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06-17-2008, 03:16 PM
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Hi MM, just started reading this and I noticed you used the wrong version of chapter 4, where Larry's in the slog pit. After uploading the version you posted here you then edited it because you weren't satisfied with it and one of your readers (ahem) gave you an idea you evidently preferred at the time.

Anyway, I'll keep reading and post again when I catch up. Arthur's introduction made me grin a mightily nostalgic grin.

"A hammering on the cell door woke Larry and the others up. That was strange, normally they would simply have a Slig barge in and yell loudly and incessantly at them all to wake up, causing them all to stagger bleary eyed out of their gritty cells and off to that day’s first work session.
The banging continued, followed by a muttering of “Oops, forgot I had the keys.” Larry smirked as he realised who the guard was. A chink and the door creaked on rusty hinges and swung open. Sure enough, it was Arthur."

A star is born! (But we couldn't find him so we're stuck with Arthur, who is probably more entertaining anyway.)

EDIT: in other news...
“Oh, and believe me slave, it won’t hurt a bit. At least, not until I give you the injection!”
Forsooth sirrah! The agonising horror of your terrible humour is surely torture enough for anyone!
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