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This poem is very long, but I don't like it that much because a poem shouldn't be like that.
I don't like the rhymes you typed there. Like ODDBODD said already "That was pathetic" - I agree with him.
Sorry for being so harsh, but if you try to write a new poem, think more about it.
Due to my words, I won't give you a score from 1-10 because this is not necessary...
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