[T-nex]

Honestly I don't care if you're gonna change your story or not. I knew from the beginning that you wouldn't.

So it's a boxing fic... All Im saying is that it has nothing to do with oddworld... It has to do with normal human relationships and boxing, unless you plan to inegrate this story into oddworld a bit more. So far it has had none of that.
And yea alot of people use femal whatever... But many of them care to explain why they are female. Heck.. I even used to RP with a female mudokon and created a pretty logi background for her which Splat then later expanded upon.
What I'm saying is that it's not logic for a female slig to be able to run around without being detected by security and killed. I'm sorry if I don't pat you on the should like everyone else and say 'good job'. But I actually care about oddworld and the quality of FC.
All I'm trying to do here, is give you a few pointer ón how to improve. If you don't want to improve then fine, don't. But I'm still gonna give my critique.

I'm not trying to bring you down and stomp on your story. Just wanna make you think and maybe see you improve things in the future. Like it would be nice to see some conflict that's oddworld related... or at least bring in some oddworld elements.

I spend more time in FC than you think... I just don't bother to post cos there's not alot that impresses me anymore. But I want to try and bring up the quality a bit.

Also i'm sorry if I offended you. The title really gave me the wrong impression.