[paramiteabe]

Interesting chapter Gabbit. I like how you are useing a slig as your character. In my next storys I will introduce places on other continents and I will give a little twist to the inhabitants we already have seen so far. Heres a tip for ya though when you have a character talk put this mark " around the phrase that is doing the talking. So it can be easier to follow and to know who is talking. Don't worry I did the same mistake in my story around the beginning. Your story is great and I can't wait to read more chapters. You said your second chapter is going to be more interesting? Thats cool I will make sure to read it. Keep up the good work.