Lamp is fairly cool; flickering lights are pretty evoking. I love your competition picture; I love the way the native and industrial is flipped, though a native slig probably wouldn't be standing upright. But it's a cool picture; I'd like to see it finished.
I had to read the story fragment a couple of times to work out what was happening; I'm still a bit in the dark, to be honest - there's not a lot of information there. I'd like to see more just to understand what's going on, but it's up to you of course.
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