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10-16-2009, 11:39 AM
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I know, I promised to reply to Chapter 30. Kinda forgot to do it, and I only have the usual reason. But I'm here now and I'm replying.

I enjoyed both chapters, especially the last one (though I have trouble recalling any of this brawl occuring, but it was an awesome read). You provide really good reasoning for Anni's transfer to RF, it's definately not rushed work. The W@RF characters introduced in the last one were described pretty convincingly. As I didn't remember this fight between Bela and Expert, I couldn't recall who the female Mudokon in hiding was, but the revelation was a nice touch. I could also imagine "another aggressive-yet-fun Big Bro" throttling Bela until you named Expert.

All in all, great job on these, very interesting to read. Keep it up!

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