[T-nex]

Um... So is this gonna be about oddworld? or a romance fiction, where sligs have been put in the place of humans? (and please don't make this some dirty, erotica) x_x...

Your writing is ok, But honestly, I don't see the point in you putting 2 chapters(even being so short) in one post. A regular chapter made by oddworld fans would usually be a page in word or more. I suggest merging the chapters.

Also so far the whole story has been about the sligs fighting. Nothing else. There hasn't been an establishment shot(which is important)... And establishment shot is when you show the location to the audience. Where's this boxing community? In a made up city? In the wilderness?
Next... A female slig? This is not 'canon' in the least. First of all, any female slig would be a queen and most likely get killed by Skilliya. You'll have to explain how a female slig ends up in a boxing community. Was she de-fertilized? was she just a freak of nature?

Also, I would really love to see more of oddworld in this fan fic.
I mean.. ask yourself. Would this fic be any different if it was with humans? Or do you just get off on the thought of two sligs fighting each other and then passionatly falling in love.

Sorry if I sound too harsh... But I feel like you need a bit of help here in expanding the story.