Down-toning of swearing at this point is not really feasible. This seems interesting, and you really set the mood. But I'm not sure if mudokons would know all that much about weapons and how they work. You can only learn so much from watching sligs fire their's. A fine description of the free-fire zone too. Seems very accurate as well.
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Congratulations, Oddey, on winning FC's fanfiction competition two years running! You are clearly the man to beat!
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