That was verily verily awesome! You really have writing talent and if it all continues like this I shall be happy to keep reading! You've definately left a lot of intrigue; who is the outlaw and how does he tie in with the glukkon? Who are the people working for the glukkon?
And as Zozo already pointed out a female character on Oddworld always seems to add interest no matter how many times its been done before!
Really, one of the best things I've read here. How much work did you put into that may I ask?