I like.
Being picky about grammar, may I point out:
1) When someone speaks, put full stops, exclamation marks etc. after the quotation marks:
"Is anybody home?" rather than
"Is anybody home"?
2) Also put commas in places like this:
"I don't know what to do" he said. should be
"I don't know what to do," he said.
It seems like it's going to be a great story though, I can't wait for more
