I like it, it contains humour, and lightness that is with the oddworld games (where else would a tribe call people loosers?).
Only problem is, plan everything, don't randomly add facts, if you have to, pretend you didn't.
Try and be more subtle about it, instead of saying things like: sligs also inhabited the town.
You should of said that when you first introduced Slogadon, but you could of gone around that and emitted that sentence altogether, we would of worked out that there were sligs in the town aswell.
In the future, at least have the basic story in your mind, so you won't have to add things like that at the last minute.
Otherwise, goodjob!
