[Hulaabeo]

Some of you may have known Slusk from several RPGs I briefly participated in, now you will find out his backstory.
The Brawl

Slusk, the low life slave of Sloghut 1359 on the outskirts of a small Clakker town, was in his dormitory stroking his Sloggie, Mochy. Slusk received Mochy when he was about to get “recycled” because he was the runt of the litter. Slusk managed to persuade the slig guard to hand the slog over to him. He then brought the young slog to his dormitory to nurture him with his scraps of lunch. Slusk’s shift wasn’t until 12:00 P.M and he already smelled the soaps and dirty rags.
“Only half hour left. You best go early Slusk.”
Slusk jumped up nearly smashing his forehead on his bunk. The voice was Redge, the slig. Redge wasn’t like other sligs and their room temperature IQ’s. He was touchy about slavery and frowns upon beating the workers on his shift.
“Redge! I thought you were asleep!” Slusk said as Mochy scampered to Redge.
‘’Ya I was gonna to, but I found out Victor is on shift.” Redge said, petting Mochy.
“I thought he was working in the barracks!’ Slusk exclaimed.
“Well he came back, and sentenced a mudokon for missing a spot on his Employee of the Month Photo.”
“Poor schmucks…”
“Well good luck, bud, you’re gonna need it.” Redge said as he walked away, shotgun slung over his shoulder.
Slusk thought about what he just heard and decided to leave, making sure Mochy was tucked in his bed made of rags and headed towards the Kennel Room. Victor was waiting with his arms slung over each other in an impatient posture.
“You’re late maggot.”
“I’m half an hour early” Slusk said as he dropped his bucket.
“Uh, never mind, get to work…”
Slusk had cleaned out all the slog kennels and waxed the entire floor under an hour and still had time for a really late dinner. Victor had drunk a brew too many and got pissed when he slipped on the bucket of water. Slusk offered help and in return got a baton to the face. Slusk grabbed the trowel he used to scoop slog poo and smashed Victor in the face. Victor shoved Slusk down and slammed his metal knee into Slusk’s face which created a bloody scar on his face that crossed his eye. Slusk, filled with battle fury, Rammed into Victor and pinned him down and started slamming his huge hands into the tentacles on Victor’s masked head and then he grabbed Victors baton and hit him repeatedly along his visor, making it shatter. The slig sputtered blood and his bloodied eye made a steady flow of blood. After Slusk had tired out, he realized that he had beat him to death. At that moment Redge stepped into the room and stared at the bloody mess Slusk had made. Slusk stared wide eyed at Victor and felt blood trickling down his face.
“Slusk, you better get outta here before Security finds you.” Redge said still gazing at Victor’s mangled corpse
“But the factory exit is across the facility, it’s impossible to get out.” Slusk said with a slight sob.
“Grab Mochy and some valuables and meet me back here.”
Slusk obeyed ran back to his dormitory and grabbed a knapsack he kept for a situation like the one he was in and grabbed Mochy, a box of matches, a photo of him and Redge, and a compass. He didn’t own anything more valuables than the one photo. He ran back with his knapsack and received a sleeping bag from Redge which had hidden Victor’s Body and cleaned all the blood.
“Ok you wait here until I go get my stuff.” Redge said as he ran off.

I want some honest opinions, this is one of my first fanfictions. (Besides Odd Wars.)