When I finished chapter 2, I was a bit disappointed at the quality of the chapter. So what i've done is instead of carrying on to chapter 3, I re-did chapter 2 to see if I could do better. However, I need your views readers. Which one did you like and why. Anyway. here's version 2 of chapter 2.
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Chapter 2 (Version 2)
Unknown Past
Zaypher turned around and walked over to the cell gate. "Well, well, well, look who decided to rescue me" said Zaypher. "hmm, you and your witty humour" replied the general, "Looks like your first task is complete. But what took you so long to get back?" "Hmm, long story" said Zaypher, "I was sort of dragged into this. I had to create a diversion so that Admeet would think i'm dead; and Climbing 100 miles of tunnel ain't a walk in the park". "I see" said the general coldly, "well now I have a new task for you". "Okay, shoot" said Zaypher. "We need you to go back to the Slig military complex" replied the general, "From there when the time is right, you will send in two of my Scrab armies to fight against the Sligs like the last time. You need to make sure that the so called 'Admeet' is critcally wounded from either the attack or secretly from you. Once he is wounded, take him to a location not far from the complex. from there, colonel Arcaius and some of my men will take him back to our base via half-track truck. We will 'question' him once he's here. And if possible, bring the so called 'Solister' too; but thats only optional". "Got it" said Zaypher, "but first, you have to release me first or else i'll be going nowhere". "Right" said the general. He took a key from out of his leather pocket and unlocked the cell gate. "Be sure to come back once the job is done" said the general as Zaypher was walking out of the cell.
The manhole cover slid behind Zaypher as he walked out of the tent. He walked on and on through the desert until he could see the military complex. "Hope you're ready Admeet" said Zaypher to himself, "you're gonna get a big surprise when you see me".
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Which one do you prefer and why.
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