First get!
Well, it it's nowhere near as bad as I was expecting, the narrating style is a bit half and half which is a bit weird, you're narrating it like you're half removed from the story and half the storyteller with all the references to how Mudos will be in the future.
Other than that it's all right, a little short and without much elaboration but I'm sure you can improve on that. You may also want to play around with using more describing and also try building up the tension more. You've certainly got the basis of a good plot with the whole 'Ages past' thing and it could be interesting seeing the lifestyles that the Mudokons and Glukkons lead respectively, also how the Sligs figure into this could be quite interesting, and I haven't mentioned the Queens yet.
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“I always believe the movies I've made are smarter than the way they are perceived by sort of mass culture and by the critics,” Snyder said, a statement he immediately followed by saying, “Also, ‘It looks like a video game.’
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