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It sounds good, but I would have more rhythmic movement in the left hand. The big spaces work fine to begin with, but from there it doesn't seem to develop a great deal. I would use some syncopation (due to the nature of the piece, only mild syncopation, though I think that you can use some quite unusual rhythms if you go about it the right way) to create friction so that the piece doesn't risk stagnating as much.
Harmonically, I hear a lot of suspensions (and maybe extended harmony - I haven't analysed the piece, so I don't know straight off), some of which are successful, some of which feel slightly forced, but in most of the latter instances, if you try and rearrange the chord, this should be rectified (you have probably noticed that dissonances sound less jarring the greater the interval is).
Also, there was one instance where (I think in the left hand) I heard one chord in the same position twice. I can't find it now, but I heard it. If you don't alter the chord, at least alter the voicing.
It sounds like you're doing alright, man. Keep on with your stuff.
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Ah, I need to spread rep around before giving it to you again.
Thanks. I agree with pretty much everything you said there. Some of the cords
are forced, especially towards the end. I'm looking at ways to make it more rhythmically interesting, too.
I really want to hear how it sounds when it's not being played by Sibelius, though. The playback resembles an elephant.