well this is just a summary correct ?
if so no it isn't shit its actually very good of course with more details and the like....
you should also come up with a more unique name for the elites than just the elites but this is your story so thats you decision. Oh by Co-queen do you mean like a regent or just like an official advisour forthe citizens to come to for help ?
just my 2 cents but so far seems to me a very good story. Good luck !
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The red pill or the blue pill ?
hmmmm...How about the chill pill ?
ignorance is bliss....and bliss is your blight.
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