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03-29-2009, 12:10 PM
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Nice. You keep sorta jumping all over the place. Indstead of making a heading say "One Month Later" Just sart the paragraph with something like:

It's been a month since the birth of the abnormaly strong slig and he has been growing tiresome of the doctors test...

Other than that; Good Job!

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