Aye, that is a very good choice, Gretin
And it's good to finally hear what you thought of the chapter! (I can talk; I should've posted in W@RF on Sunday.) Glad you enjoyed it
I know circumstances mean its not a great cliffhanger, but we can all pretend
Interesting that you should link to that chapter, Gretin, as it was quite heavy on my mind when I was writing the last-but-one chapter of part 6...
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He looked down at his metal legs. Were they worth it? Was some mobility, some enhanced vision, worth anything if it meant this much pain, this much confusion?
He reached up to remove his mask (for the first time in Odd knew how many years) but stopped himself just in time. He hadn’t sunk that low yet.
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“Right, I want you to press down there, sharp and hard. Do it now.” She did so. “Harder than that, idiot! Now, do it twenty times.” While Anni tired herself out, he started unbuckling Stivik’s mask. “When you’ve done twenty, you check if he’s breathing. If he’s not, you do it twenty more times, understand?”
He pulled the mask away and Anni got her first look of a slig’s face – the sunken, ugly, puffy eyes, the wrinkled, shrivelled skin, and the tight, cadaverous cheeks. She tore her eyes away and found she had lost count of her presses. She started again from one.
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The physical exertion of the compressions soon had her exhausted and oblivious to what was going on around her. Her world became aching arms, sweaty skin, putting her head close to Stivik’s horribly ugly face to listen for the sound of a breath.
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Spot the parallel! I wonder what I meant by that... (No, seriously. I'm not entirely sure what I was doing myself; so much of the 'clever' stuff I do in this story, I do because it
just feels right.)
Sci, I like the theme, but it's not really a perfect fit, I think. It's a bit... otherworldy, and Stivik is very realistic, very unimaginative. He learnt to take things seriously as a scout and now he's almost painfully grounded in reality.
About five or sixth years ago I would've suggested '
Easier to Run' or '
Numb' by Linkin Park for Stivik, but I don't really like the band any more, so I won't
The lyrics kind of fit, though they're a little too extreme; it's a shame they're so depressed and whiny. Those guys need to look on the bright side more! Not even Stivik is as miserable as Linkin Park!
Does no one have a piece of music horrible enough for Krik?