Never ask people if you should keep writing. Ask people how you can improve your writing if you want feedback so bad.
As for this piece, it's rather short and you could work on your writing style a bit. Read some books from good writers and see how they write and try to adapt that into your own stories.
Good luck.
__________________
The Oddworld Wiki
When one person suffers from a delusion it is called insanity. When many people suffer from a delusion it is called religion.
|