I'm so happy that I've finally started writing some good stories. It's a shame that Armament didn't really work out that well... but at least I established some decent characters. I really want to end the Armament series on a gigantic bang so that it'll be remembered. I'm itching to write another Pack story as well and possibly a Prison sequel. I'm currently working on a sandbox prison game but I'm not sure how that'll work out.
My Oddworld Party game is in it's BETA stage right now. Hopefully I can get some more opinions on things before the final polish-up. This is a brand new fanfic that I started quite recently, so hopefully it'll contain all of my improved writing skills!
Thanks Oddey and Slig75. I know it means a lot to recieve comments about your work, I want to catch up to your stories as soon as possible, I've had to wait to find the right time to check them out. I'm hoping that I'll get at least one comment per additional chapter. I'm really looking forward to making this work.
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Chapter 3
Yael was prepping herself for bed. She'd just listened to another audio-book on her media player. Saffy popped her head through the gap in the doorway, "Hiya Yael. Not sleeping?". Yael smiled, "Not quite yet. You?". Saffy sighed, "I woke up late, so I'm still full of energy".
Saffy came over to Yael and sat down on the other side of the bed, "What do you think of Malaki?". Yael smiled, "Poor stance, awful punches and an uppercut so obvious that it would be cruel to counter it". Saffy waved her arms, "Not that way, I meant like... as a person?". Yael looked at Saffy, "To be honest. I'm not really interested in him". Saffy opened her eyes widely, "Seriously? But he's hot! You should go on a date!". Yael shook her head, "Nope. Not going to happen. I'm not going out with someone who can't even defend themselves properly. Besides, I have a busy training schedule". Saffy nodded, "I guess so".
Saffy and Yael talked for a while longer. Yael then fell asleep and Saffy left the room silently. Saffy walked past Denno asleep in his rocking chair, she went to her own bed.
Chapter 4
It was a few days later. Denno approached Yael, "Listen, your first real opponent is coming up. He's ranked #10, Kanbok". Yael smiled, "Whoever they are, they're in for a world of pain". Denno smiled, "I wouldn't doubt that. Now, for training. Are you waiting for Malaki?". Yael nodded, "I'll just start on the punching bag while I wait". Denno nodded, "Okay, I'll go and train some of the other recruits today". Yael smiled, "Thanks".
Yael started on her low punches, before moving onto some uppercuts. She then decided to swing some high jabs in, to improve her strength. This was some pretty hard work, but she kept to her training regime.
Malaki walked into the gym. He caught Yael's eye, "Hi Yael, sorry I'm late". Yael giggled, "No problem Mal, just get changed and come and train with me". Malaki nodded, "Okay". Malaki wrapped the white bandages around his fists, before reaching for his black boxing gloves.
Yael gave herself some time to breathe, before Malaki was ready to fight. 'This was going to be fun', she thought.
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