I’d love to see the rhyming and coherence of the antagonists be worked into the development of the story.
So, at the beginning we have a simple plot with stereotypically evil one-dimensional guys who mutter incoherently, and a humble protagonist who speaks in rhyme.
Then as the plot develops, we get acquainted with those characters. We learn the backstory, influences and pressures on those bad guys, and as we do they become more coherent, more fleshed-out solid characters. As the protagonist grows as a character, learns about the history and plight of the inhabitants, he loses his naivete and charm and so too his rhyming subdues.
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