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11-21-2009, 03:42 AM
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I would have liked feed back for the last chapter but ok, back on track now.

Enchilado - It is undecided and the fact is I am not supposed to give anything else away yet. I've been hung drawn and quartered by the guys back ant Fanwerkz for releasing this. I'm on a fine thread. Is perhaps an answer? Sorry.

Also Besides SW, oddworld is pretty comic, maybe it was a bit rude but does it matter that much actuallt, don't answer, no more spamming, I don't swear much myself but it adds a comic feel.
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EDIT: Next chapter -

Chapter 5

The train ride was long and tedious but eventually the train slowed and Fillin stepped out on central southlands station - Matchstick Pines, he hammmered at the pants vendor and slipped back into walkers, it was desolate and similar in look to Paramoina, the trees however where far higher, it is said that in the Match Stick Pine forest, there are levels and in the canopy, a breed of slig survives that has not pants but a tail, thye swing from branch to branch, it's just legend but the thought sent shivers down Fillin's curved spine.

Dark, it was dark too, Fillin could barely make out the sign saying which way to go, the sunlight was fragmented by the trees foliage and barely any reached the floor. The sign did say however that MMPLI was south, it gave no distance which was anoyying but it did give a path, Fillin thought it best if he followed.
He looked about, it was a magnificent area, a shame that MMPLI would de-forest it in about 10 years, he would be one of the last sligs to ever see a matchstick pine tree within a 3500 mile radius. It was likely that there would be an outpost somewhere but after an hour, there was still no sign of other intelligent life, Fillin took his map from a compartment in his pants and to his dismay, realised that the map didnot specify where he was, it was uncharted territory, never touched by industrialists.

Fillin was scared half to death and began to panic, in a blind stumble he ran down the paths, sliding over walkways and at one point, nearly slipping down to his death. He was about to give up all hope when he saw something magnificent, in the distance a gentle light was shining, he wandered towards it to realise it was a small bulb attached to a little solar panel on the top of a vendor for soulstorm brew, it was amazing, it meant thta someone was here, even though the vendor was so old it was made from wood. There was also a soft trickling sound now as well, a tiny rivulet was carving it's way down the rock and trickling over the pathway in front of him, Fillin was parched and decided to clamber over the rocks to the source...he was in for a suprise.
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Oh yeah, fair point. Maybe he was just tortured until he lost consciousness.


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