have revealed yourself BEFORE i sat in the Scratch Weed."

Oron laughed again.

"You do have a point there. Oh well,whats done is done. Come on,i'll show you to the river. Meanwhile i'll attend to your..i mean the slig. Fro mthe sound he made when he hit the ground i think he may have a broken arm. "

Helping Ali Support Zander the two disappeared into the trees.
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just bringing this up.
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I wondered what happend to this... coz I was really enjoying it and then when I came back to see if any more had been writen it was gone. Yay it's back ^-^

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THis is really great as ever! Keep going!

I remember reading the original version of this story and the sequel ages and ages ago on Oddworld.au.com. It was the first ever Oddworld story I ever read, "Sigh"...
THere were only 2 stories by you there though it was obvious you'd written more by the music video you'd also posted on the site. Never found anything else though...

Anyway, it was great, I loved it and i still love it and your writing rocksand keep going!
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i did start number 3 splat but i never finished it ( and it won't be ever finished thanks to the revision) glad you liked them though. in anycase,on to the next chapter!

Zander woke up when a bolt of pain when through his arm.

" Good Odd that hurts!" He screamed as he sat straight up. He was surprized to see an old mudokon holding his arm.

" Who are you and what the hell are you doing?"

"I am Oron. And i am fixing your arm. You broke it."

"Oh." Zander said, not knowing what else to say.

" I'm going to set the bone now. It's going to be painfull."

"I can handle pain." Zander grunted. " Untill it hurts."

Oron chuckled then began to set the bone. Zander tried to hold back screams of pain but found he couldn't. Finely the setting of the bone was over and Oron had put a splint on Zanders broken arm.

" There. That wasn't so bad was it?" Oron said.

" Says you. Your not the one in pain." Zander grunted,getting up off the ground. His arm fixed he started off.

" Don't you want to see your friend?"

"Huh? What friend?"

" The female mudokon."

" Her?" Snorted Zander. " Shes not my friend."

" Thats very funny." Started Oron. " Because if she wasn't your friend she wouldn't have carried you the whole time you were out."

" What? She did that? Why?" Zander asked.

Oron shrugged. " Beats me. Why don't you ask her yourself. Shes at the riveredge. It's that way."

Zander considered for a second before heading the direction where Oron pointed.

Zander found Ali at the edge of the river,gathering riverside plants. She was humming a tune to herself, haveing not noticed the slig yet.

"Why did you help me?" He asked,not bothering to greet Ali first.

Ali stopped humming the tune and turned to look at Zander.

"Your up." she said.

" I asked why you helped me? I treated you as a prisioner.I insulted you.I chased you. And yet you still help me. You could have left me out there to fend for myself with a broken arm. Why?"

For a minute Ali was silent. Then she shrugged. " i don't know why i helped you. When i saw you laying there i just..felt bad."

" You felt bad...for me?"

" What can i say,i'm a idoit."

Zander was silent for a moment. He then took a deep breath and spoke.

" I uh..well, want to thank you."

" A slig? Thanking a mudokon?" Ali said. " Thats unuseal"

"Look, don't rub it in. It was hard enough."

Ali smiled slightly. Her smiled faltered when she thought of something.

"I suppose your still going to bring me to the lab?"

" Nah. I give up on that. For one thing i couldn't find the lab now if i tried. I have no idea where i am. Plus i couldn't overpower you now with this broken arm. No, your free to go."

Ali considered this for a moment.

" Free." She finely said. " I was free before. But that was a long time ago and i barely remeber it."

She smiled.

" I think it's going to be good to be free."

" Yeah, well, enjoy yourself." Zander grunted and turned to walk away.

" Where are you going?"

" Away. I have to find civilization."

" Why?"

Zander stopped to ponder that. That was a very good question. Why go back to that life of work. Why have to deal with those sligs that always made fun of him?

" Well, You see I..." Zander began to stammer.

" Besides, you won't survive the journey. Not only is your arm broken but you have no idea how to survive out here. On that note neither do I. Thats why i'm sticking With Oron. "

"I doubt Oron would apperciate a slig as compeny."

"I wouldn't say that." Said Oron,comeing out of the bushes,surprizeing both Zander and Ali.

" Geez Oron." Ali yelped. " You scared the hell out of me. I didn't even hear you comeing."

" Sorry, I wasn't trying to sneak up on you two. In anycase, I wouldn't mind your compeny young slig. I can tell your not like the sligs."

" Yeah." Zander mumbled to himself. " So can the other sligs."

"What was that?" Ali asked.

" Oh,um,nothing. O.k, i'll go with you two. I really don't have that much of a choice anyways."

" Great!" said Oron. " It's more fun getting to destinations with more people."

" Where are we heading to anyways Oron?" Zander asked.

Oron smiled wide.

" Why,we're going to find the lost city."

***********

" What do you mean they arrived Mr.Waneseny?" Matterson said questionly.

"What i mean, Is that the truck containing MY female mudokon never arrived."

" Are you sure it isn't just late?"

" It's been Two weeks! No, something happened. And YOU.." Waneseny jabbed at Mattersons chest with his upper left hand claws. " Are going to help me find out what happened by commissoning me your best sligs."

" MY sligs? Why?"

"Lets not forget Matterson,who donated that money to your lumberyard. Without that money your compeny would be in the red now, Isn't that right?"

Matterson could only sigh. " Very well."

Matterson walked over to the lumberyards intercom and yelled into it.
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Coolcan't wait to read more! ^-^

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ugh, in the last update the last line of chapter 6 didn't show up. i'll put it up with chapter 7

" Xaiver, collect your best sligs and come to the main room. You have a new job!"

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For a moment or two after Oron's annoucement Zander and Ali were silent. Zander finely broke the silence with the statement.

" He's cracked."

" What lost city?" Asked Ali.

" The lost city of Odd of course."

" Never heard of it." snorted Zander.

"Neither have I." Ali said.

" I wouldn't expect you two to. It's a native legend."

"Oh." said Ali. “ Geuss that explains it.”

“ So whats the story behind this place?” Zander asked.

“ well, Many many years ago, Before the Glukkons started to enslave the Mudokons, A city was built. Legend said the city was built by Odd himself for his loyal worshipers. All was well untill the Glukkons begin enslaveing the Mudokons. They say that instead of letting the city be attacked Odd sunk the city into the ground, never to be seen again.”

“ Wow.” said Ali.

“ Yeah right” said Zander.

Ali gave Zander a glare then looked back to Oron. “ So,why do you want to find this place?”

Oron shrugged. “ Why not? It sounds like a grand adventure doesn’t it? Besides, if we find it it would be a wonderfull hideing place from the Glukkons. Where better to hide then a lost city?”

“ Thats a good point” Ali said with a nod.

Zander crossed his arms. “ And what if it doesn’t exsist?”

Oron shrugged again. “ Then we spend our lives exploreing. There are worse fates.”

“ I think it sounds like a good idea. Lets go!” Exclaimed Ali.

“ Fine. I’m most certainly out voted here.” Zander grumbled.

“ Wonderfull! This will be a wonderful adventure. I can already tell! I’ll just pack up my camp and we’ll be off.”

With that Oron ran off to pack up. Zander looked to Ali.

“ So tell me, What do you REALLY think of this idea?”

Ali smiled. “ Well,i’m not sure if i belive this lost city stuff but it can’t hurt to humor him can it?

“ No, I suppose not.” Zander agreed.

“ Come on,we better help him pack up.”

Ali ran the way Oron had. Zander was still. He was lost in thought about all thease new develoments.

“ Zander! Come on!” Ali cried from the brush,noticeing Zander wasn’t behind her.

“I’m comeing, hold your Elums!”

And with that,Zander followed.

END OF STORY ONE.
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The End? THe end of "Unlikely friends" or just this section of it? TELL ME!!!!!
Loved this chapter though! You could just edit that last line onto the end of chapter 6.
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