there is some potential for a brilliant twist at the end, but I will let you carry on with it and let the story unfold itself.
With this story at the moment, my main question is why would the glukkons want to kill the sligs off if they where just in danger of getting fired anyway? Surely this is too much of an extreme and might ruin Glukkon/Slig unity?
Now, creating a story is 1% inspiration and 99% problem solving. With the story you have started with, you can have some fantastic looking visuals, coupled with a mystery inspired story.
A couple of ideas I would have for this fanfictions ending would be:
• To have the Boddy Cream not only kill sligs, but make them turn on each other before they do, therefore creating partial zombie sligs, which could crop up throughout the story.
• Have Rex turn up alive at the end, bribed to betray his friend in exchange for a Big Bro upgrade, in on the whole thing. He wanted Zed to find out the secret ingredient to the cream to create a panic among sligs, and while they where panicking, they could commence on their "ultimate weapon"
A lot of potential, and excited to see how it turns out.
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