I guess I can come back as a zombie! Funny thing is, just recently on another forum I pronounced myself dead as well. However the cause of that one was a shot to the head brought about by extreme shame. This case was just extreme stupidity XD
Anyway, getting onto the story, I don't really remember exactly how the case between Nick and Anni went, so I don't know how far off you went from the RPG version
I do like the way you stopped to describe the room though. And this line cracked me up:
The other glukkon, Otto suddenly cut in, speaking over him, “Are you saying you were attacked by a little girl mudokon?”
Behind Nick, Groll let out a snigger. Nick spun round and glared at him.
As well as this one:
Groll jerked to attention, “Uh, sir, but, um, with respect, uh, I mean, I’m not really used to this mudokon thing, nice to mudokons, not yet, and I’m still sort of used to… So I don’t know if my… If I would be suitable-”
(Disclaimer: The fact that Groll is my own character has no bearing whatsoever on some of my favourite lines involving him. Honest!)
And poor Kix, she just doesn't want to cause anyone any trouble but she might've saved them some trouble if she'd been more forward in telling the others about Anni.
Also, I hope you haven't neglected to retain Nick's habit of calling Stivik "Stavik" XD